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PostPosted: Sun Aug 07, 2005 10:48 pm    Post subject: [EXE5 Spoilers / PG] Healing Wounds - Final Chapter Reply with quote

Comadre, feel free to edit. *runs away 'cause sis wants her compy*

TITLE: Healing Wounds -(title can change)
AUTHORS: Plantman and SSX
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SPOILERS: High ones from the ending of EXE5 (Team Colonel). Watch out.
RATING: PG
CATEGORY: Angst, Drama, Yuu/Regal friendship (it's not going to be a shounen ai fest, trust us).
DISCLAIMER: No, we don't own these characters, save the few OCs we threw in, but we hope they won't tear the story's plot apart. CAPCOM owns Yuu and Regal, and both authors are hereby stating they're thankful for it.

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Healing Wounds
by Plantman and SSX

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As the nurse pushed his wheelchair to reach the dining room, Hikari Yuuichirou thought of the past days, mixed feelings overwhelming him. A feeling of despair was taking over him; he didn't doubt his father would be happy to see one of his unfinished projects to take place, but in no doubt he would also disapprove of the means Dr. Regal had used to get Kokoro Network to work.

Dr. Regal. He hadn't given a thought to him, truth to be told.

He hadn't seen Dr. Regal after he woke up. Yuuichirou assumed he was sent to the same hospital, but he couldn't remember anything. He didn't know if something worse had happened to him. He hadn't tried remembering, either; the exposition to KokoroNet had left him physically and emotionally exhausted. Everything was coming back to him, but he prefered not to accelerate the process.

But now, he couldn't help but wonder what fate the other man could have encountered. He hoped the other scientist had survived. Despite his crimes and the pain and suffering he caused to him, his family, and many people in the world, Yuuichirou couldn't bring himself to hate the man or wish for his death.

"Dr. Hikari, how are you feeling?"

The nurse's question abruptly ended Yuuichirou's musings. Being unable to face the woman for obvious reasons, he just smiled. "Pretty fine, thank you."

"That's good!" the nurse, whose name was Ami, answered back. "I was getting worried because you didn't answer back. Is there something bothering you?"

"Well...." He pondered for a moment, carefully choosing how to word his worries. "I was wondering if anyone else was brought here the same day I did."

"Oh, well... yes, I do believe someone was brought here the same day you were. I do believe the police is with him right now. I don't know what for, to be honest" Ami replied as she pushed Yuuichirou's chair to the dinning area.

Yuuichirou hesitated, but he really had to ask. "Ami... is it possible for you to take me there?"

Ami's cheerful tone changed, or so it seemed to him. "I guess, but... is he a friend of yours?"

"He..." She didn't need to know the full details, he reasoned. A little lie wouldn't hurt, would it? "He's a colleage of mine."

Ami approached the door of the dining room and opened it, pushing the brown-haired scientist inside. "Well, Doctor... to be honest, I don't think I can get you there. He's in a restricted area of the hospital."

Yuuichirou sighed. That was precisely what he had expected. "I see. Any hopes if my credentials might override that?" He loathed to use his status as one of the most respected scientists in SciLabs to get favors, but his sense of righteousness was telling him to send his pride to hell.

Ami blinked a few times, understanding somehow the need of the brown haired man. "I'll see what I can do, Dr. Hikari. For now, please wait here, and rest up." With that, Ami stopped the chair in a comfortable area of the dinning room, not too noisy, and rather warm and calm.

Yuuichirou nodded as he was left in the large area, feeling somewhat anxious about what would be happening in the room he thought Regal was being under interrogation. He couldn't help but fear what the police could do to him. He was a brilliant scientist, even if he had taken a bad route, he could do so much to help others if given the chance, and if he had it on his heart to try to start over.

Not too long after Ami left him, the nurse came back in company of one of the directives of the Hospital. Time to put his infliences to work.

"Dr. Hikari. I've been told you want to see one of the patients on the restricted area?" The man asked while fixing his broad glasses' frame.

"If it could be possible," Yuuichirou replied with a small smile, "I would like to be able to see him, it's important for me."

The directive nodded, pondering the situation fora few moments before sighing softly, deciding to allow the scientist to have it his way. It wouldn't be a smart move to upset one of the top scientist of Sci Lab. "Very well, I'll allow you to see him. However, he's currently on custody of the police. I'm afraid you won't have much privacy when you address him."

"That's alright to me. Thank you for your understanding, sir, I appreciate it." Stabbing a pea with his fork, he brought it to his mouth and swallowed it whole, smiling apologetically to the hospital director and to Ami. "I won't interfere with the police investigation, rest assured."

"I hope so." The director nodded and walked away, whispering something to Ami the nurse before leaving.

"Are you ready, Dr. Hikari?" Ami asked, taking a grip on the wheelchair's handle.

Yuu eyed the gelatine and the lemonade.

This couldn't wait.

Yuuichirou dropped the fork next to his half-finished dinner. "Yeah, I believe so, Ami. Thanks."

--

In the restricted area of the Hospital, a detective towered by the side of the only bed in one of the rooms. "So, you don't recall anything? How convenient, don't you think, Dr. Regal?"

Dr. Regal laid on the bed, a bandage wrapped around his head. He had been enduring the interrogatory for about a hour and a half. He had just woken up a brief 15 minutes before just to be welcomed by the sight of this detective, who was currently showering him in questions. He couldn't remember much at all, a big gap presented in his memories. He knew who he was. he knew almost everything about himself and his life, but he couldn't remember anything recent at all.

"Well, Dr. Regal?" The detective pressed.

"I told you before, I can't remember any of the things you're asking me." Regal replied dryly, this wasn't a good day so far. Wake up to be harassed by a detective about events he couldn't recall at all... he didn't wish a similar fate for anyone.

Somebody knocked on the door, and both Regal and the detective immediately looked up to see. A nurse stood on the doorframe, shifting uncomfortably. "Sorry to interrupt..."

The annoyed detective crossed his arms and shot the poor nurse a death glare. "What is it? I thought I said 'no interruptions' when I got here."

"I'm truly sorry, sir, but somebody wishes to speak with the patient and--"

"I don't care." spat the detective. "I wouldn't give a damn if it were to be the president who asked that. I am trying to get some answers here, and being interrupted during the interrogation isn't the fastest way to get them."

"But, sir, the hospital director said--"

"With all due respect, what part of 'I don't care' you haven't grasped yet, ma'am?" The waiting had wore off the detective's patience. "You don't seem to realise this is a criminal, therefore he's not entitled to all the benefits of being hospitalized here. And that includes having visitors."

The sound of a wheelchair interrupted the discussion, as a hazel-haired man wearing a hospital gown entered the room. The detective recognized this man as Hikari Yuuichirou, the other scientist involved in the case he was working in.

Yuuichirou grabbed Ami's hand in order to get her attention. "Would you excuse us, Ami?"

"Dr. Hikari!"

"It'll be alright, just wait in the hall."

The nurse looked at him, then at the detective, and finally glanced at the patient, whom she only knew by the name of 'Regal'. The man appeared to be harmless; however, she could tell he wasn't in the best of moods, and she couldn't blame him.

"Fine, Dr. Hikari. Let me know when you're done." Ami nodded and closed the door after her.

Yuuichirou smiled at her and nodded before she left. Then, he turned his attention to the detective. "I'm sorry to interrupt your investigation, Detective..." he squinted, trying to read the name in the man's badge. "...Stone. But,I would like to known how Dr. Regal is doing."

The detective wasn't one bit pleased by the interruption, but nodded. Perhaps Dr. Hikari could provide more information and a trustworthy witness in the case. "It's alright, Dr. Hikari. He seems to be fine outside of a minor concussion. However, he has.... conveniently forgotten everything about his activities on Nebula. Or that's what he claims."

Yuuichirou nodded and looked at Regal, who didn't seem to recognize him right away. Somehow, Yuuichirou felt the other man wasn't lying about his memory. "Have the medics turned down a report on his condition yet? It's not impossible for him to have partially lost his memory if certain conditions are met."

"No, not yet. I'm interrogating him to see what I can find out."

"And I tell you" Regal sighed, eye-locking with the detective, "that I do not know what you're talking about."

"So you claim the words 'Kokoro Network' or 'Hikari Report' mean nothing to you?"

"That's correct."

The detective sighed, running a hand through his hair. "Did you mention something about a 'selective memory loss', Dr. Hikari?"

"Yes." He looked again at Regal. "Would you mind if I speak to Dr. Regal in private?"

The detective gave Yuuichirou a nasty shot. "I'm being indulgent by letting you stay around, Dr. Hikari. Are you implying I'm asking the wrong questions to this man?"

"I am not implying anything, detective Stone. But if this helps, I am certain your investigation would advance faster."

The scientist seemed determined, thought Stone. He felt offended at the fact this man thought could get the answers he had obviously failed to get during the past minutes. The man wasn't an idiot, that was very clear to the detective, but he couldn't help feeling insulted about this. "What makes you so sure you'll suceed, Dr. Hikari? You damn well know what this man has done..." Stone waved lazily to Regal, who looked genuinely puzzled. "This man. You, out of everybody else, know his deeds."

Yuuichirou looked sternly at Detective Stone. "That's why I want to give it a try."


- to be continued
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PostPosted: Sun Aug 07, 2005 10:59 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow, I can't wait for this thing to continue! It is awesome so far.
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 08, 2005 4:51 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow.

So far I am definitely liking what I am reading. Though I do not really see a friendship between Regal and Yuu as something that could possibly go on, I still have quite some respect for this piece of work.

As of now, the conversation with Regal is going to be the major portion of the work--so I think I'll hold off until then and await the next installment.
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 08, 2005 4:29 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Lovely. Very interesting, and I love how it's setting up for more. I can't wait to see the next installment, as always Mari-mama your writing is excellent :3
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 08, 2005 5:40 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Weee~, love this and I say that Detective Stone needs to die for the nasty look he gave to Yuu, a painful death by that matter >_>, I want to see Yuu and Regal working together~, I wonder what kind of memories he'd retain after the "selective deletion". =O
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PostPosted: Mon Aug 08, 2005 7:53 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

mabi_chan: Thanks for your comments, we appreciate them.

MC: Thank you. We have that conversation half-done; as I'm imagining it, Planty's probably going to write Regal's lines and I'm going to write Yuu's. We'll try to get it up soon enough.

Neko: I'm not the only one writing this. Credit goes to Planty too. XD

Compadre: Nah, maybe just a slight torture session. *g* That part was left because the guy was meant to be annoyed at Yuuichirou who decided to "get in the middle" just because, or that's what it seems to him.
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PostPosted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 6:27 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Disclaimer on chapter 1.


Detective Stone rolled his eyes and moved towards the door. "Fine. Whatever. You've got five minutes, no more than that."

"Thank you, Detective Stone." Yuuichirou waited until the man had left the room and pushed his chair to the the side of the bed to get a closer look to the black haired man that laid on it. "So, Dr. Regal, what exactly can you remember?"

Dr. Regal sighed, giving a genuinely thankful look to the brunette, relieved of having the detective off him for at least a few minutes. "I am not sure. I can remember working with my father on a project I was assisting him with, then everything seems to be blurry. I can't remember anything. It's almost like... like I've been sleeping for 10 years. I don't know or remember anything that happened in that lapse. I'm surprised of what year we're at now." Regal sighed heavily, feeling truly lost and frustrated about his current condition. "I... I think you're familiar. Have we met before? I'm sure I've seen you in the past."

Dr. Hikari adjusted his glasses, absentmindedly. It seemed that, indeed, he had lost his memory partially. But how could it be? Why only the last 10 years or so of his memory have been erased? Such an accident couldn't have happened just because. Could it have been caused or provoked in some way by the Kokoro Network?

"I... yes. My father is Hikari Tadashi, I'm sure you've met him before."

Regal blinked. "So you're the son of my father's partner? I've heard about you from him, but I never had the chance to meet you." He extended his hand to shake Yuuichirou's. "It's a pleasure to meet you... though in these odd circumstances."

Yuuichirou felt odd to be introduced again to this man, but he shaked hands nonetheless. "Likewise."

Regal nodded slightly, he could feel some sort of tension in the air. Not from him, but from the scientist before him. Something was making him uneasy, and Dr. Regal could only think it had to do with himself. "May I ask, Dr. Hikari, if you know what's happening here? I am uncertain of what answers this Detective seeks."

Yuuichirou sighed. "I think I do. But judging by your current state, I'd rather not take risks and give you my full version of the story." The brown-haired scientist didn't think it would be wise to dump the details in his brain just like that, not until he learned the results of the tests anyway.

To be honest with himself, he couldn't think of a better way to summarize to this man all the crimes he's had committed during the past years in just 5 minutes.

Regal frowned and looked around the room for a second, not knowing what else to say. Not only he had been harassed by the police into details of some supposed scheme he didn't remember taking part into, but now this man before him seemed to feel somewhat distressed around him. What he could have done that would make people treat him and refer to him as a criminal?

In that moment, the black haired scientist just wished he could close his eyes and slink back into a dreamless sleep, hoping that he'd wake up to a world that'd make more sense.

Yuuichirou noticed Regal's face and realised Detective Stone wouldn't get the answers he was longing for. Breathing heavily, and hoping he wouldn't give the man a terrible shock, he said, "I can, however, give you a small tour, if that helps."

Regal blinked a couple of times and glanced back to the brunette. Right now, he didn't feel like being filled in anything. But he knew there was no way to avoid his current situation. Whatever happened, it was best to clear it as soon as possible.

"I'd appreciate it, Dr. Hikari." His reply was barely above a whisper.

Yuuichirou adjusted his glasses and did his best effort of summarizing Regal's life in succint phrases, avoiding small details like Regal's failed attempt to destroy humanity and Yuuichirou's whereabouts during the past months. As he had explained to him, Regal had suffered from severe stress and trauma caused by working 24/7, which in turn had caused him to 'become' evil, to create a NetMafia which in turn affected the whole world, and interfering with the Electopian government's Science Labs and a secret project which codename was 'Kokoro Network'. That seemed like a plausible explanation to Yuuichirou, for the time being.

The brunette looked at Regal, scrutinizing him. If anyone looked at his face in that moment, nobody would be able to tell if Dr. Regal was impressed or even affected by what Dr. Hikari had sumarized about him. His expression had barely changed one bit as the explanation proceeded. But his only visible eye betrayed what his face would not.

Dr. Regal was distressed by the news. Insanity had taken over him? But how? Why? He couldn't remember at all, he couldn't even think of much stress being placed into him. He couldn't remember anything, but he could tell the other man's words were truth.

On that moment, the detective decided to enter the room again. This time, though, he was holding an envelope, which he nonchalantly handed to Yuuichirou.

Stone sat down in a nearby chair and faced Regal. "Well."

Yuuichirou retrieved the tests and skimmed the documents. He then looked back at the detective. "This is..."

"'Impossible'?" countered the detective. "Yes. From all the accounts, yes, it is."

Regal sighed softly, grunting lowly as the detective came back into the room. He watched the other two men talking. "What is 'impossible'?" He shifted in the bed, trying to have a more comfortable position. "Would you care to inform me what is that?" The black haired man pointed to the envelope and the documents Yuuichiriou was holding.

"Your memories. It's all like Dr. Hikari said. They're just gone... somehow." Poor Detective Stone couldn't believe it either, judging by how bewildered he looked.

"According to the notes on the fMRI and EEG tests, some portions of Dr. Regal's brain, the ones related to memory functions, were damaged, which would explain the memory loss Dr. Regal claims." explained Yuuichirou. "By studying several process of the interactions between humans and navis, I've learned about neurological process, but I've never seen anything like this before. I've heard of documented cases, but this..."

The truth was, Yuuichirou was certain the Kokoro Network had caused it, although he hadn't quite figured out how. Only Regal would know how to operate it, and theoretically Yuuichirou could, too, but he had been unconscious when he supposed it had happened. The whole process of it would be hard to explain to the police, not just this detective. He knew the Kokoro Network by theory, having read his father's notes, and he was certain that if such an accident were to happen, it would've affected everyone in the range of the whole Network... including him. Yuuichirou could remember everything, save for a few fuzzy details.

Something doesn't fit here, thought Yuuichirou. Someone caused it... but <i>who</i>?

"Maybe I can shed some light into this matter." A voice interrupted.

The Detective Stone shot a nasty glare to the newcomer. "Who are you, sir? Who authorized you to come inside?" He stood up and stalked in quick steps towards the man at the door. Before the man could shout anything else, a badge was displayed in front of his face. "C-Commander Barrel?"

Barrel placed his badge back into the inner pocket of his jacket. "I have some information I'd like to share with Dr. Regal and Dr. Hikari if possible. In.... private."

Regal couldn't quite hear what the other man said. He was beginning to feel a headache building up, too many things going at once were quickly wearing him off.

"I, uh, I guess I'll leave you alone." Detective Stone scuttled out of the room as fast as he had entered it.

"Commander Barrel, it's good to see you." said Yuuichirou, pointing to a nearby chair.

"Drop the boundaries, Dr. Hikari. And I'd prefer to stand, if you don't mind."

Yuuichirou nodded. "I suppose you're here to investigate?"

"On the contrary. I know all that is needed to know about this issue, Dr. Hikari. I will entrust you the following information, because I'm certain you'll do what's best with it." Barrel nodded, before glancing at Regal for a moment. He carefully chose how to word this information. "After you fell unconscious, the main system of the Kokoro Network restarted itself and overloaded. Somehow, the overload managed to erase completely the last 10 years of Dr. Regal's memories. To him, the last 10 years never happened." Barrel dismissed Yuuichirou's quizzical look, and the doctor understood there was something else, something the raven-haired man wanted to keep to himself.

"So..." Dr. Regal rubbed his temple tiredly, trying to understand. "What you're saying is that in the last few years I've been a criminal? That I tried to dominate the world for no aparent reason? If that's true, if I am really the mad man Detective Stone said I was... what is going to happen with me? What I am supposed to do?"

Barrel sighed. "What the police is going to do is to put you in jail, for an indefinite amount of time. All the proof points you as the only perpetrator, and your cronies have already confessed their crimes, naming you as their main leader."

Barrel looked outside through the window. It was a bright day, not a cloud in sight. He glanced at Regal, who was returning the look, wishing for a good reply. "However, due to the given circumstances, it's impossible to get a full-fledged confession from the main leader of Nebula. Our scientists are trying to decipher the way the Kokoro Network works, but all of its documents and the machines operating it were lost after the vulcano's eruption. It would be too much to have SciLabs recreate such an intrincate system just to get the answers the NetPolice wants."

Yuuichirou handed the tests results to Regal, assuming the black-haired scientist would like to review them. "Is there a way to change the sentence?"

The main commander of the NetPolice frowned. "What do you have on mind, Dr. Hikari?"

"I..." Yuuichirou paused and thought of the words that were to come out from his mouth. It was an ilogic decision, and more than one person would question his sanity. Why did he feel in such need to favor his kidnapper?

"I would like to appoint Regal as a SciLab intern, if possible. Let him repay his crimes there. That's what I suggest."
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PostPosted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 6:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Intriguing.

I found that the chapter seemed to be quite adequate--it got across the confusion that Regal experienced as he awoke from his coma--but something about it seemed to be off. Somehow I figured Regal to be a bit more temperamental--as his hotheadedness was DEFINITELY apparent throughout the majority of EXE5--and I don't think a 10-year memory wipe would eliminate his personality.

Nevertheless, it was a good read, and I can't help but think that this is the end.
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PostPosted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 6:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Bah. I still have to play through EXE5. As it is, I can't comment too much, except that Yuu is awesomely in-character, and the little details throughout this fic makes the situation seem entirely real. The detective is, of course, a pompous jackass. It was quite satisfying when Barrel sent him fleeing, though I've been damn used to thinking of Barrel as an old guy (or dead. <_< blame Stream).

AND YUU FORGIVES REGAL. /o/ I wonder how the latter will react when he realizes that the rest of the world detests him for the actions he doesn't remember doing?

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PostPosted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 6:51 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

*squeals like the little fangirl she is* How awesome /o/ I loveses it!

Way to go Mari and Planty, may your fic continue to kick much ass :3
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PostPosted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 6:52 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

The irony is, normally Regal wouldn't even think of paying for his crimes. "Criminals judging criminals," he said at the end of EXE4. You can't help but admire how deep his words are, then.
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PostPosted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 6:54 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Since I came up with most of Regal's lines, I'll explain my reasoning as to why he seems less hot-headed. Temper is something you build up through the years, I can see Regal being very temperamental, but I can see that building up through the years. Also, keep in mind most of this is based on his reactions and personality displayed at the ending of EXE5 -and many of these traits and scenes do not appear in ToB's ending.

I used my mother as reference for how to react, as she is quite hot tempered. I'd think Regal would rather be a cautious man and stay as calm as the situation allowed rather than throw a temper tantrum in his confussion, after all, is not wise to let your temperament go when you don't even know where the hell are you and what happened with your last 10 years of life.
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PostPosted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 6:55 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'll let Planty answer the questions towards Regal's characterization, because his dialogue and actions on this fic were ideated by her.

Nazne - thanks for the comment about Yuu's characterization. EXE's game storyline is quite normal compared to the anime's; it's nice to work with a character like Barrel in the same storyline without messing with time machines or something around those lines.

Many thanks to Wikipedia and my parents for the data on neurological tests, by the way.

Neko - Thanks! We're glad you liked it.
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PostPosted: Thu Aug 11, 2005 7:45 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Out of the way pompous detective \o/, and Barrel marks his entrance, poor Regal out of coma and directly to questions with a *expletive*

Will Regal be able to live a normal life?, Most likely not since it wouldn't be a fic without a plot excepting fics that clearly state that <_<

Will the pompous detective die?, I sure hope so >_>

Will I keep asking questions since I can't seem to do a review like god demands?, A likely yes.
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PostPosted: Fri Aug 12, 2005 12:52 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow.

What can I say? I can't find any faults in the grammar structure or any spelling errors that I can immediately see...Everything looks perfect so far.

I like how this is a set-up to the end of EXE5. It comes off as more real and you get Yuuichirou's character down quite nicely, despite the limited screen time he had.

I am interested with how this continues. You've left a bit of a cliffhanger, and I WILL read it once you get it out.

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PostPosted: Sat Aug 13, 2005 11:37 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Compadre - Not a single detective was harmed during the making of this fic. Sadly.

Sol - Don't worry, you'll find your spelling errors and faulty grammar structure below. Trust me. XD




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disclaimer on chapter 1



Both Barrel and Regal stared at Yuuichirou, dumbfounded.

"Dr. Hikari, with all due respect, this man committed a crime and the law says he has to pay for it, with or without confession." Barrel said gravely.

"I know" replied Yuuichirou, his tone borderlining in exasperation. "But, isn't the purpose of condemning a man to jail to make him repent from his crimes? This man doesn't even know what's happened during his last 10 years, how do you suppose he's going to feel regret for ten years that never occured in his mind?"

Regal was confused to say the least. He certainly couldn't remember any of the crimes he was going to be condemned for. He didn't like the idea one bit, but he understood, if he really commited such crimes, he didn't expect much mercy. Why was Dr. Hikari trying to help him to avoid the imprisionment? He sighed and examined the documents the other scientist handed to him, confirming what he was already told.

Barrel looked deeply in Yuuichirou's eyes, and saw an uncanny determination on him. He rubbed his chin, pondering the situation, and decided to conceed the doctor his point. "Well.... I guess something could be arranged." He also wished Dr. Regal could have a fresh start, and lead a better life, like his father, Dr. Wily, wanted. "I am sure I can try to change his sentence to serving as intern in SciLabs. With proper security measures, of course. He's a brilliant scientist, I'm sure he could be a great addition to the SciLabs' staff."

"I agree. We're always happy to welcome new scientists into the SciLabs." Yuuichirou smiled. "I will take all the responsability over this."

"Very well." Barrel looked back at Regal. "What do you say, Dr. Regal?"

Regal pondered the situation for a moment. This felt like a rollercoaster, going up and down very fast. He didn't really have to consider the options, but he still wondered why Yuuichirou Hikari was willing to take responsibility for him. "Very well. I admit I don't have much choice, but I would like to atone for my crimes. Even if I don't remember them, I'd rather try to pay my debt to society in useful ways."

"Alright then." Barrel nodded and glanced to Dr. Hikari. "We'll have to make the arrangements, and you will have to present yourself to take the formal and legal responsibility over Dr. Regal."

"Understood. As I've been told, I should be released tomorrow, so I hope you don't mind if I fill the forms then." Dr. Hikari moved his wheelchair to the door. "I guess I'll take my leave. Excuse me."

"Dr. Hikari, would you be so kind to wait for me outside? I'd like to have a word with you before you go to your ward." said Barrel, approaching him.

Yuuichirou was puzzled at first, but shrugged. "Okay, Commander."

Barrel helped Yuu out and remained in the room to talk with Regal a bit more. Ami was waiting outside in the hall, as she had promised her patient she'd do. "Dr. Hikari!"

"Ami." Her patient nodded and smiled. "Thank you very much for waiting."

"Ah, it's nothing... you're under my care, after all. Let's go then?"

"Er, not yet, Ami. I need to talk with that man first." Yuuichirou waved to the door. Ami spotted the raven-haired man she had seen on the hall before he entered that same room Yuuichirou had just left.

Just then, Barrel exited the room himself. A rather confused and tired Regal was left alone to have some needed rest. "Dr. Hikari." He noticed the nurse and bowed slightly. "Evening, ma'am."

"Right." Yuuichirou nodded, patting his nurse gently. "Thanks Ami, I can get to my room myself."

"Are you sure?"

"Positive. I'll be there in less than an hour." said Yuuichirou, apologetically. "I'm sorry to be such a burden, pushing me around just to meet somebody in the other side of the hospital."

"It's okay, Dr. Hikari, I'm getting used to it" replied Ami, chuckling. "Please don't be late, though. Excuse me." Ami the nurse walked towards the stairs and disappeared.

Yuuichirou's smile faded, and he turned to face Barrel. "Commander... no, Barrel. I fear you might be hiding something."

Barrel said nothing. He had a feeling the good doctor knew most of the truth already.

The brunette adjusted his glasses and sighed. "I'll tell you my theory. If that hypothesis about Kokoro Network that you told Regal is true, he wouldn't be the only one affected by it. Everyone exposed to Kokoro Network would've had sequels like Regal's, unless somebody interfered with it to focus it in one person."

Barrel's look told Yuuichirou all he needed to know. "You know who did it, don't you?"

Barrel sighed softly and nodded slightly, walking with the scientist towards his room. "Dr. Hikari, if your son was in danger, you'd be willing to risk it all for his sake, wouldn't you?"

Yuuichirou blinked a few times, confused as to why the raven-haired man would ask him such a thing all of sudden. "Of course I would, what kind of father I'd be if I wouldn't?"

Barrel smirked a bit and nodded. "Exactly. What kind of man would let his son die in the eruption of a volcano?"

Dr. Hikari's eyes widened slightly as the sudden realization hit him. "...Dr. Wily?"

"Yes."

Yuuichirou was expecting anything, but this. "But... why? I mean, how? His consciouness was eaten by Proto nearly a year ago. We never found him when the SciLabs scientists scouted what was left of it. And even if he could come back," he took a pause to breath, and continued, "even if he could, why would he help him now, and not before? He's never shown regret for his actions, let alone regret his child's..."

But it did make sense, after all. No one else but Tadashi Hikari, Dr. Wily, and their sons would know how to operate Kokoro Network. With nothing left of Tadashi Hikari's consciousness, only Regal and him would be left with the knowledge of the Kokoro Network.

And, apparently, Wily as well.

Barrel began to play with the small medals around his neck. "Those are answers that only Dr. Wily himself can provide." He pondered for a moment whether to tell everything to the scientist or not.

After a small pause, he carried on. "To be honest with you, Dr. Hikari, I formed this team by request of Dr. Wily. He asked me to stop his son at all costs. Why he has come to regret the insanity of his own son just now, I do not know. But it was his wish for his son to have the life Wily gave up on long time ago."

"I see." Yuuichirou lied. He really couldn't understand why, but it somehow made sense in his mind. So he just shrugged off the thought for the day. Smile and nod. And so he did.

"Very well. I guess that's all then. I'll take you to the elevator." Barrel didn't wait for Yuuichirou to reply and pushed his wheelchair all the way to the elevator.

"Thanks, Commander Barrel." said Yuuichirou, pushing the button to open the elevator's door.

"No need to thank me for, Dr. Hikari." Barrel helped Yuuichirou inside, before turning around to walk away. He needed to have a couple of words with the medics and Detective Stone. Preparing an audience to try to change Regal's sentence into internship on SciLabs wouldn't be easy, but he knew what strings to pull to get what he wanted. Barrel couldn't help but wonder if Dr. Regal would be able to climb the hill he was about to be put in front of. Only time would tell.

--

Dr. Regal casted a glance to the bundle of clothing that was delivered to him. He examined them; it seemed like a suit of a rich burgandy shade and a matching robe. The black-haired man sighed softly, slightly exasperated, as he picked it up and walked to what looked like a small dressing table arranged in his hospital room. As he sat up in front of the mirror, he quickly noticed how different he seemed to be from what he remembered himself to be. He had grown a well kept goatee he never remembered having or ever intended to have. But what really caught his interest was the strange piece over his right eye.

"What in the world..." Regal reached cautiously to brush his fingertips over the cold, metallic surface, quickly realizing this piece was permanently attached to his face. A low growl crept out of the man's throat. He recognized this piece as one of his father's early designs in his robotics investigation; it was his father's attempt to help to recover sight for those who had lost complete eye function. How in the world he ended up with one?

Regal decided he really didn't want to find out. He stood up to dress up in the garb that was handed to him. Just a few minutes after, he was completely dressed. Once more, he examinated his looks in the mirror.

"Well, I definitively look somewhat threatening..." He spoke without much humor. He could change his appearance a bit, but he decided it was best not to and confront the reality as it was.

A knock on the door drove him off his musings. "Excuse me, Dr. Regal, are you ready?" A nurse peeked into the room. Regal concluded the police was here to take him away.

Regal took a look at himself. Whatever belongings he used to have, he lacked them now, except for that bloody eyepatch that he had no means to take off of him. "Yes, I am."

"Okay," said the nurse, and walked away, apparently to bring the policeman or woman who would escort him on his way to his new 'home'.

Dr. Regal waited until the police agents walked into the room. He certainly expected heavy security from what he was told his crimes were. Thankfully, Detective Stone wasn't there this time; a lady dressed in a salmon colored suit came inside and carefully secured a pair of handcuffs on his hands.

"Let's go" was all the lady said. The black-haired man was glad at least her tone was rather neutral, he had enough of being yelled at by a random stranger. As he was taken into the patrol that would transport him to the Police Station, he walked straight up. He never bowed his head one bit. He was a criminal, and he wasn't proud at all of what crimes he commited, but he wouldn't hang his head in shame asking for forgiveness. The scientist was determined to pay for his crimes to the best of his ability, and he'd work hard to do it.

After arriving to the station, the nameless policewoman lead Regal to a small room in the deepest reaches of it. Another policeman was waiting for Regal and the policewoman there. He silently handed the woman a package, mumbled something to her ear, and left.

The woman opened the package and took out its contents, showing them to Regal. "Dr. Regal, do you know what this is?"

Regal scrutinized the small object the woman was showing him. "It's a satellital tracking chip." He said without hesitation.

"Correct. Then I don't need to explain what I'm going to do with this."

A couple of minutes later, the woman had successfully introduced the chip in Dr. Regal's right wrist. She quickly wiped the tiny spouts of blood from his hand, and nodded. "This chip is connected to a secure satellite network with no direct link to the SciLabs network or the internet you know of. Wherever you go, a laboratory, a park, the shower, we'll know. And if you're somewhere out of bounds, Commander Barrel has ordered us to send you into jail, and let the judges decide how long you're staying there to rot. Am I clear?"

Dr. Regal nodded. This wasn't going to be an easy nor a very pleasing experience, but he decided to make of this a personal challenge. He was certain the crimes he commited warranted the treatment he was receiving, it didn't make things easier for him. Admittedly it was a good incentive to prove to everyone that he could repay his debt to society beyond their expectations.

"Alright," she spoke in a slightly more friendly tone. "Dr. Hikari is here to take you into SciLabs. Don't mess it up, Dr. Regal."

The black haired man suppressed an annoyed groan. "Rest assured I won't, miss. I am no fool."

As if he were summoned, Yuuichirou entered the room. The woman dismissed herself, and Regal stood up. No words were needed, and both scientists understood this.
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PostPosted: Sat Aug 13, 2005 11:46 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

...You're right, I do find the spelling errors and faulty grammar in there. XD

Anyway, nice job again. I would nitpick at some of the small details, but I'm too tired for that right now. The way you handle the story is excellent, and it ties up some loose ends from the game. Very good storytelling.

...and that's all I have to say right now. I'm too tired from other things today to pick your story apart piece by piece...

*coughyouspelledburgandywrongcough*

ETA: The nitpicky feeling has come back. =o
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He didn't like the idea on bit, but he understood, if he really commited such crimes, he didn't expect much mercy.Why was Dr. Hikari trying to help him to avoid the imprissionment? He sigherd and examinated the documents the other scientist handed to him, confirming what he was already told.


You typoed "one", and the sentence runs on in my opinion. Try and fix that by using a semi-colon after 'understood'. You also added one extra s to 'imprisionment' and typoed an r in sighed. Examinated isn't a word, so I assume you meant Examined.

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"Very well. I admit I don't have much choices, but I would like to atone for my crimes. Even if I don't remember them, I'd rather try to pay my debt to society in useful ways."


First off, it should be either 'any choice' or 'much choice'. I'm guessing that was a typo...

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"Alright then." Barrel nodded and glanced to Dr. Hikari. "We'll have to make the arranges, and you will have to present yourself to take the formal and legal responsibility over Dr. Regal."


Change 'arranges' to 'arrangements'.

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The brunette "If that hypothesis about Kokoro Network that you told Regal is true, he wouldn't be the only one affected by it. Everyone exposed to Kokoro Network would've had sequels like Regal's, unless somebody interfered with it to focus it in one person."


You missed a word after brunette. I'm guessing it was 'continued'...? And 'sequels'? Do you mean 'seizures'?

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Yuuichirou blinked a few times, confussed as to why the raven-haired man would ask him such a thing all of sudden. "Of course I would, which kind of father I'd be if I wouldn't?"


I'm assuming you meant "What kind of father I'd be..." You also have an extra s in confused.

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Regal decided he really didn't want to find out. He stood up to dress up in the garb that was handed to him. Just a few minutes after, he was completely dressed, and once more, he examinated his looks in the mirror.


The third sentence is running on. I would change it to:

Quote:
Just a few minutes afterwards, he was completely dressed. Once more, he examined his looks in the mirror.


I seperated the run-on sentence into two sentences, even if they feel a bit short.

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And if you're somewhere out of bounds, Commander Barrel has ordered to send you into jail and let the judges decide how long you're staying there to rot. Am I clear?"


You missed using the word 'been' before 'ordered'.

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Dr. Regal nodded. This wasn't going to be an easy nor a very pleasing experience, but he decided to make of this a personal challenge. He was certain the crimes he commited warrantied the treatment he was receiving, it didn't make things easier for him, but admittedly it was a good incentive to prove to everyone that he could repay his debt to society beyond their expectatives.


Warrantied should be warrented. That same sentence is also running on, so end that sentance after "it didn't make things easier for him", delete but and start the next sentence out with "Admittedly,". Also, expectatives should be expectations.

That should be it...Nice job anyway, though, you two.

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PostPosted: Sun Aug 14, 2005 12:17 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Okay, third one was my fault... <.< forgot to add the words after it. I fix that one. The been before ordered was also my fault, too. I'll fix those.

ETA: Fixed. \o\ My own misspellings, that is. Planty's getting to fix hers. Thanks for your input!
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PostPosted: Sun Aug 14, 2005 12:41 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Fixed the bits that were my doing, thanks for your input and your help to solve them.
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PostPosted: Sun Aug 14, 2005 12:44 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

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