Zatch Bell.EXE! Chapter 29: Jorney To The Jawaii Islands!!^^

DjangoSP · Last edited by DjangoSP on Mon Jan 30, 2006 8:01 pm; edited 24 times in total

Okay, I know my last one was locked because it was (R) Rated, sorry to everyone for my mistake, but I've been working on a new one! For all you Zatch Bell and Rockman fans, I give you the beginning of my new Fic...

Zatch Bell.EXE
Rating: PG-PG-13
Genre: Comedy, Action, Adventure!
(MAY contain crude language)

Chapter 1: The Mamodo Battle Is Relocated

Kiyo

*pant, pant* I’m really getting a workout in this Mamodo battle! Sherry said , “Then maybe you should hand over the book!” Up yours, Princess! I shot back. Zatch looks really worn out, I thought. I wonder what he’s thinking.

Zatch

I wonder what I’ll have for dinner tonight? Maybe some chicken. Or pie! I LOOOOOOOOOVE pie! Then I heard Kiyo shout my first spell, “Zaker!”, and braced myself.

Kiyo

Zaker! The ball of lightning issued forth from Zatch’s mouth, heading straight for Brago and Sherry. Then something weird happened. And after all this crap I’ve been through with the Mamodo Battle, that’s saying something! The ball froze in midair, just hovering. Not moving, just…floating. The ball then flashed, blinding us. I could feel myself being lifted up. We were going somewhere! I hoped that wherever we went, that it would have basic cable.

Zatch

Huh. That’s weird. My lightning balls never do that. If it’s a new spell, then beating Sherry and Brago’ll be a piece of pie! …Mmmmm… Pie…. *smacks lips hungrily*

Chapter 2: Welcome to Akihara!

Kiyo

Oof! I landed with a hard thump on hard ground. Ow…looks like I got those cheek implants for nothing. “You WHAT!?” I heard Zatch scream. Zatch, where are you? “Here!” he replied. I looked around and saw on the floor a strange device. It was a small box. There was a symbol on it that was in the shape of a lightning bolt. It was yellow on the outside and red on the inside. I picked it up and looked on the back. Engraved into it were the words, “Advanced P.E.T”: Made In Scilab. “Get me out, Kiyo! You know I’m claustrophobic! I’m already hyperventilating! *Zatch starts breathing rapidly* Zatch, you don’t hyperventilate. “WELL I COULD, KIYO!” Alright, calm down. Let me just figure out where I am. I looked around. Things were different. I saw a big sign that said, "Welcome to Akihara!" And in front of me was a big building with the sign “SciLab” on it. Well, Zatch, let’s go in here. Maybe we can figure out where we are and what we can do to get you out of that box. “Hurry!" Zatch replied. "I’m getting hungry.” I rolled my eyes and went inside.

Netto

*sigh* “Something wrong, Netto?” Meiru said with a tone of concern in her voice. No, not really. I’m just…bored. Nothing exciting has happened for a while. We were lounging in the lobby of SciLab doing nothing. There hadn’t been any Net Savior work for months. Rockman was getting more bored than me. Suddenly, the lobby bell dinged, and a kid walked in. He looked about 14 years old with a white dress shirt and dark blue pants. In his hand he carried a P.E.T. He looked utterly confused. And I couldn’t tell, but something about him seemed strange. Something…abnormal. And it creeped me out big time.

END OF CHAPTER 1

Well, what do ya think? I'm open to any and all suggestions! And I hope that this will be acceptable to the Administrators and Moderators. Thank you!
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Darth Osiris · Posted: Wed Sep 07, 2005 5:56 pm Post subject:

Pretty good. Though I wonder, what happened to Sherry and Brogo?

DjangoSP · Posted: Wed Sep 07, 2005 6:05 pm Post subject:

Oh, don't worry. They'll show up around chapter 4 or so. But wait for chapter 2! It'll be really funny! Laughing

You'll love it!
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CrossFusionStarman · Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2005 5:29 pm Post subject:

Great job! I like both series, so this should be good. You did a pretty good job of starting this off. However, I just spotted a few teensy errors.

Whenever somebody talks from there point of view (say Kiyo is peaking and we're reading from his point of view) they should still have quotation marks.

Also, instead of writing something like *pant pant*, something like I was panting heavily would work better.

Other than that, you did a wonderful job!
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DjangoSP · Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2005 5:34 pm Post subject:

You're right, CFS. I knew something was missing from this Fic, and you found it! Thanks for your advice!
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CrossFusionStarman · Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2005 5:39 pm Post subject:

No problem, I'm glad I could help. Can't wait till the next chapter.
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DjangoSP · Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2005 6:56 pm Post subject:

I'm not one to double-post, but here's Chapter 3: Kiyo Meets The Gang

Kiyo

I looked around the lobby and saw the front desk. "Maybe that's where we should go, Zatch." "Gee, ya think!?" he snapped back. "If you keep that tone with me, I'll just leave you in there!" I yelled back at him. A few moments silence passed. The Zatch said, "Okay, okay, I'm sorry. Will you help me now?" "All right", I replied. I went over to the front desk and rung the bell. And in walked in...a kid. He had a lot of white hair, with some black underneath, like the Yin and Yang symbol. He wore a red blazer with a black shirt underneath. He had baggy, green pants. He had an I.D. badge that read "Enzan".

Enzan

The kid in front of me was really weirding me out. Here he was, asking me what his own P.E.T was. "Well", I said. "You should talk to Netto about this. He's the best with stuff about the Advanced P.E.T". Though that's the only thing he's useful for.

Netto

Enzan was bringing over the kind who was yelling at his P.E.T earlier. "Everyone, this is Kiyo Takamine. He needs your help Netto." I pointed at mymself and said "Me?" "No, Netto, I mean the Fairy Princess of Death behind you." I whirled around and screamed to the wall, "I knew you'd come back, so I came prepared!" I held up a bazooka. "EAT LEAD, FAIRY PRINCESS OF DEATH!!" "Netto!" Enzan cried. "I was kidding!" "Where did you get that!?" Meiru screamed. Too late. I had charged the shot, and there was a big BOOOOOOOM! When the dust settled, half of SciLab was gone. "Dad's gonna kill me." I said dejectedly.

Kiyo

"Now that crazy boy is gone, I'll tell you about Zatch. You may not believe me, though." And with a dramatic flair, I began to tell them the story of the Mamodos.

Funny, huh? Sorry to leave ya hangin', but I'll have more chapters tomorrow. TGTF! Thanks again for your help, CFS!
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CrossFusionStarman · Posted: Thu Sep 08, 2005 7:04 pm Post subject:

No problem. this chapter was a little short, but the part with Netto and the bazooka and the Fairy Princess of Death makes up for it. ^^ God that's hilarious!
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ChibiForte · Posted: Fri Sep 09, 2005 7:34 pm Post subject:

Oo, nice, DjangoSP! You read my fics, so I read yours! Awesome! *pokes Gash and then hugs him* *Gash screams and struggles* Hah, I like Gash Bell, and can tell I'm liking this fic already!
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DjangoSP · Posted: Fri Sep 09, 2005 7:48 pm Post subject:

Get ready for the super hilarious...

Chapter 4: Sherry and Brago Burst onto the Scene!

Kiyo

"Every one thousand years, one hundred Mamodo descend upon the Human World. They find human partners to read their spellbooks and engage in the ultimate battle. And at the end, when there is"--Dekao interrupted, "What if two humans want the same 'Mamodo'?" I replied, "Will somebody get his sorry ass outta here!?" Two Scilab workers grabbed him by the arms and dragged him out. "Okay", I continued. "Now that the Pillsburay Doughbastard's out of the picture, I'll keep going." "At the end, when there is one Mamaodo left, that Mamodo will become king." "Or queen." Meiru put in. "Okay, or queen."

Netto

I really didn't understand Kiyo's story, but we found out later!

2 days later at the park...

Kiyo

"Okay, first of all, I'll need something to get Zatch out of his P.E.T." "I've got just the thing!" Netto piped up. He pulled a dimensional chip out of his pocket and gave it to me. "Okay. Dimensional Chip! Slot-In!!" I slotted in the chip, and a dimensional area appeared around the park. Zatch appeared right next to me. "FINALLY!!" He yelled out he ran off to another side of the park. He showed up again three minutes later. "Where'd you go, Zatch?" I asked him. He said, "If I told you, I'd have to kill you." Everyone looked at him nervously. "Oooooookay. Anyway, he's what I'm gonna do to prove to you what Zatch is." I pointed to a large rock. This rock was as big as the Hulk on pills. I held up my Red Spellbook and yelled out my command. "Zaker!!" Zatch opened his mouth, and a huge beam of electric light shot from inside. All of a sudden, I heard a cry that was not my own. "Reis!"

Sherry

"Reis!" The bluish-black ball issued from Brago's outstreched hand and slammed into the 'Zaker' spell. And, boy, did that feel good!

Kiyo

"What the freak is going on!?" "I'm back, you SOB!" I knew that voice all too well. "Sherry, what the hell are you doing here!?" "I'm going to take my revenge on you!" "Oh, really? Bao Zakeruga!" A giant electric snake blasted out of Zatch's mouth and headed straight for Brago. "Brago, get ready!" "Anything you say, Sherry." he replied. Sherry yelled out her command. "Gigano Reis!" A bigger version of the 'Reis' spell blasted from Brago's hand. The two attacks headed straight for each other at full force!

Netto

"This is getting good! Pass the popcorn, Meiru."

I told you Sherry and Brago would show up in Chapter 4! Did the Solar Boy deliver, or did he deliver? Laughing

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ChibiForte · Posted: Fri Sep 09, 2005 8:08 pm Post subject:

He delivered!! Laughing

Good job, you make Gash very obnoxious... not that he isn't already... Laughing

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DjangoSP · Posted: Fri Sep 09, 2005 8:18 pm Post subject:

That's how I portraied him. You know, to make him funnier. But the next chapter is going to include (tell me if I'm being self conscions) me and my Mamodo! I'm going to see if I can give you and CFS your own Mamodos. Just PM me a desrciption and I'll work my magic! Laughing

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LgacyDX · Posted: Fri Sep 09, 2005 8:38 pm Post subject:

Your story is awesome. I love Zatch Bell especially the times Zatch unleashed some major butt kicking on his opponents. I especially saw the clip show where they showed all the battles that Zatch and Kiyo went through. Hey, if you can... please check out my story because it's awesome and I put a lot of work on that.
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ChibiForte · Posted: Fri Sep 09, 2005 8:43 pm Post subject:

You'd do that, Django-chan?! YER AWESOME!! *glomps DjangoSP* I'll get to those chars RIGHT NOW! *runs off to tell CFS* DOMO ARIGATOU!!!
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CrossFusionStarman · Posted: Fri Sep 09, 2005 8:56 pm Post subject:

Nice chapter! Very funny, and a huge battle is coming out! And yuo'll let us put in ourown characters and Mamodos? YOU ARE FREAKING AWESOME! I'll get stared on mine ASAP.
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DjangoSP · Posted: Fri Sep 09, 2005 8:57 pm Post subject:

LDX, I never really played the X series, so I couldn't understand what you were writing about most of the time. But your Fic was really good, especially when Rock smacked down the bully!! Laughing

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LgacyDX · Posted: Fri Sep 09, 2005 9:03 pm Post subject:

My stories combine the original Mega Man and Mega Man Battle Network so if you have any questions or suggestions for ideas, please tell it in my fan fic thread.
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DjangoSP · Posted: Sat Sep 10, 2005 1:39 pm Post subject: Chapter 5 Added!

Get set for...

Chapter 5: Sherry's New Power! Harem-no-jutsu! (My regards to Naruto! :D)

Kiyo

I was panting heavily. We had been battling in the Dimensional Are for three hours. It's a wonder Zatch can even still use his spells. "Ready for another one, Zatch?" Zatch was lying on the ground a few feet away, vomiting uncontrollably. His shirt was in tatters from the 'Reis' spells. His hair was covered with dirt. "No more." He rasped. "No more!" Netto, Meiru, Enzan, and Dekao were asleep by this time. A bunch of empty popcorn tubs littered the ground around them.

Brago

God. Why did I join the Mamodo Battle? I could've followed my Dad and worked at the DMV, but nooooooo. I wanted to be King! I sighed. Oh, well. There's always the unemployment office.

Sherry

"ENOUGH!!" I bellowed. "It's time to take this to the next level!"

Kiyo

Sherry started making some weird signs with her hands. She ended it with her hands clasped together with her index fingers and thumbs pointed up. It was very Naruto-esque. Then she yelled out, "Harem-no-jutsu!", and disappeared a puff of smoke. This woke up Netto, Enzan, Dekao, and Meiru.

Sherry

I've never used this technique before, so I don't know what'll happen! I made the signs with my hands and yelled out the command. "Harem-no-jutsu!" A puff of smoke appeared around me.

Kiyo

When the smoke cleared, I could NOT believe what I saw! Sherry was wearing a harem skirt and her hair was put into one big braid. She had a fan in each hand and makeup all over her face.

Netto

I must be dreaming becaue what Im looking at can't be real! Wait, what's that dribbling down my mouth? I put my finger up to my nose. "BLOOD?" Huh. The last time I got a nosebleed was when I accidentally walked in on Meiru in the shower when I was sleeping over at her house.

Enzan

"Oh. My. GOD! I never thought that P.E.Ts could do this! Hmm...maybe I should update mine. Heh, heh, heh... Wait, I've got a nosebleed, too know!?

Dekao

Man. And I thougt Meiru was hot! Meeee-ow! Oh, great. Now the've got me nosebleeding, too! ARGH! :grr:

Meiru

That little slut. Look at the way the boys are drooling over. Even Zatch has recovered enough to oogle at her! Then Sherry yelled out, "Now you will face the power of Hare-no-jutsu!"

Zatch

"Oh, man! All this needs is some Jell-O and this Mamodo Battle will be all worth the pain!"
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LgacyDX · Posted: Sat Sep 10, 2005 2:27 pm Post subject:

Awesome chapter. Very impressive dude.
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DjangoSP · Posted: Sat Sep 10, 2005 2:37 pm Post subject:

Thanks for the compliment. But where, oh where are Chibi and CFS!? :grr: I thought they were gonna give me the descriptions for their Mamodo's. Do you want me to make you one, LDX? Just tell me how you want it and I'll put it in my next chapter! But I need you to be specific... Laughing

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