The Star Pendant <A MM: NTW Fan Fic>( Finished... ;_;)

Haly K · Posted: Thu Jul 07, 2005 9:59 am Post subject:

Maybe I will put Link in later or in the next fan fic. -_-; And I didn't know there were three moons in Digimon Frontier until you pointed it out. I'm serious! >_< Oh, and are you happy that Trigoya is an original charater?? Confused

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Flame Buster · Posted: Thu Jul 07, 2005 10:41 am Post subject:

Yeah, I am. Sorry for the whole Digimon thing.
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Cyclone EXE · Net Official Age: 34 Joined: 08 Jun 2005 Posts: 308

Okay...I have read the fic and here is Cyclone EXE's criticism:

First off, the script format is really bugging me. The story would have much more detail and description if it were in paragraph format. More detail, more describing of feelings, and it will make a huge difference. If a reader doesn't have a clear and detailed description then it is hard for them to get into the story. Example:

[not detailed]The waves lapped up onto the beach where I was walking.[/not detailed]

[detailed]The cool waves from the vast, twinkling sea lapped up onto the sand and splashed over my bare feet as I walked down the beach.[/detailed]

You see how much of a difference there is? Point made. Moving on.

There are too many characters. I'm sorry...let me rephrase. I believe it would be easier to follow if you stuck to a handful of main characters. Too many characters=too hard to follow=mixing up characters=etc...etc...I think it would be best to just get a handful of characters and...make a fic. But! Only Liz's opinion. Next...

Pretty good so far. Plot's a bit hard to follow...cause it's in script...charas hard to keep up with...basically I'm just repeating myself. Hope you don't bite my head off for this, I kinda need it... Don't have to take my advice, don't even have to ever look at this post again! Just gettin this stuff out there. *throws it out there* Good luck with ur fic.

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Haly K · Posted: Thu Jul 07, 2005 4:05 pm Post subject:

Did you see some of my charater desciptions?? Did you?? :grr: Sorry, I'm stressed about Hurricane Denise. T_T

But really, too many charaters?! One was already killed off (Janga), there's another one that will be killed off later [spoil:de5800c15c](Beelzemon)[/spoil:de5800c15c], two of the three main villians are dead ( Ghadius and Asmen), the main villian left is ovbiously gonna die (Trigoya), the three guards (Dragolfos, Dinolfos, and Lizalfos) are just stupid, filler charaters, the Heores that were metioned ( Sonic, Bomberman, Crash, and Raz) aren't even IMPORTANT to the plot, Klonoa and Lephise are the only important main charaters beside Lan and co.!! Do you call that too many?! :grr:

And if you just ignore the useless info ( The Three Worlds, the Tri Eclipse, yada yada) the plot is pretty much easy to follow:" Maddy finds Star Pendant - Maddy gets kidnapped - Lan and co. go to rescue her - Janga is killed off - Lan and co. are in Dream World - Klonoa finds them - Lan and co. go the Lejimba - Why Maddy was kidnapped is explain. " There!!! :grr:

Again, I am stressed about Hurricane Denise. So sorry if I was mean. T_T
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Cyclone EXE · Net Official Age: 34 Joined: 08 Jun 2005 Posts: 308

*head is bitten off*

Didn't mean to start a flame war...go on with the story. I'm sorry.
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**Plantman** · Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 12:43 am Post subject:

Okay... I'm gonna have to step up in here:

1.- Being stressed over a hurricane nearing your zone -if that's what your "stressed over the hurricane" meant- doesn't give you any right whatsover to be rude to people that are offering well intended criticism.

2.- Don't ask people for comments or critics if you're going to reply rudely to their inquires, complaints and critics. Cyclone was never rude to you, so return the courtesy and explain things calmly and politely back to her. If you can't take on the criticism, then by all means don't ask for comments then. If I catch you replying to people in such manner again I'll lock your topic.

3.- Do NOT bump topics if you have nothing new to update to it. If you're going to double post, do it to include a new chapter. And do not complain here about things such as nobody posting a summary of Stream episodes, that is quite irrelevant to the main subject of this section.
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Haly K · Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 8:26 am Post subject:

Oh dear... I'm terribly sorry about all of this. Cyclone EXE, I'm VERY sorry about that last post. Can we forgive and forget? T_T

The next chapter...:

Chapter 6

( And so, Lan and co. were being lead through the Dark Mountains, with Klonoa leading them. An evil chill was in the air, and everyone could feel it.)

WackoMan( Shivering): How much longer?! You said this would only be a short walk!!

Lan( Whining): I’m getting tried!

Klonoa( Looking back at the others): Well, it’s a short walk for someone who DOES a lot of walking.

( Everyone but Mr.Match groaned. He was obviously worried about Maddy so much, he didn’t care about walking too much.)

Lan( Slowing down): So tired… Must…… rest……

Chaud( Looking at Lan): You’re going to miss the fight with Trigoya, then.

Lan( Speeding up): Never mind! Let’s keep goin’!!

( Suddenly, a large wall blocked their way. It was covered, from head to toe, with spiked vines. )

Klonoa( Surprised by the wall): What?! This wasn’t here before!!

WackoMan( Crying): NO! We were so close too!!! MADDY!!!!!

Mr.Match( Thinking): No… There has to be a way…

TorchMan( Pointing his cannons at the wall): No problem! I’ll just burn it down! FIRE ARM!! ( A blast of fire came out of TorchMan’s cannons and struck the wall. Though it did burn the vines off, it only left a small black mark upon the steel wall beneath the vines.)

TorchMan( Surprised): What the-?!

Lan: NOW what are we gonna do?!?

MegaMan( Smiling): Simple, Lan!

Lan( Confused): Huh???

( MegaMan gestured TorchMan and ProtoMan to come closer. He whispered something to them, and they both nodded.)

WackoMan( Complaining): Hey, why are you leaving ME out?!

MegaMan( Looking at Lan): Hey Lan, could you download a Bubbler for me?

Lan( Still confused): Uh, ok… ( Downloads a Bubbler chip, which turns MegaMan’s right hand into a Bubbler Blaster.)

MegaMan( Turning to TorchMan): Hot, then cold, then hot again, and so on. Got it?

TorchMan( Nodding): Got it!

( TorchMan blasted the wall with his Fire Arm again, then MegaMan blasted it with the Bubbler, causing steam to billow up into the air. They continued doing this until where they were hitting the wall was a black dent.)

Lan( STILL confused): Now what??

Klonoa( Looking at Lan): Y’mean you STILL don’t get it??

Chaud: Don’t worry about him; he’s always this dense.

Lan( Annoyed): HEY!!

MegaMan( Turning to ProtoMan): Now!

ProtoMan( Right arm turning into a sword): Alright then! ( Trust the sword into the dent, causing it to form a gigantic hole in the wall.)

Lan: Um, so you used the Bubbler and TorchMan’s Fire Arm to weaken the wall enough so ProtoMan’s sword could make a hole in it??

MegaMan( Smiling): That’s right, Lan!

Lan( Watch the others go through the hole): Um, okay… ( Follows everyone else to the other side of the wall)

( On the other side, they could see Trigoya’s palace; it was a large castle that was completely black, with several tall towers looming over it. It felt even more evil that the mountains themselves.)

WackoMan( Shivering): So, that’s it? It’s creepy!

Klonoa( Nodding): Uh huh. ( Points to the bottom of the hill they were suddenly on) This road leads down from here to the entrance. You guys can take it from here, right?

Lan( Grinning): Of COURSE we can!

Klonoa: Ok, then. ( Starts to walk back the way they came) Good luck!

( And so, Lan and co. followed the trail to the entrance.)

Mr.Match( Thinking): We’re almost there…

( Meanwhile, at the top of the castle‘s highest tower…)

???????: Hmph! They will not make it far! Maybe I should toy with them… Let them find their friend Maddy, then kill them!! ( Evil laughter)

( Now at Maddy’s cell…)

Dragolfos( Drunk): Aw, shaddup!! Ya dun’t know wat yer thinkin’ abut!! ( Hic)

Dinolfos( Also drunk): What da ya mean?! Ya dun’t know wat yer thinkin’ abut, too!! ( Hic)
Dragolfos: At least I ( Hic) know wat I’m thinkin’!!

Dinolfos: O yeah?! ( Hic)

Dragolfos: Yeah!! ( Hic)

Lizalfos( Rolling his eyes): I can’t believe they got drunk drinking apple cider…

( Dragolfos and Dinolfos got into a fight of sluggish punches and weak kicks. Maddy, on the other hand, was pacing inside her cell.)

Maddy( Thinking): Getting drunk from apple cider?! That’s just stupid!

( While Dragolfos and Dinolfos were fighting, Lizalfos managed to get Dragolfos’ keys.)

Lizalfos( Jingling the keys in front of the cell door): Ready to be free?

Maddy( Surprised): Is this a trick??

Lizalfos( Unlocking the door): No trick. Who would want to be locked up? Besides, Trigoya was planning to kill you!

Maddy( Freaking out): Kill me?! But why?!?

Lizalfos( He and Maddy were completely ignored by the other two guards): You see, your Star Pendant has special powers, right? Well, there’s this upcoming event called the Tri Eclipse, where the three Moons of the Goddesses come together once every millennia. If the current Diva of the Star Pendant, that’s you, is sacrificed at the Eclipse, there all of the Star Pendant’s power will go to the one who killed you.

Maddy: So all of the Star Pendant’s power will go to this Trigoya person if he or she kills me, right?

Lizalfos( Nodding): Right!

Maddy( Frowning): Wait, but didn’t Beelzemon say…?

Lizalfos( Shaking his head): No, Beelzemon won’t marry you. It was a lie Trigoya told him to make him help with all of this.

Maddy( Pointing to the other guards): Ok, but what about those two?

Lizalfos( Looking at Dragolfos and Dinolfos): Them? They’re still drunk, so they won’t notice.

Maddy( Smiling): Would you mind leading me out of here, please? I don’t know the way around here…

Lizalfos( Also smiling): I knew you were going to say that! ( Leads Maddy out of the room, leaving the two drunken guards to fight with each other.)

( Will Maddy be safely reunited with the others? Or is this all part of Trigoya’s plan? Find out in the next chapter…)
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Lan1220 · Posted: Fri Jul 08, 2005 8:38 am Post subject:

Suspense..suspense....Nice! Great job on this one. Getting drunk on apple cider, laaame.
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Wackoman.EXE · Posted: Mon Jul 11, 2005 6:38 pm Post subject:

I love it so far. Poor Wackoman not being able to use his attacks. Very suspenseful and I like your crossovers. Hopefully there might be a bit of Wackoman battling soon. Keep on writing!
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Haly K · Posted: Tue Jul 12, 2005 7:31 am Post subject:

Gah, I spent most of yesterday playing MMBN5: Team Colonel. Thankfully, I managed to finish Chapter 7 today. :D

Chapter 7

( So, Lan and co. searched through the grim halls of the castle for Maddy, while she and Lizalfos tried to find a way out. The castle had many halls, all of them with high ceilings, and all of them were made of black bricks.)

Maddy( Annoyed): You’re a guard here at this castle, and you don’t even know a way out?!

Lizalfos( Embarrassed): Actually, I’m one of the newest guards here. I only know the way to the dungeon cells, the food hall, and to the front entrance.

Maddy( Rolling her eyes): This is hopeless…..

( Meanwhile, Lan and the others were trying to find out where Maddy was.)

Lan( Dragging his feet): If there were a map, this would be a lot easier…

Chaud( Sarcastically): If there were a hammer, I’d probably hit you with it!

Lan( Tired): Give me a break!

( Up ahead, a guard was leaning on the wall, sleeping.)

MegaMan( Stopping everyone): Don’t wake the guard up!

WackoMan: Aqua Tower! ( Slams his hands on the ground, causing a giant tower of water burst up from beneath the guard.)

( After landing hard on the ground, the guard scampered away down another hall.)

MegaMan( Sweatdrop): Uh, thank you?

WackoMan( Smiling): You’re welcome!

( Both groups continued on, have no idea where they were.)

Maddy( Whining): This isn’t fair!! I wanna go home already!!

Lizalfos( Quickening his pace): Don’t worry, I’m sure we’re near an exit…

Maddy( Slumping down to the ground): No!! I wanna go NOW!! I miss Match!!!( Starts crying)

Lizalfos( Sweatdrop): Oh dear…

( Suddenly, Lizalfos noticed Lan and co. in the other hall up ahead.)

Lizalfos( Tugging Maddy’s sleeves): Hey! Are those your friends other there?( points to the next hall)

Maddy( Absolutely happy): It’s them!! It’s them!! They came!!( Starts running towards them)

Lizalfos( Eyes turning blue; Evil smile): All according to plan…

( And so, Maddy happily hugged Mr.Match while the others watched.)

Maddy( Still crying a little): Thank goodness you’re here!! Don’t you realized how much I missed you?!?!

Mr.Match( Blushing): Uhh…

Lan: Hey! He’s blushing! Does that mean he really does like Maddy?

Mr.Match: ….. Yes.

Maddy( Squeals): I knew it! I knew you liked me!!

Mr.Match( Smiling): Would you mind… letting me go now?

Maddy( Lets go of him): Oops! Sorry!

Chaud( Checking to see if anyone else is nearby): This is….. Too easy…

ProtoMan( Right arm turning into a sword): I agree. This must be a trap!

Mr.Match: By the way…( Hands Maddy her PET) I brought this along to give it back to you.

Maddy( Taking back her PET back): Gee, that’s so sweet of you! Thanks!

Mr.Match( Blushing again): You’re welcome…

TorchMan( Rolling his eyes): Man, you blush too much!

Mr.Match( Annoyed): Leave me alone, will ya?!

???????: My, what a touching reunion! ( Laughs evilly)

( Everyone turned to the one talking. It was Lizalfos, except he had blue eyes and bat like wings coming out of his back.)

MegaMan: Who are you?!

Maddy: Oh, that’s Lizalfos. He got me out of my cell, and brought me here.

Lizalfos( Evil smile): I can’t believe how foolish you are! Do you really think I’d lead you all the way here just so you could leave?!

Maddy( Confused): Huh…?

Lan( Also confused): What are you talking about?!

Lizalfos: No, I lead you here so your friends could spend their finally moments with you!!

Everyone else: What?!

( Suddenly, Lizalfos changed into a giant black blob, then changed back into…)

MegaMan( Realizing who Lizalfos changed into):… Trigoya?!

Trigoya( flying near the high ceiling): It’s about time you saw me, right?!

Lan( Shivering): Man, she’s more creepier in real life!

Chaud( Also shivering): I hate to admit it, but you’re right!

Trigoya( Annoyed): SILENCE!!! Not you shall all die!!! ( Raises her hands into the air. While muttering a spell, her hands take on a shadowy aura)

( Suddenly, the ground beings to shake. Then everything is consumed by darkness, and they all find themselves inside a grand, yet empty, coliseum.)

Lan( Getting some battle chips ready): Alright then! Ready, MegaMan?!

MegaMan( Nodding): Rea--( Is suddenly engulfed by sparks) Gah!!

Lan: What the-?! ( Notices that all the other Navis are being shocked as well)

( All the Navis returned to there PETs.)

Trigoya( Laughing): That is why I brought you all here! This coliseum forces Navis back into their PETs! Now, show me this pathetic “CrossFusion” I’ve heard so much about!!

Lan( Angry): I’ll show YOU who’s pathetic!

Chaud( Taking out his Synchro Chip): Finally, the last battle…

( Lan and Chaud CrossFuse, and charge toward Trigoya. The last Master managed to create a giant wall of rock, separating herself, Lan and Chaud from Maddy and Mr.Match.)

Maddy( Worried): I hope they’ll be ok…

Mr.Match( Assuring her): Don’t worry! They’ll beat that witch for sure!

TorchMan and WackoMan( Agreeing with him): Yeah!

( But they weren’t alone…)
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Lan1220 · Posted: Tue Jul 12, 2005 7:43 am Post subject:

Nice! Rock on! Great job there!
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Wackoman.EXE · Posted: Tue Jul 12, 2005 9:58 am Post subject:

Hmmm. Very nice. Just like Wackoman to attack at the worst possible moment Razz

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ChibiForte · Posted: Tue Jul 19, 2005 12:17 pm Post subject:

Woot! This fic's awesome!!! it's got everything I like in it: action, suspense, romance, humor, and, a daily dose of VG characters! Yes! Finally! Somebody ACTUALLY puts Klonoa in their fics! YAHOO!!! Feep! KEEP WRITING DANGIT!
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Haly K · Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2005 8:08 am Post subject:

Ah! I see another Klonoa fan here! Smile

Now, to say sorry for my long absent, here is chapter 8! ( The second to last chapter, sadly. T_T )

Chapter 8

( And so, the battle continued. Lan and Chaud were doing there best, but it seemed Trigoya was tougher than she looked.)

Lan: HeatShot! Battle chip in!! Download!!!( Lan’s left arm turned into a flamethrower and he fired it at Trigoya. The last Master managed to dodge, but barely.)

Trigoya( Noticing a small scorch mark on one of her wings): Hmph! Not bad, but let’s see you handle THIS! Rock Arm!!

( Suddenly, a giant arm made of rock thrusted through the ground, grabs Lan, and slams him into the rock wall.)

Chaud( Smirking): Nice trick, old hag!

Trigoya( Angry): WHAT?!? You little--!! YOU’RE NEXT!!! Rock Arm!!!

( ANOTHER arm of rock appeared, but Chaud managed to dodge it. He then used Sonic Boom to slice both Rock Arms in half, causing them to disappear.)

Chaud: Program Advance! Cyber Sword, Wide Sword, and Long Sword! Battle chips in!! Download!!!( All of the chips combined to make a huge blade of light) Life Sword!!!( He fired the P.A at Trigoya, causing major damage)

Trigoya( Trying to stay in the air): You--!! ( Coughs)

Lan( Recovering from the Rock Arm attack): My turn! Cannon, Hi-Cannon, and Mega Cannon! Battle chips in!! Download!!! ( The chip combined to make a HUGE cannon. Lan aims it at Trigoya.) Zeta Cannon! FIRE!! ( Fires off several shots at Trigoya with the cannon)

( Although the cannon didn’t do a lot of damage, it did manage to blast one of Trigoya’s wings off.)

Trigoya( Hovering near the ground): I will not be defeated!! I am the last Master!!

Lan: Face it! You’re finished!

MegaMan: Yeah!

( On the other side of the wall…)

Maddy( Cheering Lan and Chaud on): Go Lan! Go Chaud! Beat her! Beat her!! Beat her!!!
Mr.Match: Hey, they’re winning already. Didn’t you hear those Program Advances?

Maddy( Smiling): Yeah, but they still need all the help they can get!( Cheers again) Go! Go!! Go!!!

TorchMan: I’m getting a headache…

WackoMan( Also cheering): Go MegaMan and ProtoMan!!

TorchMan( Yelling): YOU AREN’T HELPING!!!

Mr.Match: Calm down! They’ll win.

?????????: Don’t be so sure!!

Maddy: Huh?!

( Suddenly, Beelzemon swoops down into the coliseum half Maddy and Mr.Match were in.)
Maddy( Hiding behind Mr.Match): Eek! It’s the pervert!!

Beelzemon( Taking out his guns): Shut up, you little brat!!( Points one of his guns at Mr.Match) You! Step outta da way!! I need to make sure my bride is okay.

Maddy( Yelling): I AM NOT YOUR BRIDE AND NEVER WILL BE!!!

Beelzemon( Smirking): Yeah right! Master Trigoya said that, after she has absorbed the Star Pendant’s power at the Tri Eclipse, I can keep you as my bride!!

Maddy( Rolling her eyes): Yeah right! When she was disguised as Lizalfos a while back, she said that I have to be KILLED at the Tri Eclipse in order for her to take the Star Pendant’s power!!

Beelzemon( Shocked): She… did…?

Maddy( Rolling her eyes): Duh! It was a trick to make you help her!

Mr.Match( Look at Maddy): At least now Lan and Chaud will defeat Trigoya so that won’t happen.

Beelzemon( Thinking about it): A trick…?( Points both his guns at Mr.Match with a angry expression on his face) That a lie!!

Maddy: It’s. the. TRUTH! Get over it!!

Beelzemon( Taking one step forward): Nice try sweetie. You almost got me there fer a sec.

Maddy( Getting scared): Now what?

Mr.Match( Whispering): Maddy, would you mind if I borrowed the Star Pendant for a bit?

Maddy( Tilting her head to one side): Huh? Why?

Mr.Match: Well, the Star Pendant has powers, right?

Maddy: I guess, but I think only the Diva wielding the Star Pendant can use them…

Mr.Match( Smirking): What if the Diva allows someone else to use it for a short time?

Maddy( Taking out the Star Pendant): Well, I guess that could work…( Hands the pendant to Mr.Match)

( Then, the Star Pendant turns into a sword with a light green hilt, dark green blade, and two yellow ribbons flowing from the hilt.)

Maddy( Eyes widen): WOW!!

Beelzemon( Laughs): You think that little butter knife will save you?!

Mr.Match( Smirking): I bet you’re just saying that. You’re probably really scared on the inside!

Beelzemon( Angry): YOU--!!( He was so blinded with anger that he forgot about his guns and charged forward)

( Mr.Match then thrusted the sword trough Beelzemon’s chest.)

Mr.Match: You’re going down the same way as your buddy Janga!

Beelzemon( Being deleted little by little): You--!! I’ll get you… for…… this………( Is deleted completely)

WackoMan( Cheering): Yay! A victory for us!!

TorchMan( Yelling): I STILL HAVE A HEADACHE, YOU IDIOT!!

WackoMan( Frowning): HEY!! That wasn’t very nice!!

( Mr.Match hands Maddy back the sword, which turns back into the Star Pendant.)

Mr.Match( Smiling): That takes care of him, right?

Maddy( Putting away the Star Pendant): Yeah…

Mr.Match: Huh? Something wrong, Maddy?

Maddy: Well, it’s just that…( Hugs Mr.Match) You’re my hero!!!

Mr.Match: Hey! All you had to say is thank you!!

Maddy( Still hugging him): Well, I still love you! And that’s final!!

Mr.Match( Looking scared): You…… what?!

Maddy( Looking at him): I love you!( Kisses Mr.Match on the lips real quick)

WackoMan( Horrified): D-did she just…?

TorchMan: I can’t believe it…

Mr.Match( Blushes and looks away): You… REALLY didn’t have to do that…

Maddy: What’s wrong with you? How come you’re so shy around me, huh?

Mr.Match: I’m not shy, it’s just…

TorchMan: He has a weak spot for cute girls.

Maddy: Really?

Mr.Match( Angry): TorchMan!!!

Maddy( Smiling): Does this mean that you think I’m cute?

Mr.Match( Nodding slowly): …Yes.

Maddy( Squeals): Yay! You love me!( Hugs him again)

Mr.Match: Geez, will you stop alrea-( An explosion is heard from the other side of the rock wall) What the-?!

Maddy( Worried): Oh no! I hope Lan and Chaud are alright…

( On the other side of the wall, where the fight was…)

Trigoya( Laughs evilly): I KNEW that my Inferno Explosion would get you!!

( Lan and Chaud were both on the ground, panting. Chaud had gone out of CrossFusion, but Lan was still hanging on.)

Lan( Getting up and pointing his Mega Buster at Trigoya): I’m not finished!!!

Trigoya( Smirking): Not now, but you soon will be!! Inferno Explo-( Suddenly, a green flash comes from Lan and the whole coliseum lights up) What the-?!

Chaud( Seeing the green light everywhere): Huh?!

Maddy( Wondering what’s going on): What is that?!

Mr.Match( Worried): Let’s just hope it’s a good thing…

( Cliffhanger!)
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Lan1220 · Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2005 8:28 am Post subject:

Cliffhanger!!! No!!! That was an intresting chapter.
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ChibiForte · Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2005 1:16 pm Post subject:

Not cliffhangers! Noooooo! :puku: Just when it was getting good! Woot! keep going Haly K, cuz I don't know what we'd do without ya!
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Wackoman.EXE · Posted: Wed Jul 20, 2005 1:57 pm Post subject:

Best chapter so far. Fireman is getting a headache from Wackoman's constant cheering. Hinoken and Madoi are going to have pink haired, fire obssesed clowns. w00t!
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Haly K · Posted: Thu Jul 21, 2005 8:26 am Post subject:

*sob* The worst thing to happen... the final chapter! T_T But I assure you, there WILL be a sequel! Smile

Chapter 9

( Suddenly, the green light faded away, and there stood Lan, still in CrossFusion, but in a different form: his helmet, gloves, and boots were dark green, his body was a normal shade of green, the stripes on his helmet were white and flaming, and the arrow mark on his helmet was shimmering in a rainbow of colors.)

Lan( Noticing the changes): Huh? What’s this?

MegaMan: Lan, I think it’s… a Style Change!

Lan( Surprised): What?! But I thought after our first CrossFusion, you couldn’t do any more Style Changes!! Why now, and why during CrossFusion?!

Trigoya( Horrified): NO! I-It can’t be!!!

Lan and MegaMan: Huh?

Trigoya( On her knees, shivering): I thought it was a legend… The physical form of light… The gift of the Star Pendant… Hub Style!!

Lan: Hub style, huh? Look’s like you’re finished now!!

Trigoya( Screaming): NO! I will not be defeated!! Now, my ultimate spell!! TRUE FORM TRIGOYA!!!( Suddenly, she turns into a gigantic black dragon with three heads, and the same cold, blue flame-like eyes)

Lan( Surprised): Yikes!!

Trigoya( All three heads speaking in unison): Now you shall be deleted, and darkness will rule the world!!!

Lan( Getting his Mega Buster ready): I don’t think so!( Buster is charging) Hub Charge Shot!( Fires the buster at Trigoya, which sends a HUGE beam of many colors at the dragon)

( The left and right heads were deleted completely, and half of the middle head’s face was blown off. Parts of the body were bleeding, too.)

Trigoya( Struggling): N-no! This is m-my strongest f-form!! How c-can I be d-defeated?!

Lan( Charging the Mega Buster again): Simple: Good ALWAYS triumphs over evil! Hub Charge Shot!!( Fires again, this time finishing off Trigoya)

Trigoya( Disintegrating): No…! I shall have… my revenge!! One… of my fallen minions… shall arises… and be your downfall!!!( Is deleted)

( The rock wall and coliseum disappears, and Lan and co. are transported outside the castle. The castle disappears, Lan gets out of CrossFusion, and the Navis appear again.)

WackoMan( Very happy):Three cheers for Lan and MegaMan! Hip hip-!

TorchMan( Aiming his cannons at WackoMan): SILENCE!!! I still have a headache!!!

WackoMan:………(Gulps)

Lan( Feeling tired): It’s all over… Whew…

MegaMan( Receives and reads an e-mail):…… Not yet!

Lan( Horrified): HUH?!

( A bit later, Lan and co. are back at Lejimba where a huge crowd has formed, all waiting to see the Tri Eclipse. All of them were out in the fields next to Lejimba, where the three moons were starting to get together. Fortunately, Lan and co.( Except for Maddy and Mr.Match) found a nice spot to look at the eclipse from a large hill in the fields.)

Lan: Wait, isn’t it dangerous to look directly at an eclipse??

Chaud( Rolling his eyes): That’s only for SOLAR Eclipses, you nitwit!

Lan( Annoyed): C’mon!!

Klonoa( Smiling): Well, the eclipse will be great either way!

Lan: Yeah, but…( Lays down on his back) this adventure was crazy! Maddy gets kidnapped in the morning, we go to the Dream World around noon, and beat the last Master in the afternoon; this whole thing only took one day!

MegaMan: Though, I wonder if Famous will believe us about this place or not…

WackoMan( Smiling): Let’s just enjoy the eclipse. We deserved it!

Lan( Turning around to look at WackoMan and TorchMan): Say, where’s Maddy and Mr.Match?

TorchMan and WackoMan( Looking at each other): Er…

Klonoa( Thinking for a bit, then points to a forest to his right): Well, I think Lephise lead them to a spot in the woods where it’s the best to see the eclipse.

Lan( Looking at the crowd around him): Hey, Klonoa. I’m just wondering, but are all of the worlds from the games crammed onto one planet or several of them?

Klonoa: Well, all of them are on several different ones. Some share the planet with other game series, while other have whole planets, or even systems, to themselves. For example, the planet we’re on now is for the Klonoa, Zelda, and Mario games, the Digimon series have a whole planet to themselves, and then there’s the Lylat System far away from here.

Lan: Cool!

Chaud: Say, how do you get around from one planet to another?

Klonoa: Usually by Gummi Ships or some other similar type of space transportation.

Chaud: Alright then…

( Within the woods, Maddy and Match were sitting near a tree, watching the moons get closer. Lephise had left them there and gone off to see the eclipse with the rest crowd.)

Maddy( Excited): Eee! This is so cool!

Mr.Match( One arm around Maddy’s shoulders): Calm down, will ya?

Maddy( Hugs Match): But you have to admit, this is a rare opportunity since the Tri Eclipse only happens once every millennia!

Mr.Match( Smiling): Heh, yeah…

Maddy: Wait, isn’t this the part were you complain about me hugging you?

Mr.Match: Why should I?

Maddy( Confused): What? So you’re not shy around me any more??

Mr.Match( Blushing): Well, no…… I mean, I’m your boyfriend now, right?

Maddy( Squeals and hugs him again): Yay! You love me!!

Mr.Match: Hey, you already knew that!

Maddy( Smiling): I know, I just wanted to say that.

Mr.Match( Kisses Maddy on the cheek): No wonder I love you!

Maddy( Blushing): C’mon… You’re making me blush, Match…

Mr.Match( Looking away): Er, Maddy… You can call me Ken if you want…

Maddy( Surprised): Ken? Is that your real name?!

Mr.Match( Nervous smile): Actually, my real name is Kenichi…

Maddy( Confused): That doesn’t sound very Netopian…

Mr.Match( Looking at Maddy): Well, my mom was from Den Tech City, but my dad was from Scotland. Happy?

Maddy: Oh, no wonder you spoke better Electopian than Count Zap…

Mr.Match: Yeah, whatever…

Maddy( Hugging Match again): Alright then, Ken! Ready to watch the eclipse?!

Mr.Match( Smiling): Yup!

( Then, the three moons lined up, and glowed a rainbow of colors. It was absolutely amazing yet beautiful.)

Lan( Amazed): Whoa! Cool!!

Maddy: It’s so pretty!

( The eclipse last for only a few minutes, sadly. Lan and co. returned home afterwards ( With the help of the Star Pendant’s power to open portals.) and Lan explained everything to Famous. ( With MegaMan correcting Lan whenever he exaggerated.) And life in Den Tech City ( And the Dream World) returned to normal…)

( But who said that it’s end of the adventure? For now, it’s the end of this story……)

~{THE END}~

.:Credits:.
Lan, MegaMan, etc. are copyright Capcom
Klonoa, Lephise, Ghadius, Janga, and Lejimba are copyright Namco
Lizalfos, Dinolfos, and Dragolfos* are copyright Nintendo
Trigoya, The Star Pendant, and the idea for this story is copyright me!
All other characters mentioned or used in this story are copyright of their owners

* = Dragolfos is the Majora’s Mask version of Dinolfos. Since they had the same name, I invented the name Dragolfos so the reader would not be confused between them.
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Wackoman.EXE · Posted: Thu Jul 21, 2005 12:57 pm Post subject:

Woah. Hub Style? That came out of the blue. Fireman hopefully wont roast Wackoman... Very nice ending. The tri eclipse with Madoi and Hinoken was adorable. Hmmm...Maddy and Ken...Barbie and Ken? Oh god!
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WindSoul · Posted: Thu Jul 21, 2005 1:10 pm Post subject:

If you ask me it's pretty good to me. Laughing

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