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PostPosted: Mon Aug 29, 2005 2:00 pm    Post subject: Present meet Past Reply with quote

This is my first Megaman/Rockman.EXE fic. I’m writing here and first time I used the Japan version names. So if I use them in the wrong way. Sorry! Anyways I don’t own Megaman or any character except some.

Rated: PG



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Present meet Past

Chapter 1

We meet Dr. Hikari and a very unusual guest Mr. Ijuin in SciLab.

“Almost done, Mr. Ijuin.” yawned Dr. Hikari.

Dr. Hikari typed in the last remaining codes and sighed which turn out to be more of a yawn.

“Are you sure it’s going to work Hikari?” said Mr. Ijuin with a frown.

“Yup… finally *yawn* our friends be back. Right?” said Dr. Hikari rubbing his eyes.

Business helpers not friends, Dr. Hikari my company doesn’t have friends.” said Mr. Ijuin hissing the last part.

“Just like your father.” said Dr. Hikari under his breath.

Before Mr. Ijuin could reply a beep came from the computer.

“The Net Navi are ready to be downloaded Dr. Hikari.” said the computer.

“*Yawn* we’ll download them tomorrow. OK with you Mr. Ijuin?” said Dr. Hikari.

“Whatever Hikari and I’ll send my son to get him.” said Mr. Ijuin.

“Fine with me Blues has a new ‘Business helper’ he needs to meet anyways.” mocked Dr. Hikari.

“Very funny Hikari” said Mr. Ijuin but smirking this time.

***

Netto rolled over in his sleep.

“Where am I?” said Netto.

Suddenly a creature of some sort coming towards him.

“Atomman block!” yelled a voice.

Netto turn around to see…


“GOOD MORNING NETTO-KUN!!!” yelled Rockman form the P.E.T.

Netto jump off his bed and landed right on the floor with a moan.

“ROCKMAN STOP SCARING ME!” yelled Netto getting off the floor.

“Hehe… sorry Netto-kun but your going---” said Rockman but got cut off by Netto yelling.

“LATE!” said Netto grabbing his clothes.

***

Mrs. Hikari was humming a song to herself when she saw her son come down stairs.

“Morning Honey” said Mrs. Hikari in extremely happy tone.

“MORNING, BYE, MOM!” yelled Netto grabbing a piece of toast and running out the door.

***
In the Ijuin Company Enzan was filing some files when a knock came form the door.

“What?” asked Enzan coldly.

Mr. Ijuin opened the door and stepped in quietly.

“Go to Dr. Hikari Lab and get something there for me.” Replied Mr. Ijuin with a cold tone, too.

Enzan didn’t even look up but made a small nod.

“Good” said Mr. Ijuin and with that left.

“One day I have to stand up to that Hag.” said Enzan.

“Enzan-sama you have some free time now. Do you want to go now?” said Blues.

“Yes Blues” said Enzan with a small smile.

Before Blues logged out he smiled back and said “If only the Company was willing to back you up on that, sir.”

Enzan got up and went straight out the door.

***
“Something weird just happened. Just yesterday they said were done but now it says here that they’re not done.” thought Dr. Hikari frowning.

Dr. Hikari typed in some more words and then got up. Before he turned around someone touched his shoulder.

“Well, good morning Enzan-kun.” said Dr. Hikari smiling.

“Morning Dr. Hikari” replied Enzan with a smile, too.

“Oh and morning to you too Blues-kun.” said Dr. Hikari.

“Morning Hikari-sama” said Blues.

“We’re here for something for my H---I mean Dad.” said Enzan hissing the last word.

“Oh well about that… well it was supposed to be done today but it’s not.” said Dr. Hikari scratching his chin.

“Can Blues and me check it out for you, Dr. Hikari.” said Enzan.

“It will help a lot. Thank you.” said Dr. Hikari.

“Jack in Blues.EXE! Power up!” said Enzan.

A red light logged into the computer, and Blue started working quickly.

“What does my Dad want anyways?” asked Enzan.

“His old Net Navi” said Dr. Hikari with a sad tone.

Before Enzan could reply a big explosion came form the computer.

“Blues!” yelled Enzan into his P.E.T.

“I’m fine Enzan-sama but whatever Hikari-sama’s project was, there is something coming out of it.” said Blues backing away.

“What?” said Dr. Hikari and his eye widened.

Yes there was something in there but not what Dr. Hikari wanted. There stood two very large creatures. One looked like a bat and the other a tiger.

“Who are youuuu?” hissed the tiger like creature.

“IT TALKS?” yelled Enzan.

Dr. Hikari just stood there dumbfound.

“How could they be alive??!!!!!!! I just want my Net Navi back.” thought Dr. Hikari.

Before Enzan or Dr. Hikari new what happened Blues logged out.

“BLUES?!” yelled Enzan.

Just then Netto came.

“Dad, Mariko-sensei wants to talk you again.” said Netto not bothering to look up.

“Netto don’t move.” Said Dr. Hikari but to his horror he said it too late.

Netto moved one step forward and BANG! A big light came out of the creatures.

“NETTO-KUN!” yelled Rockman but it was too late…he was gone.

***
Netto opened his eyes and stood up quickly. Looking around his surroundings, he gasped.

“How did I get into the park?” thought Netto.

Netto knew just one place to go… home.

[color=darkblue]To be continued…[/color]


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[color=orange]@uther note: How was it? Oh can I ask you guys a question. Am I supposed to put ‘-san’ in the back of Dr. Hikari and Mr. Ijuin instead of Mr. or Dr. :?

Thanks for reading! Bye! :]
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 30, 2005 8:04 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

This isn't too bad for your first Rockman.exe fic. Also, if you're going to use the japanese names, yes you would use -san on the end of the the last names.

-san is for Mr or Mrs. An example would be Ijuiin-san. Then for Dr Hikari, you would use Hikari-hakase.
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PostPosted: Tue Aug 30, 2005 11:08 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I'm a bit confused, to tell you the truth. This is a decent first try at a fic, but a lot of the story seems to be too shallow and underdeveloped. A lot of it seems to be moving along too fast, and it seems that the speech is unclear at times. The spelling errors also make it a it harder to understand what is going on, but other than that, it seems to be a fine first attempt.
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