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Darth Osiris Net Official
Joined: 04 Aug 2005 Posts: 351 Location: Where do you think?
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Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2005 6:27 pm Post subject: |
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Pretty good. Although the ending was nice, you could have made it a bit longer, and by that, I mean you should have told us if Netto eradicated his darkness. |
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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2005 7:28 pm Post subject: |
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What part of "I think it's better to leave it as an 'open ending' for anyone to decide wether Netto erradicated his dark side or not." was too hard to grasp? _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
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Darth Osiris Net Official
Joined: 04 Aug 2005 Posts: 351 Location: Where do you think?
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Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2005 7:59 pm Post subject: |
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Hey, I'm just stating my opinion. I, personally, think you should have made it longer, but if you don't want to, that's your right as the author. So excuse me for speaking my mind! |
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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2005 8:37 pm Post subject: |
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I wrote this fanfic for Sol after all, and I didn't want to take the decision of how the issue would end, since, after all he wanted to see this fanfic take 'a twist'. I wanted every single person that'd read this to determine if Netto would or wouldn't get rid of his dark side.
And drop the 'I'm so hurt because you don't let me speak my mind' act. You're entitled an opinion, but not to push it. It's not going to hurt you to try and decide if you think Netto would get rid of his dark side or not. _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
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Malik Local Prinny Deity
Age: 34 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1179
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Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2005 11:30 pm Post subject: |
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Plantman wrote: | I'm glad you liked it n.n/ |
Planty bad! Planty spam! Planty not setting good example for the kids! :<
Some writers can make whether you choose the ending good or bad. It does seem a little short, but this definately leaves a lot of open options. Netto defeats the darkness, Netto is defeated by the darkness, Netto and the darkness call a temporary truce for ice cream... _________________
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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Wed Aug 24, 2005 11:33 pm Post subject: |
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;o; Hush woman, or no Django for you!
Well, it's a bit short because I wanted to finish it before Sol would go to bed xDD and because I liked how it was coming this short. _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 12:01 am Post subject: |
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Malik's request, a crack fic for a crack fan. Keep in mind due the crack pairing I have in my hands I'm making up how Dark Blues is there as a separated entity from our Regular Blues, so, the canon will have to excuse me this time XP. I'm shamelessly borrowing Neko's idea of virtual houses for net navis, please don't kill me Neko!
I Hate to Love You
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There were things in the world of the virtual society of the Network that resembled the human society a bit too much. Having the behavior and need for interpersonal relationships of humans had to be one of them.
Dark Rockman was used to be under the orders of Dr. Regal, always ready to perform any action without hessitation. But there was a fine line that divided servitude for your master, and stand the demands and attitude of a crabby mate.
"Where the hell is that data?!" Dark Blues yelled from the bedroom area of the virtual home he shared with Dark Rockman. The sounds of objects and shelves flying around the room and landing on the ground filled the place.
Dark Rockman sighed softly as he continued to calmly arrange a set of digital books into the library shelfs. How could humans stand moving around with so many belongings many times? It was a boring task, but much better than stand around his mate and watch him yell about everything.
"Bah, I can't find it." Dark Blues huffed stalking into the living room, his lover could feel very well his bad mood.
"What are you looking for, darling?" Dark Rockman asked in a sugary voice he knew would annoy Dark Blues even more. Sometimes he wondered what he was thinking when he asked Regal to make him a companion.
"The data of my decorative swords!" The gray haired navi barked, trying to make his displeasure even more evident.
Dark Rockman sighed heavily and set the digital books down on a sofa and took his mate's hand. "Is it that hard to just ask me to get them for you?" The purple clad navi asked on a slightly irritated tone but tried to remain calm.
"I thought if I yelled you'd get the hint."
"Whatever." The shorter navi sighed and helped his mate to unpack his beloved decorative swords. "Sometimes, I think you love these more than you love me." He said as he poked the capsule of data that spread into a set of swords to hang on the walls.
"Want me to be honest?" Dark Blues teased.
"Oh, you bastard!" The purple clad navi growled and used the swords as a baseball bat, swinging them right to Dark Blues' head. A curse erupted from the other's lips as he was sent flying across the room and right into the wall.
The red navi growled loudly and sat up, rubbing his head. "Okay, that's it!" Without warning, he jumped towards Dark Rockman, tackling him into the ground. "What is your damn problem?!"
"You are my problem." The shorter one replied calmly as he struggled and managed to turn around, raising his hands as if he was trying to hit the other navi, "You never appreciate what I do! Without me around here nothing would get done!" It was unusual for Dark Rockman to raise his voice and yell this much, but his lover managed to bring this behavior to the surfice quite often.
Dark Blues caugh both of his mate's wrists, struggling to regain their previous position and pin the other down, "Oh come on! It was a joke!" He manged to dodge the smaller one's attempt for a kick, and straddled the other's legs so he couldn't move them.
"Your jokes aren't funny." Dark Rockman kept struggling, managing to sweep the taller navi and regain the upper hand for a bit. Their struggle quickly made them roll around in an effort to keep control of one another.
None of them noticed when a screen opened on the room, displaying Dr. Regal's face. He opened his mouth to say something, but he was cut off by the struggling navis. He remained silent, watching the two navis fight and yell at each other.
"Stop being a cry baby!" Dark Blues growled as he tried to keep Dark Rockman pinned to the ground.
"Stop yelling at me, I'm not deaf!" The purple navi replied, frowning and struggling.
"You're yelling too!" The taller one replied.
"That's because you're too loud, moron!" Dark Rockman growled back.
"Are you done yet?"
Both navis froze and looked at each other before turning their heads to look at the screen. If Dr. Regal was in the least disturbed by the scene, he was hidding it very well.
"Thanks for reminding me why I'm not married," The black haired man coughed and looked away for a moment before casting a side glance back to them. "I need you two to carry on with a special task."
"Yes, Dr. Regal." Both replied, without moving an inch from their current... compromising position. Dr. Regal explained their orders to them and closed the comunication, leaving both navis alone once more.
"Get off me." Dark Rockman demanded softly, almost boredly.
"Aw, Are you upset?" Dark Blues grinned and leaned forward to brush his nose against his mate's.
"You're an idiot." The smaller navi turned his head away, his expression was that of boredom.
"You can't take a joke, I see." The red navi smiled and released his lover's arms.
Dark Rockman turned his head to face Dark Blues, frowning deeply, "I hate you."
The long haired navi chuckled and smiled playfuly to the other, "I hate you, too."
Dark Rockman returned the playful smile and wrapped his arms around the other's neck, pulling him closer to rub his nose back with his. "Umh... I hate to love you." He said softly.
"You're the one that asked for me to be created." Dark Blues replied just as softly.
"I know. But I still hate you." Dark Rockman grinned, pulling his mate closer for a rough, yet loving kiss. "Get off me, we have work to do."
"You're not fun." The taller navi pouted and stood up, helping the purple navi up.
"Bite me, Honey."
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You'll have to excuse the probably massively out of characterness of this fanfic XDD and Sorry it's short Malik! _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
"Logic is the Ultimate Weapon."
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Sol Fanfic Guru
Age: 37 Joined: 02 Aug 2005 Posts: 685 Location: Where all the badfics roam
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 12:06 am Post subject: |
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*snicker*
Only you could take two homicidal Navis and turn them into a typical bickering married couple, Planty. XD
Nice job. _________________
<3 Planty~
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N2-0 Night Gnihtemos od thgim I...
Joined: 17 Mar 2005 Posts: 992
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 12:15 am Post subject: |
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This is nice. No, really, it is. You and Neko come up with really interesting ideas. It's fun reading some of them, over and over again. _________________ My deviantART... |
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kuro-kitsune Net Agent
Joined: 26 Jul 2005 Posts: 268 Location: raincover, on the wet coast
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 12:26 am Post subject: |
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.... give me a moment... *bursts out laughing*
(5 minutes later)
ooookay.... ZOMG!! the crack, omg the crack!! i absolutely love it! and somehow, i can see that happening.... *imagines devil roll coming in* O_o that is just wrong........... *shudder*
^_^ keep writing, planty-sa~n!!!
~kuro-kitsune~ |
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Kitty-Chan Net Police
Joined: 08 Jul 2005 Posts: 438 Location: Massillon, Ohio, USA
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 4:07 am Post subject: |
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*cackles* Now that's funny. We need more of this; "The Adventures of Dark Blues & Dark Rockman"! *falls over laughing* _________________ Need more Zero/X, Netto/Rock, Rock/Netto, Forte/Netto, & Blues/Netto. PLEASE!
Ano sa...could someone please make me a Zero/X, Blues/Netto, or Forte/Netto avatar/banner? I would greatly appreciate it...
Thanks for the avatar, Mandi!
People! We need more Blues/Netto & Forte/Netto on the net. Come on; help me out here! *gives everyone her Super-Adorable Irrisistable Sad Kitty Eyes(TM)* |
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Haly K Cross Fusion!
Age: 32 Joined: 18 Jun 2005 Posts: 1022 Location: Somewhere, practicing with Flash animation
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 6:44 am Post subject: |
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Wait, first Sol requested, then me, then Kitty-Chan( But I guess that was canceled...), then Malik...... Was I forgotten or was my request ignored? :O _________________ MegaMan Kilobit
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Midnight This is a Hilbert Space
Age: 37 Joined: 18 Mar 2005 Posts: 3089 Location: The AfterMath. Otherwise, New York City.
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 11:39 am Post subject: |
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I don't know what to say. This is one of the most unlikely pairings in that multiverse, and possibly the last one that would have popped into my head, but for some reason, I liked this story. As Sol has said, only you and Neko could take one of themost random pairings imaginable and make it a fine read. Thank you. _________________ Today, these three players are after Big Bucks! But they'll have to avoid the Whammy, as they play the most exciting game of their lives! From Television City in Hollywood! It's time to 'Press Your Luck!'--Rod Roddy
The Kingdom of Loathing: An Adventurer is You! // I ♣ Seals
Avatar by Spork. I very much appreciate it! <3 |
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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 1:43 pm Post subject: |
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Haly K wrote: | Wait, first Sol requested, then me, then Kitty-Chan( But I guess that was canceled...), then Malik...... Was I forgotten or was my request ignored? :O |
Hummm.... let's see, didn't you request the exact same couple to, Darth, and Neko already? I swear I didn't highlight my rules in yellow text just so they'd look pretty.
4.- This is a very important rule for me. Whatever you want to request from me, please try not to have it requested to some other author already very recently, for me it's a bit difficult to cope with having sometimes similar outtakes of one topic as other authors and then fight with myself to make the fanfic 'different'.
Yes, you can request the same things you've requested to other authors recently, but try to understand I might delay your fanfic for a while until I get an Idea.
I clearly stated it on the title of the topic. READ the rules careful BEFORE requesting. I didn't ignore your request, I'm delaying it until I get an idea for it. Sorry but I already explained why I am doing this and Nazne has previously reprimended someone for the same reasons. _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
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Neko Queen of Fluff
Joined: 15 Mar 2005 Posts: 1217 Location: The computer
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 4:55 pm Post subject: |
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You made me laugh~
Oh Planty, I love you so much. Even on the suckiest possible day I could possibly have you managed to make me smile. Great fics :3 _________________ Roses are #FF0000, violets are #0000FF. All my base are belong to you.
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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 4:59 pm Post subject: |
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No problem Neko, I'm glad you liked them. \o/ _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
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Haly K Cross Fusion!
Age: 32 Joined: 18 Jun 2005 Posts: 1022 Location: Somewhere, practicing with Flash animation
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 5:52 pm Post subject: |
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Actually, I request that to Neko before I remebered that I made that same request earlier in your old thread. Honest! As for Darth, I request a one-shot about how the WWW moved over to Jawaii, and he put in the fluff in there anyway. ( Even though that wasn't my original intention... -_-; ) *rereads rules* Oh, I'm so sorry! I'm impatient, very sorry Plantman-sama...... Wait, should it be sama, san, sempai, or chan?? _________________ MegaMan Kilobit
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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 5:59 pm Post subject: |
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Haly K wrote: | *rereads rules* Oh, I'm so sorry! I'm impatient, very sorry Plantman-sama...... Wait, should it be sama, san, sempai, or chan?? |
What about neither? Just call me Plant, seriously I'm far from being a 'sama' nor a 'sempai' and chan and san are really unnecesary. Just call me Plant or Plantman if you want. _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
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HubHikari Net Savior
Age: 43 Joined: 02 Apr 2005 Posts: 151 Location: In Nettos Pet or on The Net
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 8:22 pm Post subject: |
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Its been a very long time since I requested somthing (back before the forums were hacked) so Here is my request.
(double checks the rules to make sure every thing is legit.)
How about Enzan has to go to a meeting for a day and can't take blues with him because of the equipment thats there messes with navi data so Enzan lets Blues stay with netto and rockman for a day instead of staying home all day?
Would you write how that day went starting with Enzan dropping him off that morning up until enzan picks him up that night you can make it a fun day or a virus attack day or any kind of day you prefer though a fun day off type of day would be good.
Sounds lame I know I hope this isn't to much trouble.
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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Thu Aug 25, 2005 9:58 pm Post subject: |
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I'll see what I can do about it, I might take me a while because I'd probably need to think of what they'd do on that day. But sure, I'm taking on your request. _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
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