Always Watching: Hu/AA/R *Finished*

Neko · Last edited by Neko on Thu Mar 02, 2006 9:12 pm; edited 11 times in total

Once again, a fict that is compleately Yue's fault. With a side helping of the new stream ep. One line and I swear XDDD Okay now, ANOTHER NEKO VIRUS FIC! HA! Because I can :3 Anywho, a multi-chapter Lainet for those who wanted it. And here's the first chapter. Hope you like Yue

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Laika looked over Netto’s spiky brown hair at their target. Two navi’s were shaking hands on the screen in front of them and exchanging a conversation that neither one could hear. “Okay,” Laika whispered in Netto’s ear, “they’ve finished the deal, now we can attack.”

Netto grinned and aimed his PET at the plug in port over the screen. Laika aimed his as well and both Rockman and Searchman pixilated in the net next to the two navis. Searchman crossed his arms, “Okay, which one of you has the dark chip.”

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Meanwhile, a young intern at Sci Labs was making his rounds on the viruses stored in the building. “Freeze virus,” he said looking at a formless virus in a Petri Dish “check,” he scraped his big red pen across the clip board he was holding in a deft stroke. “Degenerating Virus,” he looked at a pulsating black mass in another Petri Dish, “check,” he said with a small air of confidence. “Neko Virus,” he looked at the small cat in the Petri Dish. It glared at him with two mesmerizing yellow eyes. He gulped nervously and pulled the red pen across his clip board with a shaking hand, “check,” he said falteringly. “Well, that’s all of them,” he smiled at the viruses, “night.”

He turned around to go turn off the light but be spun too quickly on the floor that had been mopped only seconds before. With a cry he crashed backwards into the nearest case containing the Neko Virus. His pen was held point down like a javelin and it wedged it’s self into the glass. Unknowingly the man pushed his hand against the glass to try and stand up.

The Neko virus watched with interest.

The pen dug deeper and deeper into the small crack that was created on the initial fall. Finally there was a hiss of air being released and the man spun around just in time to see the Neko Virus log out.

The man stood dumbfounded for a few seconds, sating stupidly at the glass case, “Oh no,” he breathed.

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Back at Sharro Rockman and Searchman were both fighting the two navi’s that were both hopped up on Dark Chip energy. The black flames licked Rockman’s skin and he winced. “They’re really strong, Netto-kun,” he said while jumping back.

Searchman backed up until he stood back to back with Rockman. Netto growled at his PET and desperately tried to think of a way to escape. Laika touched his shoulder, “Netto, can you have Rockman use a mini bomb chip?” he asked.

“That won’t do anything!” Netto hissed.

“Trust me,” Laika said.

Netto looked at him and caved in. “All right, but if Rockman gets hurt I’m coming after you.”

Laika gave him a wry grin, “I don’t doubt it,” he said softly.

Netto held the small chip in between his fingers and said, “Mini bomb, battle chip, slot in!” he pushed the chip into his PET with vigor and the small bomb appeared in Rockman’s hand.

“Throw it on the ground,” Searchman said softly so as to not alert the two navi’s who were circling them like overgrown birds of prey. “Right between us.”

Rockman nodded and let the mini bomb drop behind his back. Both he and Searchman suffered minimal damage but Laika pushed in an area steal chip while the smoke covered the two navi’s from view.

Searchman appeared in the far distance of the computer and held up his sniper. He looked through his eye scan and caught the first navi in the back. His data was so corroded by the Dark Chip that the power actually turned on him once the navi frame no longer had enough energy to sustain the chip and he was deleted in a matter of seconds. Netto winced at the navi’s cry. “Horrible,” he muttered while slotting in a sword chip for Rockman to use.

“We’re here to work, not to pity,” Laika said coldly.

Netto gave him an angry glare but he snapped his attention back to the computer quickly enough. Rockman and the other navi were locked in a furious sword duel and Rockman was slowly but surely being overpowered by the Dark Navi.

“Searchman,” Laika said into his PET.

Searchman nodded and pulled up his sniper.

“Pull away when I say so,” Laika said to Netto quietly.

“We can do this on our own,” Netto growled.

“Netto,” Laika hissed, “I have no time to play games with you. Now follow my lead or you’ll let the navi get away.”

Netto opened his mouth to argue but he was interrupted by Rockman, /Netto-kun, just do as he says./

Netto glared at Laika but shut his mouth and looked at his PET. Laika vaguely wondered why the spirited young Net Savior didn’t retaliate but his puzzlement was interrupted by Searchman. “I have him on target,” Searchman said, “shall I fire?”

“Yes,” Laika said giving Netto one last side long glance. “Pull out,” he said to Netto.

“Rockman,” Netto growled into his PET.

Rockman pushed forward on his sword and then loosened up suddenly to let the Navi fall forward. Then he jumped smoothly out of the way.

Searchman squeezed the trigger and a magenta beam of light sliced through the navi’s icon. He screamed for a few seconds as he was deleted then he was nothing more the data powder on the net floor and soon after even that was gone.

Netto glared angrily at Laika, “You didn’t have to delete him!” he yelled.

Laika gave Netto a superior look that read ‘don’t mess with me.’ “I took care of the navi’s as I was ordered. You will be good to remember what your orders are Netto.”

Netto glared at him but before he could retaliate Laika’s PET came to life. Laika put it in front of his face and opened touch screen. “Yes sir!” he saluted his PET.

Netto looked over Laika’s shoulder to see that it was General Slovski who was addressing them. Even Netto knew they were talking to a very important man. “Private Laika, I want you to jack out your navi now and keep him from all tethers to the net.”

Laika’s salute faltered and he lowered his hand slowly. “Yes sir, but why?”

“I have just been informed that the Neko Virus has escaped from Electopia Sci Labs and is now rampaging in the capital. Good day Private,” he said gruffly and the connection cut off abruptly.

Both boys stood there a little stunned for a few seconds then looked at their navis. Netto put his PET up to let Rockman back in but a giant cat overshadowed them before the hapless navi’s could log out. It gave a deafening meow and logged out of the computer. “Oh hell,” Netto said softly.

Laika quickly pressed the log out button on his PET and Netto did the same. They watched their Navi’s for any sign of change or difference.

Rockman was the first to double over as his data rewrite its self. “Netto-kun…” he said slowly.

Laika watched in a mesmerized way as his navi changed. “Searchman,” he said in a stunned voice. Before he could come to grips with what was going on he felt Netto collapse next to him. “Netto!” he said in an even more shocked voice.

Netto’s face was contorted with pain and Laika quickly pulled him into his arms to see what was wrong. He quickly noticed what was going on, even if he didn’t believe it. “Netto…” he said again.

Finally, after about five minutes it was all over. Netto was barely conscious and the navi’s were both on the floor of the net. Laika and Netto’s PET’s slowly whirred as the Navi programs forced themselves back on line. Laika was more concerned with Netto at that point however. “Netto?” he asked.

Netto looked up at Laika with a very worried expression in his eyes. “Is Rockman?” he asked.

Laika wanted to shake the boy to get some sense into him. “You net navi is fine!” he snapped. “What about you! You… you…” he tried to find words to explain what had just happened.

Netto shook his head dazedly, “The Neko Virus?” he asked.

Laika, still not quite believing what he was seeing pulled off one of his gloves and put his bare hand on Netto’s head. He rubbed the ear just to make sure it was real. Netto growled and flicked his ears back, making him look much more threatening. “Leave them alone,” he said warning.

Laika finally snapped, “Netto, why the hell are you infected with a computer virus?!” he yelled, his voice echoing off the concrete walls.

Netto gave Laika an expression that was a mixture of fear, resilience and anger. “Why should I tell you?” he snapped back.

“Netto-kun…” Rockman said softly.

Netto looked at his PET and rubbed his forehead. “Ask Rockman,” he said finally.

Laika looked at Rockman and the navi cleared his throat uncomfortably. “Well, you see Laika-san, I’m not… a normal navi,” he said making sure to choose his words carefully.

Searchman looked at Rockman with an odd expression in his red eyes and Laika just watched the blue navi with interest.

“I was born… a human,” he said finally. He held up his hand before Laika or Searchman could speak. “Let me finish. I was born Saito Hikari, the elder twin.”

“Twins?” Laika asked.

Rockman nodded, “Yeah, anyways I died when I was about 18 months. Papa took my DNA and turned it into data, de-synched it from Netto-kun’s by .0001% and re-created me as Rockman.EXE to watch over Netto-kun.”

“Lord knows he needs it,” Laika said in a stunned voice.

Netto shot him a dirty looked and Rockman gave him a weak smile. “A few months ago I was… damaged, badly. Papa told Netto about me and gave him a choice,” Rockman continued.

“That is?” Laika asked.

“I could save Rockman’s life by letting him re-synch our DNA,” Netto continued. “But what happened because of that means anything that happens to Rockman will happen to me and vice versa.”

Laika stared at them, unsure of what to say. Finally he picked up his PET and stood up, his eyes flashed at Netto, “Are you insane?” he yelled. “Navi’s are created to be deleted and regenerated! If your navi is deleted once, you’ll die!”

Netto’s new ears went back and he stood up to Laika. “You don’t think I don’t know that! I’m perfectly aware of the consequences Laika! But Rockman… he’s…” Netto’s anger faded from his eyes to be replaced by an emotion Laika couldn’t place. “He’s irreplaceable.”

“Netto-kun…” Rockman said softly.

Netto glared defiantly at Laika, “So I’ll willingly take anything that happens to Rockman if it means I can be with him!”

Laika was taken aback as he stared at the shorter Net Savior. He looked behind Netto and cross his arms, “You have a tail,” he said coldly.

Netto picked up his own PET and crossed his own arms. “I don’t care,” he muttered.

Laika rubbed his forehead. “I’ll yell at you later, right now we need to get you back to base and out of sight.”

“But…” Netto protested.

“Do you want to explain to the world what you did?” Laika asked, towering over Netto. “Cause I can assure you the world will not be as forgiving as I,” he said, his green eyes flashing angrily.

Netto stood down, looking almost dejected.

Laika sighed, “Look, just… let me call the shots for a few hours while I sort this out okay?”

/Netto-kun,/ Rockman said warningly.

Netto nodded, but didn’t look too happy about it. “All right,” he muttered.
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Yue-chan · Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2005 8:08 pm Post subject:

awsome first chapter, Neko! Poor Netto, Laika is so mean to him. ^^;; I can't wait for the next chapter! Yet another fic for me to keep up with! \o/
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**Kai** · Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2005 8:36 pm Post subject:

/o/ Since you left before I could finish reading and comment in IRC, I'll just say what I think here.
Wai! It's the return of the neko virus! I love the concept, at first I wondered if it was a good idea to repeat it, but you handled it very well. :3 If Laika and neko-Netto get any cute scenes together, I hope you don't mind if I jump on it and draw them >_> <_<
Anyway, you're doing great at keeping them in-character and having them interact just like they would normally. Kudos! I can't wait to read more /o/~

Nazne · Shukei - Hakuteiken Joined: 20 Mar 2005 Posts: 1133

YOU WRITE SO HAPPY. <__< I get depressed whenever I try to write anything even remotely sad, but you portrayed the emotional aspect of Netto and Saito's link very well here. Laika is written well, also-fairly IC when you take into consideration the asshole he was in Axess. Although I'm wondering why the world would be unforgiving if it knew about Netto and Rock's link, but I guess I'm missing something here? XD

Just out of curiosity, how many fics have you written containing the Neko Virus? >>

-BMA

Midnight · Posted: Mon Jul 25, 2005 11:08 pm Post subject:

Oh. I'm afraid I have never read one of your fics that feature your namesake virus *bricked*...

Anyway...I'm afraid I do not know much about the Neko virus. However, that doesn't stop me from enjoying this fic.

Somehow I imagined Laika to be slightly more forgiving than he is portrayed here, but his appearance as a true jackass is not so much of a stretch, so it is very believeable. I don't see why the world has to know about their link, though.

I saw a few typos here and there, but time is short and I cannot find them all.
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Neko · Posted: Tue Jul 26, 2005 7:33 am Post subject:

Laika is being a jerk because he's a little stunned. He has no idea what just happened and Laika is someone who strikes me as being a person who likes to always be on top of things.

He'll warm up in due time, don't worry.

Oh, and I have 3 fics with the Neko Virus X3
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Nazne · Shukei - Hakuteiken Joined: 20 Mar 2005 Posts: 1133

On top of *things*, you say. >>

*shotbricked*

-BMA

Kitty-Chan · Posted: Wed Jul 27, 2005 2:28 pm Post subject:

Yay! More NVM (Neko Virus Madness)!! & LaikaNetto on top of that! You have got to update this one ASAP; we'll all die of suspense otherwise. I'm definitely going to be watching closely for this to be updated. :D
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Neko · Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 3:22 pm Post subject:

Laika looked outside as new snow started to fall in the rapidly depleting sunlight. “Okay, listen to me; we need to get back to my dormitory for now. Then I’ll call the head of base and see what exactly happened.” He cast a wary glance at Netto, “Just… follow me,” he said.

Netto crossed his arms but did as he was told. Laika opened the door and a strong gust of nearly sub zero temperature wind blew into the room making Netto and Laika wince. “We were supposed to be back by now,” Laika growled.

“I didn’t set the Neko Virus free you know!” Netto retorted.

Both Rockman and Searchman gave silent groans as they got ready for another quarrel between Netto and Laika. Instead Laika’s eyes softened, “I know,” he said.

Netto’s gaze went from angry to puzzled, he blushed and looked away but didn’t say anything.

Laika pushed ahead in the knee deep snow as they walked back to the dormitories in the last few minutes of sunlight. Netto was colder then he had ever felt in his life and it was so bad even Rockman was shaking uncontrollably. Laika noted this and unconsciously picked up the pace.

“Come on,” he said.

“I-I k-k-k-know…” Netto said through chattering teeth.

Laika looked back at Netto and finally realized what was wrong. Netto ears were freely blowing in the wind and he had learned awhile ago that cat’s ears where what regulated a cat’s temperature. It was certainly plausible, especially because humans also lost most of their body heat through their heads. Those two facts combined and the fact that it was just damn cold out made Laika realize that they needed to pick up the pace before Netto collapsed.

Laika reached over and grabbed Netto’s hand, trying to pull him along as best he could. “Why the hell didn’t you wear a hat?” he growled.

Netto glared at Laika. “B-be…” Netto shivered violently. “Be-c-cause I d-didn’t th-th-think w-we’d b-b-be out h-here th-th-this l-l-late…”

Laika sighed; true he doubted either of them did. Much less figure in the fact that the Neko Virus was going to get loose while they were on a mission. “Just keep up with me,” he said.

They walked the precious few blocks back to Laika’s building. It wasn’t a far walk by any means, and it wasn’t particularly dangerous unless you were dumb enough to be outside after dark. However the dark was partially a blessing because no one spotted them going into the building. Laika pulled Netto over to the elevator and pressed the up button and waited patiently. Netto and Rockman were both still shaking violently but at least they weren’t so cold that they stopped shaking.

The elevator opened up and they went inside. Laika hit the button with a “4” on it and the doors slid shut. Netto leaned against the wall and watched the numbers on the top of the doors change as they went up. The entire trip to Laika’s dormitory was a silent one.

Finally the doors opened and they walked to the fourth room at the end of the hall. Laika pulled out his keys and opened the door. Netto went inside and Laika followed him, shutting the door behind them. Laika took off his jacket and Netto did likewise, whatever good it did him regardless.

“Well?” Laika asked.

“W-well wh-what?” Netto asked while giving Laika a dirty look.

Laika pulled off his gloves and walked over to Netto. Netto looked up at him and Laika felt his ears. Netto winced but didn’t protest because Laika’s hands were so warm. Laika could tell immediately that Netto was very cold because as soon as he touched Netto’s ears he stopped shivering. Laika let them go after a few seconds and tossed Netto a blanket. “You need to be more careful with your ears,” Laika said simply.

“And just what the hell does that mean?” Netto asked while looking at the blanket like it was some kind of foreign object.

Rockman and Searchman linked into the main computer to get a better view of what was going on.

“Netto-kun,” Rockman said. “Cat’s temperatures are regulated through their ears.”

Netto blinked, “Really?”

Rockman nodded, “Really.”

“So, that’s why I was so cold?” Netto asked.

“Yes,” Laika answered before Rockman could. “Now,” he said while picking up a small hand held computer and sitting on the couch, “I’m going to find out what really happened.”

Netto walked over and sat next to Laika, the blanket completely forgotten for the time being. “What’s that?” he asked.

“A military issued radio/handheld. I can get all the latest information before the general public does on this,” Laika explained.

“Cool,” Netto said simply.

Laika hushed the younger boy and turned it on. “All units who have navis that aren’t infected are to report to general Ansei, all units who are infected please stay in your dorms for further instruction.” A voice came out of the small device. “I will repeat the first broadcast now; the Neko Virus escaped from Sci-Labs at 7:27 this evening. It has mutated since last time and the vaccine will no longer be enough to keep it at bay, however navi’s who were vaccinated last time will only be infected by the first level of the virus. So your navi’s are in no danger as of now, however we request that…” Laika switched off the radio.

“Well, at least we know what happened,” Netto said in a hopeful voice.

Laika leaned into the couch with his hands in a steeple position over his mouth and nose. He breathed out slowly through his nose as if carefully choosing his next words. “Netto?” he asked.

“Yeah?”

“I think,” Laika placed the hand held on the table. “That you should stay with me for the time being.”

“Why?” Netto asked.

Laika glanced at him, he was angry or upset with the idea, just puzzled. “Well, until we learn more about this, or until the virus is captured you’re going to have to stay on base. I doubt there are any air ports open with this thing on the loose. So, instead of reporting to the General I can just say you’re staying with me to avoid any…” Laika paused, “awkward situations.”

Netto shrugged, “Fine with me. Rockman?”

Rockman smiled, “I don’t mind, Netto-kun.”

Laika nodded, “Okay, now that we’ve got that out of the way, are you hungry?”

Netto looked at Laika, a little surprised.

“What?” Laika asked.

Netto shook his head, “Nothing. Yeah, I’m hungry,” he said answering Laika’s first question.

Laika smiled and nodded, “I have oven pizza,” he said.

“Sounds good,” Netto replied.

Laika went into his small kitchenette and put the pizza in the oven. Then he put the tea kettle on and started to warm some water. “Stressed, Laika-san?” Searchman asked from the kitchen monitor.

“Why do you ask?”

“You only make tea if you’re stressed,” Searchman pointed to the now simmering tea kettle.

Laika gave his navi a short laugh and opened a cupboard and pulled out a bag on chamomile tea. “I’m not stressed; I’m just a little surprised is all.”

“Netto-san?” Searchman asked.

Laika nodded, “Who knew such a thing could happen. However… what’s done is done and I guess all I can do is deal with it the best I can.”

Searchman nodded and the tea kettle went off.

Netto’s ears went back as the shrill whistle pierced his conversation with Rockman. “Ow…” he said.

Laika quickly pulled the tea kettle off of the stove. “Sorry,” he called into the kitchen after guessing what Netto and Rockman’s responses to the tea kettle were after seeing his own navi’s response.

“It’s fine!” Netto yelled back.

Laika looked at the water. “Want some tea?” he yelled.

“Sure,” Netto called back.

Laika poured two cups of chamomile tea into two cracked china cups. He came back out into the main room and handed one to Netto who took it gratefully. “Smells good,” he said.

Laika nodded, “I like tea,” he said as an after thought to the nod.

Netto drank some and looked at Laika. “Um Laika?”

“Yeah?” Laika asked.

“Are you mad at me for not telling you about me and Rockman sooner?” Netto replied.

Laika looked at his tea and drank some, “A little,” he admitted. Netto’s ears dipped slightly and Rockman looked a little put out. “But what’s done is done and at least we can do something about it.”

Netto gave Laika a broad smile and to his amazement Laika smiled back.

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After they had eaten, they watched TV to see if there was any news on the Neko Virus. At about 10 pm Netto fell asleep on the couch while leaning against Laika’s shoulder. Rockman fell asleep in his PET ten minutes later and 15 minutes after Netto was asleep Laika realized that he had fallen asleep.

“Searchman?” he asked while looking at Netto.

“Yes, Laika-san?”

Laika turned off the TV. “What do I do?” he asked.

“You should probably put them in bed, Laika-san,” Searchman suggested.

“Won’t he wake up?” Laika asked.

Searchman shrugged.

Laika sighed and cradled Netto’s body. Netto stirred a little but quieted down when Laika picked him up. “He’s a heavy sleeper,” Laika noted.

Searchman nodded and picked up Rockman, transferring them into Netto’s PET. Rockman was not quite the light sleeper his brother was and woke up to give Searchman a sleepy smile. The military navi nodded back then returned to the monitors throughout the dorm.

Laika carried Netto through the dorm and lay him down in the extra bedroom that would be used if Laika was ever given a room mate. He pulled the covers over Netto and walked out of the room taking care to shut the door.

“This will certainly be an interesting time, huh Searchman?” Laika asked his navi.

“Yes, Laika-san,” Searchman agreed.

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This chapter is for DS whom I believe wanted Laika fluff :3
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Yue-chan · Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 3:30 pm Post subject:

so cute! *dies of sugar overload* XD rawr, Neko! You've gotten me hooked on LaiNet now. Is soo cute! And you're writing Laika IC very well.
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Midnight · Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 3:31 pm Post subject:

Just fluff? Oh well.

Nothing seems out of the ordinary so far. No errors to find, which is always a good thing.

I like that you have Laika softening up a touch about the situation at hand, but there is a part of me that says that perhaps you have Laika becoming understanding a bit too soon. Nevertheless, it is still quite believeable for a person of Laika's character, given his situation. Good job.

I still wonder how you will keep Netto out of the way of the general public, so that there should be no reason for the link to be revealed to them.
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**Plantman** · Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 4:33 pm Post subject:

Ahh! Such lovely piece. I don't quite think Laika's understanding behaviour is too rushed considering stream probably has an influence around the date this is happening.

It's nice to see Laika not being a major asshole most of time. I didn't catch any typoes that I can remember. I think it's been a wonderful chapter. The only thing I'm a but confused about is if Rockman and Searchman are infected with the virus and have the cat-like appearance or not.
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Neko · Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 4:39 pm Post subject:

Yes they are, I made that quite clear in the first chappie.

Don't worry you get Searchman Neko fluff soon >3
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kuro-kitsune · Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 4:43 pm Post subject:

i told my friend about your first lainett fic, and it made her day. (and that's saying something. she is WAY more picky about her fics than i am)

i'm sure if she could see this, she'd freak out. (it's the grammer and spelling. it's so....)

as for me.... I LOVE THIS!! we need more lainett junk!!! [translation= we need more lainett. period] X]

anyway, i'm looking forward to the next chapter. [wanders off]

- kuro-kitsune

PS: fear the chance of random pics from me to you. *cough*iflaikastopshatingme*cough*

Kitty-Chan · Posted: Thu Jul 28, 2005 6:02 pm Post subject:

WAI~III!!!!!! Fluff fluff fluffity fluff! I love this! :D Need...MORE!! T_T
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Nazne · Shukei - Hakuteiken Joined: 20 Mar 2005 Posts: 1133

Aww. :D That was cute. Netto seems a bit more pissy than usual, but under the circumstances I can't exactly fault him. >> Interesting usage of facts, by the way. I didn't know that about the kitty ears. XD

Anyways, I just happened to notice that your sentences sometimes tend to be a bit run-on; definition: too many actions in one phrase. It's not a critical error, but it makes some parts seem blocky and long. I'd recommend using commas to separate two separate actions in one sentence.

"Netto crossed his arms but did as he was told. Laika opened the door and a strong gust of nearly sub zero temperature wind blew into the room making Netto and Laika wince."

Into "Netto crossed his arms(,) but did as he was told. Laika opened the door(,) and a strong gust of nearly subzero temperature wind blew into the room(,) making Netto and Laika wince."

I prefer to think of this usage of commas as breaking up the sentences into more digestable chunks. ^^;; You might want to avoid repetition of the character names as well-it sounds slightly redundant when one states "Johnny did this, and then Johnny did that, and then this happened to Johnny, and then a block of ice crushed Johnny's nose..." etc. You haven't been guilty of that so much, but you might should want to watch for that in the future.

"Netto crossed his arms, but did as he was told. Laika opened the door, and a strong gust of nearly subzero temperature wind blew into the room, making the two Net Saviors wince."

Just a bit of nitpicking. XD I like the fluffy development, though.

-BMA

Neko · Posted: Thu Aug 04, 2005 5:25 pm Post subject:

The next morning Rockman was up with Laika and Searchman at dawn. Rockman watched in silence as Laika went through a series of stretches, warm ups and various combat poses that were obviously part of a training regimen of some kind. After Laika was done he changed into a pair of long, pale brown pants and a loose green sleeveless hoodie pulled over a black long sleeved shirt. “Well Searchman, any new orders?” he asked.

Searchman shook his head, “Not yet Laika-san. All infected teams are asked to remain in their dorms until further notice.”

“So you have the day off then?” Rockman asked.

Laika sighed and walked into the small kitchen. “So it would seem.”

“You don’t like having days off?” Rockman guessed.

Laika shook his head, “No, it’s just that I like to be busy.”

Rockman laughed. “Completely opposite from Netto-kun.”

Laika gave Rockman a half smile as he put a pan on the stove and turned it on. “I’m well aware of that, Rockman.”

“Laika-san, is there anything you wish for me to do?” Searchman asked.

Laika sighed, “Well, I’d like to receive some orders or maybe do something about this,” he said while greasing the pan, “But we were told by the general to stay put, so that’s what we’ll do for now.”

“All right, Laika-san,” Searchman said.

“You like to be busy too?” Rockman asked Searchman quietly.

Searchman nodded, “I want to do something about this, I don’t like being told to wait.”

Rockman patted his shoulder, “It’s all right, I’m sure something will happen soon.”

“But what?” Searchman asked.

Rockman shrugged, “Can’t really get any worse then this, can it?” he said. “Only way to go is up.”

“You’re gonna jinx us,” Netto said quietly to Rockman through his PET.

“Netto-kun!” Rockman exclaimed. “What are you doing up so early?”

Netto came out of the room rubbing his eyes, “I couldn’t sleep,” he admitted.

“Uncomfortable?” Laika asked.

Netto smiled sheepishly, “Kinda.”

Laika cracked another egg into a large porcelain bowl.

“What are you doing?” Netto asked while looking over Laika’s shoulder.

“Making breakfast,” Laika answered while beating the eggs.

“Making what?” Netto asked.

“Pancakes,” Laika said.

“You can cook?” Netto said in a surprised voice.

Laika looked a little irritated, “Yes Netto, I can cook. I have to know how to cook because I live alone.”

Netto’s ears dipped a little and he looked put out. “Oh,” he said.

Laika sighed and got out the flour.

“Can I help?” Netto asked.

“No,” Laika said quickly.

“Awww, please?” Netto asked.

“Netto, no, you can’t help. I can make pancakes by my self perfectly fine,” Laika said.

Netto glared at him and went into his room to change. Rockman followed and Searchman went into the monitor by the kitchen. “Laika-san, don’t you think you may have been a bit…” Searchman paused, “harsh?”

“No,” Laika said while putting the flour into the bowl.

“He just wanted to help,” Searchman pointed out.

Laika shrugged and set the bag of flour to the side. Then he felt his nose itch, he tried to stop but ended up sneezing into the flour mound sending it all over the place.

Netto came out of his room and saw Laika standing over the bowl, covered in flour, and looking very surprised. It took Netto about three seconds of absorbing the scene before he started to laugh. Laika shot him a withering look that Netto ignored, “It’s not funny,” he said.

Netto continued to laugh, “S-sorry Laika but you…” he burst into another fit of giggles.

Laika looked extremely irritated at that point and even Searchman wasn’t quite sure what to say. Netto stopped laughing and walked into the kitchen to help Laika. “Here,” he said.

“Netto, be caref…” Laika warned but it came too late. Netto slipped on the fine white powder that dusted the floor and he fell down raising the flour into the air. It settled over Netto and he made a face in an attempt not to sneeze himself, even though it did him no good.

Laika stared at Netto who was lying on the floor, his ears bent down and his tail puffed out in surprise from the fall. He was as covered if not more so then Laika in flour and when he sneezed it was the last thing it took to set Laika off.

Netto’s ears pricked up at the new sound in the air. He looked up to see Laika laughing? “L-laika…” he said in a stunned voice.

It wasn’t a loud laugh but it was a laugh and it was coming from Laika. That was enough to send anyone into a speechless shock. Laika coughed and stopped laughing, “I tried to warn you,” he said with a very amused look on his face.

Netto gave a vain attempt in dusting himself off but it was really no use. The powder wasn’t going to come off with a few swipes of his hand. Laika pulled a cloth out of a drawer and soaked it in the sink. He wrung it out and helped Netto up, then he started to get some of the flour off of his friend.

Netto’s ears went back and he shut his eyes tightly. “What’s wrong?” Laika asked.

“I… don’t know,” Netto said.

Laika looked at the wet cloth then at Netto, then it dawned on him. “Cat’s are afraid of water,” he murmured.

“What?” Netto asked.

“N-nothing,” Laika said. He looked at his mess of a kitchen and sighed. “Why don’t you go clean yourself up and I’ll try and finish the pancakes.”

Netto nodded sending little bits of flour into the air. “All right,” he said and went back into his room.

Laika sighed and washed out the porcelain bowl. “Laika-san?” Searchman asked.

“Yes, Searchman?”

“Are you still going to make pancakes?” Searchman wondered.

Laika nodded, “Yes, Searchman,” he said and proceeded to start over.

By the time Netto had finished cleaning himself off and becoming quite acquainted with his new fear of water Laika had finished mixing the batter. “Need help?” Netto asked.

Laika looked at Netto who looked back hopefully. Laika sighed, “Do you know how to flip pancakes?”

Netto shook his head, and nervously scratched the back of his head, “Last time I made pancakes I uhh…” Netto blushed, “I ended up setting it on fire…” he said in a small voice.

Laika looked at the batter, “Okay then. Well…” Laika thought, “Can you just… wait?” he asked.

“Yeup!” Rockman answered for him. /Netto-kun, leave Laika alone, I think he’s a little stressed./

/A-all right…/ Netto said and he left the kitchen.

Laika gave a quiet sigh of relief and re-greased the pan. Then he put the first round dollop of batter on it and waited for it to bubble.

In the other room Netto had lain down on the couch. He smelled the air and grinned, “He really can cook,” he said quietly.

“Netto-kun!” Rockman reprimanded his friend silently.

“Well would you think Laika could cook?” Netto asked.

“No…” Rockman admitted slowly.

“My point exactly,” Netto said.

Back in the kitchen Laika successfully fought down the urge to sneeze.

He flipped over the pancake and the other side exposed it’s self to be a golden brown. He sighed as the other side hissed loudly. It was only 8 in the morning and he was already exhausted.

After about ten minutes Laika finished making the pancakes. He put the bowl into the sink and filled it up with water, then he carried the pan cakes to the two person table in the kitchen. “Netto?” he called out. The younger boy had been awfully quiet.

Netto came into the still flour covered kitchen. “Yes?”

“Want some?” Laika asked, gesturing to the pile of pancakes.

Netto looked at them and nodded, “Yeah, they look great!” he grinned.

Laika handed him and plate and Netto got a pancake. He took a bite and his ears went up, “This is delicious!” he said.

Laika blushed slightly and took a bite himself, “They’re just pancakes,” he muttered.

“But they’re really good pancakes,” Netto said.

“Whatever,” Laika said.

Netto grinned and they finished their breakfast in silence.

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I made Laika laugh... and I thought that was impossible >.>

He's still quite the fluff resistant guy though.
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Midnight · Posted: Thu Aug 04, 2005 5:38 pm Post subject:

So he is.

Another pancake-related chapter? Oh well--it does seem to serve its purpose in the long run--to pry into the nearly stoic character that is Laika. Even if Laika is a hard character to make fluff for, you still did a good job of driving that pickax into a crack in his stoic shell and made him seem more human. Good show.
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**Plantman** · Posted: Thu Aug 04, 2005 5:40 pm Post subject:

A very nice chapter. It's good to see Laika do some house work too. It's not quite impossible for Laika to laugh, but certainly it does take some effort for him to do it through interaction with Netto.

I only spotted one typo, I think you meant to type 'laid' instead of lain. That's all that I can spot at this time. XD
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kuro-kitsune · Posted: Thu Aug 04, 2005 5:41 pm Post subject:

ZOMG you updated this one too!!! kya~ *tackles neko-sempai*

Laughing

this chapter was so amusing, i had to stop and laugh at it half way through, but...