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PostPosted: Sat Oct 15, 2005 9:58 pm    Post subject: GigaMan Battle Network Reply with quote

This is my first Fanfic , so read and enjoy .(hopefully)
(I only use the dub names because I dont know the japenese names please do not let it stop you from reading.)

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"Are we there yet ?" I asked .

"No." my Mom said .

"Are we there yet ?"

"No." my Dad said .

"Are we there -"

"Another word and you are grounded ."

I made a face . This was the fifth time I had to move because of my Dad's work. He was getting a job at SciLab . At least that was good , because I got the new model PET early .

"How do you like it in there , GigaMan ?"

"Comfy. Very Comfy ." the white navi said .

GigaMan was a white navi with neck long reddish-brown hair and had a ring aroud his backpack .

"Well , that's good ."

"Mom , how long till we ge there ."

"We are there ."

"Finally ," I said grumpily .

"Welcome to ACDC Town ." my Dad said .

I looked around the lush green enviroment , and then my eyes fixed on our silver and white house .

"Come on Jay , hurry up !" my younger sister Jaqlin said .

I ran inside and looked around . First I checked out the living room . Our widescreen TV , two sofas , and my Dad's massage chair were arranged in there . The kitchen had all of my Mom's appliances in there .

"Jay , Jaqlin , your rooms are upstairs ."

I rushed up the stairs and started moving in right away .

First I told the movers wherre to put my bed , and than hung my Sabata poster up above it .I then constructed my desk and put my laptop on top. I then put in my bookcase and my Colonel and Protoman action figures up .

I laid down on my bed , panting .

" I think I have done everything." I panted .

"No you haven't ." GigaMan called from his PET .

My eyes lit up .

[b]"Jack In , GigaMan , Execute !"[/b]

GigaMan suddenly appeared on the net , and quickly constucted the link to ACDC area .

"Let's go!" I said enthusiastically .

Gigaman ran into the warp .

[i]One hour later ...[/i]

"Finally , ACDC square ." GigaMan said .

"I hate getting lost in new areas ." I said .

"Me too ."

"Now , let's check out the square!"

The first stop was the shop , and GigaMan bought a few chips .Then he made a post on the BBS . Suddenly , something else caught his eye .

"Cool ! A battle arena !"

He was running over and -

[b]BUMP[/b]

"Ow..." GigaMan said .

"You idiot ! You will pay for that !

"Fine . Battle Routine Set .

"Execute !"

The HealNavi made the first move by throwing bombs at him . GigaMan dodged them easily and was firing buster shots .

Suddenly the HealNavi came up and slashed him in the chest .

"Oof!" Gigaman said .

"Time to heat things up . Now GigaMan !" I yelled .

"Right ! ElementChange !"

GigaMan was surrounded by fire and turned red and orange . After the fires cooled off , he wasted no time in attacking his opponent .

"Fire Arm !"

Gigaman morphed his hand into a flamethrower and fired a stream of fire at his opponent .

The HealNavi took the hit and fell over . Just as he regained use of his arms and legs , he got hit by a fire tower .

"Finish him off !" I said. "Cannon , battlechip in , download !"

"FIRE!" Gigaman said as he morphed his hand into a Cannon .

The HealNavi took the hit .

[b]HealNavi Logging Out[/b]

"And there we have it ." GigaMan smirked .

He began to walk away but heard a voice .

"Nice battle ..."

CHAPTER END

There we have it . The first chapter of my first fanfic , so feel free to be a critic but NO FLAMES

P.S : I know this chapter was kind of boring , but it was just an introductory chapter . The next one will be more exciting .
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 15, 2005 11:20 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

It's okay for the first chapter of you first fic. Sure it could of been way better, a bit longer, a little more detail. More flavorful battle scenes but one shouldn't Expect that of the very first chapter of someones first Megaman fan fiction. It should get better as you progress. Realy hard to judge it by this one chapter alone.
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PostPosted: Sat Oct 15, 2005 11:39 pm    Post subject: Re: GigaMan Battle Network Reply with quote

Spice it up and you'll make things more exciting! Well, I'm open to share my fan fic characters to you. Anyway, they're not yet ready to be posted here, I'm going to bring out my fic maybe this Friday...

Mod Edit: Please do not quote the entire fic.
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 8:16 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks , Hitsuya .
Next chapter Ill try to spice up .
Will anyone take a guess who the mystery navi is?
And last but not least , I dunno when I will update . Depends on the workload .Probrably in a few days .
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 16, 2005 9:11 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well, it's not bad but you could use a little bit more of description! I'm sure the next chapter will be better! Good luck!
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PostPosted: Fri Oct 21, 2005 10:30 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Let me guess, you're the guy who submitted the Gigaman Art as a submition to MMBN4 Create a Navi Contest, right? if what I remember is correct, you drew or copied a Official Art of Megaman, and then coloured it Gold. You made the top look good, but then the bottom just died. If that wasn't you, then it must be someone else, because you using the term "Gigaman" and the Person's submition as "GigaMan" is too much of a Coincidence.
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 23, 2005 8:06 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks FabiChan !

To Fan , I have no idea what you are talking about Confused Confused . It may be a coincidence , but hey , I didnt do tha . Weird .

Update in a few Days . :] :]
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PostPosted: Sun Oct 23, 2005 12:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

You're also the guy who joined the Megaman.EXE rpg from AMZ's link, under the name of Something Gigaman, right?
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PostPosted: Thu Oct 27, 2005 4:29 pm    Post subject: Chapter 2 : Friends (GigaMan Battle Network ) Reply with quote

Chapter 2 : Friends !


“Huh?” Gigaman said , whirling around .

A red navi with long silver hair , a white and black symbol , and shades looked at him .

“I saw your battle . Good job , but you still are a newbie …”

“WHO ARE YOU CALLING A NEWBIE!?!?!?”

“You.” He said cooly .

“I’ll show you who is a newbie!!!!!!!!!”

Battle Start !

Jay wasted no time in attacking his opponent .

“Cannon , battlechip in . Triple download !”

“GigaCannon1 , program advance !”

The cannon blasted the navi in the chest , and the navi stumbled back .

“Interesting . Using a PA right off the bat is a sign of weakness .”

“Screw you !!!! ElementChange !”

“Ice Element !

GigaMan was coated in a case of ice . When he came out , his gloves were solid ice , and his bodysuit was blue .

“Ice waves !”

Snowflakes appeared and rammed into the red navi . He tried again , but ProtoMan sliced through them .

“ElecSword !” the red navi said calmly .

He slashed GigaMan on his icon .

“Never try to beat ProtoMan , Net Official .”

The ElecSword was dangerously close to GigaMan’s neck .

“ProtoMan , leave him alone !!” a blue navi yelled from the sidelines . “You are an official ! You have to admit that he did well against you .”

“You are lucky ,” ProtoMan said . “If blue-boy hadn’t defended you , the crowd would have humiliated you .” He walked off calmly .

“Thanks ,” Gigaman said . “The crowd would have really humiliated me .”

“I know . My name is MegaMan .

“ GigaMan .”

“Nice to meet you .”

“Nice to meet you too . How the heck did you end up fighting an official ?”

“He called me an newbie .” GigaMan said , frustrated .

“Well , he does that to everyone . Just let it go .”

“Okay . He just got me frustrated .”

“Yeah . I was too . By the way do you want to netbattle ?”

“No way .”

“I guess you have had enough for one day .”

“Definitely . Jay , Jack me out .” GigaMan called .

“Roger .” Jay replied .

GigaMan Logging Out

“School tommorrow , Jay .” GigaMan reminded .

“Yeah , I know . But for know I am going to bed .”

“G’night Jay .”

“Good night GigaMan .”

End Chapter

This chapter was a little rushed because of homework .

Read and review Please !
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PostPosted: Sat Nov 26, 2005 3:30 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Sorry I just found this, Gospel, but this is good! But don't use so many little lines. Try paragraphs instead of small lines all the time, and you need to specify who is speaking. Other than that, it's great! :D
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PostPosted: Sun Nov 27, 2005 7:17 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thank you ! But I really dont like this first attempt , so I am writing up another fic as we speak .
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