Battle Network EXE (My First/New Comic)

AdeptZero

This is my first time making a comic so yea... Tell me wat you ppl think afterwards.

Chapter 1- Introduction

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**Sketch** · Posted: Wed Mar 16, 2005 1:00 pm Post subject:

In accordance with the forum rules, you are no longer permitted to post more than the first in a series of comics in the Fanart section or here. You can say you're starting a comic, but you can't continually update it in this thread.

Just so you know. Smile

AdeptZero · Posted: Wed Mar 16, 2005 1:13 pm Post subject:

o ok... I'm sry! But then how can i update it properly?
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**Sketch** · Posted: Wed Mar 16, 2005 1:14 pm Post subject:

You may place a link to your comic in your signature.

AdeptZero · Posted: Wed Mar 16, 2005 1:15 pm Post subject:

o ok...
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AdeptZero · Posted: Wed Mar 16, 2005 1:17 pm Post subject:

Suraa.Exe · Posted: Wed Mar 16, 2005 7:04 pm Post subject:

It looks good, both the link and the comic
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**Sketch** · Posted: Wed Mar 16, 2005 7:11 pm Post subject:

Rockman, yes, that's fine, but there was no need to double post. --

AdeptZero · Posted: Fri Mar 18, 2005 12:19 pm Post subject:

k! I've added scenes up to Scene 38. So check it out ppl. Please comment on how i should improve and tell me what u think! Its my first time making a comic!
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AdeptZero · Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2005 8:16 pm Post subject:

k i guess this topic is quite dead... Anyways (My last attempt to try to get ppl to view my comic) i added scenes up to 50. I would really appericate if ppl could read it and post some comments and suggestions. Thnxs!
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blazequest · Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2005 10:23 pm Post subject:

The sprites are good, but I find it weird that you are using BN1-3 sprites for the adults and 4-5 sprites for the kids. It makes sense because it brings attention the the height difference. The other effects are ok. The pixilating Searchman was effective, even though it seemed kinda primitive. (Looked like it was done in paint)

The dialogue is kinda weak. It could use fine tweaking. It's not bad, but it seems unnatural. The plot seems fairly good though. At least you know where your going.

Good job. Keep up the good work.
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AdeptZero · Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2005 10:56 pm Post subject:

k thnxs! Somebody commented! k! I think i know wat to do next. Its my first time so its kinda chessy! Laughing

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kirbycuzin · Posted: Mon Mar 21, 2005 11:49 pm Post subject:

It's a good start, but why is one chp a little piece.
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Valtz · Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2005 12:01 pm Post subject:

Ok I don't like this comic very much. The one thing that bugs me the most is that it's a whole bunch of one pannel comics. It get's really annoying to click, read a pannel, click back, and repeat

kirbycuzin · Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2005 12:25 pm Post subject:

Yeah, so could you make them bigger pannels?
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Valtz · Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2005 2:58 pm Post subject:

Or make them more than one pannel per comic. Maybe 4 or something like that

**Core** · Posted: Tue Mar 22, 2005 6:22 pm Post subject:

Okie, think thread has gone on long enough. For more tips and suggestions you all can use PM or try using ye old timie IM's. Lockies for the threadorz! =o

*edit 25-3-05*
New rule added.

11.a. You are allowed to post the first page or issue of your comic and then a link to the site that you is hosting your comic in the thread. Further advertizing of a comic can only be done in your signature.
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