Megaman Nt Warrior: Code Lan a Code Lyoko/Megaman Fic Pg 13

Bassman4566 · Last edited by Bassman4566 on Wed Sep 21, 2005 2:27 pm; edited 2 times in total

My new fic I don’t know what I’m doing so lets start

It was a peaceful day in DenTech City And Lan & friends just got out of school.
When all of a sudden a Dimensional Area appeared in the part of the park where Lan and his friend were.
“Oh no not now” Lan said furiously. Then Sparkman, Bubbleman, and Novaman appeared.
“Look its Lan Hikari and his loser friends” Novaman said with a evil grin on his face
“Your going to regret that Ready Megaman?” Lan asked
“Always” was his reply.
“Synchro Chip in download CROSS FUSION!” Lan and Megaman said together
Then Novaman just did something that Lan wouldn't know
“Transport Nova” He said.
“What going on???” Lan asked.
Then the Dimensional Area faded along with Lan
“LAAAAAAAAAAAANNN” Maylu screamed.
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Lan found him self in desert but it was around wires and a tower
‘Where am I’ Lan thought Then he saw four kids right there coming in his direction.
“uhhh my head” Lan said before getting up.
“Who are you” said one of them
“Iiiii’mmm Llllaaannn” Lan said nervously he never did like so much attention.
“Hi Lan this is Yumi, Odd, Aelita and I’m Ulrich”
“Uhh Hi”
“Hi yourself guys this could be a trap from Z.A.N.A” A voice from know where came.
“What were did that come from???” Lan asked
“Never mind that Z.A.N.A” Ulrich said pulling out his sword.
“What who’s Z.A.N.A” Lan asked
“You really don’t know do you?” Yumi asked getting close to him.
“Yumi stay back it could be a trap” Ulrich said
“I trust him Ulrich” she said
Lan started to move back because he never had girl besides Maylu and Yai this close to him and also he blushed.
“Its ok I won’t hurt you” said Yumi
Lan started to move forward but then moved back again because he was scared because he didn’t know these people.
Lan saw the tower again and ran towards it
“Wait” Yumi said but Lan already entered the tower
“Wow that was cool” Lan said then he walked to the center and started floating up and stop midway.
Then the voice from nowhere said “Code Earth!”
Then the programs started to go around Lan and he disappeared.
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The next thing Lan knew he was in a tube and saw a boy about his age standing in front of him.
“Welcome back to earth Lan” he said
“That voice you’re the voice from nowhere!” Lan beamed
“Yes my name is Jeremie” he said
“Hi” Lan said when all of a sudden Yumi, Odd, and Ulrich came out of Lyoko
“Jeremie all you all right?” Odd said
“Stay away from him” Ulrich said ready to fight.
“Ulrich calm down he is on our side”
Then Aelita devirtualized
“Jeremie are you all right” she said
Lan was getting confused first he was in that weird place then all of a sudden here he was back on earth.
“Whe..where am I”
“Your in France Lan” Yumi said slowly
“FRANCE!!!” Lan screamed very loudly.
Lan looked at the floor he was far away from Maylu, Yai, and his two brothers Chaud and Raika (If you read a whole new life you know Chaud is already Lan’s brother Raika will come in later).
Ulrich and Yumi grabbed one arm of Lan and helped him up and got him out of there before anything else could happen.
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Meanwhile back in Japan.

“Can you find him?” Chaud asked
“I’m sorry his P.E.T is out of range sir“ said the scientist.
“Lan….. we will find away to get to him start searching” Chaud said forcefully.
“Yes Sir” They all said.
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In Cadet Junior High’s principal’s office at 12:00 pm
“So Lan until your brothers come to pick you up you will stay here at our humble school and Yumi and her friends will help you is that all right?” The principal asked.
Lan just nodded
“So you will stay here in a dorm as well I will provide you with food, shelter, clothing, and education” he said.
After that Lan and Yumi left the principal’s office.
Lan was looking down so Yumi pulled him closer to her and said
“Its ok you will see them again”. Lan just did the only thing he could think of cry.
After settling in Lan thought about what Megaman was thinking.
“Megaman???” Lan got no response
“Ohhhh no Megaman I left him back at that factory”
“Who???” Yumi asked but Lan didn’t here her
“I got to go back” Lan said and Lan ran towards the factory.

Blue Bommer · Posted: Wed Sep 21, 2005 12:45 pm Post subject:

I do like code Lyoko, so this is a good story. However, it was a tad small, and a bit rushed. You had no detail. Lan should have wandered a bit more. Sorry if you take this the wrong way.
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Bassman4566 · Posted: Wed Sep 21, 2005 1:02 pm Post subject:

No its ok I was going to add more but I got tired and had a huge headache

Hikari no Namida · Posted: Wed Sep 21, 2005 1:09 pm Post subject:

This is an interesting idea. But I agree with Blue Bommer on the fact you definately need more detail. Try using more interesting words than just "said".

Instead of,

Bassman4566 · Posted: Wed Sep 28, 2005 8:25 pm Post subject:

At the factory’s scanner room while Megaman was waiting for Lan he decide to try and contact one of his friends back in Japan. After ten unsuccessful tries he gave up and wait for Lan.
“Lan wait up” Yumi screamed but Lan couldn’t hear her all he could do is run.
Yumi eventually lost sight of him but knew where he was going.
Sometime later Lan arrived at the factory and got in the elevator and rode it but he forget the room where Megaman was so he rode it to the supercalculator room.
“Wh…what’s th…this” he said shocked. Lan sat in the chair and went to the computer
“Whoa this is awesome” He replied. Lan accidentally activated the Lyoko tower scanner and found an activated tower. “What is this” he pondered. Yumi was in the scanner room and found Lan’s P.E.T.
“Who are you” Megaman asked Yumi was shocked
“I…I…I’m Yumi who are you”
“The name is Megaman” he replied
Then Yumi dropped the P.E.T on the ground.
“What are you doing” Megaman asked. Then Yumi was in the scanner
“What this” Then Lan saw the scanner show Yumi
“Yumi???” Lan asked in confusion then Yumi was in Lyoko
“Lan what are you doing” she asked in annoyed tone.
“I don’t know I just came into this room and found this and something said an activated tower in the mountain region” Lan said very hurt after Yumi‘s harsh tone.
“Ok call Odd, Ulrich, and Aelita right now oh and Jeremie” Yumi ordered.
“Okay okay” Lan replied. After much calling, talking running and finally arriving at the factory they went into the scanners while Jeremie went into the supercalculator
“Yumi you have 50 life points left” Lan screamed very scared.
“Lan scan Aelita, Odd, and Ulrich now” Jeremie screamed from the scanner room.
“Okay Jeremie and get Megaman while your down there” Lan shouted.
“Megaman?” Jeremie asked in confusion
“Over here” said a voice Jeremie didn’t recognized and picked up the device on the floor
“Oookayyy” Jeremie said astonishly.
“Scanner Odd ,Ulrich, Aelita Virtualization” Lan said
Yumi was happy to see them
“Hey guys over here” Yumi said waving
“Hey Yumi what’s Z.A.N.A’s attack”
“I don’t know” Yumi
What the Z.A.N.A attack find out next time
Sorry its short much I could do on short notice