OT: Love Overcomes All (Warning: Cursing and Sad Ending)

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I don't know why, but I got this story in my head about a boy who...well I'll let you read it. It's one shot.

Love Overcomes All

This is a story about a high school freshman named Robert Jackson. For most of his life, he was always the silent kid with a few friends. He was never very attractive and was overweight until 8th grade when he started to do karate where he excelled at but was still a lower belt because of the promotion exam dates. Eventually, he became slightly good-looking, but still had bad acne and girls never really were attracted to him. By 8th grade he had also begun to open up more and became friends with more people, and became friends with more girls.

Then he entered high school and found out there was a dance at his all-boy school and that the schools his female friends went to were invited. He was extremely happy that they were coming and thought they'd be happy to see him. At the dance, all of them were happy to see him and hugged him to greet him, but he didn't dance as he had confidence problems. Throughout the year, he made more friends with girls from other schools and thought he might get a girlfriend. But, as the year got closer to the end, he began to notice whenever he would talk to them online; they would never seem very happy to hear from him and wouldn't talk a lot. However, whenever he saw them in person they seemed happy to see them.

Then when it was the end of the year, his school was having its annual summer dance. This time he had finally decided that he would dance no matter what, hopefully with his friend Jaclyn who he had feelings for. At the dance he saw them and immediately walked over to them smiling. He opened his arms to hug them, but the one in front held her hand up to stop him. To his horror, he saw it was Jaclyn who had stopped him and she looked mad. He thought it was a joke though so he proceeded to say hello.

"Hey everyone, good to see you all again," said Robert cheerily.
"Listen Robert," began Jaclyn, "We need to talk."
"What's up? Is something wrong?"
"Robert, we know you're a good guy but," said Jaclyn looking to the other girls around her, "We think you're kind of...odd."
"What do you mean?"
"Well, we don't really like you anymore, each time you talk to us, you're always joking around and it's kind of annoying."
"At first we let it slide," said one of the other girls, Gabrielle, "But now it's really irritating."
"Oh..." was all Robert could say as he lowered his head slightly, "But...I can change..."
"We're sorry Robert, but you should have thought about what you were saying more. Goodbye," said Jaclyn as she and the other girls walked past Robert. The words had cut through his heart and soul like a rusty blade. Robert had lowered his head and was beginning to cry as two small lines of tears came from his eyes.

Throughout the dance, Robert just sat down in one of the chairs lining the walls watching his friends, Jacob, Sean, and Brian, having fun. However, every few seconds he'd see the girls who had shunned him and he would look down to keep himself from crying again. He couldn't believe what had happened; he thought he was being funny and that they loved his jokes. He never imagined that he was being a fool and making himself look like an ass. He had thought this would be the night that he would confess his feelings for Jaclyn and that they would be together. Now he realized he never had a chance. He then remembered the time he had pranked them by making them think he was a psychopath and that he hated them. They had been mad but they had laughed afterwards. Now he realized they were faking the laughter.

It was now 10:50 P.M. and the dance would end in ten minutes. At Robert's feet were about 5 bottles of soda which he had drunk in an attempt to become happy from the sugar rush. His friends had also stopped by to make sure he was alright and said that some girls they knew would love to dance with them. However, when he met them he politely declined and tried to muster a smile to put up the illusion that he was fine, when inside it felt like he was dying. The DJ was now announcing that they were going to be playing a few slow songs to finish off the dance. The first one finished and it was 10:52. Then the second one and it was 10:55. Then just as he was about to switch to the third song, a loud bang erupted from the center of the dance and Robert jerked his head up.

In the center of everyone, a Senior had a gun in the air and had shot the ceiling. Robert recognized him and saw it was the Senior who always looked shifty to him. In a few seconds, five other students; three Seniors, a Junior, and a Sophomore, had pulled out handguns and fired them into the air one by one. Everyone got on the ground in fear and the DJ crouched behind the booth. The only one who remained where he was was Robert who was frozen in his seat. None of the gun wielding students noticed though.

"Alright everybody listen up," said the Senior still holding the gun in the air, "This is a hostage situation. Unexpected eh? No one would have expected five students to hold their own classmates hostage."

Robert understood now, these were no ordinary juveniles; they were a gang and they had very violent intentions. The Senior then pulled out a cell phone and dialed 911.

"Hello police? Yes I'm here to report a hostage situation," the Senior paused as the officer spoke to him, "No officer, I am not in any danger. However, everyone in Masterson Prepatory for Boys Summer dance is being held hostage by me. Yes that's right, and may I add that our demands are simple. We demand a get away vehicle filled with one million dollars. Have it here in 30 minutes or they all die!"

The Senior hung up with a malevolent look in his eyes.

Everyone was afraid now and they didn’t want to die. In just five, minutes the police arrived and had gathered outside the school. One of the officers pulled out a bullhorn.

“Hello, this is the police. We have brought the money now let the students go.”

The Senior heard him and spoke to the students.

“Well, looks like you’re all saved.”

A few minutes later, a police officer walked in with a suitcase. Immediately, all five armed students turned at him and aimed their guns at him. At the same time, Robert had a plan and began to slowly creep towards one of the pillars placed in the lunch room where the dance was being held. One of the armed students was near the pillar and Robert got into position behind him.

“We’ve brought your money,” said the officer, “Now let the students go.”
“Come over here and give it to me,” said the Senior.

The officer slowly walked towards the Senior and handed the suitcase to him. The Senior opened the suitcase and saw the money inside. Satisfied, he smirked.

“There, now leave peacefully and don’t harm anyone.”

The Senior just said nothing as he raised his gun right into the officer’s face and pulled the trigger. The officer was instantly killed and his corpse fell backwards with his head spewing blood everywhere. The students screamed in horror and the Senior fired into the air again to quiet them.

“Quiet you little bastards! I may have said I’d let you guys go, but I never said that I wouldn’t kill some of you first.”

The Senior scanned the floor and picked out a girl.

“You! Stand up!”

The girl complied and stood up with her body shaking.

“What’s your name?”
“J...Jaclyn…”
“Jaclyn? No!” thought Robert.
“Well Jaclyn, prepare yourself for Hell!”

The Senior raised the gun and began to pull the trigger as Jaclyn closed her eyes in fright.

“Hold it right there!” screamed Robert.

The Senior turned to where the voice came from and saw Robert had quickly twisted one of the armed students arm around so that he was both in a hold and had the gun aimed at his head. Robert had a fiery and murderous look of rage in his eyes. Jaclyn had turned around and saw it; the look in Robert’s eyes frightened him even more. However, the student Robert had put in an arm hold, the Sophomore, looked ready to soil his pants.

“What do you want?” said the Senior coolly.
“Let her go and I won’t shoot your friend here,” said Robert and he pressed the gun against the sophomore’s head harder.
“Come off it kid, you don’t have the balls to kill someone.”
“Let her go,” was all Robert said as he pressed the gun against the Sophs head again.
“Alright alright, I’ll let your little girlfriend go. However, you have to die instead.”
“…Fine.”

Robert then began to walk towards the Senior, holding the gun against the Sophs head the whole time. Soon, he was in front of the Senior who had let Jaclyn go; Jaclyn had already run away from them and was on the ground again. After a few seconds, the five students had formed a wide circle around Robert, each of them aiming their gun at him.

“Any last words?” said the Senior smugly.
“…No.”
“Very well. FIRE!”

And all the students fired at Robert. However, he had prepared himself and ducked as soon as the Senior said fire. All the bullets sailed over him and each one hit one of the students in the arm making them throw their guns behind them as the bullet hit their arms hard. The only one not hit was the Senior who had gotten confused. Robert had wasted no time though and had done a low sprint to the Senior as soon as he ducked. Before the Senior could react, Robert had thrown out a punch which slammed the Senior in the face hard. The punch had seemingly knocked the Senior out as he fell hard with his gun sliding about a foot away from his hand. Robert then ran to Jaclyn and grabbed her by the shoulders to make sure she wasn’t hurt.

“Jaclyn! Are you ok?!” he asked frantically.
“Robert…why did you do that after the things I said to you?” said Jaclyn looking straight into his eyes.
“I’m not about to let a few mean words stop me from saving a life.”
“Robert…I’m so sorry!” Jaclyn screamed before hugging him tightly.
“What for?” asked Robert confused.
“What I said, I didn’t mean it. It was like a payback joke for that time you pretended to be insane! I’m so sorry; I was going to tell you at the last song. The plan was for us to fool you, then for me to confess before the last song so we could dance together.”
“Why would you want to dance with me?”
“Because Robert,” said Jaclyn as she looked into his eyes, “I love you. I’ve loved you since we first met.”
“Jaclyn…I love you too.” Said Robert smiling slightly.
“Robert…”
“Jaclyn…”

And as everyone looked on, Robert and Jaclyn slowly closed in to kiss.

Outside, the police were still waiting for the students to exit.

“Where are they…” said the leader, “…Ok men, it’s been too long. We’re going in.”

Immediately, all the officers ran to the school and entered, dashing for the cafeteria.

Bang!

Robert had been an inch away from kissing Jaclyn, when all of a sudden his eyes opened wide in shock and they he gasped. Jaclyn looked at him concerned.

“Robert? What’s wrong?”
“Ah…ah…” was all Robert said before slumping forward onto Jaclyn.
“Robert!”

Jaclyn was confused and didn’t no what was wrong. Then she saw it. On Robert’s back, was a hole going through his shirt. It was a bullet hole. Jaclyn didn’t know how that happened as all the students who had been armed were still in pain, gripping their arms, and the Senior leader was knocked out. Or so she thought he was.

“Hahaha! That’ll teach that fucker to punch me!”

The Senior had woken up quickly and had picked up his gun. When the Senior saw Robert, he shot him as revenge. All of this had happened as Robert and Jaclyn were busy confessing their love.

“I said you could live, but he would die. And I am a man of my word. HAHAHAHAHA!”
”You bastard!” cried Jaclyn, tears streaming down her face, “I loved him! And you just killed him just as we were about to kiss!”
“Tough shit bitch,” said the evil Senior.
“You asshole, he was our friend!”
“Who the hell?!”

Robert’s friends, Jacob, Sean and Brian, had crept up behind the Senior who was now standing and had jumped him. They knocked away his gun and then began to punch him. However, the Senior was able to flip off of him and reached for his gun on the ground. When he picked it up, he aimed it at Robert’s three friends.

“You asses wanna die too?! Fine! Go to Hell with your friend!”
“Freeze!”
“What now godamn it!?”

The Senior turned around and saw, to his horror, the police.
“Damn…”
“Don’t move! We have you surrounded!”

It was true, officers had entered from the back entrances too and the boy was surrounded by armed officers.

“Fuck…I was so close…”


Later, the officers had arrested the students, after bandaging the ones who had been shot, and took them away. Jaclyn showed Robert to them and an ambulance was called. When it got there, Jaclyn found out that the bullet had just barely missed his spine and that he might live. She was relieved and after much pleading, was allowed to ride in the ambulance with Robert.

At the hospital, the doctors had performed surgery to remove the bullet and fix anything that was damaged. By midnight, Robert was dressed in hospital clothes in a bed with bandages wrapped around him. He was awake and watching the news report about the scene where several students were being interviewed. His friends were talking about his heroics and Robert was smiling. A knock came from the door and his parents came in. His mother ran to him and hugged him.

“Oh my God, I was so worried!” exclaimed Robert’s mother.
“Mom I’m fine, and you’re hurting me.”
“Oh dear, I’m sorry. It’s just I was so scared when I heard what happened. I thought you had died!”
“It’s ok mom, I’m fine,” reassured Robert before turning to his father, “Hey dad.”
“Son that was a very stupid thing to do. You could have been killed,” said Robert’s father sternly.
“I know dad,” said Robert as he lowered his head in shame.
“But…” said his father as Robert lifted his head again, “It was also a very brave thing to do. I’m proud of you son.”
“Thanks dad.”

Both Robert and his father were smiling and pretty soon, his mother had pulled them all into a group hug. His mom then pealed him a pear and constantly fluffed his pillow and kept asking him if there was anything she could do for him as his father chatted with him. After about an hour, they were told they had to leave. His mother have him a kiss goodbye and his father hugged him. When they walked out of the room, Robert went back to watching TV. A few minutes later, another knock came from the door and Jaclyn ran in.

“Robert!” she screamed as she hugged him.
“Jaclyn! What are you doing here?!”
“Your parents said I could visit you after them. I was scared you were going to die! I even rode the ambulance with you to make sure you were ok.”
“Well as you can see I’m still alive,” said Robert, “Or who knows maybe I’m a zombie.”
“There you go again with those jokes,” said Jaclyn as her eyes got teary.

Robert and Jaclyn looked deep into each others eyes before kissing each other. And this time, no one could ruin it. After a few seconds they parted and looked at each other.

“Jaclyn, I love you and I always will,” said Robert as he smiled at her.
“I know Robert, and I love you,” said Jaclyn.

Both of them began to kiss again and continued doing so for a several minutes with breaks every few seconds. Eventually, Jaclyn had to go and they kissed once more before saying goodbye. Robert leaned back into his bed and smiled.

“I love Jaclyn…” he said once more a he went to sleep.

The next morning, Jaclyn woke up early to go visit Robert. However, when she got there, she saw his parents were already there next to them with sad looks on there faces as he sat up.

“Robert! I came to visit as soon as I could!” said Jaclyn as she ran over and kissed him.
“Jaclyn…”
“Robert, what’s wrong?”
“Jaclyn…the doctor spoke to me today. Apparently, the bullet damaged me more than we thought. I’m not going to live much longer.”
“Oh my God…You can’t be serious!”
“It’s true dear,” said Robert’s mother.
“No…no you can’t die Robert! I love you! I wanted to live with you when we get older!”
“I did too Jaclyn,” said Robert as he began to cry.
“Robert…”

Jaclyn kissed him again as Robert’s parents held his hands. However, Robert knew what was coming next. He could slowly feel his heart beating slower and slower. He pushed Jaclyn’s face off of his too speak before he died.

“Mother, Father, I’m sorry that your only son has to die. I should have been more cautious and taken his gun. I don’t want to die, please forgive me.”
“It’s not your fault dear,” said his mother as she began to cry, “At least we know you’ll be safe in h…heaven.”
“Son, I want you to know that I love you,” said his father as he began to cry as well, “I am proud of you for saving the girl you love. I only wish that you would be able to live, fathers are not supposed to bury their children.”

Both of his parents burst into tears and hugged him, not wanting to let go of him. Then Robert turned to Jaclyn.

“Jaclyn, I want you to know that when I met you I knew there was something special about you. Now I realize it was love. I love you with all my heart and I wish I could have lived longer to see if we could have a life together. I hope you can forgive me for leaving you. And I hope when I see you in heaven that we can finally be together.
“Robert…I don’t want you to go. I wish I could hold you and never let go. It’s not fair how this is. I love you Robert, and you’re the only one I will ever love. I promise you that and when I see you in heaven, I will still love you.”

And Jaclyn leaned in to hug him as well and kissed him again. Then his parents kissed him on his cheeks.

“I love you all, and I will always remember you…” said Robert weakly as his eyes began to close, “Mother, Father, and Jaclyn. I can feel it; I don’t have much time left. I don’t want to go, I’m scared.”

Robert eyes began to stream tears.

“It’s ok honey, we’ll be here with you until the end,” said his mother.
“Son, don’t be afraid and do not be afraid of Death. You have proved yourself a man, and a man has nothing to fear,” said his father.
“Robert…I’m going to miss you and I look forward to when I can see you again. I love you Robert,” said Jaclyn.
“Goodbye everyone…And thank you for all you’ve done for me…”

And those were Robert’s final words as he closed his eyes. His heart stopped beating and he began to become cold. Robert, son, lover, and brave young man, was dead.


The next day was Robert’s funeral. The entire school was invited except for the five students who had been armed. It was a tearful ceremony that Robert’s parents has spend much money on to give their son a grand sendoff. Everyone, including Jaclyn, got a chance to speak about him. And after it, everyone left in tears as Robert’s father, uncles, and male cousins carried his casket.

After the ceremony, Jaclyn ran to her room extremely depressed and sad. She still had tears streaming from her eyes. She had suicidal thoughts and wanted to die. She walked into her room and immediately went to sleep. A few hours later, she woke up wondering what had happened. Then she remembered everything and felt sad. But then she saw something next to her on her bed. It was a letter and a rose. She opened the letter and read it.

Dear Beloved Jaclyn,
It’s Robert and yes I’m sending this from Heaven. I saw how sad you were and I begged God to let me give you this letter. They’re taking me good care of me up here and think you are a wonderful girl after I told them about you. Please don’t be too sad as I hate seeing you cry. I love you Jaclyn and I always will. If I didn’t I wouldn’t have given my life to save you. I’ve sent letters like this to my parents to let them know I’m okay but I felt I should give one to you first. Once again Jaclyn, I love you. Please wait until you get to Heaven to see me, don’t try and speed up the process. I cannot wait for the day until we are reunited, but I know I must wait. Until that day, I will be watching over you as your guardian angel, and your lover.
Love,
Robert.

“Robert…So you are in Heaven,” she said as she finished the letter, “At least now I know I’ll see you again one day. And I won’t speed up the process; I’ll try and live for both of us Robert. And thank you for watching over me, I love you.”

And as she looked out the window and smelt the rose. She could feel something, or someone was with her. And that that someone would always be with her.

THE END

Wow…this has to be the most emotional story I’ve ever made. I actually cried while writing this story. I hope you all like it and this is a reminder that when you find that person you would die for. Hold on to them and try your hardest to make them happy. And never make them sad, because seeing your lover sad is the worst site in the world.

And if you were wondering about the title, it’s because Robert’s love for Jaclyn overcame his fear and let him save the students. Oh and Masterson Prep is made up, any school with that name is purely coincedental.

[Midnight]

...I have to admit, I'm a bit of a sucker for traditional romance stories...but I digress...

I think you did a marvelous job on this story. Although I found the entire concept to be somewhat stereotypical, you still did a great job in the actual writing of this chapter. It is this "stereotypicalness" that was the main factor that kept this story back from reaching its full potential...

It did seem a bit rushed at some points, though. I could have definitely seen this as a story that could have unfolded over multiple chapters, and, to put it bluntly, I don't think a single vignette could do justice to this situation. Nevertheless, I found the writing to be compelling and the scenes adequately described.

You did a good job. Perhaps all you need to do is to alter it so that it isn't so stereotypical and this one can definitely shine to its fullest potential.
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Thanks, maybe I will redo it one day. But yeah it was kinda rushed cuz it was getting late and the reason for the stereotypeness is probably just average teenage angst. The idea really originated from the fact that a girl I met through an asian club party between my school and hers is my friend. And at first whenever I talked to her online she'd seem happy, but now she just seems to not care. And I get more emotional the later it gets so put those two together and boom, sad story from Samuraiman. But yeah one day when i can i'll rewrite this story.

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It would be more interesting if you made the [spoil:7f5c7d84d7]GIRL[/spoil:7f5c7d84d7] the main character and the person who died. It would be a refreshing break.[spoil:7f5c7d84d7][/spoil:7f5c7d84d7]
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