Rockman.EXE:The College Years-3-82:Great Battle of Light(sp)

Anime Master ZERO · Posted: Mon Nov 21, 2005 9:09 pm Post subject:

Please don't misunderstand. I DO read your reviews and I DO make an effort to comply with your suggestions and incorporate them into my writing. My work may suggest otherwise, but I AM trying. (And don't tell me to try harder. Nagging doesn't do anything for me.) Please just bear with me. Your reviews are NOT being ignored.
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LgacyDX · Posted: Mon Nov 21, 2005 9:57 pm Post subject:

Don't worry. Your story rocks and I love every single chapter of it.
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TheWebbuilder · Posted: Mon Nov 21, 2005 10:37 pm Post subject:

AMZ, take some advice and let this fic rest for a while.

You've been at this for so long that it's no wonder the originality is at an all-time low; and trying to turn out a new chapter every few days isn't going to help that situation any. I seriously suggest that you step away from this fic for a few weeks (not one week, but several) and just let it lay, don't think about it, don't even check the thread, just leave it alone. Taking a breather every now and then will give you the time that you need to recover your creativity and imagination.

I've been where you are (at least, I think I do), with my stuff over at FF.Net, and let me tell you that sometimes you just have to rest for a while.

Anyways, about this chapter... It was very mundane and barely registered above being filler. The reason for the battle was just pointless, and even though those kinds of arguments do occur, this was just blown out of proportion.

The combat was bland, and lacked flow.

As toward the reason behind the CoA... meh. It's not all that impressive. It just sounds like another throwback to the Dark Chip's anime properties.

5/10.

Seriously, AMZ, take a breather. You'll be glad that you did.
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NotJim · :3c Joined: 13 Jun 2005 Posts: 973

Four words struck out at me when I read this: Same old, same old.

The repetition of the words aren't accidental, either.

Like what Web and/or others said earlier in the previous TWO chapters:
You really need to take a break from this fic, get a few original ideas from elsewhere, make sure you have sufficient firepower before going on, and probably make sure you've used everything in this fic so far: e.g. (Alia from the beginning of the story, for example. Can't she at least do anything?)

I thought you'd do this a few weeks ago. <_<
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Elementalman.EXE · Posted: Tue Nov 22, 2005 10:14 am Post subject:

Alright this will have to be breif. Please, as Web said, you will feel releif if you stop. This was terrible. OMG NOAH TEH 1337 WITH TEH BOKTAI. Noah is basiclly turned into the super kid. But the batle was lacking and everything was bland

I'll add some more when I get home

Oh and LgacyDX this isn't my place at all but all your doing is ass-kissing. your not provideing any actual critism and that's a hell of alot better then mindless worshiping.
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**Mari** · Posted: Tue Nov 22, 2005 11:01 am Post subject:

Why, yes, Elemental, that's not your job, sorry to spoil the fun away from you. >>

While LgacyDX is completely entitled to like the chapter, regardless of what the rest of the reviews think, I do believe his reviews lack any helpfulness within them. As Malik and I have previously stated in a previous incarnation of this thread, we expect all reviewers on the REO fanfic library to take a bit of their time writing a helpful review. "That's good, keep on writing!" isn't really helpful, at all. "That's good; I think so because the writing is ___ and the characters ___, the storyline is ____" and so on. There's a difference.

I've read the reviews of this chapter. None of them appear to be flames to me; feel free to state your mind about this fanfiction, as long as you do not insult anyone on the process.

AMZ, if the reviews are starting to get repetitive (which, I believe, is a better term than 'nagging'), there might be a reason why.
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LgacyDX · Posted: Tue Nov 22, 2005 11:14 am Post subject:

Okay, okay. Here's what I really think of the story so far.

Okay, what I'll tell you is the truth. I don't want to offend you in anyway because I respect you and have been inspired by you for a long time. I just hope that once you read this, I hope you understand. Okay here goes. Your chapters are very good but all I ever see is the same old, same old netbattles that are all involving the netbattle tournament. I wonder to myself, when will I get to experience something new for a change such as like I watch in the Yu-Gi-Oh Battle City Tournament where Marik takes one of Yugi's friends and brainwashes one of them into battling Yugi. When do I get to experience that in this type of fic. I don't want to offend, AMZ but your story is good but I think it needs some editing and some work. Most times, its all the same [spoil:0fe61c19de]shit[/spoil:0fe61c19de] and I understand that your stories get better and better. But I really want to see some action that sort of twist the story a bit, I mean when will the finals begin because all I ever see is battle after battle after battle. Ditch the boring battles and have us move on to something good. Because pretty soon, I don't think there will be anyone that will review your stories any longer.

Okay, I said what I said. I hope you don't take this personally.
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**Mari** · Posted: Tue Nov 22, 2005 11:19 am Post subject:

No need to cuss either, but that's a certainly better review.
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Anime Master ZERO · Posted: Tue Nov 22, 2005 12:35 pm Post subject:

I have an idea.

Everyone, please tell me which chapters (out of ALL of them) you thought were good and/or you really liked. Whatever I did in those chapters apparently caught your liking so I can make an attempt to reincorporate what I did into future chapters.
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LgacyDX · Posted: Tue Nov 22, 2005 1:53 pm Post subject:

Okay, my favorite of most of the battles were involving Noah and his navi, Lumine especially when he uses his Boktai folder against some of his many opponents. I also like some chapters when Chaud and ProtoMan fought against Lucy and DevilMan and Laika and SearchMan fought against YamatoMan. They were very honorable indeed but I really want to see the four main villains (Waya, Greg, Nicol and Diana) battling against random opponents and seeing how powerful the Crest of Arcaida would work on them. But, I have a question to ask you, AMZ... will there be a NetOp for Copy X or Omega? I'm so curious because I like your story but it needs some action to make it better. If you have any questions, please PM me. Thank you.
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SonicNigma212 · Posted: Tue Nov 22, 2005 3:27 pm Post subject: Here's my review

Well, it looks like that you've finally got it together and put up a good chapter. You see, the battle between both Noah and Lica is just as good. It's also good that you've added a character from the RPG into this story. I wonder what else are you planning to do? Well, whatever it is, I'm sure that it's going to be good. I mean, like that one part where Noah kicked Saiba in the place where the sun don't shine. Well, I hope that there's going to be more stuff regarding the place that they originally came from: this Neo Arcadia. Oh, and what chapters do you mean? Do you mean the ones from this season? If it is, then I would like to say that this new chapter that you've put up as well as Fists and Hatchets. My least favorite was Battle of the Healers. Well, later!

Maurice A. Nigma ^_^ :grr:

Flame Buster · Posted: Tue Nov 22, 2005 3:43 pm Post subject:

You're good chapters were in season 1 and 2.

Most of the chapters in season three are total crap except for chapter 35, which I thought was very well done.
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TheWebbuilder · Posted: Wed Nov 23, 2005 3:29 pm Post subject:

AMZ, your best chapters are the ones with originality. And by 'originality', I mean NO anime references and happen to include something interesting that hasn't occured in some other storyline.

The chapters with a decent plot are also better. Going to war over a dispute in grammar just doesn't sit that well with me, there needs to be some deeper reason behind the fight.

I know that this hasn't been brought up a lot lately, but your characterization is also almost non-existant. It's hard to distinguish one character from another, even given the years between the anime and your fic, none of the canon characters seem that in character, and almost all of your villians pack generic bad-guy lines and cliches... so yeah, I'd work on that.

Basically, I liked the chapters that showed something new and never seen before.

Again, I'm not trying to be difficult, I'm just making my opinion known.
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Abiisan · Net Agent Joined: 16 Mar 2005 Posts: 285 Location: Midwest

I agree, most of your latest chapters have all been heavily lined with references, cameos, and straight rips. I think that you were doing much better in the early seasons. Sorry to be short, I have to go.
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Anime Master ZERO · Posted: Wed Nov 23, 2005 10:41 pm Post subject:

Could you guys please be more specific?

Also, you guys wanted me to take some time off & work on some of my other fics. Well, I put up a new chapter to My Loneliness yesterday. Please go have a read and provide some feedback if you haven't already.
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I doubt that you'll take my idea into consideration, nor will I think you will treat my post with much consideration. But here are my opinions:

I believe that trying strategic combos are good, but not to the point of repeating them again and again. Perhaps a new combo everytime, just to keep the spotlight on a different event.

Have the characters try and do well in what aren't thier best strenghts. Maybe have Noah and Sean accidentally trade folders or Lan and Maylu switching folders for reference but forgetting to switch it back.

Have more emotion in the villains, and don't make the point of it too clear. Perhaps make them slightly protective over something. They need a life too. Even then, try not to make it to the point where it's obvious you want the readers to know.

Have the characters try to master a folder they're not used to. Playing thier strenghts everytime will just make them bait for villains. Or perhaps you could do that, and when they're beaten, they remake thier folder and go for round 2.

Use humor in more dosages, but not to the point it becomes a comedy. Try to use jokes understood by most people, and not by things that make you laugh. This means you have to stop putting in the Fruit Candy things, with the guy getting stopped from singing his song. It dampens the atmosphere when reading.

Have characters use the chips they've gained in critical moments when they're about to lose. Higsby might keep the chips, but maybe you should have them use a past opponent's rarest chip to win the match.

Never have the characters able to execute moves perfectly. Maybe when they're told about how ot use the chip, they make a mistake and lose the fight. A lesson in defeat is an extra boost not to do it again. have the character suffer emotional problems. They're teenagers, so they should act like one.

Your characters should not know everything about MMBN, unlike you. What you know does not necessarily mean that the characters do, too. Just because you know how to use a Sonic Boom with a Varsword doesn't mean that they know how to do it.

Try and view it from the character's point of view. What you feel and what the characters feel are two different things. You may look from the outside to be happy, but you could be miserable inside.

Have the characters lose sometime. They can't win them all, and they certainly can't win them all. And not against other main characters like villains or such. A OC might need to appear in the story to spice it up.

if you never reveal certain plotlines, you can't trigger a final ending. Sort of like Megaman being unable to jack into the ship if he doesn't know where the ship is. You have to have clues that don't make anything on their own, but a lot of things when put together.

Well, that's my ideas.

I liked certain parts in Season 2, where the idea of the kid was pretty simple. In that case, Noah's plotline wasn't really a plot. They were just an answer to the VILE problems. What he was going to do was pretty obvious. The moment you explained everything in Serpent Bastion, the readers could pretty much figure out what's going to happen and that loses the mystery surrounding the plot.
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Viewtiful Starman · Puzzle Game Addict Age: 37 Joined: 14 Mar 2005 Posts: 708

I think Fan and Web pretty much cover stuff I'd like to see... Even though it wasn't really plotty, one chapter I enjoyed in the recent ones was Dekao VS Dingo. The dialogue was pretty good, and I enjoyed the battle between then because you did as Fan suggested here and mixed up a character's usual strategy.

Another thing for tournaments, I think this would be also interesting if you had a couple of battles not involving the main characters, but maybe use some sort of character rivalry. (Like Elec and Gauss, for example)
Or think of a situation like "what if character A and character B met and got a reason to fight", using some of the less used characters, who you can think of an interesting battle for.

Anime Master ZERO · Posted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 2:44 pm Post subject:

CHAPTER 3-41
GutsMan vs. CrashMan

Yutaka unlocked the metal gate in front of the chip shop and pulled it up until the door was clear. He locked into place and then proceeded to unlock the front door and entered; relocking the entrance once he got inside and disarming the security system. Walking up to the counter, he unslung his backpack and took out a binder. He opened it, revealing several Battlechips, and deposited them onto the countertop.

“We managed to rake in some impressive chips, Yutaka,” CrashMan commented.

“Yeah, we did. These should really help out the store.” Yutaka grabbed another binder from behind the counter and started flipping through it while he waited for the computer to boot up. He separated the chips by type and then started recording them into the store inventory file. Due to NetCrimes happening virtually every day, he and CrashMan had agreed that it was much too risky to store it on the computer so they kept the records on hard copy instead. When the computer finally finished booting, Yutaka instantly went to check up on the prices of the chips he had obtained in the tournament. To his surprise, all chips had gone up in value ever since the tournament began and he immediately started making all the necessary changes to the inventory log. As he filled out the sheets, he heard a knock on the door. Looking up, he saw a small boy looking in through the window. Yutaka rose from his seat and walked over to the door, unlocked it, and poked his head outside.

“Sorry, we’re closed,” he informed the boy apologetically.

“Actually, I pre-ordered a chip a month ago. I’m just wondering if it’s come in yet,” the boy replied.

“Do you have your receipt?” Yutaka took the slip of paper that was handed to him and went back inside. A few minutes later, he came back out.

“Come in.” He led the boy to the counter and told him to wait while he went into the back room. While he was gone, the child saw the pile of Battlechips and his eyes grew wide. When Yutaka came back, he asked him about the chips.

“They’re winnings from the Battle Network tournament,” Yutaka explained, “I’m still in the process of entering them into the inventory. Anyway, here’s your chip. I’ll just ring up the price for you.” Yutaka tapped away on the cash register and then turned to his young customer.

“Subtracting the five hundred zenny you put down as a pre-order fee, that comes to forty-five hundred zenny.” The boy pulled out the money from his pocket and handed it to Yutaka, who took it and returned the required amount of change. He then placed the chip inside a small case and placed it inside a bag into which he also slipped the receipt and handed it to the boy.

“Have a good day.” The boy sad thank you and left the shop. Once he was gone, Yutaka locked the door and returned to his task.

“That went well,” commented CrashMan.

“At least he left happy.” Yutaka sat back on his stool and resumed his work. About an hour and a half later, he finally finished and he placed the binder back under the counter before taking the chips into the storage room. He had placed them in numerical order while he was doing the logs, so it was easy for him to place them in the appropriate containers.

“Well CrashMan, that’s finally done,” he announced to his Navi once the last chip had been put away, “Time to head out.” Yutaka locked the backroom, grabbed his bag off the counter, and rearmed the security system before leaving the store. He firmly locked the door and pulled the cage down over the front of the shop, locking that as well.

“So where do we go from here?” asked CrashMan.

“I feel up for a pita.” Yutaka walked over to the SUB and ordered a pita from the stand in the food court. Once he had received his meal, he sat down and started eating. It was fairly late in the day so the building was sparsely occupied with a few students and faculty members. Everyone else was out trying to win the tournament. Frankly, Yutaka enjoyed moments like this. Between his classes and his responsibilities helping to run his uncle’s chip shop, there usually wasn’t any time to just sit back and relax. And with the addition of the tournament, his opportunities for such times were further limited. While he enjoyed his pita, CrashMan decided to catch up on his reading and opened up a window and started reading some fanfics. The Rockman DASH stories were among his favorites. Like his operator, he too looked forward to these sorts of moments. After finishing his meal, Yutaka threw his trash into a nearby garbage can and left.

“Well, we better get back out there, CrashMan,” he announced. Slinging on his backpack, Yutaka left the SUB and began to wander around for someone he could battle.

“So Yutaka, which folder are we going to use this time?” asked CrashMan.

“We’re going to use our second folder,” was the reply.

“Okay.” CrashMan opened up the chip folder menu and equipped his operator’s second folder. Yutaka didn’t like to keep Battlechips on himself, so he uploaded them all and stored them in his PET instead. Now that everything was set, the two of them were ready to face any challenger.

“Hey, Yutaka!” Yutaka turned at the mention of his name and saw Dex waving at him.

“Hey, Dex!” He returned the wave and walked up to him, “How’s it going?”

“Not bad. GutsMan and I have just been ploughing through this tournament,” answered Dex.

“Not from what I’ve seen on the website,” CrashMan smirked, “From what I’ve seen, you two have lost a few battles.”

“That’s not the point. Check out all these chips we won!” Dex reached into his pockets and produced two handfuls of Battlechips. Yutaka let out a low whistle.

“That’s an impressive haul,” he commented.

“What about you, Yutaka?” Dex asked in return, “What about your chips?”

“I left them all in the shop,” Yutaka responded.

“Why?”

“To tell you the truth Dex, our chip supplier has been out of touch for almost a month now,” Yutaka explained, “CrashMan and I entered the tournament so we could restock our inventory, even if it’s for a short while.”

“So by getting rare chips, you’re hoping the shop will gain some profit?”

“Essentially.” Dex looked at his winnings and handed half of them over to Yutaka.

“Here, you can have these,” he offered.

“No, I couldn’t Dex,” Yutaka declined politely.

“Take them. Your shop needs them. Plus, these are all chips I doubt GutsMan and I will use.”

“No, Dex. I can’t accept. Besides, you aren’t exactly the person I’d turn to if I needed someone to take good care of a chip.” Indeed it was true. Most of the chips Dex owned were scratched or worn out from years of constant use and lack of proper care. One had to wonder how some of them could even still work.

“Well, I don’t have a chip case like some people,” Dex retorted.

“Most people, actually,” CrashMan corrected.

“I keep them all in my pockets and there’s always other stuff in there, too,” Dex went on.

“Well Dex, it just so happens that I have a few spare chip cases. You can have one if you like.” Yutaka took off his backpack and dug around inside it before producing a small canvas pouch, which he handed over to Dex.

“There you go.”

“Hey, thanks. And I still mean what I said about the chips.”

“If it makes you happy, I’ll take them.” Yutaka held out his hands and Dex placed the chips into them. He brought them closer and looked over them while Dex was putting his chips into his new case. To his surprise, they were all in mint condition. They must have been won only very recently. Taking out his binder, he slotted them into the chip sleeves and then put it away.

“Well Dex, I should probably get going. I’ve still gotta collect more chips for the shop.”

“Wait, so you’re not really interested in getting to the finals?” asked Dex.

“No, not really. Truth be told, fame just isn’t for me,” Yutaka admitted as he started to leave, “I prefer to stay on a down-to-earth level.”

“Well, can you at least battle me? I’m trying to help Lan and the others fight those guys with the Crest of Arcadia.”

“I’ve read about that chip in the news.” Yutaka stopped and turned towards Dex, “If misused, it corrupts the Navi and makes them go berserk and then the Navi disappears when the battle ends. No one knows exactly what happens after that. Frankly, I wouldn’t even touch that thing with a ten-foot-long pole.”

“So, you’ll battle me then?” Dex asked again.

“If you’re helping to take down the guys who distribute those things, I can’t refuse. You’re fighting for a greater good.” Yutaka whipped his PET out from its case and pulled back his left sleeve. He clicked it onto his wristband and pointed it forward.

“Jack in!! CrashMan, power up!”

Dex held out his PET and spun around, letting his enormous gut jiggle, before aiming at Yutaka.

“Jack in!! GutsMan, power up!”

The two beams intercepted each other and a battle grid was formed. GutsMan appeared on the blue side of the field and CrashMan on the red.

“Battle Point chip in, download!” To Dex’s surprise, Yutaka only had twenty-six Battle Points whereas he had forty-nine.

“Hey Yutaka, what’s with the low Battle Point count?” he asked.

“Like I said earlier, Dex, I’m in this tournament to get chips. By betting one Battle Point at a time, I can squeeze in about ninety-nine rare chips,” Yutaka answered.

“So then I guess you’re betting only one point then.”

“That’s right. No hard feelings?”

“Nope. None at all. I want to make it to the finals and you just want chips. I don’t see any reason to act so competitive for this match,” Dex replied, “But that doesn’t mean I won’t go easy on you. I still need to win to advance.”

“And I won’t hold back either, Dex,” Yutaka answered.

“Let’s make this a good fight, GutsMan,” CrashMan said as he extended his hand.

“Agreed, guts.” GutsMan took the orange-armored Navi’s hand into his own and shook before the two of them went back to their respective sides.

“Let’s go, CrashMan,” Yutaka declared, “Battle routine, set!”

“Execute!”

BATTLE START

“Guts Machinegun!” GutsMan stood upright and his hand transformed into a gun. He pointed the barrel towards CrashMan and started firing a rapid assault of energy shots.

“Crash Bomber!” CrashMan’s hand changed into a missiles launcher and he fired a single rocket, which intercepted GutsMan’s attack and exploded.

“Keep it going, GutsMan,” Dex urged.

“Guts Hammer!” GutsMan clasped his hands together and they fused into a hammerhead. He brought it up over his head and slammed it against the floor, sending a shockwave at his opponent.

“CrackOut1 Battlechip in, download!” Yutaka dragged and dropped the chip onto his Navi and watched as CrashMan blasted the floor, creating a hole in front of him into which the shockwave fell.

“MiniBomb Battlechip in, download!” Yutaka dragged and dropped another chip and a small blue ball with a green stripe running around its center appeared in CrashMan’s hand.

“Come on, Yutaka. You’re never going to beat GutsMan if you keep using wimpy chips like those,” Dex taunted.

“Chips aren’t just about power, Dex. You need to know how to use them. RockCube Battlechip in, download! AirShot Battlechip in, download!” A RockCube appeared in front of CrashMan while his free hand changed into an air cannon. He pointed the barrel at the stone block and fired. The burst of air pushed it towards GutsMan.

“We’ve seen that move before,” Dex smirked.

“We’re not finished yet,” Yutaka replied. As the RockCube neared GutsMan, who was prepared to dodge it, CrashMan threw the MiniBomb forward. Just as the larger Navi sidestepped away, the bomb hit the block and exploded, sending rubble flying in every direction. GutsMan was unprepared for this and was hit by the flurry of rocks.

“Have you ever seen that one before, Dex?” asked Yutaka. Dex could only gape at what just happened. Yutaka definitely knew his stuff. Having just proven that even the weakest of chips could prove deadly when used properly. He knew he’d had to be careful and not fall for more traps like that again. Meanwhile, GutsMan was swinging his fists at CrashMan, who was jumping back to avoid them.

“That’s not going to work, GutsMan. Try this, instead. WideBlade Battlechip in, download!” GutsMan’s hand disappeared and it was quickly replaced with a big wide sword. He then proceeded to slash CrashMan. He was pleasantly surprised to find it easier than just wildly swinging his fists around due to the reduced air resistance. CrashMan himself was finding it harder to dodge the blade and raised his arms to block more often than before.

“Wind, TankCannon3 Battlechips in, download!” Yutaka slid the chips over to his Navi and a WindBox appeared and started blowing a powerful wind that blew GutsMan back. Meanwhile, CrashMan’s hand changed into a large cannon and he heaved the massive weapon up and took aim. He was nearly thrown back by the recoil when he fired, but managed to stay on his feet. GutsMan quickly ducked and the blast shot right over him.

“You missed.”

“Nope. I’m right on target.” CrashMan brought his cannon down as his attack hit the wall and the resulting explosion also hit GutsMan from behind.

“So that’s they’re strategy!” Dex exclaimed, “Yutaka uses a whole bunch of chip combos and not just Program Advances and straightforward attacks.”

“So you picked up on our plan,” Yutaka noticed.

“Crap! Did I say that out loud?”

“Actually, you kinda shouted.”

“Well, we’ll still find a way to beat you.”

“I don’t expect anything less.” Yutaka then selected GrassSeed and RainyDay from his custom menu and CrashMan threw a green football-sized seed that turned all the panels on GutsMan’s side of the field into grass panels. A cloud then appeared overhead and started to rain all over it. When the rain finally stopped, Yutaka dragged and dropped a Tornado and a ZapRing1. CrashMan’s hand turned into a fan and a whirlwind shot out and surrounded GutsMan. Wet grass was ripped up from the floor and it encircled him. CrashMan’s hand then changed into a pair of prongs and he launched a sparking ring at his opponent. The water on the grass immediately conducted the electricity on contact and sent the shock directly to GutsMan.

“Come on, GutsMan. They’re beating us,” Dex urged, “We have to try to hit with smart moves of our own.”

“GutsMan have idea!” GutsMan announced, “Use Aqua and Fire Towers.”

“What are you planning to do?”

“GutsMan tell later.”

“If you say so.” Dex slotted in a FireTower and an AquaTower and waited. GutsMan proceeded to slam his fists into the floor and two pillars of fire and water rose up and moved towards CrashMan. The orange-armored Navi slowly backed away and brought up his missile launcher, ready for the attack when the two pillars suddenly collided with and neutralized each other, creating a thick blanket of steam.

“I can’t see!” CrashMan exclaimed.

“Very clever, Dex,” Yutaka complimented, “Nice use of the two chips to create a cover.”

“Uh, of course!” Dex replied confidently, although he wasn’t completely sure at all about what just happened. Meanwhile, CrashMan tried to target GutsMan, but with no success. He expected a Navi that big and bulky to make a lot of noise whenever he moved, but no sound came from the cloud of steam.

That can only mean one thing, he thought, He’s standing absolutely still. He pointed his weapon into the steam, hoping to at least catch a glimpse of his opponent. Suddenly, GutsMan burst forward on a pair of Condors and smashed his fist into CrashMan.

“Even more impressive,” commented Yutaka, “Having GutsMan ride those condors allowed him to approach CrashMan at high speeds without making any noise.”

“Good move, GutsMan,” CrashMan observed as he got back up, “This just might be one of the best battles we’ve ever had.”

“You’re good too, guts,” answered GutsMan. The two Navis stood facing each other as the steam dissipated. When they finally moved, their motions were simultaneous. They ran alongside one another firing their default weapons.

“AirShoes, TankCannon1 Battlechips in, download!” Yutaka’s PET registered the chips and CrashMan’s arm transformed into another large cannon as jets suddenly appeared on the bottoms of his boots and he took flight. He pointed his TankCannon1 in the opposite direction and fired. He immediately ceased the AirShoes and the recoil sent him flying towards GutsMan. Yutaka then quickly dragged and dropped an IronBody and CrashMan’s entire body turned to solid metal right before slamming into GutsMan. Dex had just slotted in a Hammer chip, but found that his Navi had received it too late and thus watched as he was thrown across the field and hit the wall.

“You’re a great strategist, Yutaka,” Dex commented.

“When you work with Battlechips all day, you tend to think up a lot of strategies,” was Yutaka’s answer, “But none of our combos are as crippling as this. SignalRed, WindRacket Battlechips in, download!” As CrashMan’s hand transformed into a fan, a traffic light appeared on the field in front of him. He brought his arm back and swung his weapon, sending a powerful gust of wind that blew the traffic light to the back of GutsMan’s area.

“What that?” asked GutsMan as he pried himself from the wall and looked at the new obstacle.

“Ignore it, GutsMan,” Dex assured him, “It’s harmless. Now let’s get them. HeatCross Battlechip in, download!” Dex slotted in the chip, but nothing happened. Curiously, he checked his PET display and saw the word “error” flashing in the center in big red letters.

“What the hell is this?” he demanded.

“You’ve never come across a SignalRed before, have you?” asked Yutaka, “Let me explain. As you know, SignalRed summons a traffic light onto the field and each light gives you a different disadvantage. Right now the light is red, so that means you and GutsMan can’t use Battlechips so long as the light remains that way.”

“You’re good, Yutaka. But we won’t let that stop us.”

“Guts Hammer!” GutsMan slammed his fists into the floor and fired a shockwave at his opponent. CrashMan leapt up and fired another missile at the attack, intercepting and neutralizing it.

“DrillArm2 Battlechip in, double download!” The orange-armored Navi then brought his arms out to his sides and they both transformed into drills.

“Ready or not, here I come!” And with that, he ran at GutsMan and thrust his weapons at him. The larger Navi backed away; swinging his arms to block making sure that he didn’t hit the tips of the drills.

“If only that SignalRed didn’t block our Battlechips,” Dex muttered. Suddenly, without warning, the light changed to green and a bright light flashed across the battle grid, blinding GutsMan.

“Take this!” CrashMan took a step back and thrust both of his drills forward.

“We’ve got access to Battlechips again, GutsMan!” Dex exclaimed, “Hold on! ParalyzeBomb Battlechip in, double download!” Two bombs appeared in GutsMan’s hands and he brought them forward to block his opponent’s attack. CrashMan’s drills struck the bombs and they exploded, freezing him in place.

“Guts Punch!” Without wasting a second, GutsMan drew back his arm and threw a powerful punch at CrashMan’s head that sent him flying back into the wall.

I’ve seen enough, thought Yutaka. He pressed the icon button on his PET and CrashMan logged out.

CRASHMAN LOGGING OUT

“You’ve done well, Dex,” Yutaka congratulated as he walked over to his opponent, “You’ve shown that you can come up with incredible strategies in the heat of battle and even when the odds are against you, you still manage to pull through.”

“Well, I have you to thank,” Dex replied. Yutaka smiled as he slotted in a blank chip into his PET and downloaded one of his chips from his folder onto it.

“You deserve this, Dex: my SignalRed Battlechip.” Yutaka extended his hand forward and offered the chip. Dex took it with gratitude and looked at him.

“Thank, Yutaka.”

“And I wish you the best of luck in the tournament.” And with that said, Yutaka turned and left.

“You certainly had no problem with losing to him,” CrashMan commented from his PET.

“Dex may not be the best NetBattler, but I think our battle today taught him something very useful,” replied Yutaka, “Hopefully, he’ll be able to apply what he’s learned to his future NetBattles.”

“So what do you want to do now, Yutaka?”

“We’re going back to the shop so I can drop off all the chips he gave us.” Yutaka then picked up speed and headed back to the chip shop.

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End of chapter 3-41.

CHAPTER PREVIEW
Lan: Narcy’s antics just scare the hell out of me.
MegaMan: I think that can apply to everyone.
Lan: What’s he up to in this tournament?
MegaMan: He’s going to try to make himself a name in fame.
Lan & MegaMan: Next time on Rockman.EXE: The College Years, “VideoMan Revolutions”.
Lan: Again with the Matrix puns?
MegaMan: Hey, it was just too easy.
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Flame Buster · Posted: Mon Nov 28, 2005 3:45 pm Post subject:

This was good. There were sa lot of strategies that were put to use quite well.

My only gripe is that it seemed as though Crashman logged out too easily.

9.8/10
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NotJim · :3c Joined: 13 Jun 2005 Posts: 973

Yes, I found this much more pleasing to read, given that you took to properly think of some nice strategies. Like with the SignalRed.

...But I don't think I want to know what the next chapter could be about. <_<;

If I had to give a rating, 8/10 perhaps.
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