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Vanilla_Go_Rilla I Used to Be Sexy
Joined: 06 May 2005 Posts: 776 Location: Lumine av. (c) meh
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Posted: Fri Jun 24, 2005 10:09 pm Post subject: Cyber Man-Rise to Power: Page 1 is now up |
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*NOTE: This comic is a continuation of a fanfiction collab I wrote with Sigma.exe, titled "Adver Man: The Ultimate Evil." According to the rules, all updates to this comic will be made on this post. Also, for a little change in pace, all characters will be drawn in semi-chibi form (except for chapter intros).
The year: 200X. In the turbulent months following the defeat of Adver Man and his minions, the Cyber World is once again in hopeless peril. The remnant guerilla mafias operating throughout the globe have reorganized into independent clans, fiercely competing amongst themselves for control of the entire Internet.
Duo and Slur, in a final desperate move to counter the wave of corruption that ensued as a result of Adver Man's deletion, have altered his data and bestowed a new Navi dubbed as the Ultimate Power upon an unlikely new hero, in hopes of defending the Cyber World from certain ultimate destruction.
And so a new saga in the EXE universe begins.
PROLOGUE
Page 1: http://www.sheezyart.com/view/459562/
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Nazne Shukei - Hakuteiken
Joined: 20 Mar 2005 Posts: 1133
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Posted: Fri Jun 24, 2005 11:44 pm Post subject: |
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While the story appears pretty interesting at first glance, the picture leaves room for work. You seem to have gone off the deep end with the Blur tool, for one. It makes the entire picture just really hard to look at, as one can't tell where they're supposed to focus their vision. Maybe try and make the background less vivid, focus on the people a bit more, and on a side note, motorcycle's really well drawn. XD
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Metal Shark Player Nebula
Joined: 16 Mar 2005 Posts: 550
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Posted: Fri Jun 24, 2005 11:45 pm Post subject: |
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the cover reminds me of River City Ransom bizzarely.
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Midnight This is a Hilbert Space
Age: 37 Joined: 18 Mar 2005 Posts: 3089 Location: The AfterMath. Otherwise, New York City.
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Posted: Sat Jun 25, 2005 6:05 am Post subject: |
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Fascinating.
What Nazne has said covers the majority of what is a bit off in the drawing. I have but one question for you--what's with the bullet-hole in the title? _________________ Today, these three players are after Big Bucks! But they'll have to avoid the Whammy, as they play the most exciting game of their lives! From Television City in Hollywood! It's time to 'Press Your Luck!'--Rod Roddy
The Kingdom of Loathing: An Adventurer is You! // I ♣ Seals
Avatar by Spork. I very much appreciate it! <3 |
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Vanilla_Go_Rilla I Used to Be Sexy
Joined: 06 May 2005 Posts: 776 Location: Lumine av. (c) meh
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Posted: Sat Jun 25, 2005 2:29 pm Post subject: |
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Midnight Critic, to tell the truth, I just felt like inserting the bullet hole to give this fan comic more of a rugged Cowboy Bebop kind of feel. That, and I've heard that in Katakana the characters are usually separated by dots, and I felt like doing something creative with the title :]
Metal Shark Player wrote: | the cover reminds me of River City Ransom bizzarely.
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I was thinking more along the lines of Sin City or Double Dragon. I've almost forgotten about River City Ransom *bricked for stupidity* but now that you mention it, the resemblance does seem rather uncanny.
Nazne wrote: | While the story appears pretty interesting at first glance, the picture leaves room for work. You seem to have gone off the deep end with the Blur tool, for one. It makes the entire picture just really hard to look at, as one can't tell where they're supposed to focus their vision. Maybe try and make the background less vivid, focus on the people a bit more, and on a side note, motorcycle's really well drawn. XD |
Sigh. You noticed the Blur craziness too, huh Nazne? I just noticed the numerous Blur screw-ups myself, and it does make the background seem a bit off. As for the motorcycle, I'm glad you liked the drawing, and I'm still pretty new at drawing vehicles...hope this will get better in time. Thanks for the suggestion and the comment >_O |
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hakke shou kaiten
Joined: 23 Jun 2005 Posts: 10 Location: metropolis
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Posted: Sat Jun 25, 2005 3:08 pm Post subject: |
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I find the hair of the guy really amusing,,,,, it looks so fuzzy ::laugh:: _________________ with your heart--
>>>> CATCH THE FUTURE |
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Wackoguy Net Savior
Joined: 16 Mar 2005 Posts: 141 Location: On your head! WHEE!!
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Posted: Sat Jun 25, 2005 5:27 pm Post subject: |
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Heh! That looks fits Kenishiro very well.
As Nazne said,that's a pretty good motorcycle you drew there. :O _________________ "When it rains,it pours. When it pours,get out of the rain." -quoth me!
Megaman Melee! HUTTAH and HUZZAH!
"I ate your siggy..." |
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Vanilla_Go_Rilla I Used to Be Sexy
Joined: 06 May 2005 Posts: 776 Location: Lumine av. (c) meh
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 7:22 pm Post subject: |
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Actually, Wackoguy, Kenishiro is no longer among the living. XD Actually, he is. But he probably won't appear in this story and if he does, it's as a cameo, whenever it's appropriate for him to show up.
As for the pic, that guy in the jacket is named Chin, and the sexah thang beside him is named Lumine. These are a set of one-off characters made for the purposes of this fic. The story is that [spoil:36468fcf05]Slur gives Chin Adver Man's data, which manifests itself into a new Net Navi named Cyber Man, who bears a close resemblance to the Navi he replaces[/spoil:36468fcf05].
hakke shou kaiten wrote: | I find the hair of the guy really amusing,,,,, it looks so fuzzy ::laugh:: |
Well, considering that Chin is based a bit loosely off ME......X3 (goes off to fix fuzzy hair)
On another note, I'm working on cell shading. Slur is the first "beta test" for this technique, and even for a semi-chibi, she's got it goin' on, yo. And finally, CheezyFart's slow server problems seem to have disappeared, constituting much yayness.
Whew. I'm gonna take a nap.
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Mikazuki Net Police
Joined: 20 Mar 2005 Posts: 410 Location: Writing Manga!
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 7:29 pm Post subject: |
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It's look pretty funny to me! XD (the first page) _________________ || I'm in the hell | I'm in the fate|| |
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Elizabeth Net Agent
Age: 38 Joined: 15 Mar 2005 Posts: 221 Location: Wherever I happen to be right now
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Posted: Tue Jun 28, 2005 9:14 pm Post subject: |
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Looking hilarious so far! And the lowered amount of blur = good. |
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Vanilla_Go_Rilla I Used to Be Sexy
Joined: 06 May 2005 Posts: 776 Location: Lumine av. (c) meh
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Posted: Wed Jun 29, 2005 1:31 am Post subject: |
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Thanks Mikazuki and Elizabeth! Good to know you appreciate the funny-ness; but alas I have bad news and good news, and even better news.
First the bad. Since I've recently started work on another original comic called Arcadian Sky, I just can't find the time to work on TWO comics at once. So this manga was extremely short-lived and I'll admit it was definitely an over-abmitious effort, lol.
Then the good news. I will write the sequel to Adver Man as a fanfic, just to keep it traditional, and also to let the people on Fanfiction know the Adver Man saga is not dead. Since I'll be updating some fanart, to save forum space I'm posting in my previous fanart thread, although most of my effort will now be concentrated on Adver Man's sequel. In the meantime, I'd like to request an admin or moderator to lock this thread, and if you'd still like to comment about this, you may PM me at any time. >_O
And finally, the even better news. I just saved a bunch of money on my car insurance. |
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