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Elementalman.EXE
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That is true. But it give him no reason in anyway to use the whole dmn plot point
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| Elementalman.EXE wrote: | | That is true. But it give him no reason in anyway to use the whole dmn plot point |
it's his fanfic he can make it about he whants
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PlaguedOne
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There is a fine line between constructive critisism and flaming, Elementalman.EXE. Just letting you know to be careful about saying something you may regret.
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| gameman wrote: | | Elementalman.EXE wrote: | AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH DAMN IT TO THE BLOODY HELL
I knew it. You riped off the ending for EXE2 and used it for Noah. Damn it, I give up. You even ripped of EXE4's ending. I tried to patch up the broken ends. Dex is still a dumbass. Lan is still an OC. Chaud is still an ass( More that usual at least). I have a feeling that when Anetta comes into this fic, she'll be a Nature pasifst and cooks food that lookes disgusting, even though their two completly diffrent Characters.
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Elementalman if you have not noticed AMZ likes exe2 (because of sean) |
That isn't really an excuse for reusing its ending. >.>
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Anime Master ZERO
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Well, I DID jump straight into writing season 2 as soon as season 1 was finished. I guess I was just really enthusiastic about starting the second season.
However, a season break spent on working on my other fics and re-reading this one should prove to make season 3 even better.
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Nazne
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No offense or anything, but if you reread the same things over and over again, you're just going to end up writing the same things again. :P Try to find some other fanfics that suit your fancy, preferably some GOOD ones-say Hikari Enzan-and study those, or just go read books. Rereading your own work might help editing, but you need to look at something else to upgrade your style.
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railracer express
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| Posted: Sat Apr 30, 2005 10:20 pm Post subject: |
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What' wrong with the ending? Looks fine with me :eyes:
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It is necessary to provide a balance between originality and quality. If you hadn't noticed, the finale was essentially the end of EXE2, the end of EXE4, and Axess 51 rolled into one.
I agree with Nazne--try reading other things or not thinking about writing for a while. Go ahead and read other things, and perhaps inspiration will come that way.
I think that I speak for all of your beta readers that we would not like to be swept under the carpet when it comes to criticism. You requested our help, and we gave it. We offer ways in which to improve the quality and appeal of the chapter, and yet it seems that you do not accept any of it.
And that would be my two cents.
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Elementalman.EXE
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| gameman wrote: | | Elementalman.EXE wrote: | | That is true. But it give him no reason in anyway to use the whole dmn plot point |
it's his fanfic he can make it about he whants |
Generally speaking using some material in a Fanfic is exceptable, But not huge major plot point's. That just is showing us stuff that we've seen before. He can do whatever he want's. We just want to stop him from putting reused stuff into this fic.
PO- Yah, sorry about that. I was a little tired and I didn't intend to flame
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Midnight
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| Quote: | | (I still hadn't gotten Midnight Ciritc's response, so it was just down to Liorei, Eyebright, and TheWebbuilder). |
You didn't miss much. I pretty much agreed with TheWebbuilder. I intended to submit my report to you on Saturday afternoon, but you already posted the chapter, so it seems moot what I did.
I can, however, send you my final thoughts.
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Nazne
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Mind sending mine along with yours? I think I've been disqualified from betareading since I missed the last four chapters. :P
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And the reason MC was late was because he wanted to discuss the finale with me before we submitted our critiques.
He didn't know that I had already sent you mine, so it messed him up waiting for me to reply to his PM.
I'll do it, Nazne! 
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Anime Master ZERO
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Go right ahead, all of you. I can still make changes to this version of chapter 2-51 before it goes up on FF.net.
I'll put up a new topic for the next season so the mods don't have to split this one.
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