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Hikari no Namida
Joined: 23 Mar 2005 Posts: 48 Location: Wouldn't you like to know?
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Posted: Sat Jun 25, 2005 7:18 pm Post subject: |
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Midnight Critic wrote: | I was wondering when this fic would be taken off of hiatus.
It is certainly quite interesting...and I wonder sometimes if I am the only reader...but I digress. Somehow, I imagined Lan's weapon as a navi to be something else, but I suppose you have your reasons.
There seems to be quite the bombshell at the end of this chapter...I await to see how the shrapnel falls. |
Nah, I don't think you're the only reader, I just think you're the only reader who actually replies. Anyways, here's a part of the next chapter for whoever actually reads this.
I shook my head and decided to go downstairs, since my stomach was complaining of its lack of food. However, I couldn't help but feel as though something important had just happened. Actually, something felt really off. I looked around my room and then noticed that my PET was out of sleep mode, but Megaman wasn't in the PET or my PC. I paled at the thought of him hearing what I had been talking to myself about.
'Please don't tell me he heard...please!' I thought desperately to myself. I vaguely realized in the back of my mind that I was hyperventilating. I quickly took a deep breath and tried to calm myself. It didn't help a whole lot, but it did stop my hyperventilation. I took another deep breath and finally decided that I might as well go downstairs and see what was going to happen. I found myself having to force myself to go down the stairs step by step. Each step, the dread inside me grew and grew. When I stepped off the staircase into the living room, I found that my parents and Maylu were staring at me.
"Uh...good...morning...?" I stated cautiously. Maylu was the first to snap out of the trance. She threw her backpack over her shoulder and turned away from me with a 'hmp!' and ran out of the house. I blinked in surprise.
"What's wrong with her?" I asked my parents. Neither of them said anything, just pretty much stared at me. I fidgeted slightly. I never did like silence, especially really long and heavy ones and this one was just about as heavy as you could get.
"Lan, are you gay?" I nearly choked and tripped over my own feet.
"W-where did you hear that?" I asked, trying to sound like I had absolutely no idea how my parents could have come up with such a crazy idea. I'm not sure if I was very convincing though.
"Megaman told us." My mom answered. I spun around and faced the tv monitor where Megaman was.
"H-how...?" I stammered. Megaman looked down at the ground.
"I heard you talking to yourself about it. I thought it would be good to tell your parents..." Megaman muttered. For a moment I just stared at him in horror. I just couldn't believe it. I had a feeling that Megaman might have overheard...but for him to sink this low and not even ask me before telling people, especially my parents?!
"Oh, and not even ask me my opinion before just coming out and telling everyone my secret?! Secrets are secrets for a reason, meaning you don't tell anyone them if you do find out!" I yelled at my navi. Anger flowed through my veins at how Megaman betrayed me. I had trusted him! And here he goes and tells my parents and friend one of my darkest secrets! Megaman winced.
'Good, he oughta be sorry' I found myself thinking. Normally I would berate myself for thinking like that, but this time I was just too angry to do so. After all, it was his fault that my parents knew.
"Oh? And were you ever planning in telling us Lan? Because if you weren't I think that Megaman had every right to tell us. It's our duty to know these things." Papa said to me. Again, my anger grew.
"No, I wasn't going to tell you because I knew you would react like this! You would never understand what its like, knowing that people will hate you if they ever found out! You saw how Maylu acted!" I yelled, as a way to vent my anger. Didn't Papa ever think that maybe there might be reasons why I didn't tell people things like these? And to think that parents always say they know best. Yeah right.
"That's your own fault, Lan!" Now THAT really got me going.
"How the hell is this MY fault?! I didn't choose this! God damn it! If I had a choice, I'd be normal like everyone else! But nooo there's no way for me to be normal! Not anymore now that a certain blue navi decided to spill one of my biggest secrets! Well listen here! The next time that WWW or any net terrorist group comes back, don't come looking for me to stop them, because I'll just stand there and laugh at you! And I mean it, too!" I screamed and ran out of my house. |
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Geoff Mendicino banned onoes :<
Joined: 16 Mar 2005 Posts: 295 Location: Tallahassee, Florida.
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Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2005 1:12 pm Post subject: |
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Just to confirm, people do read this. Some people just don't want to go through the seemingly minor hassle of reviewing fiction. _________________ I suck! |
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Hikari no Namida
Joined: 23 Mar 2005 Posts: 48 Location: Wouldn't you like to know?
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Posted: Sun Jul 03, 2005 7:13 pm Post subject: |
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Here's the rest of the Chapter:
I faintly heard my parents calling after me, but I didn't stop. I just kept running until I had reached the park. I sighed and sat down on one of the benches. I knew I shouldn't have started talking to myself about that. At least not before checking if anyone was near me who could have heard.
I looked up suddenly when I heard voices approaching.
"I can't believe it. He can't be...right?" a young female voice said.
"I don't know...that's what I heard." A more older female voice replied.
"Well, it does kind of make sense. After all, he was the first of us to make friends with Chaud when all Chaud would do is insult us." I recognized that voice as Dex. So then..if that was Dex... the others must have been Yai and Maylu. Were they...talking about...me...? Oh heavens...please don't tell me they already know. It's bad enough that Maylu knows. I sighed. Well, there was only one way to find out if they did know. I put a cheerful face on and walked over to the others.
"Hey guys!" I greeted them. For a moment, they all kind of stared at me with open mouths and then, Dex scowled while Maylu and Yai glared at me.
"What?" I asked.
"How dare you talk to us, you freak!" Dex finally broke the silence first. Ouch...now that one hurt. I tried to pretend I had no idea of what he was talking about.
"W-what are you talking about Dex?" I asked. This time, Maylu spoke.
"Don't play dumb with me!"
"He probably doesn't have to try too hard to achieve that..." Yai muttered. I actually winced at that. Why do people think I'm stupid or something like that?! So I got ONE C on my report card when I came to my language class. The rest of my grades were B-'s. That's passing! But I got A's in Virus Busting and Basics of Programming classes.
"I heard Megaman tell your parents about your condition. " Maylu spat out the last word as if it couldn't even begin to describe what it really was.
"We don't want anything to do with you, so just get lost!" I didn't even register who had said that, but I didn't care. I held myself impassivly and turned away.
"Fine." I said softly. "Hate me for something I can't even control. Hate me because I'm different. Hate me because you're a bunch of prejudice bastards! Well, if this is how you're going to treat me, I"m glad that we're not friends anymore!" I finally ended up yelling and then running back to my house. I paused in the door way when I heard voices talking.
"Don't worry Megaman. I'm sure he'll thank you someday." I heard Papa say, mostly likely to Megaman. I snorted softly.
"The only thing I'd thank you for is for ruining my life," I said while stepping out of the doorway. "And also for destroying my friendship with Maylu, Dex and Yai. Well, at least I know where they stand on the issue of homosexuality." I added thoughtfully. Megaman looked slightly horrified, probably never expecting all that to happen just because of one slipped secret. I just went upstairs and sat down on my bed. Finally, it all sunk in what had just happened and I found myself bursting into tears. Why did this have to happen? Why couldn't Megaman have just kept his mouth shut? Or even better, why didn't I keep mine shut? I sighed. I felt as though there was a huge gaping hole in the middle of my chest.
For some reason, I began thinking about ways to get out of this mess. But there was no way...as far as I could tell. I glanced over at my computer and once again started thinking about why Megaman had betrayed me. Suddenly realization hit me. Of course! No one knew me as a navi. Perhaps I could use that to my advantage. I stood up and walked over to the computer and placed my hand over the jack in port. I imagined myself as a navi on the net. Slowly, a bright light started to cover my vision so I knew it was working, even if it was going a lot slower than last time.
However, something that I wasn't expecting happened. A pain like no other filled me from head to toe. I bit my lip, trying to stop myself from screaming, but the pain never faded. Slowly, it felt as though something was slipping away from me and I couldn't figure it out before my entire world went black.
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What…am I…? What is this place…?And…what is my name…? I'm in a strange place…there are odd people here. Are they people? No…something inside me tells me that they are netnavis. Netnavis…what a funny word…I wonder who came up with that word? Am I a netnavi? I look down at my hands. They are covered with black fingerless gloves. Yes…I am a netnavi. If I am a netnavi, why do I not remember anything?
Currently, I am hiding in the shadows, watching another navi. This navi was pink and had what looked like yellow ribbons circling her head. She was talking to someone through a screen.
"Maylu! Why did you abandon him! That was wrong! " The pink netnavi exclaimed. I frowned when I saw the one whom the netnavi was talking to. A female human…hatred and anger flooded through me and it seemed to control me.
I was abandoned by humans…abandoned for something I couldn't control. That much I could remember. The anger grew as I swore revenge on them. All of them would pay… I would make sure of it. I logged out of that area and onto the main…internet…? Is that it…? Yes, it is. I wandered around and almost everywhere I went, I was attacked by viruses. For each virus I destroyed, I grew angrier.
Delete…
Delete…
Kesu…
Kesu…
Kesu…that is my name. |
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Quatre Winner I Beat the 8 Robot Masters
Age: 37 Joined: 03 Jul 2005 Posts: 162 Location: Wandering the universes in search of a good story to write
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Posted: Mon Jul 04, 2005 11:43 am Post subject: |
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Oooo.... evil Lan!!!!
It's a great fic and all, but your writing style is a bit too... fragmented, I guess. Is this your first fanfiction?
I don't mind the shonen-ai. In fact, if you head to my ff.net bio you'll see a list of my preffered pairings. And I think I can guess who Lan has a crush on...
If you want advice on how to make this better: Get a beta reader. They can read your fic before it's posted and tell you what's wrong with it. I've noticed that all the fics I've posted on ff.net that have been beta read are a lot better than my earlier ones.
I can't wait for the update! _________________ Avatar made by me in paint. Whoo
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Hikari no Namida
Joined: 23 Mar 2005 Posts: 48 Location: Wouldn't you like to know?
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Posted: Mon Jul 04, 2005 2:46 pm Post subject: |
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May I ask, what do you mean by fragmented? |
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Quatre Winner I Beat the 8 Robot Masters
Age: 37 Joined: 03 Jul 2005 Posts: 162 Location: Wandering the universes in search of a good story to write
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Posted: Mon Jul 04, 2005 2:54 pm Post subject: |
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It doesn't seem to flow along to me. The sentences don't seem to connect to each other, if that makes any sense. That's all. The plot seems to be very well developed, I think. It's just the sentences that get me. It's a small thing and I can ignore it but I felt it worth pointing out. _________________ Avatar made by me in paint. Whoo
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Hikari no Namida
Joined: 23 Mar 2005 Posts: 48 Location: Wouldn't you like to know?
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Posted: Mon Jul 04, 2005 6:00 pm Post subject: |
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Well, not flowing right can be a big thing. I'll try to work on that. Perhaps also if I had a beta it would help. Thank you very much for pointing that out. I know during the last part of the chapter, the sentences seemed separated.
But no, this isn't my first fanfiction. I have quite a few on fanfiction.net. |
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Quatre Winner I Beat the 8 Robot Masters
Age: 37 Joined: 03 Jul 2005 Posts: 162 Location: Wandering the universes in search of a good story to write
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Posted: Mon Jul 04, 2005 6:10 pm Post subject: |
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I'm glad I could be of some help.
Oh dear... Pokemon... *big sweatdrop*
Please continue this soon, I've also added the fic to my fanfiction.net story alert. _________________ Avatar made by me in paint. Whoo
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firehedgehog
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Posted: Mon Jul 04, 2005 8:07 pm Post subject: |
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yet another great chappy hikari !!!!!!!!!! |
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Hikari no Namida
Joined: 23 Mar 2005 Posts: 48 Location: Wouldn't you like to know?
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Posted: Tue Jun 20, 2006 7:07 am Post subject: |
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Warped Life
Aki Kochou
Chapter 7- The Darkness Within
Ah yes, I was having a lot more fun than I had been in the past few days. It had been a week since I had…”woken up” so to speak. All I had done really, was wander around and delete virus after virus. But everywhere I went, there were those weak navis talking to those humans. They will die…I’m already planning my first attack. I smirked at the thought.
Humans were dependant upon the technology that allowed them to barely work at all. But soon…soon they will realize the critical mistake they mad by allowing such advanced technology into their society. My smirk grew when I hear a beep inside my helmet, which was very similar to the beep that a regular netnavi would hear when an email arrived. It was time…time to make the humans pay!
/3rd Person/
Megaman sat on and stared at the ground of the PET. He felt that there was nothing he could do. When he had done what he had thought was right, everyone rejected Lan and then Lan ran away. Megaman slammed his fist into the ground. It hurt, but Megaman felt he deserved it. Tears flowed slowly at first, then cascaded like a river down his cheeks. It felt as thought there was a horrible fire burning inside of his chest, and nothing he did could soothe the pain.
“W-why…? Why did I…do that…? It wasn’t my business…it wasn’t anyone else’s either…” Megaman chanted softly to himself in between sobs. Megaman had been in state for at least five days. I had also been five days since the Hikari family had realized that Lan had run away for good. At first, Lan’s parents simply thought that he was staying at a friend’s house or something along those lines. However, it became crystal clear that Lan had not had contact with any of his ex-friends ever since they had yelled at him. Megaman found that he definitely couldn’t blame Lan for that.
Megaman quickly rubbed the tears from his eyes when he heard a beeping sound, signaling a new email. He opened the email and was a bit surprised by its contents. It was from Searchman and he was…asking for assistance…? Apparently, there was a strange navi who was attacking one of the Cotnrol X towers. Searchman was having one heck of a time trying to fight the navi off.
However, when Megaman thought about it, Lan had a strange knack to show up anytime there was trouble. ‘Maybe Lan will show up there!’ Megaman thought to himself. He quickly wrote out an email to Searchman saying that he was on his way.
‘Hang in there Lan…’
/1st Person/
I blinked when I saw a green camo navi with bright orange hair suddenly log into where I was. I said to myself under my breath,
“Wow, who does your hair, punk? Because I think they need some serious help…” Apparently, the navi had better hearing than I thought because his eyes narrowed at me.
“I wouldn’t be talking. So then, you’re the one who has been attempting to destroy the Control X towers?” I simply smirked.
“Trying? I think that I’ve succeeded.” I pointed to the cyber control tower where several viruses were destroying the tower. The orange haired navi swore and charged the viruses. I watched from the sidelines, amused as the navi tried to delete the viruses in time. It didn’t matter if the navi managed to delete the viruses. The tower was already damaged beyond function. I chuckled. That tower was a lost cause now. I turned to leave, when I found myself a foot away from a blue netnavi with spiky black hair.
‘Megaman…’ I felt a strange pull towards this navi as his name suddenly appeared in my head. A flash of memory came back to me. He hurt me…He was the reason I was betrayed…but how? How had my friends betrayed me? In what way? Suddenly, I saw red. It didn’t matter how he had betrayed me, just that he did. Yes, he would die just like that camo navi would. Very painfully…oh, yes….this would be very fun indeed.
“Who are you?” I focused up Megaman. He was staring at me. He wanted to know my name? Then, my name would be the last thing he would ever hear.
“My name…is Kesu. And that will be the last thing you will ever hear!” Megaman’s eyes widened for a split second then narrowed and he got into a fighting stance.
“We’ll see about that.” He responded. I summoned my dark black sword and I charged at the blue navi. Megaman must have been surprised at my speed because he didn’t react nearly as fast as he should have. I slashed with my sword and my sword hit true, just like it always did.
Megaman staggered back, having gotten a good hit to the side. Megaman pulled up his buster, probably meant to try to shoot me with, when I felt another’s presence in the area. This presence was dark, must like my own. I dodged Megaman’s blast and turned towards the shadows where the presence was.
“Who’s there? Show yourself!” I demanded. Megaman paused and looked in the direction that I was looking, seemingly confused. A dark chuckled was heard all over the area. Suddenly, there was a flash and the camo navi fell to the ground. Megaman’s eyes widened and he stood in shock for a moment before snapping out of it and quickly running to the camo navi.
“Searchman!” He exclaimed. ‘So…that was the camo navi’s name….’ I thought to myself wryly. I saw a vampire-like netnavi step out of the shadows. He was familiar…so very familiar.
“Shademan!” I couldn’t help but snort. ‘I really must thank you Megaman…you’ve been helping me figure out others’ names.’ I nearly laughed out loud at the thought.
Shademan let out an attack that looked like a sonic blast which sent Megaman into the wall and left him paralyzed. That definitely had to hurt. Actually, it was painful just to watch. Shademan made Megaman look like a complete amateur. But then again, Megaman really DID look like an amateur right now. Shademan glanced over at me and walked over antagonizingly slowly to me.
“So…it appears that your darkness has finally revealed itself, my child…” I blinked in surprise. So…Shademan knew me before my amnesia then?
“You knew me before all this?” I questioned, my eyes narrowed. Shademan smirked.
“I did indeed. You were just getting used to your navi abilities. You seemed quite lost: a human in a navi’s frame. You were quite firmly a human of light…at least, until your own navi betrayed you…over a very simple thing, none-the-less…” Well, this was interesting…but what he was saying seemed familiar , so it must have been true. I also vaguely saw Shademan shoot a smirk at Megaman, who paled at the implications. I wonder what that was about…hm…I’ll have to figure it out. This Shademan was an intriguing navi.
“So now…my dark child…I must ask you…” My eyes narrowed.
“What…?” Shademan’s eyes glinted.
“Will you join me and destroy the humans and riffraff like Megaman and Searchman?”
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Midnight This is a Hilbert Space
Age: 37 Joined: 18 Mar 2005 Posts: 3089 Location: The AfterMath. Otherwise, New York City.
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Posted: Tue Jun 20, 2006 11:05 am Post subject: |
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Well well, to see a fic like this emerge from a hiatus of nearly a year...
I must say, this was quite a good read. There were signs that the haze surrounding Lan's perception of the past is starting to thin and perhaps breach a little, but for the most part, it remained more or less intact, and that's where much of the action will lie--a somewhat hackneyed conflict between the actual past and the one implanted by an outside force.
Even if it is a somewhat overused motif, the way that the motif is presented and used is what is going to matter in the end--and this is quite superiorly done. Good work. _________________ Today, these three players are after Big Bucks! But they'll have to avoid the Whammy, as they play the most exciting game of their lives! From Television City in Hollywood! It's time to 'Press Your Luck!'--Rod Roddy
The Kingdom of Loathing: An Adventurer is You! // I ♣ Seals
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Hikari no Namida
Joined: 23 Mar 2005 Posts: 48 Location: Wouldn't you like to know?
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Posted: Tue Aug 01, 2006 2:58 pm Post subject: |
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Chapter 8- Decisions and Blackouts
Warning: Shounen-ai
I stared at the outstretched hand and hesitated. I glanced over at Megaman momentarily, but he was currently standing in shock. Soon enough, he snapped out of his trance.
"Don't do it!" He yelled. "Shademan will just use you!" I hesitated even more. Something about his tone told me to listen to him. Then I was drawn to what Shademan said softly.
"I doubt that. Anyways, why listen to him? He's the one who betrayed you." A part of me nodded vigorously. Yes, Shademan was right. Megaman betrayed me! Why should I help him!
"Plus, my Kesu...I am the one who created you! I gave you this ability. Isn't helping me out with a few things the least you could do?" Shademan said softly to me, like how a father would to his beloved son. Is that what I am to him? His son? Well, if I am, isn't family supposed to stick together?
"Please don't!" This time, I completely ignored Megaman. Megaman deserved to die for his tretchery. First he betrayed me and now he was trying to keep me from my father! Oh yes, he WILL die, just as anyone who goes against my father will die: painfully and without mercy.
I looked up at the vampire navi and slowly nodded and took his hand. Shademan's comforting smile morphed into a smirk.
"Thank you...son." I smiled He called me his son! That means I am part of a family!
"Thank you..father." Shademan nodded with a kind fatherly smile at me.
"Of course. Family always sticks together no matter what." Shademan sent a nast smirk at Megaman, who blanched. I saw Megaman's expression and realized he must have betrayed someone else, probably in his family if his expression was anything to judge by.
'Even more reason for me to kill him...perhaps I can get this person who he betrayed to help me...' I thought. I couldn’t help but chuckle. Now there was an interesting thought…
“So you betrayed someone, hm, Megaman? You’re not the perfect navi the world sees you as, it seems.” I smirked. Megaman flinched.
“I never intended to. It was a secret that I overheard and before I realized what was happening I told his parents. After all, his parents have the right to know.”
"W-where did you hear that?"
"Megaman told us."
"H-how...?"
"I heard you talking to yourself about it. I thought it would be good to tell your parents..."
"Oh, and not even ask me my opinion before just coming out and telling everyone my secret! Secrets are secrets for a reason, meaning you don't tell anyone them if you do find out!"
I shook out of my thoughts. What was that? Who were those people talking? So familiar…is this a memory? I paused for a moment. Did it really matter though? Just more proof that he betrayed me. Somehow, this train of thought doesn’t really seem like anything I’d think- It doesn’t matter though. He betrayed you… Repay him…repay the favor…delete him.
‘Delete…him…’
‘Delete…him…’
The thoughts echoed as though in an empty chamber in my mind. It was all I could hear…all I was…
I could see Megaman saying something, could hear his voice, but the words didn’t process. No, if anything his voice made me even more angry. I was barely aware of the fact that I summoned my sword and I was even less aware of my attacks at Megaman. All I could think of was the pain. The pain of not remembering. The pain of knowing that he had betrayed me, but not remembering how.
But was it truly worth it? Was getting back at all humans the right way to do th-I think you need to get some sleep.
Suddenly, all I saw was darkness.
/Third Person/
Kesu smirked as he held Megaman up against a cyberwall, Megamans hands scrabbled to pull of the darkly colored navi away from him. Would this be his deletion., no.. he couldn’t loose. He had to find Lan.
'Lan' he thought sadly, his emerald eyes closed knowing that this was the end. But the final blow never came, emerald eyes opened in bewilderment.
Kesu was looking at him with a puzzled expression on his face, for a second Megaman had a good look at the other navi’s face. He couldn't see the color of Kesu's eyes, but they seemed familiar in some weird way.. they were looking at him as if trying to figure something out.
"What is the meaning of your existence?" Kesu asked suddenly, this caused Megaman to blink.
"My existence?" he said puzzled
“What does your existence mean to the world,” Kesu whispered into his ear, causing a strange shiver in Megaman’s spine and a strange sensation in his stomach.
“I.. I… don’t know,” Megaman answered, once he knew it had been to protect Lan and to be ever at his side as a best friend.. but that was no longer true.
“Heh…” Kesu said darkly, a sardonic smirk on his lips. He leaned over and whispered into the blue navis ears.
“I’ll tell you a secret, your existence is mine now, your ever move will be watched… and in the end you are my prey and I will delete you. Today was just the prologue, soon Megaman… you’ll be deleted by my hand... and by my hand alone,” he practically purred.
The hand released Megaman who fell limply to the ground breathing heavily, Kesu stared down at him his face unreadable now to the unnerved Megaman.
“What is your existence..” Megaman whispered softly, staring at Kesu confused at the emotions going through his slightly shivering body.
“My existence… my destiny… will be a secret for now little Megaman,” Kesu smirked.
Megaman felt that was a bit unfair, especially since it was looking like Kesu would end up as one of the new baddies on the net… working with Shademan was his bet.
Shademan watched all this with amusement, his form hidden by the shadows.
“My… my.. my, it seems Kesu likes to play with his future deletions,” Shademan said to himself, well.. he himself did like to play with his food. Seems Kesu took after him in some ways, he was so proud.
“Megaman… I wonder what your sin in... who did you betray... whose heart have you crushed to a million pieces,” Kesu hissed placing his hands onto Megaman’s shoulders, Megaman winced as they dug into painfully in a way that made it impossible for him to move.
“Sin.. my sin..” Megaman whispered a catch in his throat; tears made his emerald eyes waver as they slipped down. Yes his sin, he had caused Lan’s heart to break… crushed.. it was all his fault Lan was gone. Maybe forever.
“Don’t worry Megaman, all sins hurt... in the end I’ll take that hurt away as I delete you into nothingness,” Kesu whispered into Megaman’s ears once again, Megaman shivered as Kesu ran a finger down his face.
“Remember... you’re mine.. and I don’t share,” Kesu said.
Megaman gasped as Kesu grabbed his face as he let go of his shoulders, then he was pulled into a deep kiss Kesu’s tongue invading his own mouth. He was stock still in shock, yet a part of his mind... yes.. a part of him shivered in delight at the dark navi’s doing. This shocked him, and scared him… something he wouldn’t admit ever.. to anyone.
Kesu pulled away from Megaman a delighted grin on his face; he started walking away from the shell-shocked and slight aroused Megaman.
“See you around Megaman, this will be fun… remember... there are many chapters until the epilogue... and many, many more games to play,” Kesu said, then laughing he vanished into the shadow and was soon gone along with Shademan.
Megaman sat there as his senses slowly came back under his control, then like anyone sane would do he fled. Today was definitely not the day to look for Lan. Also, he had to warn papa, and the net saviors about Shademan’s newest alley. But, he would definitely not tell everything… that was just embarrassing.
END CHAPTER
Yes, this last portion was written by FireHedgeHog…What would I do without you Fire-chan? And for those who don’t like shounen-ai, I’m sorry… |
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RollSoul Net Savior
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Yay for dark creepy twisted shounen-ai!
I've known writers to stop posting their fics if people stop commenting, however I can't really critique a story as my only judgment is if i liked it or not and in this case I did like it. _________________
NOTICE: This user no longer uses this account, they made a new account cuz they dont like the name of their account anymore =3 |
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Kitty-Chan Net Police
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Finally got around to reading this & I must say, scrumptious! :D I'm always up for a little twincest. _________________ Need more Zero/X, Netto/Rock, Rock/Netto, Forte/Netto, & Blues/Netto. PLEASE!
Ano sa...could someone please make me a Zero/X, Blues/Netto, or Forte/Netto avatar/banner? I would greatly appreciate it...
Thanks for the avatar, Mandi!
People! We need more Blues/Netto & Forte/Netto on the net. Come on; help me out here! *gives everyone her Super-Adorable Irrisistable Sad Kitty Eyes(TM)* |
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YaminoMiko Rabid Roxas Fan
Age: 33 Joined: 16 Mar 2005 Posts: 701 Location: California
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Posted: Fri Aug 11, 2006 10:44 pm Post subject: |
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It's so twisted that it's scary. >.>
I got the shivers now. Keep up the good work, Hikari. _________________
I wanna sleep, but I don't wanna sleep at the same time. @_@.
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Hikari no Namida
Joined: 23 Mar 2005 Posts: 48 Location: Wouldn't you like to know?
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Posted: Sun Feb 11, 2007 2:36 pm Post subject: |
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Warped life
Aki Kochou
Chapter 9- Love Thy Enemy
Certain things weren't meant to be remembered. He knew that was true. It really was as simple as that. Humans, navis...they all forgot irrelevant information to make room for the memories that truly mattered. After all, if it really were important, he would remember his life as a human. And if it really were important, Kesu knew he would remember what exactly happened during his battle against Megaman a week ago. However, he didn't. So that meant that it really wasn't that important, right? After all, he most likely beat the crap out of Megaman and then went on with his daily routine. Right?
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Kesu smirked as he walked away from his Father, having just received his next orders. He glanced at Burnerman who was walking towards Shademan’s room.
“I wouldn’t go in there if I were you Burnerman…” Burnerman’s eye twitched at the implied order. How dare such a young netnavi like Kesu order HIM around!
“And why should I listen to you?” Burnerman hissed. A moment later, Burnerman found himself pinned against the wall by his neck. Kesu’s eyes glowed a bright red in anger.
“Watch your step, Burnerman…you’re no longer Shademan’s favorite. I have a message from him. ‘Fail me again and I won’t hesitate to delete you’,” Kesu hissed softly, the hand at his side itching to join his other hand around Burnerman’s neck.
“You lie-!” Burnerman chocked out and was cut off by a tight squeeze. Kesu smirked evilly and tightened his grip and Burnerman’s eyes widened.
“I don’t…though I warn you now…do not mess with me…” Kesu whispered and walked out, leaving Burnerman in shock.
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Megaman gasped for breath as he finished off Cosmoman. The darkloid was incredibly hard to beat, and he was even more so after using three darkchips. At once.
“Are you alright, Megaman?” It wasn’t the voice that Megaman was used to hearing after a long and hard battle. It wasn’t even that person’s father. Megaman turned towards the screen and saw Chaud watching him. ‘That’s right…’ Megaman thought. ‘Dr. Hikari gave me to Chaud so that he could look after me…which means that I have to stay with Protoman,’ Protoman was by not means, a social navi. And, he did not like having to share his operator. That much the red navi had made clear.
“Megaman?” Megaman mentally shook himself from his thoughts.
“I’m fine…” Megaman replied automatically. Chaud raised an eyebrow and looked pointingly at Megaman’s derezzling arm. Megaman sweatdropped slightly.
“Well, besides my arm anyways…I’m fine,” Chaud sighed and slotted in a chip.
“Recover 200,” Megaman’s arm was instantly repaired.
“Thank you Chaud,” Chaud simply nodded.
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“You’re kidding me, right, Father?” Kesu demanded his silver eyes wide in shock and horror. Shademan shook his head.
“No. You are to work with Burnerman and capture Megaman,” Apparently, Burnerman didn’t like this idea any more than Kesu did.
“What?! I have to work with this brat?” Burnerman demanded and was immediately silenced by a glare from Shademan.
“Yes, and you’d best do accomplish this properly or you both will be in serious trouble,” Kesu bowed his head, as did Burnerman.
“Yes, Father…”
“Yes, sir,”
Yet, not even the densest person could miss the hateful glares the fire and the dark navi were sending each other.
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Megaman looked up as an alarm started blaring. It was the alarm for an attack in Internet City. Without waiting for orders from Chaud, Megaman swiftly logged into Internet City. Once he did, it was quite easy to spot the disturbance. And unfortunately for Megaman, it was the navi he least wanted to see.
“Kesu…” Kesu stopped attacking whatever poor and helpless navi that he had gotten his hands on and faced Megaman with a smirk.
“Megaman…we’ve been waiting for you…” Kesu said, with his ever present smirk and a menacing tone in his voice. Megaman blinked in confusion and raised an eyebrow.
“ ‘We’?” Megaman questioned. Kesu blinked quite comically and looked around and swore.
“Damn you! You know HE’ll hear about this when we get back!” Kesu yelled into seemingly empty air. Megaman’s eyebrow went even higher.
“Someone ditched you?” Megaman questioned. Kesu mumbled something under his breath sounding a lot like ‘backstabbing, treacherous…’ Megaman wasn’t able to understand the last word, but he had a good idea what it was. Megaman was about to laugh out loud when he realized who this was. This was Kesu: the enemy of Sci-Labs and his own personal enemy. Instead of thinking more about the subject, Megaman settled into a battle stance.
“Well then, if it’s a fight you were looking for, you’ve found one,” Megaman said, with a hint of danger in his own voice. Kesu settled into his own battle stance. For a moment, there was silence. The silence was then broken by the sounds of quick footsteps running as the two navis charged at each other.
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Burnerman watched the battle from the shadows of a nearby building. He then glanced at the tiny program in his hands, smirking. This program, well…more of a virus really, was his own creation. The virus, known as the Chuushin Virus, had the ability to infect specified navis and bring out the deepest emotion in their heart towards each other. It would then amplify it over a hundred-fold. His plan? It was quite simple. Burnerman was certain that Kesu’s true emotion towards Megaman was nothing but hatred. It was so easy to see. That way, when Kesu completely deleted Megaman from his anger, Shademan would be forced to punish him.
‘Maybe even delete him….’ Burnerman smirked at the thought. He glanced down at the small, square program in the palm of his hand.
“Megaman.exe and Kesu.exe…” The small cube suddenly leapt from Burnerman’s hand and with a small ‘pop’, turned into a metaur, which hobbled over to the two battling navis. Burnerman set up a shield around the metaur and the two navis. Just because the program wouldn’t affect any others, Burnerman didn’t want to take any chances.
“Let the fun begin…” Burnerman smirked evilly.
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Kesu looked up and saw a metaur trotting over to him, and didn’t give it a second thought before blasting the little thing into oblivion. However, he froze in shock as a smoke emitted from it like the Anubis chip. Kesu also quickly noted that there was a shield preventing the smoke from exiting. Basically, they were trapped.
‘It’s Burnerman’s program...’ A strange voice whispered into Kesu’s mind. ‘It brings out the deepest emotions for the other navis caught in it’s smoke.’
‘What was that?’ Kesu thought to himself. He had heard that voice before…it was familiar….But from where?
Kesu felt, rater than saw, Megaman start in surprise.
“What is this?” Megaman exclaimed. Kesu did his best to cover his mouth and nose, knowing it was most likely in vain.
“A virus, idiot!” Kesu shouted and all of a sudden, felt guilty for calling Megaman an idiot.
‘What…? What is this…Of course! Burnerman’s program!” Kesu fought the emotions that were quickly welling up inside him and charged at Megaman once the smoke began to clear. Megaman’s eyes widened as he saw Kesu bursting through the smoke and charging at him.
“Hang on! Kesu! I don’t want to-!” Kesu knew he had to find some way to shut the blue hair-brained idiot up before he burst out all of his emotions and let Burnerman know that his program hadn’t been successful in the way that the fire navi wanted.
“Silence!” Kesu disappeared and then reappeared behind Megaman and had his sword at Megaman’s neck. This would be the easiest way to tell Megaman what was going on. But…why did he even feel that Megaman needed to know? Burnerman was looking for weaknesses…either of Megaman’s or his own. Why not let Burnerman know that Megaman’s weakness was his emotions. Oh yes, it was because anyone with half a brain could figure that out. However, if they acted like they hated each other…heck, why not let Burnerman think that Kesu and Megaman were equals in power? It would be fun…
“This is a trap set by Burnerman…it’s a virus that brings out our innermost feelings for each other…you need to act like you hate me, no matter how much you may not…Burnerman’s watching right now…don’t show any weakness since that is what Burnerman is looking for…” Kesu whispered in Megaman’s ear and then kicked the blue clad navi in the back, causing him to go flying.
Megaman landed with a roll and quickly got up to his feet and lunged at Kesu. Kesu truly was surprised by Megaman’s speed and soon nearly collapsed from a deep slash on his chest. Kesu clutched at his chest with a soft gasp.
“Heh…you’ve gotten better, Megaman…” Megaman stood back but with his sword at the ready.
“Perhaps…” Megaman replied. Kesu charged at Megaman, knowing that he wouldn’t be able to hold back. Kesu quickly slashed with his dark sword and was countered by Megaman’s sword. The two clashed swords for a few minutes until Megaman suddenly summoned another sword and it found it’s way into Kesu’s chest. Kesu staggered back and fell to one knee. He had never expected Megaman capable of this! How…how had Megaman gotten this good so quickly! Last time, Megaman was no match for Kesu! How could this happen? How? Were the rumors true…that Megaman got his power from his emotions…? Something inside him confirmed the answer. It seemed like an instinctual feeling…no, it was more than a feeling.
‘How would I know that? I haven’t known Megaman long enough to determine that, let alone know what gave him strength,’ However, Kesu knew when he was defeated, and he certainly was that this point. He knew he would be pondering over the blue netnavi tonight.
“Ung….heh…I certainly never thought this would happen…hehe…It appears that I’ve underestimated you, Megaman…We’ll meet again…rest assured of that…” Kesu then logged out with a flash of ‘LOGOUT’.
Megaman stared at the place where Kesu had been moments ago.
“…We will indeed….” Megaman turned and walked off into the crowds of Netcity.
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Burnerman growled as Kesu logged out.
“If he squeals to Shademan, I’m finished…” Burnerman quickly logged out to try to get to Shademan before Kesu did.
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In the shadows of NetCity, Megaman leaned against a brick wall and buried his face in a hand.
‘Why...? What are…are these feelings…?’
But inside, Megaman knew exactly what his emotions were.
“Megaman!” Megaman looked up and saw Roll running towards him, a silly grin on her face as she tackled him. Megaman only managed to stay on his feet from his battle training.
‘Why…does this feel so…wrong…?’ Megaman awkwardly patted Roll’s back as she hugged his tightly, blabbering something about the new fashion chips that Maylu had bought for her.
‘Everyone thinks that I love Roll…but I don’t….but who thought I would love my enemy…and I’m exactly what I convicted Lan for being…’ And for the first time ever, Megaman broke down in public.
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RollSoul Net Savior
Joined: 11 May 2005 Posts: 168 Location: Under your bed. O.o
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Posted: Wed Feb 14, 2007 7:58 pm Post subject: |
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Netto x Rockman is my favorite couple out of the entire anime, so having a good fanfic based on it, with Dark Twists to boot, makes this rabid anime fan a very happy person. _________________
NOTICE: This user no longer uses this account, they made a new account cuz they dont like the name of their account anymore =3 |
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Anzuru Guest
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Posted: Thu Feb 15, 2007 11:09 am Post subject: |
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great fic so far
YAY! NettoxRockman |
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RT-fact Net Agent
Age: 35 Joined: 05 May 2006 Posts: 220 Location: Visby, Sweden
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Posted: Sat Feb 24, 2007 5:23 pm Post subject: |
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Since I felt bored and wanted to do further Rockman.EXE research, I just wanted to make a selection of one of the fan fiction and look at this! I have spent a few hours in a row reading from the first to the latest chapter.
Indeed, I felt the story to be very intriguing. The strongest part was in the end of Chapter 8, as Kesu metaphorically gestured who Rockman has "betrayed". Keep up the good work! You have my attention from now on. |
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Kitty-Chan Net Police
Joined: 08 Jul 2005 Posts: 438 Location: Massillon, Ohio, USA
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Posted: Tue Mar 27, 2007 9:38 am Post subject: |
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Finally got around to finding the new forums. You know I love this fic, Hikari, & I will be glad to beta. Argh, where did our custom emoticons go?? _________________ Need more Zero/X, Netto/Rock, Rock/Netto, Forte/Netto, & Blues/Netto. PLEASE!
Ano sa...could someone please make me a Zero/X, Blues/Netto, or Forte/Netto avatar/banner? I would greatly appreciate it...
Thanks for the avatar, Mandi!
People! We need more Blues/Netto & Forte/Netto on the net. Come on; help me out here! *gives everyone her Super-Adorable Irrisistable Sad Kitty Eyes(TM)* |
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