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Power Rangers Element Force #1.1
“Elemental Awakening Part 1”
Written By C. M. E.


Mysterious Ship in outer space

“Are you sure that it is there Master?”

“Yes I am sure. It is there. In Angel Grove.”

Angel Grove College: Early Morning

Jason Scott, former Red Power Ranger, walked up to the school, after parking his motorcycle, passing by new students trying to find their classes. He had short hair, and wore a leather jacket with a red t-shirt underneath. Wearing khaki pants with a pair of black slipper-shoes.

“Man I can’t believe this place hasn’t changed since I left,” he exclaimed. “I missed this place so much.” Jason walked up to the administration office, and knocked on the door. “Excuse me I’m Jason Scott the new history teacher” A young woman, who looked to be in her late 20s, walked up to him “Yes we were expecting you.”

Angel Grove Youth Center: mid Afternoon

The youth center looked about the same. It did have some remodeling in the past 14 years though. It still had the Juice Bar and the karate studio, but it now had a pool table, computers, and a better paint job.

Dan Anderson entered looking for his friends. Dan was 20 and in his second year of college. He had long black hair in the skater style. Wearing his trademark red track jacket with a black undershirt. Sporting his new black jeans and new red Heely’s. On his left wrist was his black wristband saying “Everyone Sucks Except Me” that his best friend got him for Christmas when they were 13.

“Where could those guys be?” It was then that he spotted the five of them. Pat McGuire, Tom Henderson, Tony Mendoza, D.A MacNamara, and Ryan Brooks.

“Sup Dan,” said Pat. Pat was the same age as Dan. He wore a green ACDC shirt. His pants were the same color as his hair, black. “Why are you so late,” he said as he came up to give his best friend a slap on the back. “Our gig is tonight and we haven’t gotten in one practice yet,” he turns his head to the others “You guys are still coming right?”

“Wouldn’t miss it,” said Tom. Tom was a year younger than Dan and Pat, but in his second year like them. He had on a blue polo shirt with the collar popped up. His blue jeans were splattered with white paint from the painting of his room he did the other day. “What would think we wouldn’t?”

“What could possibly keep us from coming?” asked Ryan. Ryan was 19 and still finishing up his first year. He wore a black tank-top with white cargo pants. His brown hair was spiked up, like it always is. “Half of us are in it. What could possibly go wrong?”

“We got a gig! I’m gonna need some new sticks!” exclaimed Tony, the drummer. Tony wore a yellow t-shirt with a golden dress shirt over it. He had on black sweat pants because he forgot to change after his morning run. “Eh. I’ll take care of it in a little bit.” He’s 18.

“You really should take care of it now. You might forget,” D. A. exclaimed,
“You do tend to forget things.” D.A. wore a blue mid-drift and had on a pair of blue jeans. She is only about a month older than Tony.

“Yeah that’s a good idea. Just let me get five minutes to finish my smoothie.”

Dan walked up to the counter, “Hey Ernie can I get a Sprite?” he said as he pulled $3.50 out of his pocket. Ernie a semi-portly man in his early 50s gave him the soda and said, “It’s on the house. You guys are going to need all of the energy you can get for tonight.”

“Thanks Earn,” Dan said as he walked away. He heard the fizz of the soda as he opened it. Then something hit him. It was a notebook. “Ow,” he exclaimed as he turned around to see it was just some little kids messing around, but then he realized something.

“Pat,” he said.

“Yeah,” said Pat.

“We need a bass player”

“I can play bass,” said Ryan

“Are you any good?”

“Yeah”

“Well stop by my room later,” said Dan.

Angel Grove Park

Tony was walking in the park, on his way to get his new sticks. He had his old ones in his hands. They were torn up and dirty, he had had them since fourth grade. Just then he felt an earthquake.

“What the heck was that? I’ll have to go get my sticks later. I need to see what is going on.” He rushed back to the Youth Center.

Over at the Youth Center there were these weird creatures with wolf-like heads and bear like bodies. With them were two other creatures. One was seven foot tall with an eagle like head and a gryphon-human body encased in greenish gold armor. His name was Gryphor.

The other was five foot tall with the head of a snake and the body of a wolf incased in bluish-reddish armor. Slypher was her name.

“Where issss the SSSSouce?” she asked.

Gryphor replied with a simple “I don’t know.”

The gang was hiding behind the computers.

“What should we do?” asked Ryan.

Dan replied with “We ROCK.”

He and Pat rushed as fast as they could to get to the stage where their instruments were. The guys turned their guitars up to 12 and the volume of the amps all the way up.

Dan and Pat let out a string of cords so loud it drove most of the grunts away, but Gryphor and Slypher stayed. They grabbed Dan and Pat by their by their throats.

“I don’t see why the master doesn’t just let us kill the humans,” complained Gryphor.

Then all of a sudden the monsters fell to the ground.

“What wassss that?”

“It was me!” Jason stood there signaling the gang to get out. They ran as fast as possible. Gryphor and Slypher teleported away.

“Thisssss issssn’t over yet human,” vowed Slypher.

Jason soon ran out to see what happened to the others. They had just met up with Tony.

“What just happened in there?” asked Dan.

“And what were those things?” added Ryan.

“Well it’s a long story,” said Jason.

TO BE CONTINUED.

Power Rangers Element Force #1.2
“Elemental Awakening Part 2”
Written By C.M.E



Previously on Power Rangers Element Force:

“Yes I’m sure. It’s there. In Angel Grove.”

“Excuse me I’m Jason Scott the new history teacher.”

“Our gig is tonight”

“Where issss the SSSSource?”

“What wassss that?”

“It was me!”

“What just happened in there?”

“And what were those things?”

“Well it’s a long story.”


Outside the Youth Center

“Well are you gonna tell us the story or not?” asked D.A

“Yeah, we wanta hear it,” said Tom excitedly.

“I will, but first let’s go somewhere else,” said Jason.

Jason’s House

The car ride to Jason’s house was mostly silent. Jason had told the group to save their questions. His house was pretty big. The red painting on the outside was kind of creepy because it looked a lot like blood.

The group followed Jason down to the basement.

“Come on. Just a little further,” said Jason.

With those words he opened a door revealing a secret room filled with computers, a holodeck, the works (it is a secret base you know).
“Where are we?” asked everyone except Dan.

“Cool,” said Dan, “So why did you bring us here?”

“To give you these,” and with those words Jason opened a box containing 4 wristbands and 5 phones.

“What are they?” asked Ryan.

“And why are there 4 wristbands and 5 phones?” asked D.A.

“To answer your question Ryan, these are your morphers,” answered Jason, “and D.A the reason is that I will need Dan to give me his for just one minute.”

With that, Dan took off his wristband and gave it to Jason. Jason messed with it for a minute and gave it back to him. Dan then asked, “Wait did you say morphers, as in the things the Power Rangers used?”

“Yes,” Jason replied.

“But why us?” asked Tom.

“Yeah what makes us so special?” continued Pat.

“That will all be revealed in time,” said Jason, “The only question is, will you accept?”

“I’m in,” said Dan.

“Me too,” said Pat.

“Me three,” continued Tom.

“Me four,” said Tony.

“Me five,” added D.A.

“Me six,” finished Ryan.

With these words the rangers took their morphers and wristbands. Putting the wristbands on their left wrist, and just when they did the phones disappeared.

“What was that?” asked Tony.

“Don’t worry you will see them again,” said Jason calmly.

Just then an alarm sounded. A screen appeared showing a monster with a bear head, snakes for hands, and a wolf-like body. He was destroying everything is sight.

“Well rangers it’s time for your first battle,” said Jason, “Beary Bonds is in the shopping district.”

“No! All my favorite shops are there!” shouted D.A.

“But it’s on the other side of town. How are we going to get there?” Tom pointed out.

“We have a teleporting system.” With those words Jason hit a button teleporting the rangers to the battle field.

Angle Grove Shopping District

“Hey, Fuzzy Wuzzy, I think the fat section is down the block,” said Dan.

Beary just growled at him.

“Looks like he can’t talk much,” said Pat.

“Wolfhounds!” with those words the creatures from the Youth Center appeared. They started jumping around growling.

“Hey guys you know what time it is?” asked Dan.

“No, what time is it?” asked the rest of the rangers.

“It’s Morphin’ Time!”

With those words each of the rangers put their right wrists to their wristbands, and their morphers appeared.

Dan was the first to go.

He raised his morpher in front of his left ear (so that the back of his right hand was facing his ear) and shouted

“Red Ranger Power!”

Dan was surrounded in flames. He absorbed the power into his body then jumped up. A phoenix appeared and fused with him. Doing a back flip and landing on his feet. He stood up and put his hand in front of his ear like he did in the beginning and shouted.

“Element Force!”

He then posed in a fighting stance and shouted,

“Fire!”

He appeared with his uniform on. His helmet was red with a phoenix on both sides. The arms and legs were black with flames on them. Gloves and boots were red. His torso was black and red with a symbol on in the center with flames on it.

“Wow! This is so cool!” he said excitedly.

The other rangers followed suit.

“Blue Ranger Power!”

Tom was surrounded by water. He absorbed the power into his body then jumped up. A dragon appeared and fused with him. Doing a back flip and landing on his feet. He stood up and put his hand in front of his ear like he did in the beginning and shouted.

“Element Force!”

Taking a fighting pose, he shouted,

“Water!”

He appeared with his uniform on. His helmet was blue with a dragon on both sides. The arms and legs were black with waves on them. Gloves and boots were blue. His torso was black and blue with a symbol on in the center with waves on it.

“Green Ranger Power!”

Pat was surrounded by wind. He absorbed the power into his body then jumped up. An eagle appeared and fused with him. Doing a back flip and landing on his feet. He stood up and put his hand in front of his ear like he did in the beginning and shouted.

“Element Force!”

Taking a fighting pose, he shouted,

“Wind”

He appeared with his uniform on. His helmet was green with an eagle on both sides. The arms and legs were black with air currents on them. Gloves and boots were green. His torso was black and green with a symbol on in the center with air currents on it.

“Yellow Ranger Power!”

Tony was surrounded by electricy. He absorbed the power into his body then jumped up. A tiger appeared and fused with him. Doing a back flip and landing on his feet. He stood up and put his hand in front of his ear like he did in the beginning and shouted.

“Element Force!”

Taking a fighting pose, he shouted,

“Lightning!”

He appeared with his uniform on. His helmet was yellow with a tiger on both sides. The arms and legs were black with lightning on them. Gloves and boots were yellow. His torso was black and yellow with a symbol on in the center with lightning on it.

“Cyan Ranger Power!”

D.A. was surrounded by ice. She absorbed the power into his body then jumped up. A polar bear appeared and fused with her. Doing a back flip and landing on her feet. She stood up and put her hand in front of his ear like she did in the beginning and shouted.

“Element Force!”

Taking a fighting pose, she shouted,

“Ice!”

She appeared with her uniform on. Her helmet was cyan with a polar bear on both sides. The arms and legs were black with ice on them. Gloves and boots were cyan. Her torso was black and cyan with a symbol on in the center with ice on it.

“Black Ranger Power!”

Ryan was surrounded by darkness. He absorbed the power into his body then jumped up. A fox appeared and fused with him. Doing a back flip and landing on his feet. She stood up and put his hand in front of his ear like she did in the beginning and shouted.

“Element Force!”

Taking a fighting pose, he shouted,

“Darkness!”

He appeared with his uniform on. His helmet was black with a fox on both sides. The arms and legs were black with silver lightning on them. Gloves and boots were silver. His torso was black and silver with a symbol on in the center with silver lightning on it.

“We are, Power Rangers Element Force!” shouted the newly transformed rangers.

“And you are going to regret the day you came to earth!” shouted Dan.


TO BE CONTINUED.

Power Rangers Element Force #1.3
“Elemental Awakening Part 3”
Written By C.M.E


Previously on Power Rangers Element Force:

“Come on. Just a little further,”

“So why did you bring us here?”

“To give you these,”

“Well rangers it’s time for your first battle,”

“Hey, Fuzzy Wuzzy, I think the fat section is down the block,”

“Hey guys you know what time it is?”

“No, what time is it?”

“It’s Morphin’ Time!”

“We are, Power Rangers Element Force!”

“And you are going to regret the day you came to earth!”


Angel Grove Shopping District

“Wow. This feeling is amazing!” exclaimed Dan.

“You got that right!” Pat said excitedly.

“Does this spandex make my butt look big?” asked D. A.

“No, it makes you look sexy,” said Tony.

“Stop kissing up cassa-no-luck,” said Tom.

“Can we just get on to kicking some ass?” asked Ryan.

“Sure.”

The rangers charged in at full speed.

D. A. and Tony took on some Wolfhounds.

Tony came in and started with a few roundhouse kicks. He then heard Jason’s voice inside his helmet.

“Tony, use your Lightning Daggers,” he said.

“Alright, Lightning Daggers!"

Two short blades appeared in his hands. The handles were yellow and the blades were shaped like lightning bolts.

“O.K lets see what these babies can do!”

Tony started slicing the Wolfhounds one by one, but they didn’t disappear. He then cut off ones tail, and it disappeared.

“Guys, get rid of the tail!” he shouted.

D.A. was looking at shops when a Wolfhound kicked her in the back. Tony saw the whole thing.

“Dude, you are going to regret that,” he warned the monster.

D.A. turned around and even though they couldn’t see her face, they knew she was pissed off. She kicked the Wolfhound so hard that it flew a good 10 feet into a wall.

Jason’s voice was soon heard in her helmet.

“Use your Ice Bow.”

“K, Ice Bow!"

A cyan bow appeared in her hand. The tips looked like icicles with a sort of whitish tint to them. She aimed carefully and nailed the monster right on the tail cutting it off.

“Huh, I didn’t even know I was any good at archery.”

Tom was trying to stop some Wolfhounds from trying to get to civilians.

“Get outa here,” he told them.

“Tom,” Jason said, “Use your Water Trident.”

“Water Trident!" he shouted.

A blue trident appeared in his hands. It had grips so he knew exactly where to hold it. The tips were really sharp, sharp enough to cut through solid steel.

“God, I love this so much!”

He took a few stabs at a Wolfhound and missed. So, he aimed for the tail. It came right off.

“There we go,” he said as he spun his trident around. A little kid started walking towards him, and a Wolfhound was coming at the kid.

“Look out!” Tom shouted. The kid didn’t hear him. He lunged at the monster stabbing its tail with his trident.

“You need to get outa here kid,” he said. The kid nodded and walked away.

Pat was taking some Wolfhounds out when he heard Jason’s voice.

“Use your Air Axe”

“How is deodirent going to help me now?” he asked.

“Not that kind of Axe stupid!” shouted Jason.

“Whops, my bad. Air Axe!"

A green axe appeared in his hand. The blades looked like the wings of an eagle. Its handle was green.

“Killer.”

Pat took a few swings at the monsters and hit them in the chest causing this greenish substance to ooze out.

“Why did it have to be green?” he asked in a whiney tone.

Dan and Ryan took on Beary Bonds.

They charged in and started kicking and punching, but he didn’t feel anything and hit them far back.

“God damit!” Dan shouted.

“I know how you feel man,” Ryan said.

“Boys I think it’s time to use your weapons, The Flame Sword and the Darkness Blaster,” said Jason.

“Flame Sword!"

“Darkness Blaster!"

A flame ignited in Dan’s hand. Out of it came a red sword with a burning blade.

“Cool,” he said.

A purplish flame ignited in Ryan’s hand. Out of it came a silverish gun with a fox’s head near the front.

“Nice,” said Ryan, “Would you mind if I went first?”

“It would be my pleasure,” said Dan.

Ryan took a few shots at the monster. The bullets hit right on target, knocking their fuzzy foe back a few feet. Then, all of a sudden he felt a large slash across the chest. It was Dan. Beary stood up and saw all 6 rangers standing together.

Jason’s voice was heard inside each of their helmets.

“Rangers, he’s weak, combine your weapons together.”

“You heard the man,” said Tom.

Dan placed his sword in the middle. Tom broke his trident in half and placed it next to the sword. Pat’s axe broke into two pieces and lay next to the trident. Next came Tony’s daggers, then D.A.’s bow, and finally Ryan’s gun. The weapons fused together to form one blaster.

Dan was at the trigger. Tony and D.A. stood next to him. Pat, Tom, and Ryan helped hold it up.

“Fire!” all the rangers shouted.

Dan fired off a huge blast of energy containing all of the ranger’s elements. Beary exploded into a million pieces.

“You…go…bye…bye,” said Dan.

The rangers’ teleported back to the base.

“Great work rangers,” said Jason, “There will be time for celebrating later, but don’t you have a gig in five minutes?”

“Oh umm..um...umm.. you’re right!” exclaimed Dan, “We got to get back to the youth center fast.”

They all teleported to outside the youth center after de-morphing.

“Sorry we’re late Earn,” said Tony.

“That’s cool just get up there and have fun,” said Ernie.

Ernie stepped up to the stage and tapped on the mike. “I see we have a full crowd tonight,” he said, “may I now introduce four boys, who I know personally,"Falling With Style!"

The curtain opened revealing Dan, Ryan, Pat, and Tony. They started to play their trademark song “Mesmerize.”

Meanwhile in the shopping district.

Gryphor teleported down and picked up what seamed to be a piece of Beary Bonds.

“Tomorrow is another day rangers,” he said before teleporting away.

Power Rangers Element Force #1.4
“Fired Up For Action Pt 1”
Written By C.M.E



“Dan, help us!!” shouted Ryan.

“What’s your problem?” screamed Tony.

“HELP!” blared Tom.

“WTF, man?” screamed Pat.

“AHHHHH!” screamed D.A.

Dan was paralyzed in fear; he didn’t know how to help his friends. They were surrounded in flames. Then he saw him.

“You couldn’t help him then and you can’t help your friends now!” the man said.

This man was about 30 and had a burn mark on the side of his face.

“No, I will help them!” Dan shouted. Suddenly, there was a loud crack like sound.

“Mr. Anderson, I suggest you pay attention, this will be on the test!” said his teacher Mr. Yanushefiski. Mr. Yanushefiski was a large man in his late 50’s and he hated Dan because of his constant sleeping.

“Sorry Mr. Y, I didn’t get much sleep last night,” said Dan in a sleepy tone, “and besides I pass every test anyway, so why does it matter?”

“I matters because if you fall asleep in my class one more time all you will be dreaming about is a big, fat, F on your next exam!”

“Ok dude, just chill,” finished Dan.

Youth Center

Dan was wearing a red tank top and a pair of blue jeans. He had his wristband incase of an emergency.

“I think Mr. Yanushefiski has it out for me,” stated Dan as he was beating the umm..um...umm.. out of a punching bag that Ryan was struggling to hold.

“Dude, you need to chill,” said Ryan, “you are hitting this thing like it’s him.”

Ryan was wearing about the same outfit as Dan, but his tank top was black.

“Sorry, I kind of got something I need to work out of my system”

“You always were a little pissy!” shouted a voice. Dan turned around to see his two brothers, Tim and Chris, and his old friend Riley Wheeler, “Yeah that’s true,” said Dan.

He ran up to them and greeted them.

Riley was 20 years old. He had long blond hair that reached almost to his butt. He wore all black except for his red hoodie.

Tim was 28. He is Dan’s oldest brother. Tim is a famous chef and is the owner of Angel Grove’s most popular restaurant, “The A List.”

Chris was the middle child. At the age of 25 he had already finished college and was a pro surfer. “You always had a temper problem,” he said.

“Yeah I know,” said Dan, “So, how’ve things been?”

“Oh you know, same old, same old,” said Riley, “Making my way through WCU, you know.”

“Well owning and cooking at a restaurant is a lot of work, but I manage to get it done,” said Tim.

“Traveling the world’s beaches is always a blast, so you know,” said Chris.

“Shinfty,” Dan said, “So these are my friends: Ryan”

“Sup”

“Tom”

“Hey, how is it going?”

“Pat”

“Hi”

“Hey where are Tony and D.A?” asked Dan.

“Tony had to go since his sticks are busted, and we think D.A. is out shopping,” explained Tom.

Suddenly Wolfhounds appeared.

“God damn it!” shouted Dan, “Why now?” He and the rest of the guys started fighting while Tim and Chris got everyone out of the Youth Center. Riley was among those people.

“Well these guys want to fight boys,” said Dan, “Let’s give them a fight.”

Dan reached into his pocket and pulled out a blue lighter.

“Here guys, if you can’t stand the heat, stay out of the kitchen!” He lit the lighter and moved his right hand around it and his hand was engulfed in fire. Then, he fired a large explosion.

Ryan darted for behind the counter. He took the hose from the sink and sprayed some water and he nodded at Tom. Tom knew what Ryan meant and moved into the water and he just absorbed it and was like a water man. He shot a large blast of water at the creatures.

Pat was just fighting normally.

Soon as soon as the Wolfhounds were gone, Gryphor appeared.

“Well done rangers, but this isn’t over. Dan do you remember this man?”

“What the hell do you mean by that?” Dan asked, and just as he said that the man that was in his dream appeared.

“Hello kid, remember me?” he asked.

“No, not you,” Dan said in shock. As he said those words he ran out of the Youth center in fear.

“Now with your leader gone in fear, you are helpless,” said Gryphor triumphantly, “Time for the main event.” When he said those words the man pulled a bottle out of his pocket and began to drink it.

“So why you are let him drink?” said Ryan, “You know drinking is bad for…” at that instant the man had changed. He was now six feet tall with the head of a wolf, the body of a cat, and four wings; the scar remained. His new name was Katra.

“Bonjour rangers, Je m’ appele Katra, like the French word for four, and I am four times as strong as anything you have ever faced.”

TO BE CONTINUED…..

Power Rangers Element Force #1.5
“Fired Up For Action Pt 2”
Written By C.M.E
*Note: None of this is actually about my life so don’t be concerned.*


Ryan: “Previously on Power Rangers Element Force”:

“You couldn’t help him then and you can’t help your friends now!”

“You always were a little pissy!” shouted a voice. Dan turned around to see his two brothers, Tim and Chris, and his old friend Riley Wheeler

“Well done rangers, but this isn’t over. Dan do you remember this man?”

“What the hell do you mean by that?” Dan asked, and just as he said that the man that was in his dream appeared.

“Hello kid, remember me?” he asked.

“No, not you,” Dan said in shock. As he said those words he ran out of the Youth center in fear.

“Now with your leader gone in fear, you are helpless,” said Gryphor triumphantly, “Time for the main event.” When he said those words the man pulled a bottle out of his pocket and began to drink it.

“So why you are let him drink?” said Ryan, “You know drinking is bad for…” at that instant the man had changed. He was now six feet tall with the head of a wolf, the body of a cat, and four wings; the scar remained. His new name was Katra.

“Bonjour rangers, Je m’ appele Katra, like the French word for four, and I am four times as strong as anything you have ever faced
.”

Anderson House: 5 years ago

A 15 year old Dan sat in his room. In front of him was a calendar with several X marks on days.

“Just a few more days,” he said happily. Then there was a knock on the door. Dan opened the door to see his dad, Tim Anderson.

“Hey pop, what’s up?” asked Dan.

“Well it is a few days from your 16th birthday, and I wanted to give you an early present,” said Mr. Anderson. Mr. Anderson was an old man, well at least to his sons he was. At the age of 53 he still was a fun guy. Dan always would have fun with him no matter what they did. He was Dan’s hero.

“But dad, it’s too early,” said Dan.

“I know but I want you to see it now,” said Mr. Anderson. He took his son to the window of his room. Outside on the driveway was a brand new, red Jaguar.

“Holy Snot!” exclaimed Dan.

“Yeah, I had a feeling you would like it,” said Mr. Anderson.

“Thanks dad, you are the best!”

Youth Center

Ryan, Tom, and Pat stood facing their newest foe. Although it was three on two they felt outmatched.

“What was up with Dan?” asked Ryan.

“Yeah, he seemed pretty tweaked,” said Tom.

“Well whatever his problem is, we gotta get outa here!” exclaimed Pat.

“Good idea!” Ryan and Tom said in unison.

Angel Grove College: Dan’s dorm

The dorm room was messy. Clothes on the floor, computer wires covering the only desk, and a messy bead; which Dan was laying on, thinking.

“Why him and how did they find out?” Dan asked himself. He turned his head to a picture of him and his father in his Jaguar. Then there was a knock on the door.

“What” asked Dan, “I’m trying to think here.”

“Can we come in?”

“Sure, whatever.”

Tim and Chris walked in. They looked around the pig sty of a room. Then they looked at Dan. They both knew what was wrong. The three of them just sat there until the others walked in.

“What was up with him?” asked Pat, “As soon as he saw that guy he ran out.”

“Yeah, what was with that?” asked Ryan.

“I’d better tell you,” said Chris.

“It all went down the night of Dan’s 16th birthday,” started Tim.

Anderson House

“We were all sitting at the dinner table, well almost all of us,” said Chris, “Our mom was away with our aunt because she wasn’t feeling well; so it was the four of us.”

Dan, Tim, Chris and their father were sitting at the table saying grace.

“…and may Megan get better, Amen,” finished Mr. Anderson.

“Let’s chow down,” they all said.

“After dinner we had cake, opened presents, etc...” said Tim, “We had no idea what would happen next.” “Just as we were heading upstairs we heard a crash.”

“What the f*** was that?” asked Chris.

“I’ll find out,” said Mr. Anderson.

“We followed our dad to the back of the house, and we saw our neighbor, John Prunesack, standing there with a gun,” said Dan.

“You know, I never really liked you assholes anyway,” he said, and with those words he shot Mr. Anderson.

“Dad!” the boys shouted. They rushed over to their father. He got shot in the heart.

“You asshole!” shouted Dan, “I’m gonna kill you!” But before Dan could do anything, John had run away. Dan chased after him. He chased him into the woods right behind the house.

“Just because I can’t see you, doesn’t mean I can’t do anything!” shouted Dan. He pulled out his lucky lighter, lit it, and torched the whole woods.

“Needless to say, all I did was leave that burn mark on his face,” said Dan, “We moved here to Angel Grove a week later.”

Dan’s Dorm Room

“So that’s the story,” finished Chris.

“Wow, I’m so sorry Dan,” said Tony, “Is…” He was interrupted by the sound of their morphers.

“Rangers, Katra is attacking the warehouse district,” said Jason, “You need to get there pronto.”

“Let me go myself,” said Dan.

“Are you crazy?” asked D.A. in shock.

“Mabie, but this is my battle, and I need to finish it.”

“Red Ranger Power!”

Angel Grove Warehouse District

“Red ranger, come out to play,” said Katra. Just then he was knocked to the ground.

“What the hell was that?”

“It was me,” said Dan,

“Flame Sword!”

“Burning Illusion!”


Dan surrounded the monster in flames. Then Katra saw thousands of copied of him.

“Which one is real?” Katra asked himself.

“All of us!” the rangers shouted. Each one took their turn slashing up the monster. After they all took their turn, the flames and rangers disappeared. Just Dan and Katra stood there.

“How do you like my version of the Shadow Clone Jutsu?” asked Dan.

“It, doesn’t matter how many times you attack me ranger; I just need a little boost from the boss man,” said Katra, panting. Just then a bolt of lightning came down and struck the monster, and he grew taller than a building.

“Dan, use your zord mode,” said Jason.

“Whatever you say dude”

“Red Ranger, Zord Mode!”

Dan was surrounded in flames, which soon spun around him in a tornado; growing bigger and bigger. He emerged looking similar to the Phoenix Titan Zord and his ranger uniform mixed.

“Phoenix Zord”
“Alright time to take you down to Chinatown!” said Dan.

“Bring it!” said Katra as he drew his sword.

“Fire Clone Jutsu!”
Millions of Phoenix Zords appeared and started to kick the shit out of Katra. All the monster could do is scream as he was destroyed.

"Gotcha!” shouted Dan triumphantly.

Youth Center

“Well now that’s all taken care of,” said Tom, “There is only one thing left.”

“What?” asked Dan. Tim, Riley, and Chris walked in with a birthday cake. Dan was in shock.

“Happy Birthday!” shouted everyone.

“Thanks, you don’t know how much this means to me.”


Warehouse District

A beam of light appeared. Out of it stepped Emperor Zargon. He was similar or Messogog in a lot of ways in terms of appearance except he was black instead of silver and wore red armor. He picked up a piece of Katra and teleported back to the ship.

Just as a small note: it wans't Dan's actual birthday, it was a make-up 16th birthday. Also the CME thing is my Rangerboard name I first posted this on rangerboard.com.

Alleyway Angel Grove: Late at night

A shadowy figure was running through a dark alleyway. A street light flickers just enough to show the figure. It was a young man wearing a white sleeveless shirt with a torn up pair of jeans. He begins to speak.

“Little brother, I find you soon.”

Power Rangers Element Force #1.6
“Darkness Before Dawn Pt 1”
Written By C.M.E


Ryan’s Dorm room

Ryan steps into his room. The room is neat and orderly. Everything is in its rightful place, the exact opposite of Dan’s room. A Kingdom Hearts 2 poster hangs on the left wall. To the right is a night stand with scattered pictures of him and his friends, his foster parents, his real parents, and a picture of him and his older brother when they were kids. Ryan was wearing a black holister shirt with tattered jeans.

“Boy do I miss you big bro,” Ryan said as there was a knock on the door.

“Come in,” he said. Entered a young man looking to be in his early 20’s. He wore a grey plaid button down shirt and khaki pants with a black pudding bowl cut and giant eyebrows. His name was Lee and he was Ryan’s karate rival.

“Oh, it’s you, What do you want?” asked Ryan.

“Nothing just seeing if you are ready for the upcoming tournament,” said Lee.

The two boys just stared at each other for a good five minutes until Lee left. As he closed the door Ryan flipped him off.

“Butt munch.”

Beastion Stronghold

Emperor Zargon was pacing the room trying to figure out a way to destroy the rangers as Slypher stepped into Zargon’s office.

“Master, I believe I have come up with a way to desssstroy the Power Rangers,” she said.

“What is it?” Zargon asked, and as he said it Slypher pulled up a screen showing the mysterious man from the beginning. As Zargon looked upon it an evil grin appeared on his face.

Youth Center

Ryan walked up to one of the computers and accessed the school’s website. Up came a pop-up for a karate class.

“Hey Jason’s starting a karate class, and it says to talk…to…Ernie if I want to sign up,” read Ryan. As he starts go walk up to the counter as Dan and Tony walk up to him. Dan was wearing his favorite red track jacket with a black shirt underneath and a pair of jeans. Tony wore a yellow billabong shirt with some black jeans.

“Heey, what’s up?” asked Dan.

“Just going to sign up for Jason’s karate class, you guys should sign up too,” said Ryan.

“Eh, I don’t know, will it get me outa class?” asked Dan.

“Yeah, every day at noon,” said Tony.

“Dude I am so in!” exclaimed Dan, “That is when I have Yunishitski.”

The three walked up to the counter and saw the sing up sheet, but just as they were about to sign up they got a call on their morphers.

“Rangers report to the op center immediately,” said Jason.

Command Center

Black, red, and yellow beams of light appeared in the center of the command center. Out stepped out Ryan, Dan, and Tony respectively.

“What’s up Dr. S?” asked Ryan.

“We have a monster terrorizing downtown, and he is requesting the black ranger and only him,” said Jason, “He also has hostages that he threatens to kill if you don’t go by yourself.”

Ryan began to teleport, but Jason stopped him.

“What’s up?” asked Ryan.

“Take this,” Jason said as he gave him a watch.

“What’s that for?” asked Ryan.

“You’ll know when the time comes,” and with that Ryan teleported.

Downtown Angel Grove

As Ryan teleported on to the scene he saw that the hostages were actually dummies.

“What the hell?” he said as an orb of darkness appeared and out stepped out a sort of fox-human hybrid.

“Welcome Black Ranger to my little fox hole,” said the monster, “My name is Foxtrot, and I am glad to meet you.”

“Well I am not glad to meet you,” said Ryan.

Black Ranger Power!”

To Be Continued

Tom: “Previously on Power Rangers Element Force”:

“Boy do I miss you big bro,” Ryan said as there was a knock on the door.

“What is it?” Zargon asked, and as he said it Slypher pulled up a screen showing the mysterious man from the beginning. As Zargon looked upon it an evil grin appeared on his face.

“We have a monster terrorizing downtown, and he is requesting the black ranger and only him,” said Jason, “He also has hostages that he threatens to kill if you don’t go by yourself.”

“What’s up?” asked Ryan.

“Take this,” Jason said as he gave him a watch.

“What’s that for?” asked Ryan.

“You’ll know when the time comes,” and with that Ryan teleported.

“Welcome Black Ranger to my little fox hole,” said the monster, “My name is Foxtrot, and I am glad to meet you.”

“Well I am not glad to meet you,” said Ryan.

“Black Ranger Power!”


Downtown Angel Grove

Ryan appeared after a flash of silver light in his ranger suit with the watch on his right wrist. He and Foxtrot just stared at each other for a minute.

“Well are you going to do something or do I have to kill you now?” asked Foxtrot.

“Oh, I’ll do something, but there is something familiar about you that I can’t put my finger on it,” said Ryan, “Whatever. Darkness Blaster!” He said as a silver flame appeared in his hand.


Power Rangers Element Force #1.7
“Darkness Before Dawn Pt 2”
Written By C.M.E



“OOOO, I am sooo scared of you!” said the fox-like creature sarcastically. Ryan took a shot and it bounced off the monster into a building. He took another shot and the monster grabbed it and threw it at Ryan. Ryan flew a good 13 feet causing to crash into an office building.

“Ow, that’s gonna hurt in the morning,” Foxtrot said as he started to burst into an evil laugh. Ryan got up and had the lower half of his helmet disappear so that he could cough out some blood. As he finished the missing part reappeared he charged to try to fight. Foxtrot just appeared in front of him and gave him a kick uppercut. Then he got on all fours, jumped up and kicked both of Ryan’s sides. Following that, he is standing parallel to Ryan and slams him almost to the ground with the bottom of his fist, spins, and finishes up with a kick to the gut; intern slamming Ryan hard into the ground, causing Ryan to demporph. He coughed up a little blood and started to get up.

“Just give up ranger you can’t win!” shouted Foxtrot.

As Ryan got up he began to speak, “I…won’t…give….UP!” He was surrounded in silver lightning. “I have something to fight for!” he screamed, “I have my older brother Brad waiting for me, and will not die until I find him!” Just then he watch lit up in a black light. “What the hell?” asked Ryan. He looked up with a triumphant grin on his face. He raised his arms and formed them into a cross pattern with right wrist in the front.

“Neo Space Armor!”

Ryan was surrounded in darkness. He raised his arms so that he looked like he was flexing his muscles as images of Neo Spacian Black Panther and E-Hero Neos appeared behind him and fused together to form Black Neos. Then, he and Ryan fused together; creating a fusion of Black Neos’ and Ryan’s looks.

“Contact Fusion: Black Neos!”

There was a flash of light and an explosion, the Ryan emerged in his new form.. “Wow, this power is amazing, and it’s just what I need to take you down!”

“So what, you changed, big whoop, you will still die!” shouted Foxtrot as he pulled out a pair of sais. Ryan just donned a pair of claws. Both fighters’ weapons clashed and they jumped away from each other. Ryan flew up into the air.

“Time to finish you off,” he said as he came in to slash.

"Black Star Slash!” He shouted as he sliced Foxtrot into pieces. “Well that takes care of that,” Ryan said as he lost his new armor and started to walk away, but a bolt of lightning came down and struck the pieces of Foxtrot and the monster was resurrected and grew into giant. “Well I guess it’s time for my zord form,” said Ryan.

“Black Ranger, Zord Form!”

Ryan was surrounded by silver lightning, which spun around him in a tornado. It got bigger and bigger until he emerged and looked like a fox-like zord and his ranger costume mixed.

“Fox Zord!”

Ryan charged at the monster and bit it on the arm, but Foxtrot just flung him to the ground. “Well then, it looks like I ‘ll have to get serious,” said Ryan,

“Fox Fang Attack!” Ryan was surrounded in dark energy and rammed into Foxtrot, intern reverting him to a smaller form without any energy. Ryan powered down and walked up to the monster and gave him a punch in the gut causing him to faint and be engulfed in a white light. The other rangers ran up to Ryan.

“Hey, good job man,” said Pat.

“Yeah man, that Neo Space armor thing was so co-” said Tom, but he was interrupted by the white light clearing up and showing a young man. Ryan ran up to him.

“Who is he?” asked D.A. Ryan turned to the other rangers with tears in his eyes.

“He is my older brother, Brad!” he said as the other rangers looked at them in astonishment.

“Are you serious?” asked Dan.

“Yup, I would know him anywhere,” said Ryan, “but my question is why is he here, and why was he the monster?”

Power Rangers Element Force #1.ex.
“Secrets Explained”
Written By C.M.E
Note: The rangers do know about Jason’s ranger past


Jason’s House: Porch. 3 days before episode 6

Jason was sitting in a red lawn chair with each ranger sitting on their own with a chair of their respective color except Dan, who had drank too much Fresca before they got there. Dan slammed the sliding screen door behind him.

“Man, I really had to go,” he said a he zipped up his fly. The others just stared at him. “What, I had like 4 liters, how was I supposed to know that we were gonna have an emergency meeting?”

“Dan, just sit down,” said Jason. Dan sat down and rolled his eyes. “So what’s up in the ranger hood?”

“What’s up is that it’s high time I tell you where your powers came from,” said Jason.

“Finally!” exclaimed Tom, “We have been waiting forever to hear this!”

“Good, I have been trying to find a time to tell you all, but we keep getting interrupted,” Jason started, “Let’s go back to the beginning; it all happened about a couple of years ago….”

Angel Grove: Some years ago

A slightly younger Jason was standing in modern day Pompeii wearing an archeologist’s outfit and looking like he was searching for something.

I was young and starting research in Greece, when I discovered a stone tablet inside an old temple. This temple looked just like the one where the ninja powers were hidden. Young Jason dusted the tablet off and it revealed the Japanese symbols for each of the ranger’s elements. “Is this what Trey told me?” I asked myself.

“Wait, wait, wait, when did Trey tell you about this ‘temple’?” interrupted Pat.

“After he took back the Gold Ranger powers, he had told me about a temple of power in Greece,” said Jason, “Now back on topic; I pulled out a scroll that he had given me telling me what to do. It said to touch the symbols In this order: Fire, Water, Wind, Electric, Ice, and Darkness, so I did, and when I did colored beams of light shot out of each symbol and possibly tried to find a host. I looked at the scroll and the writing had changed, now it said that I should take the tablet and wait for the powers to become active, and so I waited, and one by one the morphers came out of the tablet, and the final words on the scroll appeared, “ To whoever reads this, find these people, one who controls fire, one who commands ice, one who can move at lightning speeds, one with the ability of flight, one who controls darkness, and one who commands water. Those are the owners of these powers. These devices will lead you to them.”


“…so after that day I went out to the world looking for those people.” finished Jason.

“But that doesn’t explain why we got chosen,” said Dan.

“Dan, those are all of our powers,” D.A. told him.

“Oh, but how did we get the powers?” asked Dan.

“I’m guessing, when we were little, those beams must have hit us,” explained Ryan, “Am I right?”

“Precisely, I was there when you first discovered your powers,” said Jason, “Now on to the topic of your enemies…”

Command Center: A couple of years later

After a found all of you, I built the base

Young Jason sat at a desk studying each of the future ranger’s powers. Suddenly a red light flickered and an alarm went off

I noticed a strange reading on one of my monitors; it was some kind of giant ship that looked like a giant lizard. I had no idea what it was so I called Triforia to see if Trey knew anything about it.

Triforia: Throne Room

King Trey sat on his throne when a soldier came up to him. The solider bowed and said, “Your majesty, we are receiving a call from Earth.”

“Bring it up on the screen,” said King Trey, and an image of Jason appeared on the screen.

“King Trey,” said Jason, “I have picked a large lizard-like ship on my radar, do you have any idea what it could be?”

“It can’t be,” said Trey in shock, “It’s the ship of Emperor Zargon of the Beastion army.”

“Sorry to be rude, but who the hell it that?” asked Jason.

“Long ago, the Beastions were searching planets of something called “The Source.” Their leader was a monster named Zargon, and then they attacked Triforia. We managed to drive them back, but they overpowered us. Soon, our best scientists discovered that The Source was an immense power supply, enough to let him destroy the universe. We created a weapon to seal them in carbonite for a long time, I guess they broke free.”

“Well, what do I do?” asked Jason in shock.

“Remember those powers I told you about?”

“Yes, I already found them.”

“Well then, watch the holders of the powers are in college, give them the powers,” finished Trey as the video faded out.[/I]

“So that’s the story everyone,” finished Jason.

“So the Beastions think that the Source is here?” asked Dan.

“Yes, and they will stop at nothing to find it, you rangers are the only force that can stop them form achieving their goal,” said Jason.

“Wow, that was a weird story, buy why us?” asked Pat.

“I guess the powers thought we were most deserving,” said D.A.

“Rangers be prepared for this battle, like I said, they will stop at nothing.

Beastion Stronghold

“Power Rangers, pfft, The Source will be mine no matter what I have to do,” said Zargon as he injected some green liquid into his jugular vain through a hypodermic needle.[/b]
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PostPosted: Fri May 19, 2006 7:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Ok I looked this up and rangerboard and I found a post that explains what I was thinking.

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I wanted to address this, The villans attacking was never really explained on who they where and why they were attacking. Jason just brought them to the command center said heres your powers and thats it no power explaination and why they were choosen. The rangers just said wristbands and morphers lets go.

then theres no explaination of the civilian powers at all they just out of the blue use them in the juice bar. Which confused me as well, theres a dream of a guy then theres them in the juice bar then his brothers show up, then from out of no where the grunts come and just like his brothers knew they were rangers they helped them get people out while they just suddenly fought them and suddenly had civilian powers and they use those powers and morph and fight the monster out of the blue in front of everyone then the guy in the dream shows up and red runs away the end.

In all of that theres no explaination of anything it just jumps from one thing to the other with no detail.

but its a great concept and sounds interesting I just think it could be polished a little.


Another problem I had was the yugioh GX armor.
Where did that come from? It seems really odd that you would put it in there.
Not to be mean but you need to rework this idea. Parts of it just don't make sense and confuse the reader.
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PostPosted: Fri May 19, 2006 7:06 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Unknown Neo wrote:
Ok I looked this up and rangerboard and I found a post that explains what I was thinking.

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Originally Posted by FlashmanX
I wanted to address this, The villans attacking was never really explained on who they where and why they were attacking. Jason just brought them to the command center said heres your powers and thats it no power explaination and why they were choosen. The rangers just said wristbands and morphers lets go.

then theres no explaination of the civilian powers at all they just out of the blue use them in the juice bar. Which confused me as well, theres a dream of a guy then theres them in the juice bar then his brothers show up, then from out of no where the grunts come and just like his brothers knew they were rangers they helped them get people out while they just suddenly fought them and suddenly had civilian powers and they use those powers and morph and fight the monster out of the blue in front of everyone then the guy in the dream shows up and red runs away the end.

In all of that theres no explaination of anything it just jumps from one thing to the other with no detail.

but its a great concept and sounds interesting I just think it could be polished a little.


Another problem I had was the yugioh GX armor.
Where did that come from? It seems really odd that you would put it in there.
Not to be mean but you need to rework this idea. Parts of it just don't make sense and confuse the reader.



I am a first time fan-fic writer here. So give me some credit, and I like GX, is that so wrong to put something I like into my fic?
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PostPosted: Fri May 19, 2006 10:17 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Roxafanboi wrote:
I am a first time fan-fic writer here. So give me some credit, and I like GX, is that so wrong to put something I like into my fic?


First off, please drop that tone. All Unknown Neo was doing was addressing a concern that didn't make any sense to him. He gave his opinion on the fic, even if he used someone else's summary of it.

That isn't an excuse to be rude to him, however. The first time writer excuse doesn't hold weight; it's the constructive criticism that you're told about in reviews that help you be a better writer. Being snarky and rude to those very reviewers tells them that you're only looking for praise.

Second, I would listen to what your reviewers had to say carefully. Many parts of your fic are too rushed and need clarification, and parts just come in out of the blue. The other reviewers got it better than I did, so I would take their words into account.

Becoming better at writing takes time. You need to listen to the points reviewers make with their criticism in order to become better so you don't make the same mistakes again. I advise you try to be a little bit nicer when replying, because you'll lose readers if you're too abrasive with your responses.
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PostPosted: Fri May 19, 2006 10:21 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

First of all:

Nowhere in your post you especified that this was your first fanfic, don't expect people to 'give you some credit' for being your first time if you don't tell them before hand?

Second, by posting your works here you're subject to critics and comments by other users, Unknown Neo wasn't rude as far as I can tell and he was simply being constructive in his comments, so, rather than give out the 'I'm being attacked by the reviewer' act, listen to what he's trying to tell you and either explain your reasons or fix what needs to be fixed.

Users are allowed to give you their impressions and they can easily like or dislike several things.

If you do not want comments in your fanfiction, please especify so clearly at the beginning of the post. Remember not all comments you're going to get are 'praise'.
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