Poetry - OT, PG

[Quatre Winner]

These are two poems I wrote at work while waiting for my ride to finish. I couldn't write a one-shot in my notebook >.>; Before you read and ask, yes, I was depressed, but Chex Mix is an upper ^^;;

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>Uselessness<

Looming shadows within
>the depths of despair
Others passing you by,
>compensating for you
You cannot perform to their
>higher standards
You understand this, accept this,

Step aside.

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>Depression<

The light escapes me
I lost it long ago
I'm lost in the shadows
The shadows of my fears

I'm not good enough
I'm incompetent
"I'll do this," they say,
And I step aside

What if I were gone?
I wonder this, lost in darkness
What if I never fount the light?
Would I be forgotten, brushed aside?

Sometimes I see a star,
Light within the shadows
I flail, reach for it,
But keep falling just shy
Shy of oncoming dawn

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Feel free to comment if you want, poetry isn't my forte. I much prefer oneshots. The > in the first indicate indents, but forum code hates me u.u
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[Midnight]

I'll admit, poetry is something I don't often see published here. I will admit as well that it is a lot harder to review a piece of poetry rather than prose, since prose has a set structure and has bylines to follow. Poetry is a lot more free; there is a lot more flexibility in the grammar, syntax, presentation, etc. But I digress...

Both of the poems are nice. They do their job of conveying the emotion of darkness; something I have become all too familiar with in these past months. I can very much sympathize with these emotions, which is always a plus, since the reader always gets that much closer to the author in that respect.

Good job, Quat. *thumbs up*
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