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leonheart
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comics is it ok or not ok that is the question
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BioRanger
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| Posted: Mon Aug 07, 2006 7:30 am Post subject: |
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| Erm... this comic is very strange. 4/10 |
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Enzan Chaud
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ElecmanEXE
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| Posted: Mon Aug 07, 2006 5:31 pm Post subject: |
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I am at an utter loss of words on how to describe this..."comic" that you posted...Adjectives fail me...
| leonheart wrote: | | comics is it ok or not ok that is the question |
I would say "not ok" for the reasons I listed below.
Anyways...To be very frank and honest with you...I'm going to say that it's really, really, really, really, really awful. This "comic" does almost (if not all) everything that a sprite comic author *SHOULD NOT* do.
1. NEVER MIX SPRITES OF DIFFERENT BITTAGES OR ART STYLES. You brought in sprites from Rockman 8, EXE (Is that a custom sprite that somebody made?), Rockman X, and Rockman Zero all together, not to mention the blue Axl recolor (I think it's a recolor), and that REALLY does not look pretty/nice/good.
2. What's the plot and/or story? Bad guys pop in and do bad stuff? There is no motivation, character development, or story let alone any substance.
3. Where are the text bubbles? NOBODY CAN READ GREEN TEXT OVER BLUE *ESPECIALLY* when it's VERY VERY VERY VERY VERY TINY!!!!! You can try to at least make proper speech bubbles that can make the text more readable. And the dialogue was horrible.
4. I never knew Omega Zero could teleport RIGHT into the middle of an enemy mob. Let alone FLY. The same goes for X. And the backgrounds could have been a little bit more creative than the one you made with a click of the Paint Bucket Tool.
5. One panel fights are not good, let alone four of them. Also, the "<person> got <ability>!!!" parts were poorly done. It took me a good couple of minutes to figure out that THAT part wasn't the actual fight.
6. Again...plot. I know you probably wanted to do the "evil guy comes in, takes stuff, and then reveals his ultimate plan dramatically" routine, but that really does not cut it in here. He comes in, kills/hurts Ciel and takes a Cyber Elf that is a recolor of "double cyclone". For what? Probably going to be revealed next, but really...Not that enticing...
7. Colonel and Tenguman? First off, Colonel is DEAD but let's drop that for now. Why in the world is TENGUMAN part of the good guys now, eh? Zero OBLITERATED HIM after chopping him up but he's back? There needs to be an explanation...>_____> While we're on the subject...How is Searchman.exe walking around in the MMZ time? IIRC, there was a cyberworld in MMZ3, but there were definitely NO dimensional areas from the anime. Another plothole you'll need to fix.
And where did you get that Searchman sprite? I swear I've seen it before but I can't put a finger on it. Can you tell us where you got it from because I'm curious as to where it came from.
8. What in the world is that big X-monster thingy at the end? I know some games and stories bring out sudden enemies but this is just uncalled for. No explanation, just lots of explosions ripped from sprite sheets of the EXE games. You know...When you want to indicate that something is blowing up completely, covering it with the same repetitive sprite is not a good way of doing it. You are allowed to show SOME "skin" of whatever is blowing up. and maybe some explosions sprites of a different frame here and there would be nice. And the blue laser towers in the end COULD have been longer.
9. The panels. Panels, panels, panels, panels, panels, panels. Why in the world are the panels in different sizes and seemingly scattered as if somebody dropped a bomb on it (Then again...the whole itself is a bomb). If you want to make a comic, make the whole thing seem at least a little bit fluid or put arrows in-between panels to indicate the story flow. You used the typical left-to-right layout but really...it's just chaotic. I can't follow what follows what in parts like the first and the last "fights."
10. Why are there a couple of empty panels? I don't understand why they are/should be empty.
I pointed out what I could think of at the moment, but I think you should really work on some parts of your sprite comic authoring before you make the continuation to this. Also...You are not allowed to post comics continuously here so if you want to post your comic that you update regularly, you'll have to post a link to the place where it's hosted or else you'll get a warning from the mods.
And can you tell us where you got the Searchman.exe sprites from because I want to see if there are sprites of other characters done in the same style.
Also...
http://www.fragile-minds.com/crashnbass/donts.html
A must read for starting sprite comic authors. I'm sure you'll learn a couple of things from there.
P.S. Give warnings when you're going to spoil the ending bosses of games like MMZ4. People, like myself, will be upset if you spoil endings for them. And spoiled endings makes games less fun for people. WHY DID YOU DO IT!!!! *cries*
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thanks for the tip!ElecmanEXE
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