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Nazne
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"Rude".
Sorry, but you should see some other posts if you want to see rude. I was merely offering suggestions as to how you could better the fiction. If I was a bit harsh about it, I apologize, but I don't see how it was truly offensive in any way.
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gameman
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| Posted: Sat Mar 26, 2005 6:28 am Post subject: |
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I don't take any form of contructive critisum(sorry if misspelled) well
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| Posted: Sat Mar 26, 2005 6:50 am Post subject: |
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I can understand it if things are difficult for you; but we're really trying to help you out and become a better writer. That's a part of posting fan fiction, you ask for the criticism as well as the praise. Praise boosts moral, and criticism makes you stronger.
If you need any help, just PM me. O.K.?
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| You are welcom. You can write as well as I can. If you have an idea, you should post it. Even if you can't stop critics. |
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gameman
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| gameman wrote: | chapter 2 Frozen guts
“That assome dad now were at even ground with the A navi’s” “Dr.Hikari I get why Me Lan and Chaud are here but why are they here” said Laika looking at everyone else. “There here to test the new chips as well as you I based the design on Rush ability to come here but I don’t know that might happen till we tested things should go smoothly” said Dr.Hikari.
”Alright everyone prepare for cross fusion” said Mr. Famous in a test room.
Everyone held out there PET and slotted the s chip in
“Cross fusion” said everyone
Soon everyone was cross fused
R gutsman look like gut soul only bulkier with gray sleeves with guts symbol and gray mouth guard done. R iceman is Tory with iceman clothes with ice blue gloves and boots. R spoutwoman had aqua blue glove boots pants and sleeves as well as white body suit with a skirt, squirtman symbol, with a bubble head. They where with r searchman, r megaman, r roll, and r protoman.
“This is great now going to pound the Neo WWW and the a navi’s” said r gutsman then walk around and trip everyone laughed (expect r searchman and r protoman) but while laughing r iceman accidentally frozen him with a cyber blizzard “I got it luckily I download a couple chips” said r megaman
“Heat shot”
R gutsman was unfrozen but he had a little fire on these pants and stared running around like crazy “I put it out” said r spoutwoman
“Bubbler”
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Nazne
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 7:51 pm Post subject: |
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You already posted it. What's the point of doing so again?
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gameman
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 7:54 pm Post subject: |
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oops didn't mean to do that I just whanted to change some things
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 8:00 pm Post subject: |
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It does have potencial (damn word) But it needs to re read on your behalf for Grammar mistakes. Also both words in a title tend to have two capital letter's, like Cross Fusion and Heat Shot. Also R Spoutwoman, Would simply be R Spoutman
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gameman
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 8:02 pm Post subject: |
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I know but since it a girl being fused it just seem more right to be R Spoutwoman then rather R Spoutman I am considering starting my fanfic again if Nazne agrees to post nothing else on my fanfic exept tell me that I read some of your post [OTENKO] and if you think it easy to do a fanfic then start your own I bet a lot of people will hate it
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Elementalman.EXE
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Well, once again there's a later opposite sex CF later in Axess and Stream and they are simply refered to R [spoil:be51f78a44]MagnetMan or R NeedleMan[/spoil:be51f78a44]
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Nazne
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 8:18 pm Post subject: |
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| gameman wrote: | | I know but since it a girl being fused it just seem more right to be R Spoutwoman then rather R Spoutman I am considering starting my fanfic again if Nazne agrees to post nothing else on my fanfic exept tell me that I read some of your post asshole and if you think it easy to do a fanfic then start your own I bet a lot of people will hate it |
...XDDDDDD
I have been called "asshole" so many times by idiots that I may indeed select it as my next custom user title. And I have written many fanfics. Sure, they may not be loved, but I know how to write, and I do not outright insult those who critique me. Though your comment came at a good time. I have already started my next fic, so let's just wait and see, shall we?
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 8:22 pm Post subject: |
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| gameman wrote: | | I know but since it a girl being fused it just seem more right to be R Spoutwoman then rather R Spoutman I am considering starting my fanfic again if Nazne agrees to post nothing else on my fanfic exept tell me that I read some of your post asshole and if you think it easy to do a fanfic then start your own I bet a lot of people will hate it |
Sorry to dissapoint you, but she has made fics before, and all the ones I've seen from her are really good.  |
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gameman
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 8:28 pm Post subject: |
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well must be one the old site because i haven't seam any here i think and didn't see too many fanfic on the old site and didn't you think I was just trying to make him made and by the way you said she the posted gender of nazne is i guy unless he/she is lying but i don't think so he to rude and to much of jerk to be a girl
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Nazne
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 8:32 pm Post subject: |
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They're on www.fanfiction.net. I forgot my username, but now, if that's settled.
Try putting your fic through a spell/grammar check. Not that hard, it'll catch most of your mistakes, and it'll actually better the writing.
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gameman
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 8:38 pm Post subject: |
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I did let just say as you read it's not to good
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 8:46 pm Post subject: |
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Try again with proper grammar -.-
Also Nazne, what was the name of one of your fic's of FF.net.
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gameman
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 8:49 pm Post subject: |
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you think this is easy for me it really hard
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Nazne
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 9:55 pm Post subject: |
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Sorry. Didn't have time, was running around trying to catch up to appointments. And I can tell you lied because I never even gave you a link to my fic yet. :P
http://www.fanfiction.net/~dnazne
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gameman
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 10:06 pm Post subject: |
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you miss under stood me I was talking about the grammer check
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Nazne
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| Posted: Sat Apr 02, 2005 10:25 pm Post subject: |
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| gameman wrote: | | well must be one the old site because i haven't seam any here i think and didn't see too many fanfic on the old site and didn't you think I was just trying to make him made and by the way you said she the posted gender of nazne is i guy unless he/she is lying but i don't think so he to rude and to much of jerk to be a girl |
Gender discrimination now, are we? XD I doubt the girls near your place are perfect, womanly little Alices either. This is my April Fool's profile, and I'm too lazy to change it. :P
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