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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 10:06 pm Post subject: Bare as the day you were born - Fluff/Humor AU Saito/Netto |
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Little gift for a sick Neko. :9 I blame the folf for the inspiration, though.
As bare as the day you were born.
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Haruka Hikari smiled happily as she unpacked her family's bags, her husband, Yuuichirou, had recently been given a promotion and a few days of vacation which the family was determined to take full advantage of. They had just arrived to a luxurious hotel and were intalling themselves.
The sounds of Yuuichirou helping their twin children out of their clothing in the bathroom to change into their bathing suits, made her smile. This was Netto's and Saito's first trip to the beach and they were already enjoying themselves.
Yuichirou in the other hand, was having a bit of a struggle with the two years old twins. Netto resisted with all he had to be put the orange swimming trunks. In fact, this scene repeated every time whenever Netto had to be changed of clothes, the boy prefering to be as bare as the day he was born.
Saito, however, cooperated nicely and allowed his father to tie the little laces of his swimming trunks, giggling as the adult tickled his tummy playfully.
Netto smiled and casually walked out of the bathroom while his father was distracted before pulling the garment down and jumping out of it with a loud cry of joy, making a quick run for the door of their hotel room.
"N-Netto!" Yuuichirou sprung up from his sitting position to go after the rebel of the twins.
"What in the world?..." Haruka could only stare in disbelief as the naked blur ran past her followed by her husband. Saito blinked and moved over to his mother in tiny, still a bit wobbly steps, looking up a her with a confussed expression in his green eyes.
"I guess it's you and me for now, huh?" Haruka smiled and kneld down to hug her son, making the young Saito giggle and wail in joy.
Meanwhile, Yuuichirou was running like mad after the naked Netto, wincing everytime he head some lady scream at the sight of the baby's body exposed in all its glory for all to see. "How can he run so fast?!"
Netto ran through the halls happily, amused beyond description by the screams of old ladies that he graced with his nudity. That was, however, until he slammed himself against a service table, forcing him to land on his rear. The child whimpered at first before he let out loud cries, his fun spoiled.
"There, there. It's okay." Yuuichirou whispered as he approached to his son, picking the crying infant in his arms and rubbing gently the affected area. "See? This is what happens when you go around without your clothes." Yuuichirou said as he made his way back to his family's room, glad that the other guests of the hotel were now more concerned about the child's well being, than in his lack of coverings.
"What happened?" Haruka asked as her husband and child made it back into the room.
"He reamed right against a table and landed sit."
"Aw, my poor Netto." She smiled and opened her free arm out for the naked child, Saito comfortably installed in her other arm. As both children were settled in her arms, Saito patted Netto's check, speaking to him and re-assuring him in their own particular language.
"Alright, ready to put your bathing suit on, now?" Netto looked up the accursed piece of clothing, letting out a tiny sigh before allowing his father to put it on him. Who was the genious that invented clothes, anyway? _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
"Logic is the Ultimate Weapon." |
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Sol Fanfic Guru
Age: 37 Joined: 02 Aug 2005 Posts: 685 Location: Where all the badfics roam
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Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 10:09 pm Post subject: |
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*snicker*
My, that was certainly humorous. You got their personalities pretty much down, and I like how you have the interactions of the parents with the babies. Very cute~ \o\
Excellent job. _________________
<3 Planty~
Art in icon done by Raburabbit. |
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Neko Queen of Fluff
Joined: 15 Mar 2005 Posts: 1217 Location: The computer
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Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 10:10 pm Post subject: |
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Wow being sick for three days was worth it to read that XD Oh my god that was awesome XD
Ha ha... I can so see Netto doing that too ^_^ Whoooo, nekkid baby~ _________________ Roses are #FF0000, violets are #0000FF. All my base are belong to you.
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Midnight This is a Hilbert Space
Age: 37 Joined: 18 Mar 2005 Posts: 3089 Location: The AfterMath. Otherwise, New York City.
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Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 10:13 pm Post subject: |
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This was fantastic.
Heh, Netto streaking through a hotel. So cute, and yet somewhat disturbing in its own matter. Good work, Planty. Nice little thing will give me a smile before I head off to bed...^_^ _________________ Today, these three players are after Big Bucks! But they'll have to avoid the Whammy, as they play the most exciting game of their lives! From Television City in Hollywood! It's time to 'Press Your Luck!'--Rod Roddy
The Kingdom of Loathing: An Adventurer is You! // I ♣ Seals
Avatar by Spork. I very much appreciate it! <3 |
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Core Folf Samurai
Age: 42 Joined: 15 Mar 2005 Posts: 700 Location: Frederick, Maryland
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Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 10:16 pm Post subject: |
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I find it amazing what I can inspire. xD This was really great to read Planty, and I can see Netto doing all of that. Explains how he can get around rather quickly also, and so quick to strip down for hotsprings. >:P _________________
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YaminoMiko Rabid Roxas Fan
Age: 33 Joined: 16 Mar 2005 Posts: 701 Location: California
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Posted: Wed Mar 22, 2006 10:22 pm Post subject: |
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LOL, this made my day. XD
Nice work. ^.^ _________________
I wanna sleep, but I don't wanna sleep at the same time. @_@.
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Hon Kesshou Net Battler
Joined: 12 Mar 2006 Posts: 79 Location: Asinus in Cathedra
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Posted: Thu Mar 23, 2006 12:09 am Post subject: |
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BECAUSE I NITPICK.
Quote: | They had just arrived to a luxurious hotel and were intalling themselves. |
This is spelled "installing."
Quote: | "What in the world?..." Haruka could only stare in disbelief as the naked blur ran past her followed by her husband. Saito blinked and moved over to his mother in tiny, still a bit wobbly steps, looking up a her with a confussed expression in his green eyes. |
Only one "s" needed.
Quote: | Meanwhile, Yuuichirou was running like mad after the naked Netto, wincing everytime he head some lady scream at the sight of the baby's body exposed in all its glory for all to see. "How can he run so fast?!" |
"Heard."
In any case, I really enjoyed reading this story and hope that I can write something as entertaining myself one day. This stuff is really good, like Neko's stuff as well. :3 |
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Ginrei Net Savior
Joined: 16 Mar 2005 Posts: 197 Location: In a really old house with silly internets.
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Posted: Thu Mar 23, 2006 12:42 am Post subject: Re: Bare as the day you were born - Fluff/Humor AU Saito/Net |
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Plantman wrote: | As both children were settled in her arms, Saito patted Netto's check, speaking to him and re-assuring him in their own particular language. |
...you must know a set of twins. I think it's so cute (and odd) how twins make up their own little language before they can talk properly. My cousins, Sarah and Frances, called each other "googah" when they were reaaaal tiny. (They still do today for laughs, but that's another story.)
Very short, sweet, and cute! I liked it much. |
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Kitty-Chan Net Police
Joined: 08 Jul 2005 Posts: 438 Location: Massillon, Ohio, USA
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Posted: Thu Mar 23, 2006 10:59 am Post subject: |
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In the quote Ginrei wrote, "check" should be "cheek". Other than that, I believe all the other errors have been addressed. Great story, Planty. _________________ Need more Zero/X, Netto/Rock, Rock/Netto, Forte/Netto, & Blues/Netto. PLEASE!
Ano sa...could someone please make me a Zero/X, Blues/Netto, or Forte/Netto avatar/banner? I would greatly appreciate it...
Thanks for the avatar, Mandi!
People! We need more Blues/Netto & Forte/Netto on the net. Come on; help me out here! *gives everyone her Super-Adorable Irrisistable Sad Kitty Eyes(TM)* |
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Unknown Neo Cross Fusion!
Age: 40 Joined: 16 Mar 2005 Posts: 2933 Location: Unknown
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Posted: Thu Mar 23, 2006 2:35 pm Post subject: |
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That was freaking cute. So incredibly cute. Plus the idea of lan running around like that is just funny. You mods always seem to have such great ideas for fics and art. |
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