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PostPosted: Sat May 21, 2005 9:56 pm    Post subject: RockMan's Dead Reply with quote

Rated PG ONE-SHOT.
Genred Angst.

-ROCKMAN'S DEAD-

" I still can't believe you're dead. I still can't believe Forte deleted you. But what I still can't believe is that you never knew ahat I felt for you. Oh, Rock, now it's too late to tell you that I love you. I always loved you since the day when we met."

A tear sprouted in Roll's eye and rolled by her cheek. She heard two familiar voices behind her.

"Roll, are you alright guts?", asked a huge Navi known formally as GutsMan.

"We share your sorrow for RockMan's death, Miss Roll" , replied a tall Navi called Glyde.

Roll stayed silent.

Other 4 familiar Navis telepoted in.

"Seems like the Megaflea finally got what he wanted, eh?", said mockingly Fireman.

GutsMan was about to run and punch out FireMan, but Glyde stopped him.


"Shut up, FireMan, we're in a funeral, not in a rave." , replied seriously ElecMan.

"ElecMan's right, Fire, now isn't the time to play the fool" , said ColoredMan.

"Yes, this is neither the time or the place to do what you're doing", said MagicMan.


Roll ignored all was happening behind her.

She stayed silent, looking the monument StoneMan and the Zero Virus constructed for burying RockMan's remains. It was a big stone cross with RockMan's Navi symbol in the center of it.

2 Navis teleported in. They were Blues and Punk. They were carrying a huge coffin-like thing.

"RockMan's remains are here" , said ColoredMan, still in a serious tone, something unusual for him.

"Please move away, this coffin is pretty heavy" , said Punk in a gasping tone.

Roll moved away to let Blues and Punk put the coffin in the monument.

In that, a Navi and a program teleported in. They were StoneMan and the Zero Virus.

"And here ended the hero" , said the Zero Virus, " a great tomb for a great Navi."

"That's right, Zero" , replied StoneMan, " although we made RockMan's life impossible, at least we helped to make his trip to the afterlife better."

The 10 Navis and Zero watched a bunch or Metts and Billys push the coffin where RockMan's dead body was to the monument StoneMan and Zero built.

"Rock...." , whispered Roll , "goodbye, goodbye forever."

-THE END-


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PostPosted: Mon May 23, 2005 12:07 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

It's really nice! But why would the Zero Virus care about Rock?
Well anyway! All it needed was Blues! JK
Awesome job!
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PostPosted: Mon May 23, 2005 2:27 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

If he was deleted... then there should be no body. The concept is... maddening.
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PostPosted: Mon May 23, 2005 10:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Yeah i agree with there being no remains athter being deleted but other than that its a good job
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PostPosted: Mon May 23, 2005 11:11 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Kudos to you for the succinctness. The story's left me a little emotional, also.
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PostPosted: Tue May 24, 2005 2:50 pm    Post subject: Re: RockMan's Dead Reply with quote

DSX wrote:
Rated G ONE-SHOT.
Genred Angst.
A tear sprouted in Roll's eye and rolled by her cheek. She heard two familiar voices behind her.
"Roll, are you alright guts?", asked a huge Navi known formally as GutsMan.

On the Roll sentence was a pun intendid?
and what's up with formaly known as Gutsman???
I guess it's o.k isn't Zero Virus evil? Evil or Very Mad
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PostPosted: Tue May 24, 2005 3:53 pm    Post subject: Re: RockMan's Dead Reply with quote

moocowbob44 wrote:
DSX wrote:
Rated G ONE-SHOT.
Genred Angst.
A tear sprouted in Roll's eye and rolled by her cheek. She heard two familiar voices behind her.
"Roll, are you alright guts?", asked a huge Navi known formally as GutsMan.

On the Roll sentence was a pun intendid?
and what's up with formaly known as Gutsman???
I guess it's o.k isn't Zero Virus evil? Evil or Very Mad


is "known formally as-" as in other words his name is Gutsman. I think...

Zero Virus O_o, I don't know him....
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PostPosted: Sat May 28, 2005 8:40 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

This is lovely, really. No sarcasm. I like emotional fanfics. Oh, and by the way, the Zero Virus would care about Rockman because, If I remember faintly, Zero became friends with Rockman(At the end of transmission, when asked, Zero replied "Friends? ...Sure, why not?" Or something like that.). So that's why.
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PostPosted: Tue Jun 07, 2005 6:16 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Bumping!!!

Whatever, answering questions also.

ZO and some other guy I can't remember, this fic was originally based on MMX, but I edited it to put only Rockman.EXE characters. That's why RockMa has remains, although he's deleted.

rockman.exe/hikari and CrossFusionStarMan, glad you liked my fic, I don't do sentimental fics usually. Only when I'm FORCED to watch sentimental movies or soup operas with my sister, or when I read too much romantic fics at FF.net.
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PostPosted: Tue Jun 07, 2005 6:29 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

This turned out to be a lot less than what I was expecting.
Number 1: It was WAY too short. Because of that, everything seemed rushed.
Number 2: The emotion is cliched at best. I felt that the emotions expressed by the characters were hollow at best, you know?

I felt that throughout reading it, I thought this was nothing more than a rushed work, throwing together a bunch of characters to mourn very briefly. All in all, there was a LOT of potential in the idea, but it was not realized.

That is all.
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PostPosted: Tue Jun 07, 2005 6:34 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Midnight Critic wrote:
This turned out to be a lot less than what I was expecting.
Number 1: It was WAY too short. Because of that, everything seemed rushed.
Number 2: The emotion is cliched at best. I felt that the emotions expressed by the characters were hollow at best, you know?

I felt that throughout reading it, I thought this was nothing more than a rushed work, throwing together a bunch of characters to mourn very briefly. All in all, there was a LOT of potential in the idea, but it was not realized.

That is all.

Whatever, at least you didn't flame me. ^_^
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PostPosted: Tue Jun 07, 2005 6:47 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Please, do NOT quote the messages if the post is ABOVE yours.
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PostPosted: Wed Jun 08, 2005 1:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Whatever, more CRITICS TO ME, not MY FANFICS.

Can you say if you liked or not my fanfic and not if I quoted a post above mine!!!
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PostPosted: Wed Jun 08, 2005 1:24 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I don't think you understand, Plantman is a moderator, she was trelling you that YOU broke a RULE, and all you did was brush her aside. Not very smart.
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PostPosted: Wed Jun 08, 2005 1:26 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

A ver, te lo voy a poner en español para evitar confusiones lingüísticas. Creo que Plantman tiene todo el derecho de decirte eso, porque es moderadora de este foro... =P

No tiene mucho sentido citar un post entero si está encima del tuyo y además respondes con una sola línea. Ten en cuenta también que MC se tomó unos minutos en leer tu fic y comentar sobre lo que opina del fic, y lo más cortés que podrías hacer es responderle, ¿no? Digo.



Translation... << *pats MC*

Quote:
I'll put it in spanish to avoid language confusions. I think Plantman has all the right to tell you that, because she's a mod of this forum... =P

It's pointless to quote an entire post if it happens to be above yours and besides you reply with a one-liner. Keep in mind too that MC took a couple of minutes to read your fic and commenting about what he thinks of your fic, and the least corteous thing you could do is answer to him, don't you think? I say.


As an on-topic comment about your fic, DSX, I believe it has a wrong rating. Usually, character death isn't G rated... in my not-so-humble opinion.
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PostPosted: Wed Jun 08, 2005 3:19 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

There. I changed the rating to PG, well, since the fic don't shows exactly how RockMan died, I don't think it should have a high rating.

Ah, and FOR THE SAKE OF GOD, please CRITIQUE my fic, not ME.
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PostPosted: Wed Jun 08, 2005 3:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

You know, rather than critiques, you should take those as mod warnings for your behaviour.

"Critique" isn't the same as "warning", you know. Nor in spanish, either.
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PostPosted: Tue Jul 26, 2005 12:50 am    Post subject: lol Reply with quote

I'm suprised the mods havent locked this yet lolol
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PostPosted: Tue Jul 26, 2005 1:43 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Excuse me, what was the point of resurrecting a thread that's been last posted about a month ago with such comment? If you don't have something constructive to say about this fanfic, then, by all means don't post into it, moreso if it's this old.
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