The Buster and The Blade (Rated Teen)

 
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 22, 2005 11:56 pm    Post subject: The Buster and The Blade (Rated Teen) Reply with quote

Um well this is my first ever Rockman fanfic of any kind so I hope it goes well. I don't think there any spoilers in it but that might change, don't know yet. Oh and just a little note, the part of the title that’s "The Blade" is NOT a reference to Blues, sorry Blues fan girls and boys. And the main pairings will be Netto/Meiru Rock/Roll, and then an OC/OC pairing. The story takes place in the gang's 8th grade year. That’s pretty much it I guess, oh and there will not be any Yaoi and Yuri. Now to begin the story before I just give a long descrip-awww man >< ah well here it is guys ^_^ .

Chapter 1: Plug In! Shinaito! Transmission!

"Netto wake up," said a blue netnavi we all know as Rockman

"Zzzzzz....." However, Netto continued to sleep.

"Netto you're going to be late for school!"

"Zzzz..."

"I didn't want to do this but....NETTO!! I SAW MEIRU KISS DEKAO YESTERDAY!!!!!!"

Suddenly, Netto was wide awake, out of bed, and screaming at Rockman.

"LIES!!! YOU TELL LIES!!! I REFUSE TO BELIEVE YOUR VILE, WRETCHED LIES!!! MEIRU-CHAN WOULD NEVER-...shimata.."

"Hehe that always wakes you up Netto," replied Rockman, grinning at how successful his "wake up call" worked.

"Hey I'm not the one who gets all worked up whenever Roll sends an email or visits," Netto said. It was true, Roll was one of Rockman few weaknesses.

"Gah...HEY!! And remind me WHO spends about half an hour in the bathroom "thinking" right after Meiru visits!"

"Uh...well...um," Netto stuttered while blushing so hard it looked like his face would catch fire, Rock has cornered him," Hey! Didn't you say I'm going to be late!"

"THATS RIGHT," in the midst of their "battle" Rockman had totally forgotten about Netto being possibly late, "You gotta get ready, NOW!!"

"Phew, just barely got out of that one," thought Netto as he went to get fresh clothes to change into.

About 15 minutes later, Netto was dressed and ready to go, he grabbed his PET containing Rockman and headed downstairs. (A/N the PETs in this story are the Progress PETs)

"Netto, don't forget to eat some breakfast before you go," Rock said to his brother.

"Bro you know me better than that, how could I forget to eat?"

However, Netto only had about 10 minutes before school started so he grabbed 2 pieces of toast, a few strips of bacon and scooped up some egg and made a sandwich which he ate while skating to school.

"Netto! Hurry ,you only have a few minutes left!"

"Don't worry Rockman, the schools right ahead!"

Once Netto got inside the school, he ran down the hallway and burst into the classroom.

"Sorry I'm late Mariko-Sensei!" yelled Netto automatically.

"But Netto...we haven't even begun attendance, your actually about a minute early," replied Mariko-sensei.

"I'm......early?"

"Netto's....early?" said the rest of the class.

"Well...yes but only by a minute," said Mariko-Sensei, confused about the classes behavior.

It didn't matter that it was only a minute, Netto being early for class had to be a sure sign of the apocalypse.

"I'm scared....." said one the kids in the back.

"Well....Netto would you please take your seat so we may begin attendance," asked Mariko-Sensei, still a little bit confused.

"Sure..."

Netto proceeded to take his seat, the class was shocked at first and returned to normal quickly as soon as Netto moved towards his desk, finally convinced that it wasn't just some Netto imposter. Before sitting, Dekao and Tohru gave Netto a wave hello, and Netto could just barely see Yaito waving to him to. Because of her short stature, it was difficult to see her over her desk and the people in front of her (Remember according to the games, Yaito sits in the back while Netto is in the front). Once Netto took his seat he turned to Meiru and whispered a "Hello". Meiru smiled back at him and Netto could slowly feel a blush creeping on his face and had the instant desire for someone to dump a bucket of cold water on him. One thing Netto noticed though, there was a now vacant chair behind Meiru; he guessed someone had moved or transferred schools but he didn't know who. After attendance, Mariko-Sensei was about to begin class when she suddenly remembered something.

"Oh class I almost forgot, we have a new student today who use to live in End City," Mariko-Sensei turned to the doorway and called, "You can come in now!"

A boy the same age as Netto walked in. He was Netto's height and had jet-black hair spiked upwards with a single long spike dyed blue going down over his left eye. , his eyes were brown, but darker than Netto's. He wore a pair of black jeans with a light blue ice spike design lining the bottom of the pant legs, the ice spikes went about mid-way between his ankle and knee with the ice spike in the front reaching his knee. He had black sneakers on and a blue t-shirt with his navi symbol on the front, a wolf head holding a katana in its mouth. He also had an unzipped blue hoodie on with the navi symbol on the back. His PET was held onto his side vertically on top of the left pocket face, it was blue, like Netto's but slightly darker, with white lines on the edges instead of the yellow lines like on Netto's and the navi symbol imprinted on the left-hand side of it. Next to the PET was also strapped a blue rectangle about as long as the vertical PET and another similar rectangle strapped to his right pocket face. On his hands he had fingerless gloves that were also blue, much like most of his clothes, with white cuffs where the velcro strap is. He had a single earring in his left ear which was just a stud with a blue bead. And he wore a necklace around his neck with three small blue rectangles hanging from it.

"Why don't you introduce yourself," said Mariko-Sensei

"Um...well my name is Shiinji Takanama, I'm 14 years old and I used to live in End City," said Shiinji, he seemed pretty nervous and shy, he was starting to blush because he also felt embarrassed.

"Well Shiinji, perhaps you'd like to introduce your navi to us," said Mariko-Sensei.

"Oh ok, well his name is Shinaito.EXE, he's a samurai navi," stated Shiinji, sounding a little more comfortable.

"Would you mind plugging into the classroom monitor so we can see Shiinaito?"

"Sure why not," said Shiinji, now he actually sounded excited. Shiinji proceeded to the front of the classroom where the chalkboard use to be, it has recently been replaced with a touch-screen teaching monitor. Shiinji unclipped his PET and aimed it at the sensor and pressed the Plug In button on the PETs touch screen. He then said the typical plug in phrase, "Plug in! Shinaito! Transmission!" A red beam quickly shot out of the PET and into the monitor's sensor, a few seconds later, a navi appeared on the board.

The navi wore a samurai outfit, a white hakama and a blue kendo dogi. On the part of the navi's chest that the dogi did not cover was the navi's symbol, the wolf with the katana in his mouth, on a black bodysuit underneath the hakama and dogi. The part of his bodysuit that was on his arms were fingerless like Shiinji's gloves and were also black. The navi had zori (thong sandals) and the feet part of his bodysuit formed tabi (split-toed socks), He had the same jet-black hair Shiinji did and had his hair straight down with a ponytail going to the bottom of his back. He also had his symbol on his ears with a light blue visor extending over his eyes from one of the symbols to the other. His eyes were jade green like Rock and Roll's and stood out amongst all the blue and white on him. And finally a long sheathed katana was at his side with a blue scabbard, a sword guard shaped like a spiky ice shard, and a hilt wrapped in a blue cloth with the diamond-shaped spaces in-between the weaves white. And something all the girls, both human and navi noticed, was that the navi was VERY handsome, to them anyway some of the guys *cough*Dekao*cough* thought he looked a little girly because of his hakama which looked, to them, like a dress.

"Everyone, meet Shinaito.EXE , The Frost Wolf Samurai!" Shiinji exclaimed, actually smiling now.

"Hello everyone, it’s a pleasure to meet you all," said Shinaito with a grin.

For a while there was silent pause, and then to Shiinji's dismay, everyone started laughing at what Shiinji had called his navi. Some people even made fun of them by saying things like "Hah! He thinks his navi's a superhero or something?" and "Gutsman could pummel that guy!" (a cookie to anyone who can guess who said that), even some of the girls and navis who had been admiring him started laughing, including Yaito, Glyde on the other hand was trying to be polite and held his laughter in. The only ones not laughing were Mariko-Sensei, Tohru, Iceman, Meiru, Roll, Netto, and Rockman.

Shiinji looked devastated and like he was about to cry, he plugged out Shinaito and walked towards the empty seat behind Meiru which was apparently his. As soon as he sat down, Netto, Meiru and Tohru could have sworn they heard Shinaito say, "Ignore them Shiinji, they're morons who don't deserve your tears." They felt really bad for him especially since the others were still laughing. After the class finally settled down and Shiinji was thoroughly embarrassed, Mariko-Sensei began class.

The day continued as it would normally until lunch. Netto, Meiru, Dekao, Tohru, and Yaito sat down at their usual table, Netto and Meiru had bought lunch while Dekao and Tohru brought box lunches from home. And Yaito was waiting while her butler placed a delicacy from some foreign country in front of her and poured her some Strawberry milk (A/N I could really see Yaito doing this during lunch, can't remember if it happened in the series though). However, Shiinji sat down at a table by himself and ate a bowl of ramen he bought. His PET was on the table and it looked like his was talking with Shinaito.

"Man I feel really bad for him," said Tohru

"Yeah I would have wanted to die if the class started laughing at me," agreed Meiru.

"Well it’s his fault for giving his navi such a stupid nickname," replied Dekao.

Meiru became furious at Dekao and smashed him over the head with a P.P.M. (Phase-in Pain Mallet).

"Oww!! Meiru-chan what was that for?!"

"For being a JERK Dekao!"

Dekao was not clutching his head with one hand and eating with the other. Netto, Tohru, and Yaito were still trying to keep themselves from laughing at Meiru's Rage.

"Hey guys, I think we should go sit with him, he looks lonely," suggested Netto.

"Why should we-" began Dekao but he stopped himself because Meiru looked ready to give him another beating.

"I think that's a great idea Netto," said Meiru happily, smiling at Netto.

"T-thanks Meiru-chan," stuttered Netto, starting to blush.

Meanwhile in the TableComp...

"Guts! Why would Meiru-chan hit Dekao-sama? Guts," asked Gutsman.

"Well he was being mean Gutsman," answered Roll.

"Guts! Guts! Dekao-sama could crush that kid and I could crush his girly navi," complained Gutsman.

"I fail to see how that would help Gutsman," responded Glyde.

"Gutsman crush puny Glyde too!"

"Now now Gutsman calm down, wait why are you raising your fists-MISS YAITO SAVE ME!" screamed Glyde and Gutsman began to chase him.

"Haha those two are acting so silly right Rock?" said Roll

"Yeah they sure are Roll-Chan," said Rockman beginning to blush.

Back to the real world...

"Ok let's go sit with Shiinji," said Tohru.

However, just as they began to get up and pick up their trays, Shiinji stood up, took his PET, and threw out his ramen cup while walking back into the hallway.

"Darn, looks like he left already," said Meiru.

"Wonder where he could have gone to," said Yaito.

"Probably went to cry somewhere," said Dekao ," YEOW! What was that for Meiru-chan?!"

"For being a jerk AGAIN!"

They started to laugh again, however, Netto was still wondering where he could have ran off to.

After lunch ended, they all went back to the classroom to resume the lessons. At the end of the day, Mariko-Sensei announced their homework, to write about why they like their navis. After that the dismissal bell sounded and they all left, Netto and the rest of the gang ran out the door and immediately got their scooters while Netto put on his rollerblades. They started to ride home and then they saw a kid with black jeans and a blue hoodie with spiky hair riding a skateboard.

"Is that Shiinji?" asked Netto.

"I think it is," said Tohru.

"Hey Shiinji!!" cried Meiru.

The boy turned his head for a second and saw them, it was indeed Shiinji. However, he did not wave or say hi to them even though they were all waving (except for Dekao of course). Instead he just sped up and was out of sight in a few minutes.

"Weird, why didn't he say hi back?" asked Tohru

"Well I don't know but it wasn't very polite of him," whined Yaito.

Soon they all just assumed he didn't recognize them and just wanted to get home fast. After a few more minutes they all made it home, they were all able to finish their homework pretty quickly, even Netto and Dekao. Afterwards they had dinner and got ready for bed. Pretty soon they were all asleep in their homes, except for Netto, he knew Shiinji recognized them, but why did he speed up to get away? After thinking for a while, Netto gave up and went to sleep.


First chapter OVER!!! yaaay for me Laughing. Anyway I hoped you guys liked it, I’m gonna type up chapter two tomorrow.
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 23, 2005 8:31 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Hmm. This is a decent read. Not particularly great, but better than other first works I've seen.

The main problem I have with this fic for now is that the events of the story are FAR too typical. I can't begin to tell you how many fics that introduce a new character does so by saying that a new student just pops into Mariko's class, and how he is immediately marked with the stigma of the outcast. And how Netto and his posse are the first to accept the outcast into the mainstream of the class society...

A lot of the characters came out to be quite shallow, especially Dekao...since it seems that you have him made out to be the typical klutz. A lot of the characters have quite a vivid personality, as was developed by the canonical anime, games, and manga, and this just doesn't do too much justice to it.

One last thing--Try not to add parenthetical author's notes into the body of the text. It really disrupts the continuity of the story, and it's not good to take a break before the entire scene is painted to its completion.

Other than that, you did a good job. Keep it up. :D
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 23, 2005 9:58 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Thanks midnightcritic, that's the best review i've ever gotten on a story i've made, and sorry if the entrance was a bit cliche but i'll try and make the next character come in differently than a transfer and about dekao, i always saw him as a klutz who said some stupid sutff and can't let go of his pride. and yea i'll try and work on the character development o and i don't think i have many if any author notes.

2nd chappie, oh and I only know the Japanese names of the people and navis, I don't know the Japanese names of cities (except for Akihara), chips, and viruses, sorry. (Oh and I can't remember the name of Netto's school so I’ll just call it Akihara Grade School ^^'

2nd chapter: Zomon Attack!

Cut to Akihara Grade School...

"Where could Netto be?" asked Meiru sounding concerned

"Don't worry about it Meiru, if Netto's late than its not big deal,” answered Tohru," Its actually better if he's late, that way the class doesn't go into shock again, haha."

BRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRRING!!!

"There's the bell and Netto's not here," said Dekao.

"The natural order has been restored!" exclaimed the student who had been scared at Netto's "early" arrival yesterday.

Mariko-Sensei began attendance 3 minutes later, still no Netto. They finished attendance, still no Netto. The A.M announcements came over the P.A., still no Netto. And finally just as class was going to begin, BAM!! Netto slammed the door open.

"Sorry I’m late Mariko-Sensei," said Netto quickly.

"That's alright Netto, just try and be on time next time," replied Mariko-Sensei.

The class erupted in a wave of hoorahs and yippees, to them, Netto being late usually called for a normal day.

"Settle down class, settle down," said Mariko-Sensei, yet again puzzled at the class's odd behavior, "Netto please take your seat."

"Yes Mariko-Sense-WAGH!!"

Something had knocked Netto down and he was now lying on his face. But it wasn't something that knocked Netto down, but someone.

"Sorry I’m late Mariko-Sensei!"

Looks like someone else was late, it was Shiinji.

"That's okay Shiinji, please just take your seat...and get off Netto if you don't mind," answered Mariko-Sensei.

"Netto..?"

Shiinji looked down; he was indeed standing on Netto. He immediately jumped off and lifted Netto up and began brushing the dust off his clothes.

"Wah! Sorry Hikari-san!"

After he was done he left a dazed Netto where he stood and quickly walked to his seat, once again quite embarrassed as the class snickered. After Netto registered what had just happened he walked to his seat, waving to his friends quickly again and sat down.

"Now let's get started, class," said Mariko-Sensei as she walked to the monitor and touched the center to turn it on. The screen became bright and looked like a PET screen, however it had the name of classes lining the top. Mariko-Sensei took out an extendable pointing stick and pressed the button that read "Science". However nothing happened. She pressed it several more times and still nothing happened.

"Odd...oh well I guess for today we can start with Math," decided Mariko-Sensei, she reached to press the button labeled "Mathematics", but once again nothing happened. She tried pressing it a few more times, and still nothing happened.

"This is very odd...hold on class I’m going to go see get the maintenance men," said Mariko-Sensei.

She began walking towards the door, but just as she put her hand on the knob, a screen displaying several math problems appeared.

"Hm, I guess the monitor was malfunctioning," said Mariko-Sensei.

She walked back to the front of the room and began classes. The day once again was normal and when Netto and the others tried to sit with Shiinji he got up and went outside as soon they got their lunches. After lunch, everyone headed back to their classrooms and finished the school day; it was pretty uneventful except for the scene Shiinji caused in the morning. Soon, the dismissal bell was ringing again and, after assigning the class homework, Mariko-Sensei granted them permission to leave. Everyone rushed for the door, but when one of the students tried to open it, the knob wouldn't move. Someone must have locked the door.

"Hey what's the holdup!" cried Dekao, anxious to get home.

"It's locked," replied to kid at the door.

"What?! Lemme see it," Dekao said as he began pushing his way through the others, "Hey move it! Outta my way!"

When he reached the door he tried to twist the knob, but it wouldn't work. He tried pulling it, but that didn't work either. Eventually he was pulling the knob with all his might pushing against the door with his feet. Eventually his hands slipped and he was thrown back.

"Garr...stupid door," Dekao said angrily, "Whose the smart guy who locked the door?!"

"Everyone! Look at the monitor!" yelled Yaito.

Everyone turned around and looked at the monitor, someone had turned it on, but instead of the teaching screen, it was a broadcast of the MonitorComp. Inside were dozens of viruses slashing random parts of the MonitorComp with katanas.

"Zomon viruses!" exclaimed Netto, "Let’s take care of these things Rockman!"

Netto had his PET out and pressed the Plug In button.

"Plug In! Rockman! Transmission!"

And a red beam of light shot out of the PET and into the Monitor's sensor.

"Me and Gutsman'll back you up," said Dekao, "Plug In! Gutsman! Transmission!"

And a second beam of red light entered the sensor, this time from Dekao's PET.

Inside the MonitorComp...

Two beams of light shot down onto the ground of the Comp, one Blue and one the other yellow. Once the beams hit he floor, the turned into Rockman and Gutsman.

"Guts! We crush puny Zomon viruses right Rockman? Guts!"

"We sure are Gutsman, Lets do this."

Rockman then took his right arm, raised it and clenched his fist. His forearm morphed into a blaster, he then aimed it at a few Zomon.

"Rockbuster!" cried the blue navi, he fired his Rockbuster 4 times and each shot hit their target. As soon the shots hit the Zomon viruses, they immediately disintegrated.

"My turn! Guts Guts! GUTSHAMMER!!" Gutsman's hand morphed into a hammer and he slammed it to the ground, the force produced a shockwave and caused a lot of Zomon, who had taken the mistake of trying to charge him, to disintegrate.

"Netto, gimme some battlechips," Rock said to his brother and NetOp.

"Gotcha Rockman," Netto fished around in his pocket and produced a two small rectangles, "Dash Attack! Battlechip In! Download!" and he slotted the first chip in, "LongSword! Battlechip In! Download" and he slotted the second chip in.

Back in the comp, the chip data loaded and in a second Rockman held a bird-shaped virus in his left hand, while his right hand morphed into a longsword. He then was launched forward by the bird virus and got his sword ready, soon he was in the midst of the Zomon viruses and began swinging his longsword everywhere, taking down multiple Zomon.

"Your not the only one with fancy tricks Netto," said Dekao.

He began searching through his own pockets and after a few seconds produced three ships.

"Guts Punch! Triple Slot In! Download!" Dekao slotted three chips in.

"Program Advance! Z-Punch!" Dekao cried and the words Program Advance appeared on the PET screen.

Gutsman began to glow and his hands grew bigger, he then charged at the Zomon viruses screaming a battle cry, "GUTS! GUTS! GUUUUUUUUUUUUUTS!"

Soon Zomon viruses were all around him, but before they could slash, Gutsman raised his fists and screamed again. He then began punching everywhere he could at lightning speed, smashing dozens of Zomon in seconds.

"Not bad Dekao," said Netto.

After a few more Gutshammer shockwaves and buster shots, there was only one Zomon left, Rockman aimed at it and shot it through the head, causing the final virus to disintegrate.

"Good job Gutsman," said Dekao.

"You too Rockman, added Netto.

Netto and Dekao were just about to plug out when...

"Very good Rockman and Gutsman, very good indeed."

"Who said that?" asked Rockman.

"I did," said the mysterious voice again.

In a few seconds a gold beam of light shot down and produced a third navi. He was as large as Gutsman and wore a Silver bodysuit. He had golden torso armor with a gold chain wrapped around it, held in place by a large silver and gold lock. His legs were two big locks and two more locks were on his shoulders. And fingers were shaped like keys. On his head was a gold helmet with his navi symbol on the sides, a circle around a lock with a key inserted into it.

"Who the Guts are you? Guts!"

"Ah how rude of me not to introduce myself, my name is Vaultman. My specialty is locking up programs and even whole computers. I am the one responsible for the door being locked, you see I used my Golden Vault attack to safely store the door's Lock/Unlock Program where no one can find it. The only way to unlock the door is to defeat me I’m afraid."

"Then we'll do just that!" yelled Rockman, "Rockbuster!"

"Yeah! GUTSHAMMER!!"

And Rockman fired a series a shots at Vaultman while Gutsman produced another shockwave aimed at Vaultman.

"How rude, Safety Lock!"

And with those words, a giant lock appeared in front of Vaultman and blocked the shots and the shockwave, then it disappeared.

"What-But how?!" said a confused Netto.

"Yeah! NO ONE can just deflect Gutsman's shockwave that easily!" screamed Dekao.

"Ah but that is where you re mistaken, I can," said Vaultman, "And I can also do this!"

"Golden Vault!" And the lock on Vaultman's chest unlocked itself and the chains fell, his chest opened up and light shot out of it.

"You see, my Golden Vault not only stores things, it can release them!"

And the lights that came out of Vaultman's chest turned into Zomon viruses.

"So your the one who released those Zomon viruses," said Rockman.

"Correct," said Vaultman, "But these Zomon are different, these are Zomon 3; they are both stronger AND faster."

"Guts Guts! So what we'll just take 'em down like we did to those other Zomon!"

"Actually, I don't think you'll be doing that," said Vaultman, his mouth forming into a grin," Now DIE!!"

And the Zomon 3 viruses launched themselves towards Gutsman and Rockman at incredible speed.

"Get ready Rockman," said Netto.

And Rockman raised his sword, preparing to block.

"You too Gutsman," said Dekao.

And Gutsman raised his fists, ready to start swinging punches left and right.

However, just as the Zomon viruses got close enough to strike, they disappeared.

"Where did they go...?" said a puzzled Rockman.

"Maybe they ran away Guts!"

After a few seconds though, both Rockman and Gutsman could feel someone slash across they're backs with a sword. Rockman fell down, but Gutsman, who had better defense from his thick body, turned around and swung at the Zomon that had reappeared and attacked instantly deleting it.

"Rockman you okay?" asked a concerned Netto.

"Yeah, I’m fine Netto, he just caught me off guard,"

"You gotta be more alert Rockman; that attack didn't hurt me too much but it sure hurt you bad Guts."

As Rockman began to stand up though, more Zomon appeared and began to slash both him and Gutsman. However, more Zomon were attacking Gutsman because of his defense, soon however they were both low on health and on their knees.

"Hahahaha! I thought you two said you were going to take these Zomon down too," gloated Vaultman, smiling at Rockman and Gutsman's figures stooped in pain.

"Sorry Netto...they were just way too strong," wheezed Rockman.

"Guts, Dekao-sama, I failed you."

"Enough of this foolishness, delete them now!" ordered Vaultman.

And one Zomon stood forward and drew his sword, he raised it ready to finish them off. The Zomon began to lower his sword and Rockman and Gutsman closed their eyes, sure it was the end. However, they waited a few seconds and nothing happened, they slowly opened their eyes and saw that something had stopped the Zomon's sword. Actually, it wasn't something, but someone. Shiinaito was in front of them, kneeling with his sword drawn. Shiinji had plugged Shiinaito in just as the Zomon was about to strike. And now he was in front them, blocking the Zomon's blade with his own.

"Not today," said Shiinaito, before moving his blade and slashing the Zomon in half, deleting it. He then re-sheathed his sword.

The other Zomon alarmed at this trespasser, drew their blades and launched themselves at him.

"Pathetic," was all Shiinaito said.

Shiinaito then closed his eyes and didn't even draw his sword, but just stood there. The Zomon were now mere inches away and he still did nothing.

"Shiinji, tell Shiinaito to move or he's gonna get deleted!" yelled Netto.

However, Shiinji had his eyes closed too. It was no use, they were both in a trance.

The Zomon were now right in front of Shiinaito, and to Netto, Rockman, Dekao, and Gutsman, time seemed to slow down as they saw the blades begin to slash the entranced navi. Then suddenly, both Shiinji and Shiinaito opened their eyes. And before you could even blink, Shiinaito drew his sword and slashed all the Zomon in half, destroying them all with a split-second deletion with not a scratch on him. He then started to walk towards Vaultman.

"Im....impossible," said a frightened Vaultman, "How could you have deleted all those Zomon when their blades were already on you?! Its not possible!"

Shiinaito just kept walking towards Vaultman at a slow pace with his sword in hand.

"Get...Get Back! Stay away from me! I'm warning you!"

Shiinaito then stopped walking and stood there.

"Shiinji...you know what to do," said Shiinaito.

"Right," replied Shiinji and he drew three battlechips from his pocket. "Step Sword. Battlechip In. Download."

And Shiinaito's katana began to glow.

"Wh...what are you doing?!" yelled Vaultman.

Shiinaito said nothing.

"Hero Sword. Battlechip In. Download," said Shiinji, slotting in the second chip.

A Hero Sword appeared on Shiinaito's left arm.

"P...Please! Spare me!" begged Vaultman, he could tell what was coming next.

"And finally...Step Cross. Battlechip In. Download," and Shiinji inserted the third and final chip.

Shiinaito's sword and the Hero Sword on his arm began to glow, then the two swords morphed together into Shiinaito's katana, however now it was glowing brightly.

"No! Don't!" pleaded Vaultman.

"Program Advance! Evil Cut!" yelled Shiinji.

And Shiinaito's bolted towards Vaultman holding his sword with both hands while dragging the tip across the ground.

"Your a demon I say, a DEMON!!"

And now Shiinaito was in front of Vaultman, about to strike. But before he did, he said something.

"I'm not a demon.."

And he slashed through Vaultman three times so fast is looked like one slash.

"...I'm a samurai."

And Vaultman logged out, on the verge of deletion.

Vaultman, Plugging Out

Shiinaito's sword lost the glow and he re-sheathed it before plugging out.

Shiinaito, Plugging Out

Rockman and Gutsman plugged out too and returned to Netto and Dekao's PETs.

Rockman, Plugging Out. Gutsman, Plugging Out

Shiinji was the first of them to speak.

"Man that felt great, haven't fought anything tougher than a Mettaur in days!"

Netto and Dekao's mouths were agape. He just slaughtered a dozen Zomon 3s and obliterated a navi as if it were nothing. And he was acting as if he had just won a friendly sparring session.

"That...was...amazing!" yelled Netto, "How did you do that?!"

"I gotta admit it was impressive....but Gutsman could have done it too if he wanted too," said Dekao, impressed but still clutching his pride with an iron-grip.

"Oh well we've been practicing a lot, for about 3 years now," said Shiinji.

"Still that was pretty awesome," said Netto.

"Yeah I guess so," said Shiinji modestly, "Hey check if the door's unlocked."

Tohru grabbed the doorknob and it turned without any resistance allowing the door to finally be opened.

"Hooray! Now we can get home," said Yaito

And everyone rushed out the door to get outside, but as soon and Shiinji got outside, they were all waiting and ran to him. A couple of the stronger classmates lifted him up for a bit, causing everyone to laugh, Shiinji laughed the hardest. After they all calmed down a bit they let Shiinji down and everyone headed home. But today was different, Shiinji was skateboarding home with Netto, Meiru, Dekao, Tohru, and Yaito. He was happy now, no one made fun of his navi's nickname anymore. But most of all, he was happy he had some new friends.

Meanwhile, at some uncharted area...

"You have failed me, Rokar," said a mysterious voice.

"I am sorry my Lord, I do not know how that child's navi defeated my Vaultman," said the man named Rokar who was apparently Vaultman's NetOp.

"Never mind, you were always the most incompetent one anyway."

"That bastard..." thought Rokar.

"But no matter, did you at least find out the navi and NetOp's names?"

"Yes they were....Shiinaito.EXE and Shiinji, I believe."

"Very well, you are dismissed, repair Vaultman in case I need you again."

"Thank you sir."

And Rokar walked out of the room, the mysterious figure turned his chair to a screen.

"So.....Shiinaito and Shiinji...if they're working with that Rockman they'll definitely defeat us...in that case, we'll need to either eliminate him or persuade him to join us....Edge! Report now!"

A man appeared on the monitor in front of the figure.

"Yes my Lord," said the man on the screen, his figure was blacked out though to retain secrecy.

"I want you to watch this boy, Shiinji," The figure said as he produced a hologram of Shiinji,"And see if you can find a way to persuade him to join us. If you can find absolutely no way. Eliminate him!"

"Yes my Lord," answered the man before disappearing off the screen.

"And now I wait," said the figure," You will join us, The Dark Knife, Shiinji...or die! Muhahahahaha!"

And as the figure's laughter filled the room, Shiinji is chatting with his new friends online, unbeknownst of what is to happen to him in just a few days.

Second chapter done and yes I know the story is starting to focus more on Shiinji and Shiinaito but eventually they will be equally important. Anyway I hope you guys like it better than the first chapter

Dang i just realized how long this thing is O_o

Edit: after reading it again, i found a couple of typos so i fixed em, if i see anymore i'll change those too


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PostPosted: Sat Dec 24, 2005 4:07 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

A very compelling piece of work you've written here. In the first chapter you actually made it so that the reader can empathize with how awkward and alone Shinji must have felt; he initially struck me as a kind of lonely character, but his battle scene in this latest chapter has been a paradigm shift in the way I think of him and Shinaito. Suddenly they seem like two godly powerful silent lone warrior types. His potentially joining up with Rokar and the Dark Knife will definitely make for an interesting twist.

I don't know if Dekao's random klutziness is that out of character, since he does have his dumb moments at times, just not as often as Netto. Meiru's beating him with a Mighty Mallet when he said something stupid did seem like a rather exaggerated state of their relationship, however. The random bits of comedy here like the class's reactions to Netto's tardiness habits were quite amusing, but I'd recommend reserving slapstick comedy since this fic seems to convey a more serious note. That doesn't mean it wasn't an awesome fic; I for one definitely look forward to more.
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 24, 2005 2:11 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well...I'm not all to impressed, unfortunately. The concept of the chapter as a whole did not seem to work. It again seemed to be cliched, as many stories, unfortunately, have a similar situation...

Your villain seems to be the textbook one--I didn't detect anything unique about him, but then again, it is his first dabble into this fic, and it can probably be forgiven.

Erm...another nitpick I have is a continuity error. Warning: EXE6 Spoilers ahead: [spoil:7b4c13038f]Raito is Netto and Meiru's son, AFTER the end of EXE6, taking place twenty years after the events of the game. There is no way that Raito and Netto can be in the same room simultaneously and be at the same age.[/spoil:7b4c13038f]

Your character is getting rather close to becoming a Mary Sue. I cite how he managed to come out of nowhere while the main protagonists were getting themselves beaten back, and how he manages to defeat the enemy without any difficulty at all. I suggest looking over your fan character and thinking about how to tone him down to the level of a traditional character in the story, as to not place all of the focus on a navi that is needlessly elevated above the rest.

Other than that, it was a decent read. Good job.
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 24, 2005 11:50 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

well the ahem spoiler was actually a typo when i was typing Yaito, see it was dark and i was tired so i typed the "R" instead

And as for his abilities, I guess I could explain it. The Zomon are samurai type virus and Shiinaito is a samurai type navi, obviously melee combat with swords would be something he's already good at and would be something he could fight against easily. After destroying them, Vaultman was in shock that he immediately thought he could destroy anything leading to the "Your a demon I say! A DEMON!!". Also he used a program advance which is much more powerful than standard attacks. Since Vaultman was still in shock, he didn't think to defend. If you think about it, Vaultman could have quite easily blocked or absorbed Shiinaito or his weapon using his Safety Lock or Golden Vault, but the fear clouded his mind. And I also had Shiinji said "We've been practicing for about 3 years." Put three years of training in swords and a samurai type navi and I think you would have a pretty powerful navi. This was the logic I was using when I made this scene. Oh and another thing, i kinda got the entrance idea from Blues, usually when Rockman's gonna get destroyed in the games, BLlues comes out of nowhere at the last second to save him, this usually gives him the element of surprise, I incorporated that too.

Just a little anouncement, this story has reached 100 views, yay for me ^_^
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PostPosted: Tue Dec 27, 2005 3:38 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Well, you could have included that vivid description in with that chapter to make it seem less Mary Sue-ish. Surprise can only do so much. And another thing I noticed. You had Netto download a Sword and a Dash, but then said that Rockman had a longsword. Which is it? For a first though, this is pretty good. I hope this fic helps you some experience. I look forward to your next chapter, and good luck with the fic! Try not to make your navi too powerful!
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PostPosted: Sat Dec 31, 2005 1:59 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ah thanks Mugen.exe, I didn't see that one. And yeah I guess i should have, just kinda seemed obvious to me -.- . Anyway sorry for no update, I was snowboarding for the week and didn't have internet acess, I might type one sometime next week cause i got alot of stuff to do. Anyway Happy New Year's Eve to everyone and if I don't get on again, Happy New Year!!

Oh and I just remembered something, the Zomon viruses could move so quickly they would disappear as soon as Shiinaito got near them. So he deicided to wait until the very moment when they couldn't disappear, just as he was about to get struck ^_^
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PostPosted: Fri Jan 13, 2006 7:11 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Finally after ages, a new chappie! haha.

Chapter 3: The Metal Brothers

It's Saturday at 1 PM and Netto is still asleep. His pajama pant legs are pushed upwards to above his knees from rolling around in his sleep. His shirt is also pushed up. He has also kicked off the blanket and half of it is on the ground. A small line of drool comes down from his open mouth. He is holding a pillow in his arms and is on the edge of the bed.

"Zzzzz...Meiru....chan...." says Netto is his sleep as he holds the pillow closer and kisses it. Rockman however is awake and watching from the PET on Netto's computer desk; he was watching Netto and snickering.

"Sure he'll be mad, but it will be worth it," said Rockman as he turned on his video record option. He watched for a few more minutes as Netto kept making out with his pillow and eventually turned off the recorder and stored away the video.

"Well might as well wake him up," said Rockman as he drew in as much breath as he could, "NETTO-KUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUUN!!!!!!!!!!!"

Netto woke up with a start and fell to the floor off the edge of the bed with his lips still pressed against his pillow and his body bent backwards so his feet were by his head.

"What hit me?" asked Netto as he stared forward with a sleepy look.

"The floor, now stop daydreaming about Meiru and get dressed."

"What are you talking about?" asked Netto. A second later, Rockman played the video record of Netto's dream kissing.

"Rockman!!"

"Haha calm down Netto."

"Why can't I go back to sleep?" asked Netto quickly forgetting about his anger as he wanted to sleep more.

"Because you promised Meiru, Yaito, and Dekao you'd meet them at Yaito's tree house at 12 o'clock."

"So?"

"It's 1:10."

"SHIT!!" yelled Netto as he disentangled himself and began to dress himself as fast as he could. Soon he was in his white shirt with black elbows, black shorts with a green stripe on each side, and his orange vest. He grabbed his Headband and PET and tied the headband as he ran down the stairs. He grabbed a banana from the fruit bowl on the kitchen counter and put his sneakers on before snapping his rollerblade attachments on.

"Mom! I'm going to Yaito's place," called Netto as he opened the door.

"Ok honey, be safe," said Haruka Hikari.

"Have fun son," added Yuuichiro.

After saying goodbye, Netto ran out the door and rollerbladed down the streets as fast as he could. It didn't take him long until he was in front of the extremely large Ayanokouji Estate. He walked up to the gate to pull it open but was startled by a small electrical shock. He drew his hand back and shook it to get rid of the pain.

"What the hell?" said Netto as he held his hand.

"What's wrong Netto?" asked Rockman.

"The door's got an electrical charge running through it; I can't open it like normally."

"Huh, that's new,” said Rockman, “Look around Netto there should be some kind of buzzer system somewhere."

Netto looked to his left and saw a small box attached to a post, on it was a touch screen and a plug in sensor under the screen. Netto walked up the sensor and touched the screen. A message appeared and it read "Please plug navi in for security check." Netto took out his PET and looked at his brother.

"It says here to plug you in Rockman."

"Well go ahead Netto, maybe we can find out what's going on."

"Alright Rockman, let's do this. Plug In! Rockman! Transmission!" yelled Netto as a beam of light shot out from the PET and hit the sensor. Inside the machine a blue beam of light dropped down and deposited Rockman. Rockman got up and saw a program about 10 feet ahead of him. He walked up to it and it spoke to him.

"Hello, welcome to the SecureGate Mark 20, to disable the gate's security system we must check to see if your navi and operator information match any data in our database," stated the program as a machine shaped like a metal detector appeared next to Rockman.

"Netto the program here says we need to be scanned for a data match to get in."

"Yeah it says the same thing on the screen here."

The screen went from the words the program had said to a new message, "Please have navi walk through the data detector while we scan you."

"It says to walk through the scanner Rockman."

"Ok Netto."

Rockman walked through the detector and a light from above scanned him in a second while a scanner mounted on top of the security machine in the real world scanned Netto."

The program said "DNA scan, Operator: Netto Hikari. Navi: Rockman.EXE" while the same message displayed on the screen. The screen and program than said "Please place hand on the touch screen for a fingerprint scan and then place your eye in front of the scanner for a retina scan, we will then require voice recognition test."

Netto placed his hand on the screen as the screen memorized his hand. When Netto removed his hand, the screen read Fingerprint Scan: Positive, Netto Hikari. Then Netto placed his eyes in front of the scanner as a quick light flashed causing Netto to blink. The screen then added "Retinal Scan: Positive, Netto Hikari." to the list. Then Netto spoke his name in front of the machine and the machine took a few seconds to analyze his voice. Than the screen added "Voice Recognized: Netto Hikari" to the list before the information disappeared and the screen read "Data Recognized, Welcome Netto Hikari. Please plug out your navi and proceed through the gate."

Netto plugged Rockman out and a second later, the gate opened itself and Netto walked through and headed towards Yaito's advanced tree house. The house itself was made of Steel with several wires leading up the tree trunk into the floor. And instead of a rope ladder, there was an elevator door that went up the trunk and into the tree house. When Netto got up there he saw his friends there sitting on a couch getting ready to watch a movie.

"Hey guys sorry I'm late," said Netto as he walked over to the couch.

"You're really late Netto, we were going to start the movie without you," said Yaito obviously annoyed, as Netto took a seat next to Meiru, "You're just lucky Shiinji said we should wait."

"Shiinji's here?" asked Netto.

"Hi," said Shiinji as he leaned forward and waved so Netto could see him.

"Anyway can we start the movie already? I'm about to fall asleep," said Dekao getting impatient.

"Alright alright, don't get your chips in a mound," said Yaito as she pressed play on the remote.

"What movie are we watching?" asked Netto.

"Final Fantasy VII: Advent Children," said Tohru.

"Awesome!" cried Shiinji, a lover of swordfights, and Netto, a lover of action. However, they both cried for the fan boy dream, Tifa Lockheart. (Its true and you all know it ^_^)

All through the movie Shiinji and Netto were on the edge of their seats, screaming when a great fight scene ended and becoming entranced whenever Tifa came on the screen.

At the end of the movie, Netto and Shiinji had found some brooms and were trying to reenact the fight between Cloud and Sephiroth, taking turns being either of them.

Eventually, both of them whacked each other hard enough on the head that they fall back in a daze.

"See what happens when you guys get carried away?" Tohru said.

"Wazaaaaaah..." was Netto and Shiinji's only reply as they lay on the floor.

After an hour or so of prodding them and shaking their bodies, Netto and Shiinji finally woke up.

Once they were awake, Yaito ordered a pizza which was delivered in just 2 minutes by her butler. However, they found out they needed a lot more pizzas thanks to Netto and Shiinji. After eating, they all sat on the couch and started talking about anything that came to mind.

At about 5 o'clock everyone was getting ready to go home for dinner. Afterwards they would meet back at Yaito's for a sleepover.

However just as they were about to leave, a voice came from behind them.

"Halt you vile beings!"

Everyone turned to the screen and saw three navis on the screen. They all resembled NormalNavis, except one was gold, one was silver, and one was bronze. Each one's symbol was a solid circle of their color. Plus they all had a cape on matching their color. But to Netto, Meiru, Tohru, Yaito, Dekao, and Shiinji they all looked pretty lame.

"Who the doot are you losers?" asked Dekao.

"How rude," said the silver one.

"We are the Metal Brothers!" exclaimed the bronze one.

"And we have been sent by the Dark Knife to exterminate Rockman and Shiinaito," added the gold one, "But I suppose we should introduce ourselves."

They all got into a ridiculous pose that looked like something ripped from Dragon Ball Z.

"I am GoldMan!" cried the gold one.

"I am SilverMan!"

"And I am BronzeMan!"

*crickets chirping*

"And...?" said Netto.

"We said we're here to destroy you!" screamed all three, very annoyed.

"Whatever, let's take care of these guys!" said Netto.

"Plug In! Rockman! Transmission!"

"Plug In! Shiinaito! Transmission!"

"Plug In! Roll! Transmission!"

"Plug In! Iceman! Transmission!"

"Plug In! Gutsman! Transmission!"

"Plug In! Glyde! Transmission!"

6 beams of life shot into the plug in sensor. And inside the ScreenComp, six different colored beams shot down and deposited the navis.

"Alright guys, lets take these guys down so we can get out of here," said Rockman.

"Agreed," said Shiinaito as he crouched into a battle ready position.

"I'll start is off. Guts Gutshammer!" As Gutsman prepared to launch his attack, GoldMan spoke.

"Ah Ah Ah, only Rockman and Shiinaito can participate," said Goldman, "Golden Gate Trap!"

A gold cage formed around Gutsman and shackles at the top of the cage clamped his hands preventing him from attacking, two golden clamps attached to his feet making him immobilized.

"Gutsman!" cried Roll, Iceman, and Glyde as they ran to them.

"HotBody3! Battlechip in! Download!" said Yaito as she slid a battlechip into her PET, relaying the attack data to Glyde.

"Hot Body!" cried Glyde as his body was surrounded in flames which were sent towards the golden prison, causing it to superheat after a few minutes.

"Gettin kind of hot in here guys," said Gutsman as the intense heat began to take a toll on his health.

"Blizzard!" cried Iceman as he froze the extremely hot cage.

"T-Thats n-not helping!" said Gutsman now shivering furiously.

"Roll Whip!" cried Roll as she used her antenna to attack the frozen bars. However, none of the attacks worked and only succeeded in knocking the ice off the bars which beared no sign of damage. Gutsman on the other hand looked beaten up from the attempt to free him.

"What the...why didn't that work?!" cried all of them.

"Ha! Cheap tricks like that cannot penetrate the bars of my Golden Cage!" cried GoldMan triumphantly.

"Then how could their attacks hit me then!!" yelled Gutsman.

"I said the bars, not the inside."

Everyone fell onto the floor anima style except for Gutsman and the Metal Brothers.

"Enough of this foolishness," said Shiinaito growing impatient, "Everyone! Attack now!"

"Rockbuster!" Rockman fired off many purple plasma shots.

"Roll Flash!" Roll blew a kiss and fired off several hearts from her hand.

"Blizzard!" Iceman blew forth a storm of wind, snow, and ice.

"Glyde Cannon!" Glyde's cannon appeared and fired off several yellow plasma shots.

"Blade Shockwave!" Shiinaito swung his sword a few times and launched several blue shockwaves towards the navis.

"Allow me Gold," said SilverMan, "Shield of Silver!" And SilverMan's right arm transformed into a huge block of silver as he held it forward. All the attacks struck the massive silver wall and dissipated against it.

"My turn," said BronzeMan, "Bronze Barrage!" And Bronzeman summoned dozens and dozens of bronze swords and spears.

"Everyone! Brace yourselves!" cried Rockman as they all got ready for the coming attack.

However, neither Rockman and Shiinaito were hit, instead the swords had struck Roll, Iceman, Glyde, and Gutsman. This had forced all of them to log out.

"Why weren't we hit?"

"Because as we said, only you two are allowed to join this fight," said Goldman.

"And now we must attack!" cried SilverMan.

"GoldFist!" cried GoldMan

"SilverFist!" cried SilverMan

"BronzeFist!" cried BronzeMan

"Fist Stretcher!" All three cried and their enlarged fists stretched forward smacking Rockman and Shiinaito in the stomachs, knocking them back several feet until the fists retracted.

"Damn, these guys are stronger than I thought," said Shiinaito.

"We need to get in close enough to strike without them being able to block," said Rockman.

"But how can we-LOOK OUT!" But it was too late, the Metal Brothers' fists had extended again and collided into Rockman and Shiinaito. By now they were hurt badly and couldn't stand up straight easily. Rockman was on one knee while Shiinaito was barely standing using his sword as a crutch.

"We need a way to beat these guys, I'm hurting pretty bad and I don't think you're doing any better," said Rockman as several parts of them were de-rezzing at the edges.

"I may have an idea but it's going to take precise timing," said Shiinaito.

"What is it?"

"Alright here it is..."

After Shiinaito talked to Rockman, Netto, and Shiinji for a few minutes he became silent again. Rockman nodded and they both stood as tall as they could and braced themselves for the next onslaught of fists.

"This shall be your end! Gold Fist!"

"Silver Fist!"

"Bronze Fist!"

"Fist Stretcher!"

And all three fists headed straight for the two navis.

"Wait for it," said Shiinaito as he and Rockman got ready.

The fists kept getting closer and closer until they could count the feet. 12 feet, 11 feet, 10, 9, 8, 7...

"A few more seconds..." said Shiinaito.

6, 5, 4, 3...

"Get ready..."

2, 1...

"Now!" yelled Shiinaito as he and Rockman jumped up just as the fists would have hit them and landed on top of the fists.

"Shiinji, Netto, send us the chips now!" yelled Shiinaito.

"Right!" said Shiinji and Netto as they each pulled out an air shoes battlechip.

"Air Shoe! Battlechip in! Download!" they both cried as they slammed the chips into their PETs. A pair of jets appeared on the bottom of Shiinaito's and Rockman's boots as they began a mad sprint down two of the elongated arms boosted by the jets.

"So now what?" asked Rockman.

"Let's just say you're about to find out why I'm called the Frost Wolf Samurai," replied Shiinaito.

In just a few seconds they reached the ends of the arms and were in front of the three navis.

"Blade Shockwave!" cried Shiinaito as he fired off 6 blue shockwaves, each one struck an arm freezing the Metal Brothers' arms; however the elongated arms were only frozen at the shoulder.

"Rockman fire at the shoulders!" cried Shiinaito.

"Right! Rockbuster!" cried Rockman as he jumped into the air and fired off several purple plasma shots at the frozen shoulders causing the arms to fly off before shattering on the ground. The Metal Brothers were now disarmed, literally. Rockman and Shiinaito landed on the floor right in front of them.

"Uh guys...we're screwed aren't we?" said BronzeMan.

"Looks like it," said GoldMan.

"Rockbuster! Blade Shockwave!"

GoldMan Plugging Out!

SilverMan Plugging Out!

BronzeMan Plugging Out!


"It worked!" cried out Rockman as he have Shiinaito a high five.

"Indeed," as Shiinaito smirked

"Good job guys, now let's get you guys out of there," said Netto.

Rockman Plugging Out.

Shiinaito Plugging Out.


Netto and Shiinaito put their PETs away and gave each other a high five. Suddenly they heard another voice behind them.

"Stop where you are vile beings!"

"Not again..." said Meiru.

But when they turned around it wasn't the three navis on the screen again, instead it was 3 boys standing on the window edge. One had orange brownish hair and a bronze jumpsuit. Another one had silver hair and a silver jumpsuit. And the last had golden blonde hair and a gold jumpsuit.

"Lemme guess...the Metal Brothers?" asked Shiinji.

"Yes how did you-"

"Your navis," said Shiinji flatly.

"Well...thank you for killing the drama!" said the blonde one.

"Listen do we have to fight you morons two or can we leave?" said Yaito.

"We are from the Dark Knife and we have an offer for Shiinji,
said the silver haired one, "But first we must introduce ourselves. I am Thomas Silver."

"I am Richard Gold." said the blonde one.

"And I'm Jason Bronze."

"Yeah we don't care," said Dekao.

"Anyway," said Richard , "We have come to offer you to join the Dark Knife, Shiinji Takanama; our leader has an interest in you."

"No," said Shiinji flatly.

"I'm sorry? Maybe you didn't think about it enough, please reconsi-" said Jason before being cut off.

"I said no now get out of my face," said Shiinji becoming aggravated.

"Listen you insolent little bug," said Richard, "Our Master Straife has invited you to join and you reject?! You are making a big-"

Shiinji walked towards them until he was in front of them.

"I see that you've reconsidere-" But Richard never finished as he pushed all three Metal Brothers off the window edge, however none of them fell t the ground.

"You little...You're just lucky that we have support cables attached to the top of the tree."

"Oh really," said Shiinji as he pulled one of the blue rectangles from his pocket face (remember those?). He positioned it so that it was lined up horizontally with the cables. He then clenched the rectangle tightly and a blue katana blade sprung out of the rectangle severing all of the cables. All of the brothers fell down leaving three large holes in the ground next to the tree. A helicopter flew down and got all three of the boys before lifting up again. Once it was level with the window they could see a middle-aged balding man with a large walrus moustache wearing a gold and white suit.

"Hello young Shiinji, I am Rokar, member of the Dark Knife and VaultMan's operator."

"What do you want? Does your navi want another beating?" asked Shiinji defiantly.

"No no no I mean no harm, we just want you to join us," said Rokar grinning, "I'm sure you only refused because of how weak and incompetent those three were, but we shall be back." And with that, Rokar and the helicopter flew away.

"Freaks..." said all of them in agreement as Shiinji clenched the rectangle, now revealed to be a sword hilt, as the blade retracted and he placed it back on his pocket face.

"Look at it this way Shiinji, we now know who is doing these things and who their leader is," said Shiinaito.

"Yeah true..." said Shiinji.

"Let's go home guys I'm getting hungry," said Netto.

"Sure," said everyone else as they piled into he elevator and walked to the gate of the Ayanokouji Estate.

"Hey Shiinji, mind telling me where you got those swords?" said Netto.

"Sorry Netto, my dad made 'em and I’m pretty sure he's not going to be mass-produced," said Shiinji grinning.

"Awww man," said Netto. Everyone else began laughing before heading home for dinner. After dinner, they all went back to Yaito's for the sleepover in her tree house, where 6 beds had been set up in just 2 hours. They were all up doing various things, playing games, etc. and went to sleep at around midnight.

Meanwhile, at the Dark Knife Headquarters...

"We are sorry Master Straife," said Richard.

"Shut up you moronic boy, not only did you fail in getting him to join us, you three also revealed who we are and my identity!" screamed Master Straife as he clenched the arms of the chair he sat in.

"But Master," began Thomas.

"Enough...get out of here now before I decide to have you all disposed of!"

"Yes sir!" said all three as they scrambled out of the room.

"Morons," said Master Straife as he turned his chair around to face a screen in front of him.

Edge! Report now!" yelled Master Straife.

A man covered from head to toe in ninja gear dropped down from the ceiling behind Master Straife. He wore a white suit with green armor covering his forearms, shins, chest, and feet. On his back were two short swords. And his face was masked with a green wrap. On his left leg was a pouch for his PET and battlechips, and a small machine was strapped onto his left arm. He kneeled down before his lord.

"Yes my lord?" said the ninja, Edge.

"Your subordinates failed miserably Edge," said Master Straife as he gripped his arm rests, "Not only did they fail but they revealed my identity."

"My apologies sir, I will make sure they are punished."

"No need Edge, I already have something planned for them," said the shadowy man seated with his back to Edge, "In the mean time, I want you to keep watching Shiinji."

"Actually sir, if I may," said the loyal ninja.

"What is it?"

"I would like to send my best ninja after Shiinji to persuade him to join us. And if Shiinji refuses, then they can easily dispose of him."

"Very well Edge, you may go on with your plan. Just don't mess up like those idiot subordinates."

"Yes my lord," and with that, Edge disappeared from the room to prepare his plan.

A video clip of Shiinji and Shiinaito's fight started playing on the screen.
After the clip was over, Master Straife grinned evilly.

"You shall be ours, Shiinji. Whether you like it or not," said Master Straife as he turned off the display plunging the room into darkness.

Well that's it for chapter three. Hope it got better oh and kudos to anyone who got the joke about Richard Gold's first name, it might be a little tough.
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