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DarkMega Net Savior
Joined: 29 Jun 2005 Posts: 146 Location: Most vacant part of the Net- the Midwest!
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Posted: Tue Sep 20, 2005 7:52 pm Post subject: |
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The angst, the ANGST! I'm loving this! Keep it up- this fanfic's great!
Ahhh, Dark Rockman... *is bricked* _________________
Justice has many faces, but this one just happens to be hilarious.
Thanks for the siggy, Hikari Angel!
"I'm having amnesia and deja vu at the same time. I think I've forgotten this before."
"He who thinks by the inch and talks by the yard deserves to be kicked by the foot."
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Kitty-Chan Net Police
Joined: 08 Jul 2005 Posts: 438 Location: Massillon, Ohio, USA
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Posted: Tue Sep 20, 2005 8:35 pm Post subject: |
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I love angst; the darker, the better. I can't wait for the next part. ^_^ _________________ Need more Zero/X, Netto/Rock, Rock/Netto, Forte/Netto, & Blues/Netto. PLEASE!
Ano sa...could someone please make me a Zero/X, Blues/Netto, or Forte/Netto avatar/banner? I would greatly appreciate it...
Thanks for the avatar, Mandi!
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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Tue Sep 27, 2005 4:26 pm Post subject: |
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>_> Weee, because Sol and Neko wanted to see the pure and uter ebilness I can reach~
Chapter 4 - Breaking
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Dark Rockman smiled lightly as he played with a bundle of purple fabric he held in his hands as he looked back up to the chair where Netto continued to endure his 'treatment'. The Dark navi decided it had been enough, and stood up, approaching the chair and pressing different hidden keys within the helmet, carefully removing it from the boy's head. He couldn't help but grin widely at the look of terror and attonishment in the boy's face. Netto was in a state between conciousness and unconciousness.
"Netto-kun?..." He asked softly, as he changed his expression to a soft and kind one, shaking the boy gently to bring him back to his senses.
Netto closed his eyes and opened just one, his left eye seemingly deeply hurt by the helmet. He blinked his eye a few times, looking up into a familiar face, "R-Rockman?..."
"Yes, Netto-kun. Are you alright?" Dark Rockman managed to suppress a grin.
"I-I don't kno-- aahh!" Suddenly, Netto began to shake uncontrolably, flashes of the images displayed before him kept intruding in his mind. He held his hands to his face, screaming and whimpering, almost digging his fingers into his tender flesh.
Dark Rockman held the boy's arms by his wrists firmly but without hurting him, "Calm down, Netto-kun!"
"M-Make it stop! R-Rockman!" Netto's expression changed quickly, his open eye suddenly adquired a hallow look, his control, his sanity quickly departing from him. "Rockman!"
The navi held the boy close, gently petting his head, trying to ease the other's condition. After a few more minutes passed, Netto calmed down somewhat, still trembling and with a look of insanity still firmly attached to his eye. "Rockman w-why?..." He asked in a shaking voice.
"Humans can be so horrible, Netto-kun... But we can change that." Dark Rockman smiled gently to the boy, combing his hair in a soothing motion, "Help me, Netto-kun. Help me to change the world."
Netto nodded, he had no idea what he was agreeing to, all he knew is he trusted his navi, in his warped mind, Rockman was the light that would purge the world of its wrongs, and he was more than willing to be the instrument for him to bring justice to the world.
"Here, let's get you changed into your clothes now." Dark Rockman smiled and helped Netto up, guiding him to a bundle of purple clothing that laid in the ground, a purple PET rested next to it.
Netto managed to dress up, the outfit resembled what his father would wear in SciLabs for the most part, a purple coat and a pair of black gloves completed his outfit. Over his chest, right atop his heart in the coat and the shirt rested the blue crest of Dark Rockman.
Dark Rockman gave something to Netto, what seemed like a deck of chips for his use, before liking into the purple PET, "We have work to do, Netto-kun."
Netto nodded, placing an earphone with a small microphone attached to it in his ear as he began to walk away from the room, with Dark Rockman's PET secured in his belt.
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Yes, I know the whole 'Dark Rockman in PET' happened in Neko's fic, in case you've not been following, I'm writing this for her and Sol. XP _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
"Logic is the Ultimate Weapon."
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Sol Fanfic Guru
Age: 37 Joined: 02 Aug 2005 Posts: 685 Location: Where all the badfics roam
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Posted: Tue Sep 27, 2005 4:28 pm Post subject: |
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Whoo, very nice. And I like the new clothing that Dark Rockman picked out for Netto.
A prelude for things to come...you rock, Planty. _________________
<3 Planty~
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Neko Queen of Fluff
Joined: 15 Mar 2005 Posts: 1217 Location: The computer
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Posted: Tue Sep 27, 2005 4:32 pm Post subject: |
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Yay~ references to "Into the Darkness" GO PLANTY~
You totally rock my world :DDDD \o/ _________________ Roses are #FF0000, violets are #0000FF. All my base are belong to you.
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SamBarry Net Savior
Joined: 17 Mar 2005 Posts: 194 Location: In the nothing, creating another heaven and earth.
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Posted: Tue Sep 27, 2005 6:49 pm Post subject: |
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Story is good. Only problem I have is that the chapters are too short. I get the mental equivelent of being in a car that's constantly starting and stopping, starting and stopping. Could you make the chapters a little longer? I look forward to more. _________________ Please comment about my work. I don't care what you say. Like my art? Hate my art? Wanna express feelings of undying love to me? Wanna express your intent to murder me in my sleep? Comment. |
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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Tue Sep 27, 2005 7:15 pm Post subject: |
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Not really, I like my chapters short. I have the bad habit of delaying things too much if I make them longer XP _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
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sugoi sukafu
Joined: 09 Sep 2005 Posts: 34 Location: Anime room, playing Smash Bros!
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Posted: Wed Sep 28, 2005 12:35 am Post subject: |
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Must draw evil Netto.*cackle* And include what you just know is going to happen. Great story so far, I can't wait untill the next chapter. I wonder if/how Netto is going to return to Rockman, but the journey is half the fun, isn't it? :] _________________ Fear the scarf! It's a mite peckish at the moment... |
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Midnight This is a Hilbert Space
Age: 37 Joined: 18 Mar 2005 Posts: 3089 Location: The AfterMath. Otherwise, New York City.
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Posted: Wed Sep 28, 2005 5:35 am Post subject: |
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Agreed.
I know you like fairly short chapters, but this one seemed a tad shorter than the rest. Nevertheless, it's still of the same qualiity as the previous chapters. As much as the entire concept of mind control has been used in many other pieces of fiction, I can't help but feel that this take is unique.
This should be good, and yes, this is quite an evil depth that you have descended Netto into. Good job. _________________ Today, these three players are after Big Bucks! But they'll have to avoid the Whammy, as they play the most exciting game of their lives! From Television City in Hollywood! It's time to 'Press Your Luck!'--Rod Roddy
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Kitty-Chan Net Police
Joined: 08 Jul 2005 Posts: 438 Location: Massillon, Ohio, USA
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Posted: Wed Sep 28, 2005 4:19 pm Post subject: |
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Dark is good. This is shaping up to be quite the entrancing read. _________________ Need more Zero/X, Netto/Rock, Rock/Netto, Forte/Netto, & Blues/Netto. PLEASE!
Ano sa...could someone please make me a Zero/X, Blues/Netto, or Forte/Netto avatar/banner? I would greatly appreciate it...
Thanks for the avatar, Mandi!
People! We need more Blues/Netto & Forte/Netto on the net. Come on; help me out here! *gives everyone her Super-Adorable Irrisistable Sad Kitty Eyes(TM)* |
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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Fri Oct 14, 2005 9:09 pm Post subject: |
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Falling Down
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"Laika, Sir. There's a report of an attack to the Trinity Corporation Offices!" Searchman reported urgently.
"Do we know anything about the attacker?" Laika rushed out of the Net Savior's Headquarters, climbing into a motorcicle and securing a helmet on his head.
"The reports claim is a boy, sir. But no proper identification has been made so far."
Laika frowned, a slight nervious feeling nested in his stomach at the mention of the 'boy'. He felt something very wrong was going to happen, but he wasn't sure what would it be, nor why he was feeling in such way.
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"This is turning out to be far too easy." Dark Rockman muttered as he dispossed of the remaining security navis that blocked his way off a his objective; the virtual vault.
"What are we looking for, Rockman?" Netto asked impatiently as he rested his head in his arm, having taken over the control room of the building.
"What we're looking for, Netto-kun, is to attract our enemies. This data is very valuable. It has the ability to improve the performance of any program. I believe IPC intended to purchase it in an auction next week." Dark Rockman played with the container of the data, looking at it without much interest.
"IPC?" Netto asked, the name seemed familiar, yet, he couldn't quite remember why.
Dark Rockman smiled kindly and looked back up to his operator through the screen, "Enzan Iijuin's company, Netto-kun. He's your rival net-battler. He hates you so much for being able to perform Cross Fusion without any prior training, being the first human to perform it successfuly."
"He... He does?" Netto asked confussedly, flashes of memories flowing through his mind, events from the past battles against Enzan danced in his warped mind.
"Yes, Netto-kun. He and his friends are the ones that hurted you."
Netto nodded, whimpering softly as more warped memories flashed through his mind. The memories of a pompous and harsh Enzan surficed in his mind, convincing the boy of the truth of his navis words and triggering another violent reaction.
Dark Rockman watched as Netto braced himself, shaking violently between giggles. "Netto-kun, are you alright?"
"Y-Yesss..." Netto hissed in response, grinning madly as the spasm wore off, "Think Enzan will come over?" he asked with a playful hint in his voice.
The Dark navi smiled gently, "Oh, I am counting on that, Netto-kun." He snapped his fingers, several dimensional converters erupted from the ground at his command, enveloping the surroundings of the building in a dimensional area.
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"Laika!" Enzan called as he ran into the scene, carrying his and Rockman's PETs in his hands. Managing by chance to cross into the field contained by the dimensional area before it locked in the ground.
"A dimensional area. The reports said the attacker was a boy, but... how could he have access to dimensional areas?" Laika asked as he redied his Synchro Chip.
"I don't know, and I have an ill feeling from all this." Enzan admitted, looking around for possible signals of their attacker as he pulled his own Synchro Chip.
"Took you long enough to get here. I thought I'd have to begin to hurt random 'innocents' to get your attention." A familiar voice interrupted them. A purple clad figure materialized at the top of the building.
"Dark Rockman!" Rockman gasped, unable to see his foe, but recognizing his twin voice.
Laika and Enzan nodded to each other, quickly performing Cross Fusion. Rockman's PET resting in Enzan's hand.
"Very well, shall we commence the fun?" Dark Rockman smiled and linked out, leaving the two net saviors dumbfounded.
"What is he up to?!" Laika growled as he redied his riffle, looking around for any surpise attack.
"Synchro Chip Slot-in!..." A voice echoed in the emptyness of the dimensional area, sending a shiver through Enzan's and Laika's spines as they recognized that voice, "Cross Fusion!"
"Netto!" The net saviors gasped in horror as they saw a silouette being engulfed by light and quickly jump towards them. Netto landed gracefully in the ground before his former comrades, clad in a purple version of his own Cross Fusion uniform with noticeable variations in his helmet, boots and gloves that now sported clawed tips.
"Netto-kun! Netto-kun!!" Rockman called desperatly, being able to watch the action that unfolded before him. "Netto-kun!!" He called again, his cries falling into deaf ears, as if Netto was unable to hear anything coming from him.
Netto's red eyes shone brightly, infused with the power of the dark aura the formed Dark Rockman's own body. He summoned his buster, aiming straight for Enzan, seeming unable to recognize Laika.
"T-This... this cannot be!" Laika stammered taking a step back in shock. Enzan growled, taking a step back himself, and at loss of words. The look Netto was giving him was of pure hatred. He had never seen such a look in the younger boy's eyes, ever.
"Let's go, Netto-kun. Let's purge the world of its evil!" Dark Rockman's voice echoed in the air, as Netto threw himself towards Enzan.
"Rockbuster!"
Enzan stood there, frozen as he looked at the blast rush towards him. Rockman cried out once more, calling his operator desperatedly.
"NETTO-KUN!!"
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Hur hur, Cliffhangers for the win! Nyah Nyah. _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
"Logic is the Ultimate Weapon."
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Neko Queen of Fluff
Joined: 15 Mar 2005 Posts: 1217 Location: The computer
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Posted: Fri Oct 14, 2005 9:14 pm Post subject: |
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*takes in deeeep breath*
*lets it out slowly*
Woooooooow, that was amazing. I loved your portayal of Netto XD He's insane but he's not. Poor kid. Awesome job as always, Planty ;3 _________________ Roses are #FF0000, violets are #0000FF. All my base are belong to you.
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Sol Fanfic Guru
Age: 37 Joined: 02 Aug 2005 Posts: 685 Location: Where all the badfics roam
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Posted: Fri Oct 14, 2005 9:16 pm Post subject: |
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Very nice. I must agree with Neko; I like how you protrayed Netto and his insanity, coupled with memory loss.
And I can totally imagine R-DarkRockman. Heh...
You are awesome as always, Planty. _________________
<3 Planty~
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Midnight This is a Hilbert Space
Age: 37 Joined: 18 Mar 2005 Posts: 3089 Location: The AfterMath. Otherwise, New York City.
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Posted: Sat Oct 15, 2005 4:04 am Post subject: |
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Wow. You certainly have a way with suspense.
I agree with Neko here--your portrayal of Netto's mind at this point is excellent--although it shows the obvious effects that Dark Rock has done to warp Netto's mind, Netto stilll presents that air of innocence--those intermittent flashbacks that perheaps give hope to the reader that the unaffected Netto is merely being supressed by Dark Rock's devices.
Excellent job. _________________ Today, these three players are after Big Bucks! But they'll have to avoid the Whammy, as they play the most exciting game of their lives! From Television City in Hollywood! It's time to 'Press Your Luck!'--Rod Roddy
The Kingdom of Loathing: An Adventurer is You! // I ♣ Seals
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spiecas Net Battler
Joined: 16 Sep 2005 Posts: 77 Location: Earth
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Posted: Sat Oct 15, 2005 7:25 am Post subject: |
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Oh...my...god. That's all I can say. This has totaly left me speachless it was so good. Poor Rockman. I feel really bad for him seeing his operator go evil like that. _________________ “Great spirits have always encountered violent opposition from mediocre minds.”
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Kitty-Chan Net Police
Joined: 08 Jul 2005 Posts: 438 Location: Massillon, Ohio, USA
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Posted: Sat Oct 15, 2005 1:42 pm Post subject: |
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Heheheh; I am loving the angst. Twisted is good. _________________ Need more Zero/X, Netto/Rock, Rock/Netto, Forte/Netto, & Blues/Netto. PLEASE!
Ano sa...could someone please make me a Zero/X, Blues/Netto, or Forte/Netto avatar/banner? I would greatly appreciate it...
Thanks for the avatar, Mandi!
People! We need more Blues/Netto & Forte/Netto on the net. Come on; help me out here! *gives everyone her Super-Adorable Irrisistable Sad Kitty Eyes(TM)* |
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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 1:50 am Post subject: |
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Thank you everyone for your comments and reviews n.n I'm glad you're liking it so far. _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
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Plantman It's only Forever... Not long at all!
Age: 44 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 1819 Location: Mexico
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Posted: Tue Oct 25, 2005 10:21 pm Post subject: |
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Burn to Ashes
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"Enzan!" Laika jumped, knocking out the other boy away from the path of the shot, causing both of them to roll in the ground for a moment. Enzan groaned as he prompted himself to his shoulders; Laika already sitting up a few steps from him.
"W-What the hell...?"
"Snap out of it, we're being attacked!" The aqua haired net savior growled, stading up and aiming his riffle to Netto, clenching his teeth. "Netto, what happened to you?" He thought, locking his gaze in his target.
Netto didn't move, rewarding Laika with a blank stare, as if this was the first time he's seen him.
"Netto-kun, we have to attack." Dark Rockman said softly, feeling slightly annoyed that the boy would just stand there.
"Who is he, Rockman?" Netto asked softly, not sure if he wanted to attack Laika or not. His buster, however was aimed at Enzan, who was starting to get up.
Dark Rockman was more than a little annoyed at the question, "He's one of Enzan's friends. He helped him to kidnap you and harm you, Netto-kun."
"Netto!" Enzan called, summoning his sword but showing no intention of wanting to attack, "Whatever he's told you isn't truth! That's not Rockman!"
"Netto-kun! Please listen to me, Netto-kun!" Rockman yelled, grasping Enzan's attention. The skunk haired boy picked up the PET, showing it to Netto hoping he'd recognize his own navi.
"Can't you see it?! This is your navi, this is the real Rockman!" Laika tried to convinco Netto, but, once more, he was rewarded with a blank stare from Netto.
The brunette glared coldly to the blue PET, the screen showed nothing to him. Rockman was nothing but a big blue blur displayed in a distraught screen.
"Netto-kun..." Rockman whispered softly, feeling helpless. What could he do? What Dark Rockman had done to his operator? "Please, Netto-kun... Please wake up." The blue navi pleaded in a soft whisper.
"Ijjuin Enzan." Netto stated cooly, allowing a smile to crept his lips. The smile growing more and more into a mad grin, as his eyes widened. His body quaking lightly but visibly for a momet -- it would seem that Dark Rockman managed to restrain partialy the violent attacks that Netto was undergoing.
Enzan tucked Rockman's PET away, and tightened his hand in a fist, the way Netto spoke his name was so cold and hateful, almost mad. It dawned on him and Laika that Netto wasn't himself anymore, whatever Dark Rockman had done to him had warped his perception of reality.
"What the hell did Dark Rockman do to him?!"
Without warning, Netto closed the protective mask over his face, leaping towards Enzan once more, "Battle Chip, Dark Sword!"
Enzan narrowed his eyes and blocked the attack with his own sword. Pushing forward he forced Netto to step back, jumping towards him, to counter the attack.
Laika blinked and watched the two boys locking in an sword duel. Enzan seemed to gain ground only to have himself overwelmed by the superior strenght of the dark sword before recovering the advantage, only to loose it again. The Sharro soldier couldn't help but wonder why Netto seemed to ignore his presence; was his mind in such state that he couldn't remember him?
However, this could play in his favor, if he could play his cards accordingly. If Netto was being controlled by Dark Rockman, it was necesary to remove him from the equation and try to bring Netto back to their side.
"Searchman, scan the area and calculate no more than three shots that can disband the Dimensional Area. And prepare to activate the camouflage."
"Yes, Sir!"
"Damn it, Netto. Wake up! I don't want to hurt you!" Enzan growled, trying with all his might to defeat the boy without harming him in the process. "Battle Chip, Fuujin Racket!" Enzan unleashed a wave of air pressure, sending Netto to fly against one of the walls of the building.
Netto struggled to remove himself from the wall he was currently embebed on. Letting out a rather feral growl he pushed himself out of the wall, his eyes blazing with an eerie red glow, Dark Rockman's aura irradiated from Netto's body.
"Okay... this definitively didn't get any better." Enzan took a step back. "I need to do something to interrupt the cross fusion between the two!" He jumped away in time before Netto charged at him with a combination of Area Steal and Fumikomi Cross.
As the battle between the two began anew, Laika activated Searchman's camouflage skill and ran towards the building. "I just hope this will work."
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yet another cliff hanger! The battle is quite sucky because I'm not skilled enough in the use of the engish language to describe a battle in detail XD
Hope Neko and Sol will Like it /o/ _________________ Hecha en MÉXICO - Avatar by Me.
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Sol Fanfic Guru
Age: 37 Joined: 02 Aug 2005 Posts: 685 Location: Where all the badfics roam
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Posted: Tue Oct 25, 2005 10:36 pm Post subject: |
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Nice. The battle scene was well described, and you managed to get everyone's emotions down perfectly. I like how Enzan realizes that Dark Rockman had done something to Netto pretty quickly.
Poor Rockman, though.
Great job, Planty! _________________
<3 Planty~
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Kitty-Chan Net Police
Joined: 08 Jul 2005 Posts: 438 Location: Massillon, Ohio, USA
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Posted: Wed Oct 26, 2005 2:21 am Post subject: |
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This is really good. Will there be any pairings? _________________ Need more Zero/X, Netto/Rock, Rock/Netto, Forte/Netto, & Blues/Netto. PLEASE!
Ano sa...could someone please make me a Zero/X, Blues/Netto, or Forte/Netto avatar/banner? I would greatly appreciate it...
Thanks for the avatar, Mandi!
People! We need more Blues/Netto & Forte/Netto on the net. Come on; help me out here! *gives everyone her Super-Adorable Irrisistable Sad Kitty Eyes(TM)* |
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