Well I got a fanfic...

Chaos_Master · Age: 33 Joined: 24 Apr 2005 Posts: 44

Its based upon my own created navis, which then revolves around the original series. This story starts in the Proto saga and I want to know if you would enjoy reading it. Tell me and I will post it here.
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Revenant · Posted: Mon Apr 25, 2005 10:27 pm Post subject:

Umm... it would be slightly more acceptable if you actually put the story here so people can read it. Otherwise this post has almost no relevance. *hands back the staff of the mods*
Yes I would like to read it : P.
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Chaos_Master · Age: 33 Joined: 24 Apr 2005 Posts: 44

30 years ago, before the attack of Alpha had came to fruitition, SciLab created 3 Spec-Op navis. Codename Ultima was the most human navi yet with his entire body fleash and bones. He was trained in the best martial arts and had been givin the Light Chip, a chip of grand power that would protect him even when he was damamged. Codename Dargara was the full body navi. Originally made for full armor battles against the most tough viruses, Dargara became the 'guardian' of Ultima as they were both brothers. He was givin a strange 'Dark' battle chip. It was said that the original plans for the chip were leaked. A few Hi-Op navis were sent to finish this task. Then there was Codename ChaosMan, the alchemitic navi. It was originally said that he was made from the data shell of Bass, however it was infected with 'Megolina' viruses and SciLab officials had to create a program for him called 'Transferse Energy' program. This allowed him to copy different navi powers without deleting the navi. This may have also came from his transmutational skills. The day after that is when it all went to hell...

Okay now I am going to tell you how they look. Ultima is actually human shaped with a tan body. His normal decor(Yup also first navi that actually wears clothes!) is usually a dark shirt with dark blue pants(Jeans whatever.). He has blueish-red eyes. Dargara is completly covered in armor. He has a small horn on top which he CAN use. His arms are colored yellow and the rest of his body is blue, except for his mouth armor which is white. He has grey eyes as well. I'll tell you how ChaosMan looks next chapter. Now continue reading!

"Dargara come on or the damn train is going to leave!" Ultima yelled to his brother as he gave a homeless navi some change.

"Look sorry but that guy looked like he could've needed some resups." (I had to think whats there change is called.)

"Still this train only goes every 30 minutes and I am NOT getting late again. Besides isn'nt he always there?"

"I think I have been keeping him alive."

"You know how freaky that is?"

"Yes I do. But how do we get late if the train takes 4 minutes to make it to SciLab?"

"Do you know how many stairs we climb?"

"There is an elevator you know."

"Eh its always full with the damn researching navis. Damn I hate them."

"Please man you know there cool. You gave Tom's kid a present so you can't hate Tom because you'll hate his kid."

"Nah his kid is different. Besides the only people I actually get along with is you and ChaosMan."

"Yeah I know. Were has he been anyways?"

"I heared he and Bass had been training. Besides they got Blues to help with the grunt work."

"Well time to get off." Dargara told Ultima as they got off. "You know when ever we get off, SciLab always seems grand right?"

"Yeah but it is pretty big." Ultima told him as they continued walking.

"Hey you hear?" Victor, Navi head chief, asked Ultima." It seems that the net had finally started to connect to house hold items! This is soo cool!"

"Well that actually is pretty cool. Thanks for telling us." Ultima told him. "You always have the basic help don't you?"

"Yeah!" Victor said as he ran to tell another navi.

"I don't think he heared you."

"Good cause I am really getting tired of him. Besides he just is overly excited."

"Thats because his opperater is a chief right?"

"Yup. I think he is going to have loads of fun now." Ultima told him with cheer.

"See you are gettin better now. That actually scared me a bit." Dargara told him as they entered an elevator. "Whats up?"

"Today is Mr. Lights birthday!

Okay so thats it. Basically I forgot Lights name in the Game so he is known as Light. Forte really has no mention till later.
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"An unholy light is here again. Our lost souls gather to it, as if mourning to our past. We do not deserve the pain in which we place ourselves. Humanity is without that need..."

Nazne · Shukei - Hakuteiken Joined: 20 Mar 2005 Posts: 1133

You know, you should really find some way to place the character introductions directly within your story, instead of inserting random (author's quotes) all over the thing. That sort of stuff breaks up a fic and makes it quite hard to read indeed. >__>;;

Meanwhile, I'm still not understanding what you're trying to say. Alpha was the first Navi-formed-Internet. How could there be anything before, and in Navi form, when technology hadn't advanced far enough yet?

-BMA

Chaos_Master · Age: 33 Joined: 24 Apr 2005 Posts: 44

Alpha grows smarter thats why. This is before the day when Alpha went insane and started to absorb everything connected to him. The story should pick-up more later.

......I don't like having to put there names after every thing, especially if its a 2 person conversation.
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"An unholy light is here again. Our lost souls gather to it, as if mourning to our past. We do not deserve the pain in which we place ourselves. Humanity is without that need..."

Nazne · Shukei - Hakuteiken Joined: 20 Mar 2005 Posts: 1133

Ah, but Forte was the first independent Navi who had the capacity to act on his own, so technically your three Navis would not exist at around the timeline you've proposed for them. Even Forte came after Alpha, who came before everything-even Navis.

And as for your name problem, get creative. :P Merge dialogue with description or something-right now, the entire thing is one big double-liner conversation that I can't make either heads nor tails of.

-BMA

Chaos_Master · Age: 33 Joined: 24 Apr 2005 Posts: 44

Not excatly because from what I remember Alpha had attacked and Forte was the most likely navi to have done it, being a solo navi. Thats why he was caught, attacked, and dissapered. This story actually becomes a action packed story once Alpha attacks.
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Nazne · Shukei - Hakuteiken Joined: 20 Mar 2005 Posts: 1133

You misunderstand me. Forte was the first Navi who even had a possibility of going solo. Your three Navis seem to override that completely, being more like Navis today than back then in the days of discovery and Alpha. Fact is, they simply do not fit into the timeline.

-BMA

Revenant · Posted: Mon Apr 25, 2005 10:46 pm Post subject:

Thank you for letting me read it *hands a kudo*
And the fact that blues exists kinda throws me off. The making of the internet was a while ago (and Skunk Head wasn't alive, unless you want to count fanfiction that describes him as a satan incarnate, which I am not resposible for >.< ), unless of course a very grumpy rich person had already had that navi in comission for a while..

And Forte wasn't attacked. Alpha just went rabidly evil, but since Forte's independence and troubleshooting "subroutines" made people in scilabs jealous or scared, the comittee sez "forte go boom", not even insinuating that a certain thing that THEY insinuated and made was the culprit (who would become a very violent final boss later on).
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Chaos_Master · Age: 33 Joined: 24 Apr 2005 Posts: 44

thats why its a fanfic! You can alter storylines to fit it in. Besides these navis are actually Spec-Ops navis, so that lower class navis would just think of them as regular navis.
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Chaos_Master · Age: 33 Joined: 24 Apr 2005 Posts: 44

To Revenant: Well the Blues thing goes for Protoman. What did he do? Was he made before he was givin to Enzan?(That is how you spell it right?) He could've been in SciLab before.
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Nazne · Shukei - Hakuteiken Joined: 20 Mar 2005 Posts: 1133

Why alter the good, existing storyline when you can stick everything from this fic into a time two thousand years into the future, and have it still make sense? :P I don't see too much that needs a real adjustment of the EXE world.

Besides, you are still not getting it. There were no "lower Navis" back then. Everything was human-controlled, and on the same level of intelligence and technology. Cossack was the first one to actually get brilliant. SciLabs probably couldn't have done anything without him until Yuuichirou showed up to take over, and that's way later. To just simply "adjust" the storyline to make room for your absurdly super-powered Navis is madness, in my opinion.

-BMA

Revenant · Posted: Mon Apr 25, 2005 10:58 pm Post subject:

Ano.. I'm kinda confused anyhow. At you and the actual capcom story.
Umm... by the way, before this discussion has to take up a page, I'd like to say that both of you have an incentive to be right.

In Chaos_Master's favor: do what you will, and compose anything that is relatively alright. We have the freedom of choice (unless angry fans hold ye down)
In Nazne's favor: The story is rather random in itself, and deserves some editing.

And in my favor: Forte still gets to blow the living poo outta stuff so I'm happy.
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Nazne · Shukei - Hakuteiken Joined: 20 Mar 2005 Posts: 1133

Fine. Technically, by the laws of free speech that governs this country (or so I'd like to think :P) he can write whatever he wants and mangle-edit the storyline to whatever he needs it to be. I just won't guarentee reader appreciation, that's all.

-BMA

Chaos_Master · Age: 33 Joined: 24 Apr 2005 Posts: 44

These navis get deleted just to clarify that they are not Almighty navis which can not be destroyed. The Alpha storyline had to be more clarified thats why. Do we know if navis fought against Alpha? This is the story of 3 navis who try and suceed and fail.

Renvenent thank you for the kind justuer(SP?). I try to stay as close to the storyline so it will still be realistic.
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Revenant · Posted: Mon Apr 25, 2005 11:11 pm Post subject:

Correct. He can be free to write whatever his hand makes (evil and crazy, stupid, moron topics aside). However, he is not free to God-Mod-dodge whatever incoherent techno-l33t j4rg0n people hurl in his direction.

And no, you cannot look up his address and hurt him without the aid of a forum, unless you have a quick getaway car and nothing to lose. But, for the sake of our laws (which are going to peices like fewmets chucked at a windmill), we cannot harm him, but reader appreciation is not guaranteed.

... I feel like a hostage negotiator! T_T;;

Umm... would justice-doer work? For the sake of personality, I'll twist it to vigilante. Laughing

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Nazne · Shukei - Hakuteiken Joined: 20 Mar 2005 Posts: 1133

Everything Alpha did was blamed on Forte, who was the only one technologically advanced enough to do anything to Alpha, and he was innocent before they went after him with the entire horde of battle Navis. Cossack could not have created any other Navis in such a short period of time, being under effective "court-martial" for his first experiment's actions, and no one else had the technology to create better Navis. Which is why Tadashi locked himself and Alpha up. Might there have been Navis who fought Alpha? We don't know. But there certainly weren't ones made of "flesh and bones", nor ones copied from "Forte's shell", and most definitely Dark and Light energy did not exist then. When would they have bothered to come up with elements? Besides, Forte's program was by then considered far too unstable for anyone to use ever again.

-BMA

**Malik** · Local Prinny Deity Age: 34 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1179

Kindly don't double post, Chaos_Master. You can combine two ideas in a single post, zomg

Now, to ward away flames.

Chaos_Master: Some people don't like AU uncanon fics. It messes with their perspective of the game/show/manga. However, you should do research before posting a fic (I made the mistake of calling Alex x Felix mudshipping on e-fiction.org and I haven't been back in over a year). Especially since the anime and game is very different from each other, I believe that Enzan programmed Blues at a very young age. Or was that just Nazne's fanart from a long time ago? I forget.

Nazne: This is an uncanon AU fic. They do exist. It could be worse.

Revenant: Poo? XD
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Revenant · Posted: Mon Apr 25, 2005 11:25 pm Post subject:

Story of my early fanfic life, and it happens to many people. (The messed up internet info sites weren't helpful at all, because they had the same problem)

Sorry, Malik. Kids WB found my hiding spot.
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Chaos_Master · Age: 33 Joined: 24 Apr 2005 Posts: 44

I have finally made a way to clarify my navis!

Robert Smith was a very rich owner and top money giver to SciLab. Because of this he was the first person to have the Pulse Transmission System(PTS) and thats how he became Ultima. A navi who was human, he learned to use battle chips by not becoming one with them but insted actually holds them(I/E: Cyber Sword is held in hands, Bommerang is actually a boomerang, P.A is normal when used.).

Dargara was based upon the failed Armored Nexius program. The original maker, Charles III, had went insane and left. Dr. Wily decided to finish the project and he then made the first armored core nave. He dubed him Dargara, after the ancient god of machin Daragara(Made my own God, coll right?). Thats kinda were the Light and Dark thing came from.

ChaosMan was actually being made BEFORE Bass but due to complecations(SP?) in his data. Bass had been made from ChaosMan's case shell, showing that they had simmilar powers. However ChaosMan was the fiirst navi to use alchemy, an ancient form of 'magic'. He also can copy moves without deleting the opponent or being hit by it(Later he actually loses that and has to ethier be hit by the attack or kill the navi and take their data.). Bass and him were the best of friends at the time. Blues was sent to make sure that nothing bad would happen as they were still 'prototypes'.

Human navi SERIOUSLY HUMAN!

Navi made by Wily is NOT EVIL BUT IT MAY BE STILL!

BASS WAS COPIED FROM ANOTHER NAVI, OMGWTF!?

Also All your base are belong to us! (Sorry had to.)

MORE ABOUT STORY!

PTS gets cancelled when another person, named Alex, used it when the Alpha Revolt happend 5 MINUTES LATER! The kid is actually good at netbattling AS HIMSELF! He even puts some battle chips before entering(Maybe he knew what was going to appen(MORE SP?)?). Ultima gets killed first cause, well his reflexis sucked and he didn't notice a large glob appear behind him. Dargara tries to save him but gets eaten by a GIANT Alpha bug. Alex and ChaosMan are left to save the day. So they find the Alpha part thats doing this all and go in an all out war against it. ChaosMan was about to be hit with a hard attack when Alex jumps in front, forcing him to jack-out by force. Thats were he got screwed since YOU CAN'T JACK-OUT OF THE PTS LIKE THAT! He got stuck INSIDE the PTS and was unable to get out. ChaosMan gets angry and does an attack that not even Blues(Who was protecting SciLabs main computer.) knew about called ' Chaos Cannon'. The power that came from it deleted nearly all the bugs and it cause Alpha to.....GROW STRONGER! Because of this he Alpha was unable to do jack and got captured. ChaosMan dissapered, Ultima's data had been realesed(As well as Dargara's.) and Alex was sent to be saved by a few of SciLabs best. However Wily was gone somehow, Cossack left somewere as well, and Light was used to try and make sure that Alpha would be stuck.

30 years later.................Well Ultima reapperes. His data had been recovering and when he was complete he searched for a PET to suit him. Would you know it he found one with a Dimensional chip stuck in it! So he know calls himself John Smith. He works in DenTech(English version.) High(Or whatever its called.) and is in basic conntact with Netto since his teacher went on leave.

Dargara was strange. He was really deleted and his data was recreated from a SciLab computer that went solo. SciLab didn't know were it was but whenever a Dark Loid was deleted Dargara was becoming hole. When he did become hole he was unable to even be controlled by Dark Chips because he WAS MADE FROM IT! He actually only used the Dimensional chip when Netto(I want to be to the original. I WANT TO SAY LAN!) was attacked by an old friend turned evil, known as Omega.EXE.

ChaosMan became known as Chaos Master(Hence my uber cool screen name.) while he recovered. he read books, old scriptures, basically everything he could get his hands on. He even took data from games(WTF is what I guessed you ethier said or thought.). He even concentrated his mind to 'enter' other dimensions and learn even more attacks. Even with this much data he still needed to take navis datas to recover.

Alex did return and he was even visited by Slur. However because of the PTS he actually can enter the net because his mind become more electrical(His eyes turn red when he 'jacks-in'.). However he doesn't listen to her as Chaos Master enter the area to occupy the PET(Which is very old.). While Slur leaves, Alex uses a Cannon chip on a small belt on her and she drops a Dimensional chip. He grabs it, jacks out after he gives Chaos Master the chip, and re-enters his body. Chaos Master follows suit and leaves. Slur got screwed didn't she? Duo told her not to leave the net(Havn't seen Stream so this is basically a guess on her part.) so she leaves.

Alex gets Chaos Master as a navi, Ultima needs a new PET to leave in, Dargara needs a alter ego, and I need to tell you more!

Dargara becomes a student at, yes, DenTech High. He calls himself Ray Rogerson(You know that can be a name.). He looks slightly like Lan because Dargara made himself look like Light when he was young. Ultima, being human before, is still astonished at the world. Chaos master waits for Alex to get a new PET. Alex then infacts takes the business of his father who died on the same day. The legondary Castle corp. which is known for the largest supply of battle chips and PET accecories(SP?).

Long but I hope you enjoy.
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"An unholy light is here again. Our lost souls gather to it, as if mourning to our past. We do not deserve the pain in which we place ourselves. Humanity is without that need..."